I feel that there is no problem with the argument of the whole article, but the focus of argumentative writing must be to demonstrate my point of view closely. After reading your article, I feel that the theme is to stick to my own life course, and the article should talk more about how to stick to being myself. For example, in the case of Ye Yingyi, I think it is necessary to talk more about sticking to my bottom line, which is strong sacrifice and dedication. This is Ye Yingyi's own value orientation. He insisted on doing what he thought was meaningful and correct. This is what I wrote.

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