In order to help you make a breakthrough in language in a short time, the author talks about your strategy of scoring points in language expression from the perspective of narrative and argumentative essays for your reference in daily practice.
First of all, describe poetry and touch the mind of the marking teacher.
1. Give the language a sense of picture.
Language has a sense of picture, which is the first characteristic of excellent narrative. "There are pictures in poetry", which makes his poems sway in the garden of Tang poetry. When we write a narrative, if we can "depict" a picture with words, reproduce a scene, and make readers feel the scene, then our composition will stand out among hundreds of thousands of candidates. Please read a passage in the essay Curiosity of Jiangsu College Entrance Examination in 2008.
Only a few meters apart, grandma will put down her work every few minutes, "old man!" " "Grandma called it that.
Grandpa shouldn't. Grandma was in a hurry and walked to the front. Grandpa is fine. He slept soundly on the cane chair. So she smiled like a child and said, "This dead old man is ignored by others."
Such things happen every day.
This is a passage describing the daily life scene between grandparents. This passage shows the mutual care, warmth and care of grandparents in their later life after experiencing the storms of life: people must always know that they are fine before they can feel at ease. This kind of love, which is always in the deep heart, is vividly portrayed in a few minutes, showing the most beautiful love scenery in the world. It's amazing to read.
What does this passage give us? The language is simple and lively. Its main advantage is that the author observes and experiences the scenes that best reflect the deep love of grandparents' lives every day, and "reproduces" its typical language and form, which has a very vivid sense of pictures and has the power to touch people's hearts. Come to think of it, is it difficult for us to do so?
2. Let the language have a sense of flow.
Fluency of language means that words should be steady and sentence patterns should be vivid. In other words, the words are accurate and vivid, and the sentences are fluent and free. Reading a fluent sentence often makes people feel as refreshing and sweet as taking a bite of a pear. Please read the following article.
Being curious about a city will be the most extraordinary experience in your life.
In the morning, when you shuttle through the silky fog, this curiosity begins. Dew moistens the bluestone road, and there is a slight sound when the cloth shoes step on it. What is budding? The purple core of paulownia flower falls silently, so soft that it seems to break when pinched, and flies away when blown. What kind of shyness is hidden inside? From far and near, from near to far, the ringing sound "cheep-cheep-cheep" penetrates the fog and disappears silently in the ear. Who is humming? When the fog cleared, all this seemed to be pulled away from the dream. Where did they go?
I can only go on with curiosity.
This is the beginning of an essay entitled "Curiosity" written by a candidate in Jiangsu College Entrance Examination in 2008. It depicts an elegant, beautiful and leisurely urban landscape. In this passage, candidates are quite skilled in describing the details. Whether the verbs "shuttle", "run", "tread", "hide" and "sprout" or the modifiers "silk", "slight", "purple" and "soft" are used accurately and vividly, that is to say, the words are very stable, you see, "dew" and "run". The sentence pattern of this passage is also rich and colorful. There are rhetorical questions, figurative sentences, personification, parallelism, symmetry and declarative sentences, which are orderly and varied, such as flowing water, giving people beautiful enjoyment.
3. Make the language implicit.
The expression is implicit, meaningful and thought-provoking, which is the symbol of the top grade of narrative language. The sign of implicit language is often to put the author's thoughts and feelings in a thought-provoking picture, which is contained in the description of "drunkenness" and often carries profound implications with limited words. Most of them express endless meanings in words through generalization, suggestion and melodious writing, and express extensive and profound connotations. Please read a passage in the composition "Living Poetically" written by a candidate in Hunan College Entrance Examination in 2007.
Grandma is still using the most primitive wood stove. She said that burning coal for cooking is too wasteful and gas is too expensive, so it is better to burn wood. So, in that wild season, my sister and I followed grandpa's axe in Shan Ye, cut it down, tied it up, carried it home, arranged it, dried it, and bundles of firewood entered the woodshed. So, countless times, my sister and I can see grandma's red smiling face in grandma's kitchen hall. Especially in winter, grandpa makes a fire, grandma cooks, and my sister and I compete to snuggle up next to grandpa to keep warm. A string of laughter rose into the sky with the smoke, telling the warmth of winter.
After reading this passage, a deep and lasting sense of happiness ripples in our hearts. In this passage, the author shows the simple human feelings and happiness and warmth of an ordinary farmer, and expresses the author's unique feelings and understanding of poetic life. Crackling firewood, grandma's smiling face with stove fire on fire, grandma's warm and harmonious cooking with grandpa's fire, and innocent and lovely pictures of "me" and my sister scrambling to snuggle up next to grandpa to keep warm all vividly depict a poetic life picture of ordinary farmers. And the phrase "a string of laughter and laughter rose to the sky with the smoke, telling the warmth of winter" left us a profound meaning.
