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A review of the creative process of character action description
1. The evaluation language of primary school students' writing teaching enhances students' confidence and interest.

2. Bind students' excellent compositions into a book, so that students can feel the joy of harvest. Students were very happy when they saw that their excellent compositions were neatly bound together with beautiful illustrations. If we organize everyone to communicate circularly in the class meeting, students' enthusiasm for writing will be unprecedented.

3. Plan to design games, edit and guide sketches, organize outings and other activities. Students take part in practical activities in person, which is a topic that people often talk about. At this time, students will naturally be interested in writing about their experiences and feelings. Students have a desire to write, and teachers must protect them. Even if some students write "a running account of three or two sentences", teachers should not be harsh on perfection, so that students can feel that writing is not "difficult to go to heaven", which will greatly enhance students' interest and confidence in composition.

2. A Chinese teacher said in the composition evaluation class that describing a character should grasp his appearance and personality. Beethoven's posture is extremely ugly. His head is big, his body is short, it is difficult to smile on his face, and his movements are extremely clumsy. Once he wanted to learn to dance, but he couldn't keep up with the beat. It is reported that the reporter said that his facial expression is often cold and depressed. He is five feet four inches long, with broad shoulders, a pockmarked face, a rough brown face and a hard straight nose. The fingers are short, the five fingers are slightly equal in length, and the back of the hand has long hair. I have black hair. I never wear a comb or a hat. I often go out for a walk with my hair on. On windy days, his hair was blown like a flame. People met him in the middle of nowhere and suspected that he was a demon in hell.

This is what celebrities say about him.

He is short and fat, with a strong appearance and an athlete's skeleton. A wide khaki face didn't become morbid and yellow until his later years, especially in winter, when he was kept indoors and away from the fields. Frontal eminence uplift, extremely wide. Black hair, unusually thick, like a comb that has never been combed, hangs upside down everywhere, like a "snake on Medusa's head."

There was a strange power burning in his eyes, which shocked everyone who saw him; But most people can't tell their nuances. Because on the brown and tragic face, these eyes emit a wild light, so everyone always thinks it is black; It's actually gray-blue.

Usually small and deep, the time of excitement or anger only opens and rotates in the eyes, which wonderfully reflects their true thoughts.

He often stares at the sky with melancholy eyes. The wide nose is short and square, but it is actually like a lion. A delicate mouth, but the lower lip tends to protrude forward more than the upper lip. The gums are very strong, as if they can break walnuts.

His smile is beautiful, and there is often a lovely and pleasant atmosphere between conversations. On the other hand, his smile is unpleasant, rude, ugly and short-lived.

His usual expression is melancholy, showing an "incurable sadness".

Beethoven in this painting looks very young and seems to be under his age. He is thin and straight, his head and neck are stiff with a high collar, and he has arrogant and nervous eyes.

Lion-like face, clenched teeth on the bed, depicts wrinkles of anger and pain, but the most obvious character is his will, Napoleon-like will in his early years: "It's a pity that I am not as good at war as I am at music!" " Or I'll beat him! " .

Beethoven had a rough life and didn't build a family. I began to lose my hearing at the age of 26, and I was completely deaf in my later years. I can only talk to people through a conversation book. However, the lonely life did not make him silent and retired. 1789 French bourgeois revolution and progress inspired him greatly, which laid the foundation of his humanistic world view-equality of human beings, pursuit of justice and personality freedom, and hatred of feudal autocracy. He once said: "One year's freedom is much more useful to mankind than a hundred years' absolutism".

3. The composition describing the characters should bring comments to my classmates.

In my childhood, I had a good classmate. We go to school together and leave school together. We are inseparable partners.

She has ear-high short hair, a thin figure and loves to wear white sports shoes. It is DOG who laughs all day. She is a person who loves to help her classmates.

The angel of memory brought me back to that day.

On a sunny morning, I hurried to practice. A while ago, because the long flute team had to strengthen training because of the upcoming game, I didn't have time to collect my homework or hold it. Just after training, I suddenly found that the Chinese homework of the whole class was gone! I searched the desk inside and out, but there was still no trace of my homework. Seeing this, I can't help but panic. This is the homework of 39 people! Who will take it away at once? If the teacher finds out, he will definitely criticize me! At this moment, my eyes were full of tears, and I bit my lip and kept blaming myself. An idea came to my mind: go to the office and explain the situation to the teacher.

