For high school students, it is not difficult to write works with a certain depth in the examination room because of their knowledge accumulation and life experience, active thinking and more innovative spirit and imagination. As long as the teacher guides and trains properly, it is not difficult to write works with a certain depth in the examination room. The key is to establish a deep awareness and deepen the ability training. Judging from this year's college entrance examination composition, the depth of the examination composition is mixed. The author tries to take 200 1 college entrance examination composition as an example to talk about the depth consciousness of college entrance examination composition.
First, the depth of thought. It means that the author's viewpoint can be practical, and some essential and regular things are excavated through phenomena, which embodies a certain theoretical height and depth of thinking. The depth of thought is often manifested in the philosophical authenticity, historical depth, humanistic depth and political sensitivity of the works. For example, this year's college entrance examination composition, some students talk about political and moral education with "ruling the country by virtue", and some students talk about business moral education in connection with the market economy, all of which are very in-depth works. The following "Fire of Guarding Spirit" is also a work with certain ideological depth found in the marking of the college entrance examination:
Guarding the fire of spirit
There is a kind of brilliance that hangs over the spiritual home of the Chinese nation; There is a flame that dances on the Olympia Mountain of the national soul; There is a flame that warms the distant feelings of civilization-that is, honesty. Today, a thousand years later, the glory, the flame and the flame are actually dim. As a result, the historical Hong Zhong has sounded a deep and clear voice, crossed the river of time and shocked the soul of today's people: please guard the fire of spirit and restore the foundation of being a man and doing business-honesty!
Please regain your honesty, because it is the fire of civilization that our ancestors devoted their lives to. Remember Sean who picked up grass and shoes? Why did he use the art of war to strategize and gallop on the political stage of the Han Dynasty? If he doesn't have the determination to stick to and keep his promise, I'm afraid he will faint again for life in that stormy era! Zhang Zifang takes life as an example. Please leave others sincerely and restrain yourself from keeping your promise. Only in this way can we achieve great things and forge civilization!
Please regain your integrity, because this is the foundation of your career. For example, in fairy tales, everyone is salivating at the flowerpot where the seeds are planted, because as long as the seeds germinate and bloom, the king's throne is his own, and everyone holds a gorgeous flower to worship the king. As everyone knows, no matter how beautiful things are, they will hardly become British things if they are not irrigated with sincerity and cultivated with sincerity. On the contrary, the child with empty hands and shining eyes really has the talent of adult career, so the laurel was added to his head-the laurel only favors honest people!
Please regain honesty, because it is the spiritual pillar of modern society. There is a cartoon in which the word "advertisement" was originally a mouth, and the mouth in the picture became a rope loop. Its purpose is self-evident. In today's society, it should be an advertisement that combines credibility and beauty, but it has become a wonderful trap to deceive people. Ridiculous, even more tragic: today, with the rapid extension of civilization, the train of society has actually deviated from the track of "honesty"! Kōnosuke Matsushita said: "Integrity is the lubricating oil of our company's operation." In fact, it is not only lubricating oil, but also the foundation of commercial society construction. If we put aside honesty and seek development, civilized society will collapse and be ruthlessly destroyed!
Looking around the world, materialism swept across the hinterland of society, leaving ugly marks and honest light, but it was abandoned in a dusty warehouse for a hundred years, and the lampstand was dilapidated. Please think about the sword unearthed in Qin's tomb: when you see the sky, it will spew out a blue light, as if the sun, the moon and the stars roared in the sword-in fact, once polished, the legacy of honesty will shine, just waiting for us to regain it. Think about comets again, that is, human civilization-modern society is the most luminous comet, but there is unfathomable darkness ahead. Comets can run regularly by gravity, while civilization depends on honesty. Ignite this spiritual fire to illuminate the future, otherwise it will be swallowed up by endless darkness!
Human beings, we have the responsibility to keep the spiritual fire of honesty!
Comments: Comparing honesty with the "spiritual fire" of human beings vividly and profoundly reflects the author's understanding of honesty, and then demonstrates it from the perspectives of "civilized tradition", "the foundation of being a man" and "spiritual pillar", which has historical depth, publicity of human nature and pertinence of reality. This paper makes a systematic, theoretical and figurative exposition of "sincerity". Score 58 points (48+ 10).
