Hello, teacher, please review the first draft, which was completed on the basis of the opening report and outline you directed. Please also review and give your comments as soon as possible. Please make comments in the draft (note: this is the key point! Some teachers send you voice, say something ambiguous, forget it next time, and don't make it clear, which leads to repeated revisions, and the same place gives different opinions next time)

"Hello, Teacher X, I'm sorry to bother you (address+sorry, the teacher's surname was added in front). I'm xxx (I just need to introduce myself for the first time). What's the recent activity/notice (it can be omitted if there is no header). I want to ask if it is convenient for you. If it's inconvenient for you, can you ... just like this (if it must be done and there is no way out, it can also be omitted), thank the teacher (if there is a holiday, you can wish the teacher a happy holiday, if not, you can also omit the blessing).