How can you see a rainbow without experiencing wind and rain?

Examinees of Henan Province

The eagle soaring in the vast sky must have experienced the pain of countless times when the mother eagle fell off the cliff before tempering a pair of volley wings.

A bright pearl must have experienced numerous peristalsis of the clam body and polished by numerous storms before it can shine.

Similarly, a truly successful person must stand up again after countless falls, because "how can you see a rainbow without experiencing wind and rain?" No one can succeed casually. "

Shi Tiesheng fell and lost his legs, which was a heavy blow to anyone. But instead of losing confidence in life, he expressed his infinite love for life with his brain and hands.

Beethoven was blind and deaf, but he still wrote many musical works, such as Hero and Destiny. In the misfortune of life, he stubbornly grasped the "throat of fate."

These are all fallen people, but they all stood up strongly, fought against fate and misfortune, and finally achieved great success.

So for each of us, wrestling is not terrible. The terrible thing is that you have lost your confidence and courage in life.

Bing Xin said: "The successful flower, people are only surprised by its present brilliance! However, at the beginning, its buds were soaked with tears of struggle and shed blood rain of sacrifice. "

Therefore, each of us can't collapse in the face of misfortune, because after we change our mentality, it is possible to hold any chain of life.

Just like the boy in the painting after falling, we should all boldly say, "It's no big deal."

Because life is our own, our destiny is in our own hands, and our mentality and our choices determine the direction of life.

Frustration is the wealth of life and the medicine to promote your success. How can flowers that don't experience wind and rain be gorgeous? How can a life without suffering shine?

As Hong Zhanhui, a figure who moved China in 2005, said: Difficulties, we have the responsibility to face and solve. As a new generation of young people, we should understand that wrestling is not terrible, just as we have always had the courage to sing this song: how can we see a rainbow without experiencing wind and rain? No one can succeed casually!

I want to say, how can people grow up without going through wrestling and falling again and again? Wrestling is also a kind of happiness, and wind and rain are the precursors of rainbows after rain!

Comments by famous teachers

The article conforms to the meaning of the topic, which can be seen from the topic "How can I see the rainbow without experiencing wind and rain"; Finally, ask the question again and the center will be clear. As an argumentative essay, the language of the article is fluent, less dull and boring than the orthodox argumentative essay, more vivid spirituality and aura, and more resistant to personal reading.

The author has a deep understanding of the relationship between "growth and frustration" and can make a thorough analysis with examples and quotations, achieving a thought-provoking expression effect; The use of metaphor, parallelism and rhetorical questions makes the whole article colorful.

Early warning of losing points in 2007 national volume I perfect composition: inner solo

Inner solo dance

Shanxi examinee

I am a little mouse dancing solo, dragging my stump and leaving footprints in different shades.

The most dazzling stage

Since I was born, I have built this stage like a wasteland. I don't have any tools except my hands and wisdom, so I use them to practice. This is my most beautiful stage. Although it is so small and not so gorgeous, it belongs to me.

One day, when the most beautiful stage in my heart was close at hand, I found that I couldn't step on it-I was injured. A wound that will never heal.

Therefore, this pure land is no longer an island where I can live, but a gray cage where gray dreams and gray enthusiasm are imprisoned. I found that the stage of my inner dream collapsed in an instant.

Who am I and where do I live?

What am I? Who am I? A dancer or a clown? I don't know. All I know is that I lost my freedom.

We were bound by the outside world, and our parents, society and schools "poured" us in, and they won. I became their most loyal servant.

But this servant lives in the ivory tower, which is the closest place to God in heaven, but she can't fly back to earth.

When the will is hollowed out a little, the light of love cannot be "put into storage" because it does not conform to the norms. The cold current is coming, my world is cool to zero, and my heart is like an ice bank.

Then, cry, with fear of dream death.

I live in this ice room, eager to fly, but afraid to flap my wings. Longing for freedom, but feeling confused; Longing for the truth, but afraid to praise the existence of the truth alone, just because life is too comfortable.

