It's next door to you
You, my deskmate and my best friend.
I never felt any difference between us before.
We live together in this bustling city with high-rise buildings, waiting for the bus at the bus stop, galloping on the court, listening to the screams of cheerleading girls and discussing Barcelona vs Inter Milan. We study programming algorithms together, make an appointment to apply for computer major in Shenzhen University, and dream that one day the website we developed together can be listed on NASDAQ like youtube. ...
You are tall and strong, with a delicate brow. The girls in the class quietly gave you a nickname-"Little Takashi Kashiwabara", and I only got the good name of "Xu Sanduo". To tell you the truth, I'm really a little jealous. Although your academic performance is not the best in the class, you are the best in the team. The coach often takes you as an example to reprimand other players and says in his dialect Mandarin, "If you want to play the game, you must first get good grades. If you enter the university, you will have more opportunities to play. " At the end, I don't forget to add: "Like so-and-so students, playing football and studying are correct."
What I can't forget most is what bothered me last year. I'm sick and I pee blood. You are absent from class, send me to the Rock Department of Shenzhen Friendship Hospital. At that time, the math class was in the chapter of complex numbers, which was the focus and difficulty of the final exam. Every day after class, you will come to the hospital to see me and show me your class notes. I was very moved when I opened my notes for the first time. I have never seen you take notes so carefully. I recorded almost everything the teacher said in a class. ...
Until the most tense month before the college entrance examination, you suddenly said you would go back to your hometown in Anhui. According to the regulations, candidates must go back to their hometown to take the college entrance examination. You said you would give up applying for Shenzhen University, because the enrollment of Shenzhen University is small. In addition, the learning environment in Anhui is different from that in Shenzhen, so you hesitated and decided to give up.
Today, we will walk into the examination room at the same time and write an answer sheet for ourselves tomorrow. The difference is that I am in Shenzhen and you are in a strange hometown.
I know there are many students like you in Shenzhen. Their parents, like all Shenzhen people, are using their own efforts to promote the development of the city. They also have the glory and dreams of this city. They are neighbors and depend on each other. However, they have to bear more than us, but they don't want to be one of the "college entrance examination immigrants", give up their favorite schools and let their dreams go further. ...
I wish you, my friends, our neighbors, millions of migrant workers in Qian Qian and their children.
Comments:
"Be your neighbor" is the composition topic of Guangdong college entrance examination on 20 10. Teacher Li, who participated in marking, said that he was deeply moved when marking a candidate's composition. The phenomenon of "college entrance examination immigration" mentioned in the composition is something that the teacher's students have experienced many times, so that they shed tears on the spot and give the candidates full marks. This is the first perfect composition in Guangdong Province this year. The teacher commented that this article has the following five elements of excellent composition:
First, this composition is a heartfelt understanding of life. It is a true feeling from the heart. Observing life from multiple angles, understanding life from multiple angles, incorporating some youthful colors, fully meeting the requirements of the topic;
Second, the language of the article is vivid, the sentences are fluent, there is no inconsistency, there is no pretense of deep affectation, there are foreshadowing, suspense, turning points, sublimation, many endings, vivid sentences and frequent highlights;
Third, the article has unique ideas and strict logic. Starting from one's own personal experience, it is slowly unfolded in the form of peeling onions, which causes people to think about social phenomena and have a high degree of conception;
Fourth, feelings truly express candidates' true feelings about people, things and things in life, which can touch people's hearts;
Fifth, have healthy values, grasp the correct position, express your healthy feelings and give the article soul. According to the above points, the composition is a rare excellent composition, which accurately grasps the proposition of "being good to your neighbors" with its unique vision, so it is given full marks.
20 10 Guangdong college entrance examination full mark composition proposition composition "Neighboring with you"
It's next door to you
That's a kind of artistic conception I've been looking for, and I suddenly saw that figure in the dim light. It seems that Li Bai, who was drunk, narrowed his sleepy eyes and shouted, "Let me, three hundred bowls, have a big drink!" " With great pride; It is also a graceful and affectionate Yang Yuhuan like Bai Letian's "If she just turns to smile, there are hundreds of spells cast, and the harem powder is bloodless"; Or Yi Anbei's helplessness of "just hanging on the eyebrows".
Occasionally, I will sit in the study and hold a word to fill my nose with the fragrance of jasmine. Half-closed eyes, as if completely intoxicated. In that dream, there are Nalan Rong Ruo's sentimental feelings for his wife in Drinking Water Ci and Li Qingzhao's sadness in Shuyu Ci. Once upon a time, I also saw a trace of bitterness and tears in Cao Xueqin's ridiculous words. I can't help dreaming. There are ups and downs in my dreams. Experiencing life is like Conan's dream. Look at those poets, laughing and crying, frowning and forgetting. In the end, only these lines of ink spread. Until our hearts.
I dreamed that Li Bai was splashing water in his dream. In the pavilions surrounded by peonies, he ordered Lux to take off his shoes and uncle Prince to grind ink, but he wrote: "Clouds want clothes and flowers, and spring breeze blows the threshold to show China"; In the spring breeze caressed by wicker, he burst into tears and was speechless, lamenting that "Peach Blossom Pond is deep in thousands of feet and not as good as Wang Lun"; Under the bright moon, he held up his cup and felt sorry for the shadow, so he had to mourn "until, holding up my cup, I asked the bright moon to bring me my shadow and let us become three people". I just love his generosity, that white dress, or the atmosphere or elegance; That bottle of sake was also vividly written by the phrase "lanling wine tulip, jade bowl amber light". In my dream, I saw through his dream of the world of mortals, but it was just a sentence, "Oh, how can I bow and scrape to those high-ranking officials whose sincere faces will never be seen?" But my heart was full of desolation after being wild.
