Comparative example 2, this paper has the same effect, and all of them are explained in detail. The difference is that this article uses a metaphor to expand the article by focusing on the pen power. The disadvantage is that, as in Example 2, the vision of the article is too narrow, and the facts and arguments are insufficient, which makes the content of the article cramped and thin, and a little less bold. Example 4? Face setbacks bravely?

(the topic is point of view, straightforward)?

There will be many setbacks and misfortunes in life. Only by bravely facing setbacks and working hard can we achieve a brilliant life?

-Inscription?

(The language of the inscription must be concise, beautiful and vivid; Rich in meaning and lasting in affection. If you can't meet this requirement, why not "sign"?

Also facing the Cultural Revolution, why didn't the old musician languish, while the female pianist Gu Shengying committed suicide at the beginning of the Cultural Revolution? This is the difference between bravely facing setbacks and surrendering to setbacks. We should face setbacks bravely, work hard and achieve a brilliant life! Quote-brief analysis-put forward opinions, with neat opening and strong effect?

Under the dim oil lamp, a weak figure sometimes falls down weakly and sometimes stands up strongly. He is Sima Qian, who is compiling a history book of "learning from nature and knowing the changes of ancient and modern times". Castration didn't knock him down, and the neighbors' ridicule didn't destroy him. He stood up strongly and issued the most powerful cry in the world with the world's most declining body-"Historical Records", "Historians never sing again, leaving Sao without rhyme". (Sima Qian's case

The argument is appropriate and powerful, but there is no analysis; Remember: the case is only a case, and it has no argument function. It is "analysis" that gives it the power to demonstrate! )?

The muddy waves were monstrous, perilla stood on the shore, and the waves wet his skirt, but the misty fog could not hide his eyes looking into the distance. He was demoted again. what should he do ？ In this barren land, you will drown your life, feel sorry for yourself, and make no progress in this lifeless and desperate place? No, you can't just let it go. You should face setbacks bravely and work hard. Therefore, when Su Zifen rose up, she was bold and unrestrained, and she had the ambition of "a spring river, a romantic figure through the ages" and was broad-minded all her life. In the days when she was relegated to official position, Perilla frutescens made great achievements in literature. He succeeded because he dared to face setbacks. There must be such an analysis, and the handling of this case of perilla is obviously better than the previous one?

It is precisely because this old musician has the courage of Sima Qian and Su Dongpo to face setbacks and difficulties that he didn't languish during the Cultural Revolution and lived there for seven years. It was precisely because the female pianist did not dare to face setbacks like Xiang Yu and died in Wujiang River that she committed suicide at the beginning of the Cultural Revolution. This analysis is very good. It reveals the essence and closely follows the material.

"Frustration makes life", many successful people have experienced great setbacks. Edison experienced thousands of failures before he found the bright tungsten wire; Columbus experienced many storms and waves before he discovered the new world. How many times did Tai Lihua fall before she jumped out of the swing dance ... (with a good example, she unfolded it on the face)?

However, in real life, many people are afraid to face setbacks. When they encounter some minor setbacks, they will complain about others and feel sorry for themselves. Even like female pianists, when the storm strikes, the sacred and beautiful things in their hearts are trampled, and they choose to die.

Fight when you die. Why don't these people learn from the old musicians? Connecting with reality, enhancing the sense of the times and pertinence of the article?

Only by bravely facing setbacks and working hard can we achieve a brilliant life. (Inscription, mechanically repeating the point of view in the first paragraph, is at the end of its tether, Jiang Lang's talent! )? 16+17+16 = 49 points?

This brief comment is a serious argumentative paper, which is embodied in the orthodox thinking of "raising a problem-a new problem-solving a problem" and in the juxtaposition of examples and arguments. In line with the meaning of the question, the argument is appropriate and the argument is sufficient. The deficiency is that the content has not been deeply explored, and it only stays at the necessary level of "bravely facing setbacks", but the content of how to face setbacks is completely irrelevant, just like a forgetful doctor who has diagnosed a disease but forgot to prescribe medicine.