So, from then on, I also moved to the whirlpool of drowning love. It's futile to extricate yourself.

Rebuild my stage

With scars all over my body and a hole in my heart, I came back and began to rebuild my stage.

I don't care what other people think anymore. I don't have time to care whether I am good or bad in the eyes of the secular. I am no longer dependent on others, and I am no longer hiding in the corner alone, quietly watching what my parents, school and society have laid for me.

I want to open my arms, no longer delicate, let the cold wind pass by my ears, and let every inch of hair moan and dance painfully in the wind.

I want to learn to grow up in forbearance and understand life through experience.

I want to announce loudly that I want to be a truly independent dancer, even if I am the only audience. I want to attract attention with the most unique dance on my own stage.

Comments by famous teachers

"Writing" in the Examination Outline? There are two important requirements for the basic level: substantial content and fluent language. " "Rich content" refers to stating with substance and evidence, and showing the theme of the article with enough high-quality materials; Language fluency "means that language expression is standardized, accurate, coherent and appropriate." The article "Inner Solo" is an empty and extensive lyric prose. From the content point of view, the author should have understood the meaning of the question, but due to the lack of real description, it is difficult to arouse the reader's * *. From the perspective of language expression, both of them have advantages, that is, they can write more freely and the author may read more; However, there are also some shortcomings. On the one hand, many sentences are ambiguous, such as "I'm a little mouse dancing solo", "I'm building this stage like a wasteland", "The light of love can't be put into the warehouse because it doesn't meet the specifications" and "I live too comfortably". On the other hand, there are also many ill sentences, such as "attracting attention on your own stage".

2007 National Volume One Full Score Composition: Flying under the Influence of Love

Fly under the influence of love

Examinees of Henan Province

The sound of kites

In the blue sky, birds are singing freely; Under the breeze, the flowers exude a faint scent; Looking at the vast blue sky, I want to spread my wings and fly

I saved all my strength and aimed at the direction I yearned for. I flapped my wings to fly. What happened? What the hell is going on here? Why can't I fly? I looked back anxiously, only to find that there was a thread holding me tightly, and the slight struggle was accompanied by bursts of pain. No, I want to fly. How did I get tied up? Let go of me, I want to fly!

"There are endless dangers on the endless horizon. Strong winds will make you lose your balance, heavy rain will make you lose your direction, and lightning will break your delicate wings, so you won't get hurt under my influence. " Line said softly.

Without you, I will lose my way; Without you, I would hesitate; How can I be strong without you! However, please don't pull me too tight, just let me fly freely under your influence!

Alas de mariposa

Gently spit out silk, and then tightly bound myself, the bright sky suddenly became dark, and I have turned into a pupa. The dark days may be long, the feeling of being bound may be painful, but the lonely waiting will be infinitely brilliant. I want to be a beautiful butterfly, and I'm looking forward to it.

Suddenly, a pair of scissors touched my world, and the tight shackles around me began to loosen slowly, and a ray of light gradually appeared in the darkness! No, please don't touch me. I want to be a beautiful butterfly.

"Don't scream, I don't have the heart to you so painful, too tight bondage will hurt your young wings. Let me help you get rid of these unnecessary troubles and take you to the bright world! "

Thank you! Thank you! But this is the pain I have to experience, so let me bear it alone! How can I see a rainbow without experiencing wind and rain? Please put down your scissors! At this time, I don't need your help, I have to rely on myself!

Children's tears

A bright moon slowly walked through the clouds, and a touch of bright and gentle sprinkled on the earth. In the middle of the night, the light in a small room was on, and a child was sitting by the window alone, with crystal tears swirling in his eyes.

"How much I long for the endless green field, and my dream is wrapped in rolling football. I want to play football, I want to gallop in a wonderful stadium, and I want to be the king of the ball! " His eyes sparkled.

"However, my parents won't let me go out to play football. They are afraid that I will fall and get hurt. The teacher forbade us to play football. He said it would affect our study. What is even more tragic is that they all say that the government does not open the stadium to children. " The light in his eyes suddenly disappeared and his eyes became dim again.