2. Emotional depth. This year's college entrance examination composition proposition clearly puts forward the writing requirement of "true feelings". Admittedly, what high school students lack most in their compositions is the authenticity and depth of humanity and human feelings, and many people in their writing are often vague and false. Whether it is real life or literary works, the most touching thing is the true and profound human temperament. Many students were moved and inspired by movies such as Scraping, Happy Hour and My Brothers and Sisters. The emotional depth in the college entrance examination composition is to dig out the real experience, real feelings, real temperament and real consciousness from real life through works. Ru Zhijuan once said that "true feelings are the soul of an article", and only true emotional depth can really impress and infect people. The following "Be or Leave" and "Be Out of Date" are representative works with certain emotional depth:
"there or there" and "there when it's out of date"
"Be there or be square" has become the mantra of people's dating, and no one has ever thought about its rationality. "Be there or be square" has become the reassurance of some people who have an appointment. Anyway, others will wait for me. It doesn't matter if I'm late. And I, who has always kept my promise and kept my promise, am the victim of "be there or be square".
I am never late for appointments. First of all, I must fulfill my promise. Second, because time is precious, it is unpleasant to wait for others, so I always arrive early or on time and can't bear to let others wait for me. The result is often that I wait for others to suffer. After waiting for a long time, there will always be some horrible hallucinations-whether there was an accident on the way, whether the teacher stayed at school, whether he forgot the time and place, whether he was sick ... When my friend was late, I was not angry but ecstatic: I finally came, great, not sick, not having an accident ... All the anger I just endured was put out. Sometimes I feel wronged and unfair. Why do you honestly keep your promise and keep your word, while others can know nothing about it? That's ridiculous. Once I saw a friend arrive late after waiting hard, and I couldn't help crying. Scared my friends into apologizing and begging for mercy, and sent me home carefully, repeatedly stating that it would not happen again. Seeing my friend like this, I can't help feeling a little guilty again, feeling that I am suspected of being stingy and narrow-minded. But I really don't like people who don't speak good faith.
How to solve the problem? Go to the appointment happily and come back happily. I can't think of a good way, so I seldom go out to meet my friends. So, my mother began to persuade me: I should be open-minded and not care too much. There are not many punctual people now, and I can't stay any longer. I think there is nothing wrong with honesty. I can't be passive, and I can't shut myself in. Therefore, I decided to actively change this situation.
I decided to cut across the board: when it is out of date, it will be scattered. Take out your own personality determination and declare war on those who don't speak good faith. I really broke up twice, had a cold war with two friends for a while, and finally got understanding and support.
We really should throw it away. You can only waste time in boring waiting and endure punctuality.
"When it is out of date, it will be scattered", which is very personal and very good!
Comments: I have real life experiences and feelings, and I have excavated my unique temperament consciousness for the phenomena I take for granted in my life, and my feelings are sincere and delicate. In particular, the psychological description of the characters is profound and realistic, which reveals the inner feelings of the characters well. However, there are differences on whether it is "in line with the meaning of the question", so the actual score is 50 points (4 1+9).
Third, the depth of thinking. One of the important purposes of Chinese teaching is to improve students' thinking quality. Being able to use inductive reasoning, deductive reasoning, analogical reasoning, positive and negative comparative reasoning, reverse thinking, system theory and dialectics to analyze and solve problems in college entrance examination composition is a manifestation of deep thinking. The following article "Lying on my face is not red" is a work with certain depth of thinking and reasoning:
Lying is not blushing.
Everyone enthusiastically expressed that they should take care of flowers and trees, but how many people can make a detour when they really face the shortcut among flowers?
Everyone is passionate about resolutely cracking down on criminals, but how many people can really come forward in the face of vicious gangsters?
Everyone promises to be honest and self-disciplined, but in the face of the temptation of sugar-coated shells, how many people can really be honest and honest?
Man is the only animal that blushes. In the past, a little lie, even a beautiful white lie, would make people blush. Now, even if people tell a big lie, their faces will not change and their hearts will not jump.
Cheating children, cheating the elderly, cheating relatives and friends, cheating teachers and bosses are not popular, even boasting that they are incompetent, writing their own history of lying and selling books is not popular, thieves shout to catch thieves and say that others don't blush when they lie ... We seem to be surrounded by lies, fooled by lies all the time, and killed by promises. Lies have become a public hazard, an epidemic and a sign of moral decay.
Indeed, the reform and opening up has brought rapid economic development, but people have given up honesty while pursuing health, beauty, agility, talent, money and honor. In the process of pursuing, people ignore the most basic code of conduct in interpersonal communication, "honesty", and turn it into rhetoric, and even lie with dignity without blushing at all costs.
