The following is a record of teacher He Jie's teaching. His teaching direction refers to writing classroom design, which is extracted from learning materials.

This case is lesson 1 1, unit 4. The texts in this unit are all about revolutionary history and culture. The goal of unit learning is "when reading, pay attention to the description of manner, words and deeds, and experience the quality of characters" and "consult relevant materials to deepen the understanding of the text". The unit goal puts forward new requirements for text teaching. In teaching design and teaching, teachers should try their best to avoid simple and time-consuming lectures on the text content and pay attention to improving the ability of "understanding the character quality with the help of the text". At the same time, based on the uniqueness of the style, this case can be used as a sample for students to learn the special style of Memoirs, understand the style, explore the writing code, and explore the writing path, so as to prepare for truly participating in the style writing of Memoirs after class.

The events described in this case are in a special era, and this "time difference" has caused certain difficulties for students to understand. Therefore, we should pay special attention to the learning situation, encourage preview in advance, and find information. In the process of classroom implementation, students should learn about a special history and the revolutionary feelings of great historical figures by consulting materials, and be baptized by spirit and thought.

Class record

First of all, talk about memories.

(a) to recall the founder of China * * *

Teacher: Let's start with memories. Li Dazhao is one of the founders of China. Speaking of that history, it is necessary for us to recall these revolutionary martyrs, who brought us a happy life today. Look, here they come: Mao Zedong, Dong, Li Da, Li Dazhao, He Shuheng, Chen Tanqiu, Zhou Enlai ... Please remember them. Without their original blood, there would be no new China today, and there would be no stable and happy life for us.

Health: report the collected information, share information and remember people.

Teacher: In today's text, we mainly recall one of them. His name is Li Dazhao. He is one of the founders of China, a scholar and a revolutionary, and enjoys a lofty historical position in the revolutionary history of our country. The author of this article is Li Xinghua, the daughter of Li Dazhao. Let's read an introduction about her.

Student: (Read aloud)1927 On April 6th, I was arrested at the same time as my father Li Dazhao. After joining the Party's work, he insisted on publishing the whole memoir "Remembering My Father Li Dazhao" because he was blind due to illness. The single memoir Memories of Sixteen Years ago was written on 1943, which coincided with the 16th anniversary of Li Dazhao's death.

(2) Understanding Memoirs

Teacher: Have you noticed some memories written by Li Xinghua, including the cost and the single article? How many methods of writing memoirs seem to be roughly divided according to the length?

Health: There are two kinds, a single memoir and a whole memoir.

Teacher: Good. What is a memoir? Let's take a look at the various memoirs that have been published. Some of them are related to major events in the world. For example, famous memoirs include History of the French Revolution and Memoirs of the Second World War. The History of China Revolution is also a must-read memoir for China people. History always evokes people's memories and reflections at important nodes. So, what are the benefits of reading these memoirs?

Health: Know history.

Health: Remember history.

Teacher: Yes. Many celebrities have also written memoirs. Such as Tagore's Memoirs, Li Ao's Memoirs, etc. We can learn about the growth experiences of celebrities and learn the nutrients of growth through reading. Ordinary people also write memoirs and record ordinary life. In short, anyone who wants to write can. Next, who will summarize what a memoir is?

Health 1: Memoirs are books that record historical events.

Health 2: Memoirs are a book about life.

Health 3: Memoirs are books that leave traces of history.

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(C) understanding the unit learning objectives

Teacher: This unit puts forward two goals for our study. Let's have a look.

(Courseware demonstration)

When reading, pay attention to the description of manner, words and deeds, and experience the character quality.

Consult relevant materials to deepen the understanding of the text.

Student: (Read the target together)

Teacher: In the following study, we should pay special attention to the description of Li Dazhao's demeanor, words and deeds in the text and experience Li Dazhao's quality. At the same time, with the help of materials, we can deeply understand the meaning contained in this paper.

Analysis: Understanding Memoirs from Memories. Understanding the basic characteristics of style is the first condition for learning style. Reading teaching should have a standardized sense of style, so that children can really face style, literature and culture in their study.

