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Narrative (including narrative prose, short stories, new stories, etc. ) to conceive with novelty, only novelty can attract people to read. Bridgette is not mystifying, but choosing the most appropriate form to express the ideas of the article. The following are four ways to conceive narrative composition in order to provide useful reference for middle school students.
First, the horizontal editing method
The daily life of middle school students looks rigid and dull, and it seems difficult to write "super shock"; However, if we can "snap" a few specific shots from the daily life we have experienced, the books, newspapers and magazines we have read, and the little feelings we have experienced, and edit them horizontally, it is possible to create a brand-new theme and rich connotation, and receive the ideological effect of turning plain into magic.
For example, Jiangsu examinee's perfect composition "Four Acts Drama" shows the charm of "horizontal editing method" conceptually. The first scene of the article is based on our outing, capturing the shots of heavy rain, paths, streams and stones, focusing on love and hope; The second act takes three meals a day as the main line, capturing the scenes of restaurants and sweet MaiQuan, focusing on two different living conditions; The third act focuses on reading books and periodicals, capturing the lens of light like beans and focusing on "the theory of human nature"; The fourth act is based on the perception of life, capturing the truth of life and focusing on "thinking about life". This "four-act drama" vividly interprets the topic of "the answers are colorful" through horizontal editing, which fully embodies the author's ingenious ideas.
An excellent example
The best education in life
Hu Ping
( 1)
A young man came to work in the city, and soon because of his hard work, the boss gave him a small company to take care of.
He managed this small company in good order and its performance soared. A foreign businessman wants to talk to him about a cooperation project after hearing about it. After the negotiation, he invited the foreign businessman with black eyes and yellow skin to dinner. Dinner was simple, all the dishes were washed, and only two steamed buns were left. He said to the waiter, please put these two steamed buns in the food bag and I'll take them away. The foreign businessman immediately stood up and said that he would sign a contract with him tomorrow. The next day, the boss gave a banquet to entertain foreign businessmen. During the dinner, foreign businessmen asked him softly, what education have you received? He said my family was poor and my parents couldn't read. Their education for me started with a grain of rice and a thread. After my father died, my mother worked hard to provide me with education. She said I don't expect you to be superior. You can do your own thing ... the boss has bright liquid in his eyes. She raised her glass and said excitedly, "I propose a toast to her old man-you have the best education in life!" "
A person knows how to cherish after suffering; A person who grows up in poverty will not fail to know the importance of thrift; A person who knows how to work hard from an early age will not be irresponsible to himself and others. ...
Poverty is not terrible. The terrible thing is that people learn nothing in poverty and then lose their self-esteem.
(2)
A plain-looking girl, studying in a very ordinary technical secondary school, got average grades. After learning that her mother had an incurable disease, she wanted to lighten the burden on her family and earn some money in the two months of summer vacation. She applied for a job in a company, and the Korean manager read her resume and turned it down with a straight face. The girl took back her materials, propped up the chair with her palm and stood up. She felt that her hand had been pricked and looked at the palm of her hand, with a small red blood bead on it. It turned out that there was a nail sticking out of the chair. She saw a paperweight on the table, so she used it to knock the nail flat, and then turned away. But a few minutes later, the Korean manager sent someone to chase her back, and she was hired.
A person who grows up in love, her best reward is also love. When love urges a person to do something difficult for her, it is enough to prove the power of love!
Moreover, in a small matter that has nothing to do with herself, she can also show consideration and concern for others, and her love education is undoubtedly successful.
(3)
There is a position to be filled, and four applicants have come in succession. In the column of recruitment conditions, there is a condition that you must have more than two years of work experience. The first three applicants all said that they had similar work experience, but when asked by the applicants, they quickly showed their ignorance in this respect. Finally, a male classmate came. He told the recruiter frankly that he had no working experience in this field, but he was very interested in this job, and he was confident that he would be qualified for this job after short-term practice. The recruiter hired him without hesitation. After that, he had a talk with the recruiter. The recruiter asked, "There are many job seekers who are dishonest when introducing themselves, but why can you tell them honestly?" He said that he had picked up money when he was a child. He lied when his grandmother asked him. Her grandmother gave him a heavy blow on the ass and then warned him, "Poverty is not terrible. As long as you are honest, you will be saved! " He said that he would always remember what grandma said. Imagine a person who dare not face up to his shortcomings and can only gain trust by cheating. Can you go far?
