In the real world, there are all kinds of walls, made of bricks, stones and mud ... they are mainly used as partitions or barriers. These walls are tangible and visible. However, in real life, there are many invisible walls.

Please write an article on "Wall".

Requirements: ① The content written must be within the scope of the topic. 2 self-determination. 3 styles are optional. 4 topic self-made. ⑤ Not less than 800 words.

(B) examination tips

(1) This composition is not difficult to test. There is only one word "wall" in the title. According to the materials, there are three ways to write: only write tangible walls; Write only invisible walls; Write about tangible and intangible walls. Comparatively speaking, the latter two writing methods are easier, and there is more room for association and play. If you choose the first writing method, you can choose one or more related walls, dig deeper, discuss, write novel and original opinions, or write people and things related to the "wall" to express a profound theme.

(2) When writing an invisible wall, you must clearly write what the "wall" means, and you must not be vague or ambiguous.

(3) Pay attention to the key sentence "It mainly plays the role of partition or barrier" in the prompt part, and there are no other sentences telling us that we can write other functions of "wall" according to our own understanding, so whether we write tangible walls or intangible walls, we should buckle "partition" and "barrier" to write. Some students write "load-bearing wall" and "communication wall" just by looking at the topic, which is very dangerous and easy to cause the consequences of deviating from the meaning of the topic.

(4) According to the materials, the function of "wall" is "partition" or "barrier", but it does not limit whether this function is positive or negative, so it can be written as "building a wall", building a wall to resist temptation and evil, or "knocking down a wall that hinders communication and undermines unity".

(5) Because the function of the wall is "partition" or "barrier", there are "inside the wall" and "outside the wall". When conceiving, you must think that you can't write materials that can't tell the difference between inside and outside, otherwise it will be difficult to deduce the topic, such as "It is the wall in your heart that isolates the strangeness between Cong Fei and the children, and makes Cong Fei treat them as relatives and make selfless contributions and achievements.

(6) There is only one term "wall" in the title, which can be written from various angles, such as what kind of wall we need or don't need, why we should build or tear down the wall, how to build or tear down the wall, and how to face the wall.

(3) Scoring criteria

(1) If the metaphorical meaning of "wall" is not clear or prominent, it is below 45.

(2) Omitting the word "wall" throughout, the digression is below 10, and the omission is below 40.

(3) Point to the "wall", but the focus is not on the "wall", below 30.

(4) Intentional selection of materials, advocating positive, completely writing negative, such as their own isolation, social indifference, below 45.

(5) unclear thinking and chaotic structure, below 45.

(6) Fuzzy discussion, abstract reasoning, under 45.

(7) stacking materials, less than 40 is insufficient analysis.

(8) One thing, one discussion, monotonous and poor, below 40.

(9) Fictional stories, made up, under the age of 36.

(4) Main problems

(1) The surface of the scroll is scrawled and illegible.

(2) The beginning is wordy and the topic is too slow.

(3) The description of the case is complicated.

(4) Stacking cases without analysis.

(5) Making up stories is childish and boring.

(6) Casual and disorganized.

(5) Excellent composition

1, build a wall in your heart

The Great Wall of Wan Li is still there today, but I haven't seen Qin Shihuang. Wan Li Great Wall, the first Great Wall in China, has become a symbol of China civilization.

Wailing wall, a wall that has experienced many vicissitudes, has given people who have been living everywhere a spiritual home.

What about ourselves? In a materialistic and stubborn world, if you want to stick to the direction, you need to build a wall in your heart without rolling in the deep. Look at what the sages did.

( 1)

Build your heart wall with unyielding.

Li Bai, Shi Xian, Qi Baishi, a violet, grew up in the corrupt black land of the Tang Dynasty. He can stand out from the mud without being defiled because he has built a wall in his heart.

Although lux took off his boots, the imperial concubine held ink and the imperial concubine made soup, he just looked up and went out with a smile. He wants to visit famous mountains and worship the bright moon until I raise my cup and ask the bright moon to take my shadow and let the three of us. He resisted the heavy pressure and great temptation with the wall in his heart.

As a result, he embroidered his mouth and spit it out. It was another half of the Tang Dynasty, and the moon shone with a wave of his sleeve.

Oh, strange walls.

(2)

Build a heart wall for the people.

Perilla, Cizong, Tongzi, an iron pea, he can't beat it, and he is not familiar with it. It's a famous iron bean. Faced with many setbacks, he often braved the wind and rain to come to Ren Pingsheng, just because he built a Su Like gong in his heart to benefit the people.