Second, sink into the "memories of sixteen years ago"

(A) free reading, free to feel

Teacher: Read the full text freely and sink into the memories of sixteen years ago. Mark the places with special feelings and share them with your deskmate.

Student: (after reading)

Health 1: I am very touched after reading this sentence. "That spring, my father came back very late every night. Every morning, I don't know when he goes out again. Sometimes he stays at home, burying himself in sorting out books and documents. " Father is busy, hard and dangerous.

Health 2: "This is my wife." He pointed to his mother and said. Then he pointed at me and my sister. "These are my two daughters." My father went on to say, "She is my oldest child. My wife is a countryman. My child is still young. They don't know anything. Everything has nothing to do with them. " Father said and gave us another look. I feel Li Dazhao's concern and love for his family, and I don't want them to get hurt because of themselves.

Health 3: I learned from "My father is very kind and never scolds us, let alone beats us". I think something is wrong.

Health 4: I was impressed that "in court, we met our father." Father still wears his old gray cotton gown, but he doesn't wear glasses. I saw his calm and kind face under his unkempt long hair. "I can feel that my father has been persecuted.

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(B) reading teaching, rational appreciation of the text

Teacher: Good memoir writing has three principles: seeing, listening and experiencing. Li Xinghua and Li Dazhao were arrested at the same time, and all three parents have experienced it. They have a very solid writing foundation. Therefore, we have reason to believe that such a memoir is clear, complete and true. This is also the main point for us to appreciate this one-man memoir today, to see whether the details are clear, whether the story is complete, and whether the revolutionary's honesty display is true. Look at the first keyword first: clarity. Please see the requirements

(Courseware demonstration)

1. Browse the tag quickly and feel the details as clear as yesterday.

2. Share the reading, read aloud, take the reader to the scene and hear the details with your own eyes.

Student: (after reading)

Health 1: This passage makes me feel that the author's memory is very clear: "A terrible day has indeed come. On the morning of April 6, my sister put on a new coat and my mother took her for a walk in the casino. My father is writing in the back room, and I am sitting on the bench in the outer room reading the newspaper. " The author even remembers the time clearly. And what the family is doing is also very clear.

Health 2: The author recalls what his father said, for example, his father firmly said to his mother, "Didn't he always tell you?" I can't leave Beijing easily. You need to know what time it is and how important the work here is. How can I leave? "Everything you said can be recalled, indicating a clear memory.

Health 3: Seeing this passage: "Father unhurriedly took out a shiny little pistol from the drawer and came out." . I followed him closely, walked out of the yard, and temporarily hid in a secluded hut. "I clearly remember my father's actions.

Health 4: The author also clearly recalled the appearance of the enemy. For example, the plain clothes detective with a juryman's face pointed at his father.

Health 5: And this sentence, "Dad looked at us and didn't say a word to us. The expression on his face is very stable and calm. His heart was occupied by a great force. This kind of power is what he told us on weekdays-his confidence in the revolutionary cause. " I clearly remember my father's attitude.

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Teacher: Please read the excerpts from In Memory of My Father Li Dazhao. Li Xinghua's memory is always so clear. Specific events, specific feelings, and specific words make people feel immersive. Clear details are one of the marks of a good memoir.

(Courseware demonstration)

In the evening, my father taught us to sing the Internationale. We are committed to learning to sing, and my father teaches us again and again. His voice is deep and powerful. Father also explained the meaning of the lyrics to us. What impressed me the most was:

"Don't say that we have nothing, we want to be the masters of the world!"

"Who created the human world? It is our working people! "

"Workers have not eaten or drunk now, and they are miserable. If they wake up and turn over in the future, they will be the masters of the world. Those who don't work but only enjoy themselves are parasites who exploit others. "

(Li Xinghua's Memories of My Father Li Dazhao, p. 144, with deletion)

Teacher: Next, let's pay attention to the integrity of the plot in the memoir. See requirements:

(Courseware demonstration)

1. Found the "story fragment". What "short stories" did you read in the whole article?

2. Explore the "series method". Three methods of fragment splicing in this paper. ① Echo from beginning to end ② Time clues ③ The existence of "I".