In my dream, I dreamed that Su Dongpo frowned slightly. When I first came to Huangzhou as a magistrate, the desolation everywhere was not as sad as my heart. It's a big dream in the world, how cold is life? Desolate; It was the Wutai poetry case committed by Dongpo when he was proud. In fact, what is wrong is not the absurdity of the sentence "The bright moon sings yellow dogs lie in the heart of flowers", but the helplessness of the sentence "I refuse to live when I pick up all the cold branches, and the lonely sandbar is cold"; Perhaps, that smile was for his "lady-like" understanding, and the phrase "ten years of life and death are endless, without thinking, never forgetting" has exhausted my sadness. What I see is a person with the temperament of "never betraying feelings", so he is not a person who can't leave for a hundred years. He is a talented person. Finally, he breathed a sigh of relief. Otherwise, how could he sing "Looking back at the bleak place, going home, rain or shine"? He was a thorn bird all his life, and finally he got all the beauty with the greatest pain.
I also dreamed that the smile of Yi 'an layman was the loss of her "awakening a pool of gulls and herons" and a pile of yellow flowers on the ground. Who can pick it now? "Helpless and desolate; I also dreamed of the sigh of Li Houzhu, the ancient emperor, the fragrance of "I can't be a slave, so I can be merciful", or the loneliness that "the jade carving should still be there, but Zhu Yan has changed".
In my dream, I realized that life is short, watching them "drink today and get drunk tomorrow", watching them "women are happy", watching them know themselves and watching them. ...
My neighbor is a dream.
20 10 Guangdong college entrance examination full mark composition proposition composition "Neighboring with you"
It's next door to you
A few golden rays of sunshine sprinkled on the dusty oil painting. Everywhere I look, she is smiling at me-Mona Lisa's smile fascinates me. This afternoon, I was thoughtful.
( 1)
It is said that the city is good, but where is the city good?
Going home from work at two o'clock and one line is unremarkable; Surrounded by reinforced concrete all day, people are crowded at rush hour.
It's raining heavily today, and there are fewer pedestrians on the road than usual. There was no traffic jam, so I got home early.
When I went upstairs, I hummed a cheerful song. I haven't been so happy for a long time.
At the corner of the stairs, I accidentally bumped into a lady carrying a big bag and dropped everything.
I think there must be one less scolding, because city people are always so unkind.
I quickly said I'm sorry, picked up the things that fell to the ground and showed an apologetic and sincere smile. I didn't expect her to tell me with a smile that I also like the song you just hummed.
We smiled at each other and walked carefully, humming at the same time.
(2)
Finally, I look forward to Sunday, cleaning up my house and making my home look brand-new.
Sitting alone on the sofa in a daze, this city has no relatives or friends.
"Du-"The phone rang, and my friend affectionately called my nickname and said to come and see me later.
I took out all the delicious food at home, and then stood at the window and looked around. I'm glad to have friends visiting me.
When friends came, we chatted in our hometown dialect, from village east to village west, and we all burst into tears when we remembered the interesting things when we were children. She casually asked, "What are you doing to the door?"
"This is ... yes, it's on and off." A burst of laughter.
From then on, I became very curious about that door.
(3)
Maybe, by buying a plane ticket, I can reach the ends of the earth tomorrow. But I may not be able to sit on the sofa across the hall tomorrow.
That day, I made up my mind to knock on that door.
Raise your hand and put it down again.
After several hesitations, I knocked on the door with trepidation.
After a while, the door opened.
Sometimes, fate is really funny. The lady I met last time was actually opposite me.
We smiled at each other.
She invited me in, and I naturally sat on her sofa. I took the steaming cup of tea, which was misty and fragrant.
We chatted together all morning and had a good time. When she left, she said, "You are the first neighbor to come to my house. I am very happy to see your smile. "
I spit out my tongue embarrassedly: "I am also very happy to hear your words."
Every time I walk to her door, I can't help looking through the cat's eye.
Later I found out that she got off work very late. Sometimes when I hear footsteps, I get out of bed and turn on the door light to provide convenience for her. I'm happy to do so.
(4)
Another weekend, I washed my clothes and hung them on the outdoor balcony. I was so tired that I fell asleep on the sofa like falling apart. I don't know how long it took, but someone knocked at the door in a hurry. When I opened the door, it was her.
She said, "It's raining. Hurry up and collect clothes! "
I looked out of the window. It's raining hard. She helped me put my clothes in, soon.
Since then, we have become more and more close. We haven't seen each other for days, and we always miss each other. In case of holidays, send one or two short messages to congratulate each other; When you are greedy, go to the supermarket together; We stayed in the cold wind until midnight for Jay Chou's concert.
Later, we became very good friends, just because we both had sincere smiles.
Smile is a magic key, which brings me closer to my neighbors. It is a smile that makes me make friends in this strange city and makes me feel less lonely. Every day in front of all kinds of people, I smile, the most sincere smile, which makes me confident a lot. As a neighbor, I smiled and lived a full life.
So one afternoon, I went to the corner, picked up a dry rag and wiped off all the dust on the oil painting. A ray of golden sunshine spilled in, and Mona Lisa smiled even more charming.
Comments:
The author carefully and methodically wrote his communication with his neighbors. He pays attention to the function of smile and smiles everywhere. From a local point of view, both foreshadowing and foreshadowing are reflected. If a friend's casual question causes "I" to be curious about the opposite door, the writing will be natural and smooth; My yearning for friendship and tolerance for the door left an important foreshadowing for the later development, which made the communication between the two sides natural and smooth, and also made the article structure rigorous and meticulous. The article echoes from beginning to end, expressing her feelings and feelings with Mona Lisa's smile, which is novel and unique, and embodies the subtlety of the author's conception. The title is a pun. The theme reflected has profound practical significance.