So I went to the office, but my feet were like lead, and I couldn't lift them. At this moment, a familiar figure jumped into my eyes. Why is this figure so familiar? Driven by curiosity, I decided to find out. When I saw it, it was Momo, the thinnest girl in our class! She seems to be holding her homework. What homework is she holding? So, I ran up to ask DOG. I asked her curiously, "DOG, you are not a department representative. What homework do you have? " But her answer surprised me! She smiled: "You go to training, you don't have time for homework. I am helping you with your Chinese homework! " ""ah! So you got your Chinese homework, do you know? I'm scared to death. " I said reproachfully, but the big stone in my heart fell to the ground. DOG said indignantly, "I am kind enough to help you with your homework, but you say so!" Say that finish, she is in tears, and she is about to cry. You have to tell me later. ""good. "We both do our homework in the office. Since then, she has been helping me with my Chinese homework. What a good classmate! She loves helping her classmates very much, but she doesn't complain or ask for anything in return.

DOG, like a fire in winter, brings warmth to people. She made me understand that it is within my power to help others, and I should do what I can. I should learn from her. (The second composition. Just change the name. )

As long as I can remember, I have had many classmates, including nursery students and kindergarten students ... Some students have been blurred in my memory, and some students have been alienated, but during my six years in primary school, he and I have always been good friends.

His round face, small nose and big eyes are shining with wisdom. Do you know who he is? Yes, Liu.

Liu is a very enthusiastic little boy. Once, our group was a student on duty. Liu is responsible for sweeping the floor and cleaning the blackboard. When he finished the task and saw that I was still working, he whispered to me, "Liao Jia, let me help you clean the water dispenser." Before I knew it, he grabbed the rag, twisted it in the water and cleaned it quickly. Some small cracks are difficult to clear. He put his fingers wrapped in rags into the narrow gap and dug hard. Many things happen. The original water dispenser with a gray head and a gray face has become as bright as a washed face. I was very moved to see all this.

Comments: This composition is well written. There are many good words and sentences in it. The description of the characters is vivid, and a concrete example is given to make people more prominent. Rhetorical devices such as dialogue and metaphor are also used to make the article more vivid. The title is very good, and the sentence structure and structure of the article are very good.

The words are beautiful, euphemistic and fluent, but the lack is that the clues are too messy.

The paragraphs are clear, coherent and beautifully written.

The overall structure and description are not bad.

Generally speaking, this article is well written, with fluent sentences, proper words and neat fonts. I hope to continue to work hard in the future.

4. Extract fragments of character action descriptions and write comments. If the blackboard is a vast sea, then the teacher is a sailor on the sea. At the moment when * * * rings, you are like a ship, turning the textbooks parked in the harbor into pulp with the teacher's whip. On the desk, problems piled up. Your posture is lifelike, like a flying bird, drawing a beautiful arc on the platform-ships pass by ... there is no cloud floating in the sky, just like your bright heart.

Grandpa has a bronzed face, eyes like two bells and a wisp of goatee floating on his pointed chin. He is tall and has broad shoulders. Although he is over 70 years old, he can speak with a powerful voice like Hong Zhong. Even the young man can't keep up with him when he walks.

3. Dad has thick eyebrows and big eyes, and a pair of big eyes are always shining with stern eyes. Probably because of long-term mental work, the deep wrinkles on his forehead are commensurate with his age of less than forty.

4, my brother's eyes are highly myopic, and he can't live without glasses everywhere, just like a "blind man". Just take off his glasses and he will look like a sheep in front of me. One afternoon, my brother wanted to wash his hair. He asked me to bring him some soap to drink. I proudly thought: Hum! I'll run errands for you first, and then my treat. After a while, my brother craned his neck and beat soap bubbles all over his face. As soon as I saw the time was up, I quietly took my brother's basin away. After rubbing his hair, my brother went to wash his hair and took a handful of water and an empty one. He hurried to look for it, but as soon as he opened his eyes, the soap bubbles made him burst into tears. He groped his way like a blind man, groping around, and finally picked up a towel and wiped his eyes, but his eyes were still blurred, so he went to find his glasses.

5. Xiao Maotou is very small, and his head is only as big as my big doll; His face is round and red, like a big apple. She slept soundly, her eyes closed tightly, like two lines; Two eyebrows are like two crescent moons; Small mouth often moves, as if sucking milk. She was wrapped in a small quilt, tied tightly by a rope and did not move.