Student: (after reading)

Health 1: I read a short story about my dad sorting out files.

Health 2: I read a short story about my father protecting his family.

Health 3: I read a short story about my father fighting the enemy in court.

S4: I read a short story about Li Xinghua's wit and bravery in court.

Health 5: After reading a short story, my father refused to move.

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Teacher: These stories never leave. Li Xinghua connected them in series in three ways. Among them, the first kind of "echo from beginning to end" and the second kind of "time clue" are familiar to everyone when it comes to names. Just look at the text and you will know, so we won't discuss it. The key point is the existence of the third "I" proposed by the teacher. I made statistics in advance, and this article is 1826 words; Paragraph 32; There are 53 "I". Excuse me, since I am remembering my father Li Dazhao, what's the use of writing so many "I"?

Health 1: It feels real, because I was there and what I wrote was what I saw.

Student 2: Take "I" as a clue to connect the full text.

Health 3: I can also evaluate and make the memories seem to be happening.

Health 4: I talked to my father to make his image vivid.

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Teacher: It seems that my existence makes memories authentic and connects a series of short stories. It's really a good way to work. Finally, let's see how Li Xinghua shows Li Dazhao's revolutionary integrity in this article. Please search the natural paragraphs of the text 8 to 17 and mark five places with "gun".

Health: (retrieval, marking)

Teacher: Please think about it. The enemies here are "a sharp gunshot", "everyone has a gun" and "grabbed my father's gun". But Li Dazhao is just "a shiny little pistol". What kind of integrity do you think Li Xinghua showed when describing the details of the gun confrontation between the warlord and his father?

(Courseware demonstration)

I haven't finished reading a short news, when I heard several sharp gunshots, followed by a tumultuous cry.

Father unhurriedly took out a shiny little pistol from the drawer and went out.

Each of them held a pistol and pointed the gun at my father and me.

◆ The detective told his gang with a sneer: "Look, don't let him commit suicide, take the pistol away first!"

They confiscated father's pistol and searched his whole body.

Health: I think the most important purpose of Li Dazhao's pistol is to commit suicide as a last resort!

Teacher: How did you make such a judgment?

Health 1: He has heard noises and gunshots outside, and he has been outnumbered for a long time. At this time, it is useless to fight again.

Health 2: The enemy has a pistol, while the father is just a shiny little pistol. It is futile to resist by force.

Health 3: My father's small pistol is shining, which shows that my father is ready to die heroically.

Health 4: You can also feel it from the words and deeds of the enemy when he grabs the gun.

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Teacher: Good analysis. Do you admire Li Dazhao more at this time?

Health: Yes, he has a spirit of risking his life for the revolutionary cause.

Teacher: People who have integrity in China regard death as death. Laozi said: fame is not afraid of death, why not fear it with death? Mencius said: fish, what I want, bear's paw, what I want; You can't have your cake and eat it. You can't have your cake and eat it. Life is what I want, and righteousness is what I want; You can't have both, and you have to sacrifice your life for righteousness. Li Dazhao is really a tough guy hero. Let's restore a period of history. Why do you think such powerful historical data didn't appear in this article?

(Courseware demonstration)

Li Dazhao was arrested on April 6 and secretly strangled by warlord Zhang and 20 other revolutionaries on April 28. He is only 38 years old. In the meantime, the enemy promised a high official a generous salary, and he did not waver; He used electric chair, tiger stool, nail pulling and other torture, but nothing was revealed. Li Dazhao said: "A gentleman is born in the world, so you should keep integrity when you behead and bleed!"

National Daily: When being punished, everyone will get about 18 points.

Beiyang Pictorial: Li Dazhao stopped in 20 minutes.

Witness: Li Dazhao was fined three times for 40 minutes.

Health 1: Because Li Xinghua was not there at that time.

Health 2: Because Li Xinghua didn't know this at that time, he only wrote what he saw and heard.

Yes, this is the most precious truth in Li Xinghua's memoirs. Now that you know this history, what changes will you make? What are your plans for today's happy life and the future?

Health 1: I will cherish it more.

