At the corner, after a long period of wind and sun, a small yellow flower actually grew.

As soon as it established itself in the world, it looked around curiously. This is a dark and damp corner, surrounded by darkness. He frowned and looked up at the eagle fighting in the sky. A feeling of admiration arises spontaneously. Look! In the boundless sky, they flap their vigorous and plump wings and fly freely.

Small yellow flower is very unwilling. As a creature in the world, why should it live in this forgotten corner? It is not arrogant, but does not want to be narcissistic. It is eager to go out of the corner and have a look at the outside world, even if it is a glimpse.

Xiaohuahua told her neighbor Cao Qing what she thought, but she was laughed at by her neighbor. "This is our life. Don't blame others. I heard that there are many crises outside, not as good as here! "

Small yellow flowers don't believe it. It doesn't want to be a frog in the well forever. On the other side of the corner, it must be colorful.

By chance, a little boy who was playing hide-and-seek with his friends actually stepped into this "inaccessible" corner.

Small yellow flower was awakened by footsteps, suddenly shine at the moment, dancing with excitement. Small yellow flower whispered: "Hello-hello." The voice reached the little boy's ear.

"Who are you?"

"I am a little yellow flower on the corner." The little boy bent down to look at the little yellow flower. "Call me what?" "I think I want you to take me out of here and see the outside world." "You mean uprooting you?" The little boy was taken aback. "You are going to die, why go to see the world? It's so nice here! " ""Please, I-"The voice outside interrupted Xiaohua." It's time for us to go home. "The little boy stood up at once and went out without looking back.

Small yellow flower sighed, and neighbor Cao Qing smiled: "Only you are so stupid. You see-if you are exotic flowers and plants, others may take you back to plant them, and you-"Little Yellow Flower ignored it. In Cao Qing's words, it was a dream again, and Cao Qing shook his head helplessly.

Small yellow flowers are waiting for every rare entrant every day, but grass hates the interruption of these uninvited guests. Little yellow flower fantasizes about corners, blue sky and green grass, and the competing flower sisters welcome a playful butterfly ... Little yellow flower is intoxicated with it, and her faith in her heart is more firm.

A group of red scarves entered the corner and volunteered to clean up. Little yellow flower told them politely, "I am little yellow flower." I want to go out and have a look. Can you help me? "

This group of red scarves are still curious and patiently listening to all this, but after listening carefully, they all left with a smile.

Only one red scarf looked at the little yellow flower sympathetically: "OK, I promise you!" " Little Huanghua was so excited that her eyes filled with tears and she kept thanking her.

The grass watched helplessly as the little yellow flower was taken away in the flowerpot, envious and sorry.

In this way, the little yellow flower finally walked out of the corner and saw the colorful world. Later, it was found to be a good medicinal material, which was used in pharmacy.

Nowadays, the children and grandchildren of Xiaohuanghua are talking about it, even in the grass. ...

[opinion]

The teacher said: this article is called "Out of the Corner", which shows the process of a small yellow flower pursuing its ideal in the form of fairy tales. A tiny yellow flower was born in the corner, but it was not always willing to go out of the corner. I explained a simple truth. From the perspective of plants, I emphasized that people should be ambitious, persevere and struggle unswervingly. Very in line with the material point of view.

In this paper, the three echoes of grass are used to set off the pursuit of small yellow flowers by contrast. I give priority to narration, and also describe psychology, action and language. Compared with last time, my plot has made some waves again. The language in the text is concise and can reflect the character. However, the details of this paper are not well grasped, and some places cannot be concise and clear, which needs to be strengthened.

My most prominent problem this time is that the details are inappropriate and the original text is concise and verbose. This may be the reason why my idea is not comprehensive enough. I will think about the details of the article in the future, and pay attention to "cutting down the complexity and simplifying the Sanqiu tree, and opening new flowers in February".