An honest man actually needs courage most. He must dare to face the facts and the truth, and bravely point out the truth when others are vague and passive about Nuo Nuo.
Honesty is superior to all intelligence, which is the basic condition of intelligence.
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The three short stories in the article, read one by one, are very durable; Taken together, we can clearly see the author's intention-the education of excellent moral quality is the best education in life.
The language described in the article is extremely concise. The first story is mainly described through dialogue, revealing that "a person who grew up in poverty will not know the importance of thrift;" A person who knows how to work hard from an early age will not be responsible for himself and others "; The second story focuses on the detail of "so I knocked the nail flat with it"; The last story uses contrast and highlights that "honesty is better than all intelligence." The summary text after the story is limited, but it is quite impressive.
Second, the longitudinal splicing method
"Running account" is a taboo in narrative writing. The main reason is that the author lacks the ability to connect with typical events. However, if we can skillfully compose a few shining "pearls" on the red line of the article "clear development context", we can spread the rich connotation layer by layer and make the article generate show strong vertical penetration.
For example, Mr. Zhu Ziqing's Winter depicts three scenes: one is a father and son eating boiled tofu around the table, the other is visiting the West Lake with their best friends, and the third is that their family of four spend the winter in Taizhou. These scenes are far apart in time and have strong jumping ability, so they are not necessarily related. But the author connects them seamlessly through his own emotional clues-"No matter how cold, windy and snowy, my heart is always warm when I think about these." Because of this emotional connection, the works focus on the theme.
An excellent example
My hometown is far away.
Zhang Kangkang
I always feel like a wanderer.
For decades, I have been wandering around the world. I have walked through fields, cities and many places.
Where is the land I come from? My hometown, where is my hometown?
I don't know.
/kloc-left Hangzhou at the age of 0/9. Xizi Lake, full of water and mountains, is my birthplace. Luoshe, a small town in the south of the Yangtze River 0/00 miles away from Hangzhou/KLOC, is my grandmother's home.
However, I am just a passer-by in Hangzhou, and my ancestral home is in Xinhui, Guangdong. I didn't go back to my hometown in Guangdong with my parents until I was 30. There are green rivers, dense sugarcane forests and mysterious and quiet banyan island in my hometown. When the sun sets, I see white storks and gray storks circling back to their nests with big wings and long necks. The sky above the huge banyan forest is covered with sunshine and birds are singing. That is the world-famous bird of paradise. Xinhui county is a sunflower town in the world. On the green water waves by the river, strings of slender boats are full of fragrant laurel leaves, which are heavy and gone with the water. ...
But my hometown belongs to me, but I have no sense of garden. Nobody knows me, and I don't really know anyone. I can't even speak a complete and authentic hometown. My father and I, who left home in our early years, are like outcasts in exile, looking for and identifying with the roots left by this land in a strange local accent.
Dreams often appear in the lotus pond in the south of the Yangtze River. There are purple and sweet mulberries in the green mulberry fields in spring, golden pomelos in autumn, zongzi and dried fish with sauce and meat hanging all over the hall in winter, and a pot of delicious cooked taro ... During the winter and summer vacations, I went to my grandmother's house in Luoshe Town by a small steam boat. There is a big stone bridge in the east of the town. In summer, many naked children jump into the river from the dock. This river is connected with the misty Luoshe Ocean. I used to wash rice under the bridge. The bamboo woven Tao Tao was picked up from the water, and a small fish jumped on the pearl-white rice. ...
Grandma died a long time ago. Grandma took her hometown with her when she left. In fact, grandparents are not authentic Zhejiang people. I heard that my grandmother's ancestors were from Danyang, Jiangsu, and I don't know when she moved to Deqing Luoshe. I also heard that Luoshe was called Luoshe because there was a Luoyang immigrant's house in the early years. From this perspective, it is also difficult to verify the ancestral home of grandparents. What is my hometown, the Jiangnan town I dream of?