Health 2: I also want to take the Red Tour and read revolutionary stories.

S3: I want to read more revolutionary memoirs.

Health 4: I want to read more history and understand it.

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Teacher: Will you pay more attention to this group of people? They are called revolutionary veterans.

Health: Yes.

Teacher: Will you pay more attention to the history of aggression against China and the Japanese textbook incident?

Health: Yes.

Teacher: OK, give history a little truth and make people more sober today.

(3) Summary and arrangement

Teacher: Today, we enjoyed this memoir and remembered some writing methods. Let's remember together-

Student: (summarize and sort out the main points of knowledge learned with the help of blackboard writing)

Teacher: In fact, when we know the main points of memoir writing, how to appreciate a memoir and the difficulties of memoir writing, it is really more rewarding than reading one or two memoirs. Because it's called law. Learning, the most valuable thing is to get the method.

Analysis: This link arranges three links: free reading, teaching reading and combing and summarizing after reading. In the process of free reading, children have a shallow and broad understanding and formed a preliminary feeling; In teaching and reading, the text is tested, compared, discriminated and deeply studied by methods, and the feelings formed before are reprocessed; Summing up and sorting out is an appropriate induction and collection, so that children can gain something in the learning process.

Third, jump out of the text to practice.

Teacher: Practice if you have a method. What memoirs can students write?

Student: Memoirs of Campus Life.

Health: childhood memoirs.

Teacher: I also found two pictures for you to teach you how to write a memoir for others. Please see:

(Courseware demonstration)

Teacher: Please choose the person or thing you need to write according to the picture and practice it step by step. Good luck and the early birth of your memoir.

Expert review

The lesson "Memories of Sixteen Years ago" taught by Mr. He Jie is not only a creative implementation of unit language elements, but also an innovative promotion of unit humanistic theme. The atmosphere is delicate, rational and passionate, giving people the power of knowledge and spiritual cultivation.

This lesson is actually composed of three teaching clues. The first is to run through the elements of unit language from beginning to end-"to experience personality quality from appearance, manners, words and deeds;" Deepen the understanding of the text with the help of relevant materials "; Second, carry forward the humanistic theme of the unit-"understanding the revolutionary deeds of martyrs and carrying forward the revolutionary spirit of martyrs"; Third, the acquisition of stylistic knowledge of Memoirs runs through-"seeing, listening and experiencing; Clear, true and complete; Plot, detail, completeness. "

The genius and uniqueness of the instructor lies in: first, deliberately avoiding the normal first or second as the main line of teaching, but taking the unfamiliar and little-known third as the main line of teaching; Second, the development process of the three cables is not independent, and the other two clues are organically integrated with the third main line as the core, twisting into a full and powerful teaching context. The advantage of this design lies in the integration of common tasks and individual goals, which not only shows the unique quality and significance of the text as "this article", but also organically completes the common tasks and missions of the text as "this kind".

The biggest highlight of this course is the awakening of stylistic awareness and the acquisition of stylistic knowledge as the main line of teaching. Instructors guide students to experience the whole process of memoir learning, form personal knowledge experience and obtain intimate knowledge construction. Finally, students can gain "take-away" gains in memoir reading and writing through such links as "reading by themselves to form their initial feelings about memoirs", "observing the characteristics of memoirs in in-depth study" and "reading on the blackboard for reasons".

With the gradual development of the main line, two clues about unit language elements and unit humanistic themes have also been organically implemented and integrated. In the process of reading the details of memoirs, the clarity of details such as appearance, manners, words and deeds is fully presented, which has a solid and sufficient foundation for grasping the integrity of the revolutionary martyr Li Dazhao; The introduction of two documents not only strengthens students' understanding of the clarity of memoirs, but also deepens their grasp of the presence and authenticity of "I". The elements of unit language are in harmony with each other and generally fall on the main line of teaching style. Similarly, in the development of the main line of style, students constantly feel the revolutionary beliefs and revolutionary integrity of the martyrs, and are generally infiltrated and edified by the spirit of revolutionary heroism. Unit humanistic theme is integrated into the main line of style teaching.

(Wang Songzhou? Comment)