The Wutai poetry case was falsely accused by many people, but he was indifferent and indomitable. Facing the struggle between Wang Anshi and Sima Guang, he always put the interests of the people first. He worries about the world first, and then enjoys the world, serving as an official and benefiting one side. Su Causeway on the West Lake, where light makeup is always appropriate, is his wall for the people.

He cares about the world, scouring all the romantic figures of the ages, because there is a wall in his heart, and he is accompanied by the breeze and the bright moon, thinking that the people are responsible.

Ah, the tall wall.

(3)

Build a wall in your heart with ideals.

Sima Qian, Tai Shigong, wrote Historical Records, which is the first official history.

Although Emperor Wu of the Han Dynasty knocked him down with punishment, he did not give in. Man can be destroyed, but he can't be defeated. He is responsible for "repaying gratitude before shame". He wants to study the relationship between man and nature, change the past and present and become a family. The wall of ideals he had since childhood gave him the motivation to live, and he had a treasure handed down through the ages-historical records.

Ah, the wall of wisdom

Build a wall in your heart and be indomitable.

Building a wall in the heart, the heart is the people.

Build a wall in your heart, be smart and ambitious.

The world is better because of the wall!

Judging from the writing, most of the comments are about "hitting the wall", and this article is about "building a wall". From the structural point of view, the main part is also divided into three layers, and the symmetry of composition is also emphasized among the three layers, but this paper adopts serial number layering, which is more suitable for its own content characteristics and has better effect. Ancient celebrity cases are also used, but this one can better reflect the author's Chinese literacy than the second one. Linguistically, it seems to be more literary than the first two. Judging from the process of argumentation, this paper is obviously not as good as the first two, that is, only the first example has deducted the role of "partition" and "barrier" to write "wall", while the latter two examples have not. If it weren't for the strength in topics, examples and language, you might not be able to get the first grade in the paper.

2, the wall of blood and tears

Spring is full, and everything is so full of vitality. Catkin on the branches fell on the shoulders of pedestrians and danced happily on the shoulders of pedestrians.

"The swing in the wall is outside the road, the layman in the wall, and the beauty in the wall laughs."

The hurrying pedestrian suddenly stopped, and his heart was shocked by the string of silvery laughter. He just stood, looking at the wall and imagining the smiling faces of the beautiful women inside. He stood quietly, but he didn't dare and couldn't cross the wall to see this beautiful lady. Only when "laughter faded away" did he take a sad step.

Why didn't he go to the lady he fell in love with, just because of the wall? No, of course not. In front of him is a wall of "feudal ethics" that has besieged China people for thousands of years! What he didn't dare to cross was the "wall" covered with the blood and tears of China's children!

For thousands of years, how many people have been crying and wandering in front of this wall?

Jiao Zhongqing and Liu Lanzhi, lovers, were ruthlessly blocked by this "wall" and finally had to double suicide.

Liang Shanbo and Zhu Yingtai, lovers who have been praised through the ages, are also surrounded by this "wall". They tried to resist, they tried to elope, but in the end they couldn't escape the trial of this "wall". Until the end, thanks to God's care, they were able to fly away from this "wall" full of their blood and tears like butterflies.

Lu You and Tang Wan, their love changed from happiness to twists and turns, to misfortune. Unable to fight, they can only sit alone on both sides of this "solid" wall, drinking the bitter wine in the cup with tears and recalling all the good things in the past. Time goes by, leaving only two sad "Hairpin Phoenix" for future generations to enjoy, sigh!

But some people have the courage to break through this wall of blood and tears and stop crying on both sides of the wall like others. That's Sima Xiangru and Zhuo Wenjun.

A song of phoenix begging for phoenix, let their story be sung for thousands of years. Despite the opposition of the world, I eloped with my beloved and lived happily all my life. Their story touched everyone, and their spirit made this wall collapse.

Thousands of years of bad habits of the Chinese nation and feudal ethics without human feelings and humanity have built this wall in front of the world. The blood above, the tears above, simply hurt the listener and touched the listener. This wall, which should have been torn down long ago, hinders people's pursuit of freedom. It is a notorious "wall" that has been complaining for thousands of years. It is breaking up bit by bit and collapsing bit by bit. Now, there are only broken stones left.

The wall soaked with blood and tears was finally knocked down, and it gave off the lingering sound of resentment and was submerged in a piece of dust.

The comments on the merits of this article are similar to those of the third article. The main problem is that the first three paragraphs are as verbose as the beginning.