6. My sister is ten years old this year and is in the third grade of primary school. On her red face, a pair of big eyes are smart. Black hair, two curved eyebrows, like a crescent moon. One of her white teeth is missing. When she smiles, she becomes an open tooth, which is very cute.

7. Xiao Ju is 14 years old this year, but his figure is not high, his arms are still so small, his cheekbones are still protruding, and his ten fingers are like a pile of dead bamboo branches, which seems to be broken when folded; Because she is thin, she looks very light.

5. The sentence describing the character, plus the comment: "He sat there with an enamel bowl, chewing a few grass roots and our leftover fishbone for a while, and then frowned and swallowed it hard."

This passage describes the five consecutive movements of the old squad leader of the Red Army. With five accurate verbs of "sitting, hugging, chewing, wrinkling and swallowing", the old monitor's attitude of taking care of his little comrades, working day and night, and being mentally exhausted during the 25,000-mile long March was written.

The word "Peng" highlights the old squad leader's treasure of those grassroots and the leftover fishbone of "we"; The three verbs of "chewing", "wrinkling" and "swallowing" indicate that grass roots and fishbones are hard to swallow, and the old monitor is hungry. Through the description of these movements, the old squad leader of the Red Army showed his resolute character of tenacious struggle and lofty quality of self-sacrifice under difficult conditions.

6. How to evaluate the composition class 1? Based on the teaching content of composition class.

All kinds of open classes and observation classes at all levels are concerned with the teachers, that is, the personal teaching organization, teaching technology and teaching style. Because the individual differences of teachers are obvious, this kind of evaluation that only looks at teachers but not students will of course be questioned. Under the concept of the new curriculum, people have changed the perspective of class evaluation and evaluated teaching from the perspective of students, that is, whether students interact and cooperate in class? How many times did the students talk about it? Whether the discussion is enthusiastic, etc. Focusing on the external form of classroom evaluation, it still points to teachers' classroom organization and teaching methods, while the question of what teachers teach in composition class is ignored to some extent.

Professor Wang Rongsheng has always advocated observing and evaluating teaching from the perspective of teaching content. He believes that "before evaluating the teaching method of a class, we must first examine whether its teaching content is correct;" After feeling the active atmosphere of classroom teaching, we should pay more attention to whether students have a Chinese experience corresponding to the teaching content. "

The teaching content is the question of what the teacher actually teaches in the classroom. The curriculum standard puts forward the requirements of "writing" and "writing" for composition teaching in primary schools, but the specific requirements are unknown. The teaching content of writing teaching can be summarized from two aspects: on the one hand, teachers give composition topics, students write them in class or after class, and the teaching content of composition class is mainly to comment on students' compositions. The content of classroom teaching organized by teachers is "proposition-students' writing-correcting-commenting", and the teaching content of "how to write" and "how to write" is almost blank. This kind of composition teaching relying on students' independent exploration is often time-consuming and inefficient. There is also a kind of teaching content, the teacher explains some writing knowledge, such as how to describe, how to express feelings, how to arrange paragraphs and so on. The teaching of these writing contents is often combined with reading teaching. When students really want to write, they often find that the writing knowledge taught by teachers is not very useful. On the other hand, in this kind of teaching, teachers impart some external and static writing knowledge in class, and writing is a practical language skill. Static knowledge cannot be turned into practical skills overnight, but it needs a long transformation process.

In the composition class, the teacher either says nothing or talks about some useless writing knowledge, and the composition teaching content is almost scarce. What you teach doesn't work and can't solve practical problems. The crux of the problem is that the teaching of these writing contents is out of the context of students' writing.

How to observe and evaluate teaching from the perspective of teaching content? We combine two cases of composition teaching to analyze. Teacher Yu Yongzheng's "Examination" (see People's Education, No.5, 2006) in writing content, teachers mainly start from the following aspects:

By asking students whether they are willing to take the exam, they naturally transition to their views on the exam;

Take the exam and put forward two requirements (the teacher sets a trap for the exam);

Correcting test papers and commenting;

Teachers guide students to write down their feelings;

Communication between students.