The classmate said; The article you wrote is very story-telling, fascinating and narrated in the order of things. Character language vividly shows the character, and the plot is full of twists and turns. The style is clear and natural, full of interest and vivid language details. (Chen) According to

The teacher said: Going out of the corner is really going out of the narrow world and into the outside world. Xiao Huahua's unremitting pursuit inspires people, and people should constantly pursue their own ideals. There is a good idea to inspire everyone through the literary style of fairy tales, which is more infectious than empty preaching. The dialogue between the grass and the small yellow flower shows the firmness of the small yellow flower's pursuit of ideals, and the small yellow flower finally walks out of the corner, which is exciting. This paper focuses on the pursuit process of small yellow flowers, and the details are appropriate.

This paper was rated as a first-class volume with full marks.

Mother and daughter in the mountains

She is the daughter of Dashan, surrounded by green hills in the rolling Dabie Mountains. Several families live in a small village near the mountains and rivers, where she has her home. Because the family was poor, her father had already gone out to work. Only during the Spring Festival can the family get together. She has lived with her mother since she was a child.

However, she has a sensible mother, and her mother has taught her well, because her mother knows that the beautiful seeds in the child's heart are sown by her mother.

When the girl was five years old, on an ordinary day, the little girl from the neighbor came to see her. Mother saw the little girl in a hurry and asked what was going on. The little girl said, "When I was playing at my house just now, I showed her an eraser that my uncle brought back from other places. I put it on the table when I went to pour water for my uncle, and now it's gone. " Mom smiled and said, "Go home and look again to see if you have dropped it. I'll ask her. " After seeing the little girl off, the mother calmly took her daughter's hand and asked, "Did you take the eraser of the little sister next door?" The answer is: "No" Mom said: "If you take it, you have to give it back to others. You can't take other people's things If you like, tell mom that mom can ask dad to bring it back during the Chinese New Year, but you are not allowed to take other people's things, okay? " Hearing this, the girl put her chubby little hand behind her, holding the delicate eraser in her hand. Her mother smiled and handed the eraser in her little hand back to others. The girl stood there, still thinking about something. ...

When a girl is twelve, she is in the fifth grade, so she can help her mother do many things. Near the end, the girl hurried to review, but this time she did badly in the exam. The girl bowed her head when the report card was placed in front of her mother. Mother carefully looked at the test papers and grades, found out the girl's mistakes one by one and asked her to correct them. Then he smiled faintly, held his daughter in his arms and said to her, "Don't be discouraged, don't be discouraged. It doesn't matter if you fail once, you can get up again from where you fell! " "The daughter nodded in her mother's arms.

The girl is sixteen. She is in Grade Three. These days, girls have been uneasy in class, and their grades have plummeted. The teacher asked her why, but she refused to say. The teacher talked to the girl's mother. When the mother and daughter came home, the mother pulled her daughter into the room and asked kindly, "What's the matter recently? Why did your grades plummet? " The girl gave in to her mother: "I like a boy, and I always think about him every day, but my heart is not practical." Mom thought about it and said seriously, "Mom doesn't blame you. Sixteen-year-old flower season, this is the budding period of youth. It is a good thing to communicate with the opposite sex, but we must treat it correctly and steer the rudder well. We must never go astray and destroy the future in our own hands! " The girl took her mother's hand and said, "Mom, I get it." Since then, girls' grades have picked up again.

Ten years later, the girl grew up. After graduating from college, I worked in a big company in the city. She thanked her mother for her education, thanked her parents for their kindness in raising her, took her parents over, and the family lived a happy life. ...

[opinion]

The author said: This story is based on what I heard. Because the feeling is not very real, I feel that the content is not touching enough.

The classmate said: I think the author's narrative ability is very strong, and the article is rich in content, but clear in organization and closely related to the theme. But as a story, I think it might be better if the plot is more tortuous and vivid.

The teacher said: candidates have a strong ability to control materials, and the content of the article spans a long time. However, the author closely follows the selection of girls' growth stage, and the full text is seamless. The dialogue description is relatively successful, showing the mother-daughter character. The topic proposition is relatively successful, showing the simplicity of the mother and the innocence of the girl.