First of all, you should address the teacher politely and state your name in time, because the teacher has so many students that he can't remember everyone's name clearly. Besides, be polite. If it happens to be a holiday, you can say some greetings first and then talk about paper.

The first draft sent to the tutor should explain the original intention of the topic and the purpose of the study, clarify your own problems and concerns, and clarify the existing problems and difficulties, hoping to get guidance and guidance from the teacher.

For example: Hello, tutor, I am your student XXX. Ask your tutor to read it for you. I think there are many defects and I don't know how to modify them. Thank you for reading my paper in your busy schedule. Or cut to the chase: hello, teacher, I have finished the first draft of the paper as required, please read it, please point out the shortcomings, thank you.

When you contact your tutor in the future, first of all, say hello politely: hello, teacher, I am a student of your graduation thesis. Secondly, briefly introduce my thesis: my thesis level is not very good, and there are many defects. I will try to improve! Finally, humbly ask the teacher: I may often trouble the teacher in the future, please don't mind, and finally thank the teacher for his guidance!

Only in this way can you leave a good impression on your tutor.