Honesty is the foundation of a person's life and the way to be a man. Only those who have integrity can gain people's trust and be deeply respected by the world. If everyone gives up honesty, the communication between people will no longer be the communication between hearts, but the contest between lies, and society will show a scene of intrigue and intrigue. People dare not tell the truth, let alone confide in each other. Everyone should be alert to other people's lies when telling lies. ...
What kind of world will this become? The communication between people should be a collision between morality and morality, and the communication between hearts should not lie for personal gain.
I don't want others to be red when they lie, but I want others to be red when they lie.
Comments: The argument angle is relatively new, and the viewpoint is profound and novel. From the perspective of thinking, inductive reasoning and positive and negative comparison are mainly used. First of all, from the perspective of lying, the author summarizes a variety of phenomena of "lying without blushing" in different fields, different objects and different purposes, which is really thought-provoking. Then it discusses the harm of lying from the perspective of positive "honesty". The contrast is sharp and the argument is profound. Score 59 points (49+ 10).
4. Academic depth. As far as high school is concerned, this is the most innovative and instructive formulation. At present, with the reform of college entrance examination subjects and propositions and the implementation of new syllabus and new teaching materials, the road of Chinese teaching is getting wider and wider, and research-based learning has entered the middle school classroom. This year's college entrance examination in Shanghai has already had research-based learning questions. Western developed countries (such as the United States) have put forward academic composition topics such as "cultural comparison between the East and the West". For a long time, our college entrance examination composition mainly tests students' ideological level, thinking quality, language ability and expression ability. Perhaps in the near future, students' academic thinking and academic research ability will also be tested, so now high school composition should advocate the cultivation of academic depth. As far as high school is concerned, academic depth mainly refers to the profound and unique insights in the works, the detailed and reliable novel materials that can make people feel refreshed, the rigorous logical reasoning that can justify themselves, and the theoretical basis and practical guidance that can make people apply what they have learned. The following article "Even if I die, I will wait for you in my post" has a little academic atmosphere:
I will wait for you to die in my post.
Opening the exquisite and elegant thread-bound book of Chinese civilization often brings indescribable static pressure and emotion. I can't remember which dynasty, which age, which apricot blossom and spring rain, Xiaozhuang has a pair of young lovers. Once they met at the stone bridge, the man arrived and the woman was still in the future. At this time, the tide suddenly rose and the water level became higher and higher. The man remembered the agreement, held the bridge pillar, and finally died in the ruthless tide with hope and determination. So some poets chanted from generation to generation: "I will wait for you to die in my post and never lose heart in the silent watchtower?"
In the Eastern Jin Dynasty, there was a geisha named Lvzhu in Shi Chong, who was beautiful and played the flute. A high-ranking guest took a fancy to her at a banquet and asked for it. Shi Chong refused to make peace and said, "What if I die for you today?" He said, "I should be a martyr to repay your virtue."
Shi Chong really died because he offended powerful people. On the same day, Lvzhu jumped off the building. Many years later, a woman in the book chanted: "The powder falls on a hundred flowers, and the fragrance stays in the Yan Lou." This swallow house is where the beautiful green bead died. The woman in the book died because the "alliance between wood and stone" failed to come true-she is Dai Yu.
Not long ago, I read a passage in Reader: A college student promised his girlfriend that he would love her for life. "If I have anything wrong with you, all our property will be yours. If you don't believe me, we will go to notarization now. " They really went.
This is the behavior of our time? This is the honesty of modern people? I don't doubt the commitment of the lovers. I'm just shocked, sad and disappointed. Surprised by the shrewdness and paranoia of modern people, disappointed that true love should be guaranteed in this way, disappointed that the feelings of "love is stronger than gold" in ancient China no longer exist, and disappointed that there is no notarization of innocence and honesty.
What is honesty? It is the most basic quality and moral requirement of human beings, the rope that can maintain the relationship between people, the cornerstone that we stand between heaven and earth, and the "a little noble spirit, a thousand miles against the wind" in the vast desert!
In today's China, "market economy" seems to be the reason for the loss of credibility. However, the market economy is a credit economy! It is precisely because we are divorced from the government's rigid planning, free competition and free circulation that we need honesty, especially for enterprises and individuals!
The teacher taught me: "Honesty makes people have a sense of honor, so the two words are homologous." The light of wisdom visited my mind in this way, and I remembered me when I was young: HON E ST-HON E N O R. So when I read that a Russian was helped by someone else's fur hat in China, I smiled shamelessly: "Still? Idiot! Who will return the hat here tomorrow? " I am very angry. Because one person loses his integrity, a billion people are humiliated! The honor of the people of China.
