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Topic: Write an article of about 800 words with the theme of "Fashion". The word "fashion" in Modern Chinese Dictionary means "fashion of the times". The so-called "contemporary" means that it will change with the passage of time, and it will become popular and be accepted by the public at a certain time. And "fashion" refers to both spiritual and material aspects. And my understanding of fashion is that fashion is special and has personality. Although I am not the kind of person who will pursue fashion, I like to pay attention to those curious things related to daily life. For example: diet, clothing, interior design and so on. (This sentence can be quoted below and discussed with examples. ) Fashion is also relative. This sentence means the first paragraph, so it is not needed here. During the Revolution of 1911, it was a fashion for people to wear Chinese tunic suit. Because most people were still wearing robes and jackets at that time. In addition, people at that time had long braids, so short hair was very special, especially the hairstyle of Sanqi hair. If you can do that hairstyle, it may cause a sensation. It's groundbreaking work and requires a lot of courage. Because at that time, people would mistake a man with short hair for a fake foreign devil, a traitor and so on. This shows that people are ignorant and stubborn. This sentence is biased in the direction of fashion. For the contemporary era, culture is becoming more and more diversified. Walking at the forefront of modern times requires great courage and motivation. I admire and admire those people very much. They promoted the development of the times. They may be despised and laughed at, or they may be pointed at. But they don't care about other people's attitudes, they just go their own way. (The third paragraph takes clothing as an example. This paragraph might as well take diet as an example to enrich the content. It is because of them that things around us are constantly changing and constantly let us know what we need. Only when society progresses can it develop. Some avant-garde things become popular things, and some popular things become history. The passage of time has taken away many beautiful things, but left people's spiritual wealth. This paragraph can be used as an example of interior design. The above three paragraphs can form a total score with the second paragraph, so don't laugh at those fashionable things and those fashionable people. Maybe one day you will become a fashion promoter, a person with fashion ideas. The last paragraph summarizes the full text, and it is necessary to refine and deepen the theme. ) Major modification scheme: 1. From the content point of view, it is not sufficient, and some explanatory materials can be added. The theme needs to be refined to make it clearer. 2. From the point of view of expression, the structure is not rigorous enough and needs to be adapted and adjusted in order to carry forward its nature and deepen it step by step. I think the word "fashion" means "fashion of the times" in modern Chinese dictionaries. Since it is "contemporary", it will change with the passage of time, become popular at a certain time and be accepted by the public, that is to say, the so-called "fashion" is relative. And "fashion" can refer to both material and spirit. In my opinion, fashion means fashion, uniqueness and individuality. Although I am not the kind of person who deliberately pursues fashion, I like to pay attention to curious new things related to daily life, such as clothing, diet, interior design and so on. Because they lead the new trend of our life. During the Revolution of 1911, it was a fashion for people to wear Chinese tunic suit. Because at that time, most people were still wearing robes and jackets, and some still had long braids. Therefore, it is very special to shave short hair, especially the hairstyle with three-seven hair openings. That kind of dress shocked the world and caused social shock. This is a pioneering work, a challenge to the old tradition, and how much courage is needed. Because at that time, people would regard people in short-haired tunic suits as fake foreign devils or traitors. Today, it seems that we are used to wearing Chinese tunic suit, from which we can see that "fashionable" clothes have overcome ignorance and conservatism and created a new era. For the contemporary era, culture is becoming more and more diversified. Walking in the forefront of the times also requires great courage and motivation. For example, "KFC" was introduced to China, a country that has held chopsticks for thousands of years. Because of its advanced management concept and unique food culture, it gradually established its unshakable position. There are also Korean food, Japanese food and Italian pizza, which are very popular in China and greatly enrich our food culture. Some people think that eating foreign food is a fashion that is not worth promoting. But I think culture has no national boundaries. It can not only lead the trend, but also explain the advantages, and local culture will also be promoted in the competition. I admire and admire the advanced fashion, which promotes the development of the times. Some "fashions" may be despised and ridiculed, and may be pointed at, but time doesn't care about people's attitudes, it will make the right choice. It is precisely because of the advanced "fashion" that things around us are constantly changing and constantly let us know what we need, so that society can move forward and develop. Some avant-garde things became popular, and some popular things became history. For example, interior decoration, once popular with luxury, now advocates returning to nature and being practical and simple. The passage of time has taken away many beautiful things, but left people's spiritual wealth. Fashion becomes fashion because people understand beauty. Therefore, we can't deny all fashionable things and people who pursue fashion. Without fashion, our life will not change, and without the drive of fashion, society will not progress. Maybe one day you will become a fashion thinker and a fashion promoter. There are at least two improvements in completing the revision of this article: first, the content is more substantial, and second, the structure is clearer. Of course, to write an excellent composition, there is a third level, which is "profound theme, rich content, literary language and creativity." This is the development level of composition. But this can't be done by simple modification. To do this, we need to practice writing constantly at ordinary times, encourage our own thinking and learning, accumulate to a certain extent, and achieve "a full house of poems and books".