Step 3 love the wall

I like the wall of this world. The Forbidden City has a solemn red palace wall, and Jiangnan gardens also have elegant and pleasant white quaint walls. I often think that no matter how beautiful the scenery in the world is, it will be in vain if there is no wall to separate it from the outside world.

For example, the Grand View Garden has a wall. If the Grand View Garden is like a poem and a dream, without a "winding path leading to a secluded place" entrance, a glittering and translucent gate and a "pure land" to isolate it from all the noise, dust and evil outside, then this fairyland on earth will probably be a bit tacky after all.

Therefore, lofty people in this world will build walls. Tao Yuanming will build a wall to separate the vulgarity of the outside world, even if he is begging along the street, he can't penetrate his heart wall. Zhu can build a wall, let it rain outside the window, the world ups and downs, and the only thing that passes through his heart wall is the sound of reading.

Therefore, selfless people in this world will build walls. Gui Youguang Jian Jixiang announced that he forgot to study, but he couldn't go out every day; Su Dongpo established an innocent mind and forgot his official career; Ouyang lives in the West Lake by himself, forgetting the customs and sending his feelings to the mountains and rivers ... A man who can build a wall is a firm man, a pure man, and his heart will remain the same as before, and his smile will never wither.

Zhuangzi said that a world that foreign evils can't invade must be a beautiful world. So, love a wall!

Love Lin Hejing and build a poetic wall. Mei's wife lives alone in the lonely mountain, and his poetry and loneliness accompany him to spend his life in the lonely mountain. Therefore, Chen Renjie even praised: West Lake Scenic Area has only isolated hills.

Eric built a wild wall. He lived in seclusion in Zhong Nanshan and devoted himself to fame, but he didn't care after his failure. Drunk singing all day, let the boat come and go. Thinking about secular prejudice and criticism is just a piece of cake for him. He turned around and spoke loudly. Naturally, the clouds were blowing and the clouds were surging.

I think the wall of this world is so much. However, this is somewhat ridiculous. The red wall of the Forbidden City is said to have risen with the participation of the Eight Diagrams and Five Elements. It is extremely harmonious in the right time and place, but it can't withstand the wind and rain for a hundred years. The walls of Jiangnan gardens are extremely simple and profound, but they can't stop the fame and fortune behind their owners.

Look, the wall is still the solid and indestructible wall in my heart, which can stop everything and protect everything.

But I still like walls. Especially today, all the old walls have collapsed-whether it is to protect the scenery, the spirit or a sad story-I still love all the remaining walls. I not only love walls, but also build walls in my heart. This wall retains the beauty of the world.

Obviously, this is an excellent composition, and I didn't get full marks or close to full marks. There is only one explanation: in the case of rapid marking and grading, this spiritual composition has not attracted the attention that teachers should pay-the article is really chewy, but the marking staff has no time to taste it.

An almond came out of the wall.

This wall is a barrier.

Specifically, the wall is the barrier of space. Because there are walls, there is a room; With the wall, there is a portal; With walls, there are alleys.

Li Shimin, Emperor Taizong, and his younger brother were brothers when they were young. Together, * * * helped my father lay the foundation of Datang. Perhaps, they can only share joys and sorrows, but they can't * * * wealth? Suspicion and jealousy between brothers built a solid wall. The intrigue between them finally developed to the point where brothers ate each other. Now in our time, individualism is rampant and all kinds of walls are everywhere. Between the boss and subordinates, between colleagues, between husband and wife, between parents and children, the company closed down, the family broke up, and the father and son turned against each other. Looking at these facts, don't you want to overthrow the wall around you?

Not only China, but also many foreign novels reflect the harm of "wall" from the side. Like Lev? Anna of Tolstoy? The heroine in "karenin Na" committed suicide by lying on the rails because of the layers of walls between her husband and her. The poor woman in La Traviata died of illness after losing her beauty.

Imagine a society without walls. What we see is a vast grassland, where people from all over the world gather together, and people of different languages, colors and costumes weave moving pictures.

Tear down the wall around you, open the window of your heart and share your happiness and pain with everyone. As long as we hand in hand, heart to heart, no matter how strong the wall, no matter how big the contradiction, no matter how deep the hatred.

The scenery of "an apricot out of the wall" also has a special flavor. What everyone wants is a peaceful environment!