Teacher Yu passed this unique exam, which made the students fall into his preset "trap" and gave them a profound experience and feeling. In the following writing, students naturally speak freely. "Emotion moves in the heart and comes from words". Writing is the catharsis of the soul and a way to express yourself. Without the touch of the heart, it is disease-free, and the quality of writing is self-evident. It is certainly a positive and desirable method to let students appreciate life and enrich writing materials. But not every student has the time and opportunity to go out of home and school to feel the outside world. Then the teacher needs to provide the students with writing content to feel life in class. Teacher Yu solved the problem of students' writing content. Of course, it is also the key to the success of this class that teachers establish a harmonious dialogue relationship throughout the class and create an atmosphere of equal dialogue with students.

Wang Songzhou's "sentiment test" (see "Chinese Teaching Communication Journal of Primary Schools" 2007. 1) neither taught students specific writing knowledge nor put forward any specific requirements for students' writing. The teacher did the following things in class:

Please take out a clean piece of paper;

Write down your five favorite people on paper;

Pick up a pen and cross out one of them;

Cross out another one;

Cross out another one;

The last painful choice is to cross out one of the two.

In addition to the limited dialogue between teachers and students in class, teachers are more about letting students experience and express their feelings. Two-thirds of the time in the class is spent by teachers to solve the problem of writing content. It is also with the richness of writing content that in the little time left, students are resourceful and write articles that make people cry.

Let's leave aside the social controversy caused by Wang Songzhou's "home test". Judging from the writing content, Mr. Wang's class alienated the distance between reality and life through the creation of family ties, made students feel "strange" about life, integrated the writing content with students' emotional experience, and stimulated students' desire to express. From the analysis of teaching content, this kind of composition class should be advocated.

7. How to write a composition about a character's movements and language in 500 words 16 How to describe a character's language 1? It is common sense that a character's language reflects his professional characteristics, otherwise it will be irrelevant and make a lot of jokes.

For example, in the lesson "Flower Picking", the flower picker said, "Like beekeepers, we seldom stay in the nest all year round. Wherever there are flowers, we rush there." This wonderful metaphor is in line with the professional characteristics of beekeepers, if it is changed to doctors, teachers, workers, or people in other industries.

That's no use. In our daily life, a person's language can often reveal his occupation.

For example, after a few days, the two brothers decided to ask a tailor, a chef, a boatman and a driver to mediate. The four people felt that things were difficult, so they invited each other to meet at the chef's house first and discuss it.

Who are a, b, c and d below? What does a chef's wife do? A. One said, "I think we should cut the gordian knot when we go, and don't confuse pots and pans." B. One said, "Don't be too biased in your work. We need needles, needles and thread. "

C. One took the message: "Hey, it's not that we didn't manage this matter well before. There is a car in front of us and a road behind us. Just don't go out of line. " D. The other one is impatient: "I think it's better not to shiver here and go to his house to kill two birds with one stone."

The cook's daughter-in-law smiled: "You really can't leave your lines without saying anything." According to the character's language, it is easy for us to judge the character's occupation.

A is a chef, B is a tailor, C is a trolley and D is a boatman. The cook's wife is a peddler.

2, language should reflect the identity of the characters, people's identity is different, language should conform to the identity of the speaker. For example, Lenin and the Guards wrote the dialogue between the guards and Lenin: He was very upset and raised his hand to salute and said, "Comrade Lenin, please forgive me for delaying your time."

Lenin took the little soldier's hand and said happily, "Young man, you did the right thing! You are very responsible for your work, thank you! " Their conversation conforms to their respective identities. Besides, there are many wonderful examples.

For example, there is a story in ancient China, in which the characters' language well reflects their identity.

8. How to give a good composition lecture and evaluation class I think the current composition lecture and evaluation class has the following disadvantages: First, the theory is abstract and the terminology is cumbersome. Some teachers downloaded various theories about writing from materials and online, such as "momentum theory" and "ethereal theory", which made students confused. What's more, mechanically tell students the concepts and terms that they don't understand and digest.

Teachers should use their own words to express their understanding when quoting theoretical terms, and try to choose some incisive and vivid examples to help students understand. For example, the teacher talks about "image" and interprets this concept with "scenery in the heart" and "scenery that can convey feelings", which is much simpler than the definition in the textbook.

Second, the example is perfect, so that students stay away from it. The examples chosen by teachers are almost perfect and amazing, and the faces of students often show surprise and envy. Such examples can undoubtedly stimulate students' enthusiasm for writing, thus broadening their knowledge, broadening their horizons and providing typical materials for students' writing, but such examples often make students feel unattainable and unable to follow suit.