After carefully understanding this passage, many of our candidates' articles can reach this level. The basic idea is to select a typical picture that can reflect the thought of the article in life, cut the picture into several parts, grasp the most critical "action" of each part, and present it to the reader coherently with an appropriate verb, so that the reader can understand the thoughts and emotions from the description, rather than being told directly by the author.
Second, pay attention to language expression skills and improve argumentative scores.
The data of college entrance examination composition for many years shows that the candidates who write argumentative essays account for an absolute majority, but the language of discussion is mostly monotonous and dull. Some articles are all declarative sentences, some are even commas, and there is a period at the end of the paragraph, without even a question mark or exclamation point. It is really as quiet as water and as light as distilled water. Some argumentative language concepts are unclear and lack necessary modification restrictions, which leads to imprecise expression and affects persuasiveness. In this regard, we make the following suggestions:
1. Combine long sentences with short sentences.
Generally speaking, there are long sentences in argumentative essays, which can make the articles express more closely. However, the sentence is long and there are many modifiers, so it is easy to pay attention to one thing and lose sight of another, and structural diseases or logical errors may occur due to improper modification. Candidates are particularly prone to such mistakes in a tense examination room atmosphere. We suggest that we can use several sentences to express the meaning of complex sentences. Of course, if we are well trained, using long sentences can add color and strength to the discussion. Therefore, in the examination composition, we should pay attention to the combination of long sentences and short sentences, which can also make the sentence patterns rich and diverse and form the ups and downs of beauty. The combination of long and short sentences in the following paragraphs is very enlightening.
Noble thoughts create eternal happiness. Throughout ancient and modern times, looking at China and foreign countries, Qu Yuan and Chu people joined the Miluo River in "The world is cloudy and I am alone, and everyone is drunk and I am alone". Although he died in flesh and blood, he sublimated eternal happiness. Under the encirclement and suppression of the enemy, Mao Zedong finally decided on the Long March, and a noble and clear thinking created the happiness of more than one billion people in New China. Exiled Deng Xiaoping walked along a country road, but the spark of thinking was flying in his mind-the reform and opening up, and a system that made hundreds of millions of people in China rich came into being. At this point, we have to say that the way of thinking determines the happiness of human civilization, and happiness needs the interpretation of thinking. (2008 Hainan College Entrance Examination Excellent Composition "Thinking and Interpreting Happiness")
2. Combination of generalization and concreteness.
The language of an excellent argumentative essay should be speculative. It is full of literary talent, but it cannot be flashy; It is enriched by materials, but it is not a complete record of the plot. In argumentative writing, we learn to combine general language with concrete expression, which can make the language of argumentative writing more speculative. such as
One kind of "curiosity" is the most common in Lu Xun's articles: it is curiosity that drives people to watch "beheading programs" in a hurry; It is curiosity that drives neighbors to listen to Xianglinsao's crying; It is also curiosity that drives Ah Q's "revolution". However, perhaps these can only be called "curiosity", but the "heart" is lost. This kind of "curiosity" is based on prying into the sufferings of others, and it is based on the darkness and ignorance of an "iron house". If this is really "curiosity", then there is no such thing.
Question: What is real curiosity?
True curiosity requires thinking. As Pascal said: "Thinking makes people great, and all our dignity lies in thinking-even if you are just a reed under the strong nature." If there is no such thinking under the condition of "the soul is present", then no matter how many apples fall, I am afraid that the discovery of "gravity" will not be found; No matter how hard human beings observe and learn, it is difficult to have the slightest creativity and progress. (2008 Jiangsu College Entrance Examination Excellent Composition "Curiosity")
In the first paragraph above, the author summed up some "bad" curiosities among the people-curiosities of "bystanders" criticized by Lu Xun, in contrast to curiosities of "truth", "presence of soul" and "thoughts" which will be discussed in detail below. It is this combination of generalization and concreteness that highlights the "real curiosity" emphasized by the author. Because the focus of the article is argumentation, the negative and generalized examples of "curiosity" are compared. In this way, the article seems relaxed, showing the examinee's considerable theoretical talent.
Mr Lv Shuxiang said that language is a skill and habit. This tells us that language ability can be improved through training, and the key is methods and skills. As long as you read more and practice more, the language will fly.