Comments: This is a very good argumentative paper. At the beginning, the meaning of "wall" is explained by two sets of parallelism sentences. Then, the author demonstrates the harmfulness of "wall" from ancient times (Emperor Taizong) to today (modern society). In order to make the argument more powerful, the author further lists examples from foreign literary works to enrich the content of the article. What makes people shine is the end of the article. The author shows us the bright future of people gathering together after removing the obstacles between people.

5, looking for warmth

It's like crossing a dark tunnel and finally reaching the end of the road under the guidance of distant lights. I seem to hear the laughter in that corner, which lingers in my ears for a long time. An impulse in my heart rushed to my home; However, I read it wrong and heard it wrong. This is a warm ocean of neighbors. Even so, I am willing to be surrounded by this warmth and stand unwilling to leave; However, before long, the light went out.

I took out the bunch of keys, and it fell into the air coldly, singing a lonely song and hitting my heart gently, slowly and violently. I didn't turn on the light when I entered the room. In this huge house, I smiled gloomily alone. Is it really that hard to be human? The beauty of the past is fleeting with the passage of time, the gap between people is getting bigger and bigger, and the once beautiful and happy family can not stand the test. It is like an invisible wall, separating people from the soul. Lying quietly in bed, singing the words in San Mao's The Color of Butterflies over and over again: "Be strong and live, and tomorrow will be better than today ..."

The phone rang again. I unplugged the telephone line and stood up. As usual, there was a piece of paper (about diet tips) on the refrigerator. I tore it off and kept tearing it until it was torn to pieces. "It is a note. Don't humans have language? " I muttered angrily with tears in my eyes.

The next day, as usual, I didn't have breakfast. Although my stomach has been disobedient these two days, I still can't help it. I don't know how long I walked, but I suddenly lost consciousness.

When I woke up, I was already lying in a white hospital bed, and the two men appeared at the same time. It turns out that they can still appear at the same time. I didn't speak, just stared at the wall. The father grabbed his mother's hand and said kindly, "I'm sorry, son, our family will always be together!" " "Unconsciously, tears filled my ears. ...

Now, every day after school, I know there will be two pairs of expectant eyes under the warm light, waiting for a happy moment.

Maybe the gap just disappeared, maybe happiness just came quietly. In every journey of life, we have different scenery. They are playing their roles in sunny weather, lightning and thunder, clear skies in Wan Li, and stormy weather.

In every play in every period of our lives, we will be sad and cry, but we will eventually find our warmth.

Comments: reading such an article is really a beautiful enjoyment. The author told us a story with poetic sentences, although it hurt people. I really admire the author's language ability, which must benefit from a lot of reading and hard writing. This is an article written in prose style about the invisible "heart wall" to the collapse of the "heart wall" between people, which is very implicit.

Step 6: walls

A wall is just one thing that constitutes a building. what can I do? That was not the case. Unwilling to be lonely, "people" write articles on this wall, which is the simplest and simplest. People began to dislike the single wall, so they put calligraphy and painting on it. This wall has become an art exhibition. After a long time, people are not satisfied with the small print on the wall, so they simply draw pictures on it. Have you ever seen Dunhuang Mogao Grottoes? Those who have never seen it must have heard of it! After being whitewashed by Taoist priests, murals still enjoy a high reputation in the international art world, and the walls have become the treasures of the country and the darling of the world under the influence of people.

Since then, people have not only been dissatisfied with its monotonous appearance. They used their own "actions" to make the wall have more wonderful changes. They have now changed from "the body of clay" to "the body of metal" and "the body of glass". Their "metal bodies" were installed in important places. For example, the national defense armament office and the bank treasury office. They become a guarantee of safety. Their "glass body" is installed in leisure places. For example, visit halls and tea rooms. People can even change its name and call it "French window". They have become an indispensable factor in human leisure.

People also make such a metaphor for walls. The ancient poet said: There is an almond in the wall. As the saying goes: flowers bloom inside the wall and fragrance outside the wall. Describing efforts has no long-term significance, but only temporary results. It is more appropriate to use the words "robbing Peter to pay Paul".

The wall was originally a very simple thing, and it existed to keep out the wind and rain. It is such a simple thing that it has become complicated after many years.

Greedy human beings created it and changed it. But what can it do? Even if tired, humans can destroy it effortlessly. If you let the wall resist, it may even be ridiculous to the wall itself!

Maybe it's even more ridiculous, because isn't it the same for human beings themselves? We are kind, but we are simple. However, we began to hate, complain, become snobbish and sharp, in this secular world.

No wonder the poet generate shouted: "It is as difficult to get involved in the world as it is to get tired of becoming famous."