Therefore, there is a faint separation and suspicion about Hangzhou, which gave birth to me and raised me. Naturally, I like the tenderness and indifference of the West Lake, the green grass and intoxicating smiling flowers in the botanical garden in spring, the bamboo forest and the lush camphor tree in winter ... but they are just ribbons and decorations in my cradle. I appreciate them and praise them, but they don't belong to me. Every time I visit my parents in Hangzhou, in the noisy streets and lanes, the "strange smell" I bring from afar always makes me feel out of place with the warmth and humidity here. ...
Where the hell am I from?
More often, I will meditate on the distant ice and snow and think of the blue Xiaoxing 'an Mountains shrouded in mist. Stepping into the deep mountains in knee-deep snow, the unfrozen mountain springs in the bushes tinkle all the way, singing and laughing, and occasionally warm spring water overflows along the slope, so the tower piers in low-lying areas are generally sealed by crystals, and you can see jasper-like grass under the ice. On a windless day in the mountains, a little clear snow floats gently and slowly in the quiet oak forest, which falls on the headscarf and does not melt, and soon shines on your shoulder. This is a gift from the Snow Queen. If you close your eyes, you can hear the sound of snowflakes kissing leaves. It was the first time in my 2 1 year-old life that I found the sound of falling snow, such as silkworms sipping leaves and babies sucking milk.
At that time, I lived in a tent, and the rough wood was burning in the furnace barrel all night, rumbling like a forest train or a tractor in a forest farm. There are always several points: first, the paragraphs form a neat and strict parallelism relationship, which has a reciprocating formal beauty; Second, there is an overlapping and complementary relationship between content and content, which produces a kind of power beauty with smooth meaning.
For example, the essay "It's really nice" shows the course of life through the display of different attitudes pursued by young people, middle-aged people and old people. The article is "how nice it is to be young!" "Love, how nice!" "It's good to have money! ..... It's good to be alive! " The preface vividly reveals the unique taste of life.
An excellent example
laugh
backbone
The rain gradually died down, and clear light came in from behind the curtains. Open the window and have a look, ah! The clouds are gone, and the residual water droplets on the leaves reflect the moon, flashing and moving like a thousand fluorescent spots. -I didn't expect such a beautiful picture after the bitter rain!
Standing in front of the window for a while, I felt a little cold. When I turned around, I was dazzled, and everything else in the room was hidden in the light cloud; The faint light is only immersed in the angels in the paintings on the wall. -angels in white, holding flowers, holding wings, smiled at me.
"This smile seems to have been seen somewhere. When will I ... "I unconsciously sat under the window and thought quietly.
The closed heart curtain slowly opened, pouring out an impression of five years ago. A long ancient road. The mud under the donkey's feet is slippery. The water in the ditch gurgled. The green trees near the village are all caged in wet smoke. Bowed crescent moon, hanging in the treetops. Walking, there seems to be a child on the side of the road, holding a pile of white things. The donkey passed by with no intention of turning back. He smiled at me barefoot with flowers in his arms.
"This smile seems to have been seen somewhere!" I still want to-silently.
Another curtain of gravity appeared, which slowly opened and poured out the impression of ten years ago. -the rain under the eaves falls on Mao's clothes drop by drop. The blisters on the edge of the earth steps are turning. The wheat ridges and grape racks in front of the door are very bright yellow. -After a while, it finally cleared up and went downhill quickly. I saw the moon coming head-on from the sea, and suddenly remembered that I had forgotten something, stopped and turned around. The old woman in this small room-leaning against the door, holding flowers, smiled at me slightly.
This equally subtle expression, like a hairspring, flutters and gathers together.
At this time, I feel relaxed and happy, such as entering a fairyland and returning home. San Xiao, who appeared in front of me, suddenly melted and couldn't see clearly in the harmony of love.
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This paper focuses on three "beautiful" pictures: after The Lonely Lamp in the Bitter Rain, I saw the angel in the picture "holding flowers, raising his wings and smiling at me slightly"; When stepping on the ancient road in the rain, when a crescent moon hangs on the treetops, childish children "hold flowers and smile at me barefoot"; After sheltering from the rain under the eaves, the old woman in the house "leaned against the door, held flowers and smiled at me."