Can you visit Gan Kun with pure eyes and make the world look brand-new?
Can you pack your bag with beautiful hands and don't forget "sincerity"
Is it okay? Even to death, I will wait for you in my post and keep a pure heart forever?
Comments: In the short examination room, the novel and detailed materials, such as holding the tail column, martyrdom of green beads, Dai Yu's poems, property notarization, English etymology, refusing to return the hat, and quoting poems and sentences in many places, are really commendable. Moreover, the argument is rigorous and the thinking is clear, which shows the student's Chinese literacy and academic foundation. It should be said that this year's college entrance examination composition proposition has no academic orientation, nor is it an academic paper, but it still has some academic flavor from the application of its materials to the discussion of theory and practice. The actual score is 60 points.
Verb (abbreviation for verb) language depth. The language depth of senior high school composition mainly refers to the fluency of language, meaningful sentences and certain literary talent and artistic conception. Deep language transcends mediocrity and gets rid of naive language. Language depth is the most important embodiment of candidates' language quality and language ability. In high school composition teaching, teachers often lament students' compositions, which are written like primary school students and junior high school students. In fact, the problem is that the language depth is not enough. In the marking of college entrance examination for several years, the most important thing to score the development level is the depth of language. The above-mentioned excellent compositions with thoughts, feelings, thoughts and academic depth are also very mature and profound in language. The following "Be Honest, Be Honest" is still at a naive level in language and lacks depth:
Be honest and do honest things.
When I was a child, because I was greedy, I quietly climbed into someone else's yard with a few friends. Stealing the fruits of other people's labor only made me feel flattered. When I came home with joy and aftertaste, when my mother saw me, she would say to me: It's wrong to steal from others, apologize to others quickly, so my mother took me to the yard. ...
When I was in primary school, the teacher asked me to recite the text. I cheated the teacher under the guise of coquetry. Later, the teacher found out and said to me harmoniously, "You are the flowers of the motherland. Beauty is not the appearance, but the heart. Mothers of the motherland like honest children. ...
My mother's words often ring in my ears. When I do something wrong, even the slightest thing, I will summon up the courage to admit it. Although sometimes I don't want to put down my noble face, sometimes I lack the courage to admit it, and sometimes I wander at the crossroads, in the end, I overcame my fragility and strode onto the road. ...
In the later study, I saw a very simple topic and wanted to pass it in a hurry. I want to give up easily when I meet obstacles. When I want to deceive the teacher and myself, the words of the primary school teacher jump in my ear again, so I come step by step with honesty about knowledge.
I saw a plump young man today, and I am glad that he has integrity and other things. But when I read that he thought for a while and easily threw his honesty into the water, he didn't make any noise, so he was silently drowned.
I feel sorry for him: poor young Yin! You have nothing left.
I remember the great leader Chairman Mao once said, "Be honest and do honest things." It's true. I admire him, not only because he is brilliant and strategic, but also because he is simple, honest and trustworthy.
Another philosopher said, "The fall of trust is like a broken mirror, which can never be recovered." We can see the importance of trust. I appreciate these two sentences only because he respects the best moral character in the world. This sentence has become the motto of my life. It is honesty and trustworthiness that made me and made me have many beautiful things. My friends are willing to chat with me and my knowledge is willing to be close to me.
I thank my mother for teaching me to be honest. I thank my teacher for teaching me to be honest. Although I am an ordinary high school student, as long as I am always honest and upright, I will have all the beautiful things.
Comments: The whole article focuses on "sincerity", and the writing around the topic can also be regarded as "fitting the meaning of the topic". The outstanding problems are that the language is not fluent enough, there are many language diseases, and the writing is simple, straightforward and naive, which does not have the level that high school students should have. Comprehensive score: 36 points for basic level, 2 points for development level, typo 1 point, with a total score of 37.
Finally, we should pay special attention to the fact that while promoting the depth consciousness of college entrance examination composition, we should try to avoid pretending to be cool and deep. That's just the opposite. That's disgusting. If you pretend to be cold and deep, you might as well be a crystal clear stream as Mr. Lu Xun said. In addition, it should be pointed out that the above-mentioned in-depth compositions are all argumentative genres, but it does not mean that only argumentative essays can write depth, and other styles can write depth. To tell the truth, after reading the third year of high school, everyone is an adult and has read a lot of books. They also know a lot about astronomy and geography and should be able to write works with a certain depth.