For example, a teacher talks about "detailed description", and he quotes many classics, from Fortress Besieged by Qian Zhongshu, Flowers Bloom and Flowers Fall by Lu Xun, to Chekhov's Death of a Civil Servant and Charlotte's Jane Eyre. The classroom has a large capacity, and the wonderful and moving sentences are rich and colorful. The students were fascinated by this pious worship and applauded frequently. After class, I asked the students, "Do you know how to describe the details?" He said: "The teacher did speak beautifully, but I don't understand how these good examples were conceived and written."

Therefore, composition evaluation must be based on students' writing examples. Too perfect examples will make students feel distant and dampen their self-confidence. Third, instilling and explaining, students lack the opportunity to participate and think. Writing needs comprehensive ability, and the formation of ability can not be achieved only by knowledge accumulation. Teachers must let students think in practice and improve themselves through participation.

In some composition classes, only the teacher always dominates the podium and controls the right to speak in class. However, many teachers rely too much on lesson plans and online materials when preparing lessons, and rarely read, think and practice. There are few original elements in classroom language and opinions, and teachers are only the memory, transmitter and spokesperson of knowledge. Over time, the writing knowledge taught by teachers in class has become more and more old-fashioned and outdated.

This kind of lecture and evaluation is small in information and single in form. Often just superficial, lack of interest and interest, and low efficiency. Fourth, find fault with students and seriously suppress their enthusiasm for writing. Some teachers insist on this and that in writing, deliberately setting up various obstacles for students' thinking; When summing up students' compositions, they talk about seemingly endless problems and faults exposed in their compositions, and even accuse students of low level and poor ability with a little ridicule; The composition is a shocking red pen comment.

When students see that what they have worked so hard to write is so bad, what else can they have but loss and inferiority? There is no doubt that composition evaluation should point out the existing problems, but it should also provide specific and effective improvement measures and methods. Some problems are hard to recover and need repeated training and persistence to be fundamentally solved, such as the development of thinking, the conception of examining questions, the expression of language, the layout of articles and the skills of writing.

Five, the same old tune, lack of new ideas For a long time, composition teaching in middle schools has no special guidance materials, no clear provisions on what must be taught, no orderly and effective training questions, no excellent compositions that can be directly used for student guidance, and no evaluation criteria for evaluating students' compositions (the only criterion is the examination outline of the college entrance examination). In short, the current composition teaching is arbitrary, subjective and personalized.

Since the implementation of the new curriculum standard, compared with the previous Chinese textbooks, writing guidance is still a "hard bone" and a "fatal weakness". Many teachers learn their writing knowledge from college textbooks, but many new concepts full of the flavor of the times have not been absorbed by front-line teachers in time. Even some teachers don't read as many extracurricular books as students. In short, there are only a few poor writing terms that have been repeated countless times, not to mention that students sound tasteless, and even teachers themselves have already experienced aesthetic fatigue.

A teacher said, "Students' compositions can be improved not by teachers' teaching, but by reading and writing more." Practice has proved that this laissez-faire approach is an important reason for the "less delay" in composition teaching.

I think the following methods can improve students' writing level: 1. Summarize the existing problems in students' work and put forward effective improvement measures. This will not only enable students to understand the grading standards, matters needing attention, and the reasons for mistakes, but also enable them to draw inferences and understand the writing of a class of articles. For example, when reviewing students' compositions, I found that the common problems of students' relationship topic compositions are: I don't understand that the central argument of an article must be the relationship between concepts, or write only one aspect, or write alone, or start a new stove; I don't know what kinds of common logical relationships are; Lack of analytical ability, unable to judge and reason.

Accordingly, in the composition evaluation class, I will focus on training students' ability to judge the relationship between things and explain the reasons, and then ask students to write compositions on such related topics as "action and result", "idolization and self-cultivation" and "center and edge", so that students' argumentative writing ability can be effectively improved from one article to another, from writing to guidance and then to writing. Second, examples to prove ideas should come from textbooks and students' own exercises as much as possible. If you choose extracurricular examples, on the one hand, students will feel strange and need time to understand. On the other hand, because some examples are too old or difficult to connect with ideas, it will bring difficulties to teachers in preparing lessons.

If you choose the examples in the textbook, students can quickly understand and learn to look at the learned text with a new eye. For example, the "face" of the "combination of point and face" in argumentative argument is to take a familiar example word in the form of arrangement, which can not only enhance the momentum of the article, but also show the author's profound knowledge.