"Please let me play football! Thank you for your concern and care. Without you, I will not grow up healthily, but I also need to decide my own life! Love me, please don't hold me too tightly. "

A gust of wind is blowing, conveying the children's voices: thank you for your love, please relax your hands gently and let us fly freely under the influence of love!

Comments by famous teachers

"Thank you for your love", but "Please relax your hands gently" and give your child room to fly freely-the author tries his best to convey his own feelings in the article, which is touching. The clever use of personification strengthens the appeal and gives readers a sense of intimacy.

The structure of the article is exquisite, and three sub-titles are drawn up under one headline, which tell stories in the tone of "kite", "butterfly" and "child" respectively, showing the same theme. This form of subtitle, such as flowers in full bloom, is pleasing to the eye.

In 2007, the national volume was a perfect composition: the new On young chinese.

New "Young China's Theory"

Shanxi examinee

A hundred years ago, Mr. Liang Qichao shouted from the heart: "If a teenager is strong, the country will be strong, and if a teenager is independent, the country will be independent!" And Liang Gong's high-spirited spirit finally failed to reappear in our generation. Looking at the examination questions in front of me, I imagined the lofty sentiments of Liang Gong swallowing mountains and rivers and squeezed out a bitter smile.

How did our children grow up?

Fortunately, I was born in a well-off family in peacetime. From the fertilized egg, I am the load-bearing wall. Together with my mother, I supplement all kinds of nutrition every day. Although this nucleic acid and that drink were finally identified as conceptual hype, listening to Mozart's music didn't make the baby smarter. When I was born, I drank imported milk powder for hundreds of dollars. Although foreign milk powder is expensive only because of high tariffs, there are countless bright toys that are said to develop intelligence everywhere, although I don't think it will increase some brain cells. When I was three years old, my parents took great pains to choose a five-star kindergarten for me. Although I didn't do half of my graduation papers in kindergarten correctly, I began to learn elegant art piano and painting at the age of five and received professional training in mental arithmetic and English. When I was in primary school, they tried their best to get me into a key primary school. For six years, the three-hour shuttle service every day made them very happy. When I entered middle school, they spent two years of savings to send me to a key middle school. For six years, my mother cooked soup every day to fatten my ugly duckling, but she was not strong at all ... They took great pains to love me, but never let me go alone. Maybe it's not that they don't want to-I can understand that they dare not.

My middle school, which is very famous, has many shining glory cards hanging at the door, a glorious history of being among the best in enrollment rate over the years, and a playground with a plastic track, but there is no canteen, so we are not allowed to go to the suburbs to sweep graves in Tomb-Sweeping Day. There is only one reason: safety is heaven.

My teachers are rare. They are noble in character. They work hard with Dai Yue, and they don't imply that my parents will give them gifts during the holidays. They are all right, but they just don't have time to teach me what to do when faced with a choice. Maybe it's not that they don't want to-I can understand that they dare not.

As for my society, I'm sorry, I don't know. All I know is that I am being pushed forward by a huge force along a narrow alley. What is ahead, glory and dreams? Trap or abyss? I can't see, I have no choice. ...

Students who took the senior high school entrance examination were suddenly told to take the physical education exam. Their parents began to practice skipping rope and running at the last minute. This is just another new but not new failure case under the examination-oriented education system. And I walked into the college entrance examination today, and the painting in front of me once again plunged me into deep sorrow. What is more sad is that the author's painstaking efforts are all on paper, but he still can't restrain the sadness from flowing year after year.

Comments by famous teachers

Although the content and style of this exam composition are a little different, it has a bit of ridicule, such as "My mother has been cooking soup every day for six years to fatten my ugly duckling, but it is not strong at all" "My middle school is very famous, and I have won many shining glory cards hanging at the door" and so on. , but the relationship is close and the feelings are profound. It can be said that there is no lack of sharpness and enthusiasm when clicking.

In addition, the proposed topic "young chinese's New Theory" was written by Mr. Liang Qichao's "On young chinese", which is deeply emotional and quite ingenious.