He once praised the ink shrimp written by the old man Baishi, and once stood in front of the drunken maid-in-waiting and praised thousands of charms and customs. It never occurred to me that these are all the results of "diligence".
The Drunk Lady is the masterpiece of Bobby Chen. Because I lived in poverty since I was a child, there was no teacher to teach me, so I could only improve my artistic skills by hard training. In order to lay a good foundation, he used his photo album to sketch all over China. In order to accurately outline the scenery in the north, he often sits in the snow for hours and unconsciously becomes a snowman. I have also sketched in the hot desert again and again, and when the draft was first made, I was sweating like a pig. Numerous times of hard training, quickly wrote several boxes; Numerous experiences, the mountains and rivers of the motherland have been well known, and even the unusually high noses of the people on the Loess Plateau have been noticed by him. With a solid foundation and rich experience, Bobby Chen's painting skills advanced by leaps and bounds, reaching the point of perfection, and then it was logical to create such a masterpiece as Drunkenness of the Imperial Lady.
Diligence is Bobby Chen's superb painting skill. The reason is that the wonderful ink shrimp written by the old man Baishi can not be achieved with little effort. He practices painting for seven or eight hours every day, which is a rule that he will never change in his life. It is this unwritten rule that has cultivated his unique skill of painting shrimp.
The profound artistic attainments of the two old people are the result of hard work. When we marvel at their achievements today, we never realize the hardships and sweat behind the word "Jing".
Starting from the two old people, the success of outstanding talents in all walks of life today is not due to a sudden idea or inspiration from nature overnight, but to countless hard attempts day and night. There is an old saying that goes well: "The edge of the sword comes from sharpening, and the fragrance of plum blossoms comes from bitter cold." (The author Wen Jun is a student of Longhui No.1 Middle School in Hunan)
Comments by famous critics
This proposition composition is quite successful. The author sticks to the theme, with reasonable arguments and smooth narration. The author's way of dealing with the topic is very natural. Obviously, he chose materials that he is familiar with.
But as far as the theme of excavation is concerned, it still lacks depth. "industry is good at diligence" seems to be a small truth, but it is actually a big article. The author only explained that "essence" comes from "diligence", and the deep thinking caused by "being proficient in diligence" has not been fully demonstrated. A good article should not only tell the reader what it is, but also tell the reader why, thus enlightening the reader what to do.
As far as the example chosen by the author is concerned, it carries a lot of weight. Citing examples of celebrities is a common way to write argumentative essays. However, the drunken imperial concubine cited in the article seems to be somewhat intolerant. Some readers may not know Bobby Chen's Drunkenness of the Imperial Lady, because they usually ignore the art of painting. The author also did not briefly introduce the artistic value of Drunkenness of the Imperial Lady to readers. This is a typical problem. The author needs to pay attention in his future writing. In argumentative writing, the selected materials should not only be familiar with themselves, but also make readers feel unfamiliar, so as to effectively enhance the appeal of reading. Furthermore, if the author can grasp the fresh things around him and the bright spot of his "diligence", he may be able to better meet the readers' reading expectations.
In terms of words and sentences, there are two "amazing" and two "for" in the article, which seems to be eclipsed. Another example is the phrase "painting skills are advancing by leaps and bounds" and "wonderful ink shrimp is not easy to lift a finger", which is a misnomer. Language is the basic skill of writing. If the verbs "move" and "move" can be done properly, the article will be fascinating. Of course, this is not a day's work.
A good article should be emotional, poetic and picturesque. Love is to touch people; Reasoning is reasoning; Entering poetry is to be catchy; Painting is to have an artistic atmosphere. The author of Indulge in Diligence has made great efforts in this direction, but on the whole, it seems that there are different weights from beginning to end, and the discussion is still not over. Writing is the organic combination of the author's inner universe and outer universe, and writing argumentative papers is the most taboo. If we don't pay attention to the development of thought and the innovation of language, it will be dull as water and boring. It is true that writing also pays attention to "diligence", but we should also pay attention to "kung fu is outside the poem", which is a digression.
Introduction of famous artists
Qin Delong, 1955, a native of Jixian County, Tianjin. Member of Chinese Writers Association, member of Henan Federation of Literary and Art Circles, now working for China Great Wall Aluminum Company. He has six collections of literary works, focusing on short story creation and theoretical research. He was selected into the "List of People in China's Contemporary Short Stories" by the Creative Research Department of the Chinese Writers Association and won the "Short Story Constellation Award". It was rated as one of the "hundred contemporary schools" by Selected Short Stories and Selected Miniature Novels.