9. Add comments to the fragments that describe the appearance, movements, language, demeanor and psychological activities of the characters. One day Xiao Ming came home, and his mother scolded him a few words. He roared, "Why did you scold me? What did I do wrong? " Mom saw Xiaoming talk back and hit him several times. Xiaoming ran out of the door angrily.

2. At first, Ding Chunqiu made a subtotal and robbed A Zi of the opportunity to challenge the Shaolin abbot to swim. After the Shaolin abbot was defeated, he wanted to freestyle and let the beggars' sect drop out of school. Ding Chunqiu's disciples actually said that beggars' unique skills were not as good as those of stars. At this moment, our Xia Daxia appeared. First, I didn't see him. First, I heard his voice: "Who said that the martial arts of the Stars Sect are better than the eighteen beggars?" Then, he took the lead. In the two strokes and eighteen palms, he used "Kang Long has regrets" for the first time to defeat Johnson Ding and raised his hand to save A Zi!

As soon as it comes out, it gives people a super-superior state, and then three moves will beat the three great masters out of the water. It's really an old magic clown! So Xiao Feng, Duan Yu and Xu Zhu became sworn brothers!

Xiaoli sipped her mouth, bowed her waist and approached it step by step. Approaching, approaching, I saw her quietly reaching out her right hand to the butterfly, and her open fingers closed and caught the butterfly's wings. Xiaoli jumped and jumped with joy.

He bent down, the basketball kept flapping back and forth, left and right under his hand, and his eyes turned around, looking for a chance to "break through". Suddenly, he quickened his pace, then turned left and right, rushed through two layers of defense lines and came to the basket. After a tiger jump, he turned to shoot, and the basketball drew a beautiful arc in the air and landed in the basket impartially.

It's too late now, but it's too soon. The athlete who fell to the ground stood up suddenly with his hands propped up and tiptoed. The left foot points to the starting line, and the knee bends and squats firmly. Hands are like two wooden pillars stuck in the ground, and the whole body leans forward slightly, like an eagle spreading its wings.

She washed the dirty clothes with soap and then polished them. Small soap bubbles emerged from the clothes and soon turned into many white bubbles.

6. She took a breath at the window glass and wiped it with her nails. A series of actions were clean and neat.

7. I first poured a small amount of oil into the pan. When the oil smoked, I quickly poured the egg into the pan, only to hear a "click". The egg quickly appeared in the oil pan, and its edge was like the lace on the little girl's skirt.

I rinsed the mop in the pool again and again, then wrung it dry, then bent down, arched my front legs, pulled back and pulled it up.

8. I just opened the textbook and suddenly saw a picture under the glass plate. "Deer, my favorite sika deer, draw it." I thought to myself, open the painting, pick up the brush, divide three times five by two and tick off a deer. However, because I didn't observe it carefully, I painted the deer head as a child's head. How ugly this is! Erase the repaint, but draw it to the right. I had to draw another duck swimming in the river on the left side of the paper and "twist" the deer's head to make it look at the duck. I've finished painting. It's really good.

9. In the fifth grade, I joined a calligraphy interest group. Under the guidance of my tutor, I picked up a brush dipped in black juice for the first time. According to the instructor's instructions: the index finger and middle finger are stuck outside the pen container, and the ring finger and little finger are stuck inside the pen container. I write carefully one by one. A point, a horizontal, a vertical, a si. But it's outrageous. It was clearly painted by a three-year-old child. A little, it is a thick ink group; A horizontal, winding like a small snake; A vertical one, but as thick as an elephant's legs and feet in art; A slap is even more outrageous, like a bald broom that has long been scrapped. I looked at my masterpiece and smiled. These strokes are uneven and asymmetrical, not to mention the shelf structure. But the tutor said, "well written!" It seems that you have a bright future. If you practice hard, you will succeed in the future. "

10. He found a red dragonfly parked on the green grass by the pond. I saw my brother staring, the cat hunched over, leaned forward and moved forward very slowly. Suddenly, he reached out and caught the dragonfly with two fingers. Dragonflies struggled desperately, and my brother jumped and jumped for joy. He tied the dragonfly's long tail with a thin thread, grabbed the other end of the thin thread with one hand, let go of the dragonfly and it flew. He flew with the dragonfly and shouted, "I flew, I flew."