These three scenes repeatedly render the "laughter" that brings comfort to the soul, all with rain and moonlight as the background; At the end of the article, "San Xiao" is juxtaposed in "Harmony of Love", which makes people feel the beauty and warmth of life.
Fourth, the method of changing perspective.
As we all know, narratives are generally described from the perspective of people. In fact, sometimes we might as well look at people and things around us from a different angle. For example, "reducing the burden" is an old topic. Students, teachers and experts have their own opinions, and readers are generally not interested. The exercise "Dialogue in the Study" has changed a perspective and described the "burden reduction" in the eyes of the object in the study, so the literature is interesting. Another example is Witness, which is a perfect masterpiece. Find writing inspiration from the news hotspots of auction of rat heads and rabbit heads by Christie's auction company in France. The witness is written in dialogue throughout, which is ingenious, vivid and interesting. In the article, the author lost no time in deducing and pointing out the topics (such as "We witnessed the prosperity of the Qing Dynasty in front of Haiyan Hall in the West Building of Yuanmingyuan", "We witnessed their cruelty", "Teacher Cai stopped the auction with wisdom and we were witnesses", and "By that time, we only had one more identity, which was a powerful witness of the motherland", which made the theme of the article like a bright lamp and lit up the whole article. Similar articles include "The Experience of a Handbag", which observes the society from the perspective of a handbag; Dogs Look at Dogs reveals the life and world changes of corrupt officials from the perspective of a puppy of a corrupt official's family.
In addition, abstract concepts can be personified, such as "honesty after falling into the water", and "honesty" can be personified, telling stories and experiences after it was abandoned; You can choose a special subjective perspective (such as the perspective of aliens) to observe human society; You can also choose multiple subjective perspectives, observe and tell from multiple angles and multiple sides, which makes readers feel refreshed.
An excellent example
Dawn is the light projected by darkness.
20 12 Shandong candidates
I don't know how long I slept here.
That day, I fell from my mother and declared my maturity. Then, a big thing with feathers saw me when it fell and took me away. The feeling of flying against the wind made me dizzy, and then I was left here The rocks on both sides are no longer soft and sweet in my mother's arms. Thin dust covers me, and my whole body is full of darkness.
I am a pine nut.
When the autumn wind blows, I feel that the dust on my body is getting heavier and heavier. I almost suffocated. I can't see the mountains surrounded by flowers in spring, draw the dew in the morning, hear the lazy chirping of cicadas in summer, and smell the bursts of rosin emitted by Ye Ge. I was desperate, I cried, but there was no more water to make me cry. I dare not breathe deeply, for I am afraid that I will never see the beautiful sun again.
The wind is blowing hard in winter, and I cringe between rocks and mud, and there is no temperature at all. I am tired and gradually close my tired eyes. In front of my eyes, it is vaguely my mother's kind voice and smile. She said, "No matter how bitter, tired and cold you are, don't give up the hope of living." I want to call "mom" again and jump into her arms, but I am very tired, really tired, my consciousness is beginning to blur, and my thoughts are drifting away.
I don't know how long I slept here.
One day, I was awakened by a strange sound that seemed to come from ancient times. I opened my eyes in the dark, and a drop of water suddenly fell, which moistened my nearly dry heart, surrounded me with warmth, and I felt full of strength!
I can't wait to get rid of this shell.
I am crazy about pumping water and accumulating strength. "Let me out! I miss the bright sunshine! " Suddenly, the shell was broken by me, and I felt that I stretched my arm!
Grow up a little more! I raised my arm and touched the heavy object like a stone on both sides. I panicked. Why is it so heavy? "Can't give up!" There was a voice shouting in my head, so I raised my arm straight. I climbed up again and again ... tired and painful. I turned my head to the top, once, twice ... a hundred times, a hundred times. ...
Finally, the weight suddenly disappeared and rolled aside, and I finally broke through the ground! At that moment. At the moment when I was exhausted and full of success, I saw a red sun, which broke through the ground and jumped out of the horizon. This is what I dream of seeing day and night, and this is what I will always miss when I shed all my sweat and tears!
Tears welled up in my eyes, and I opened my arms to embrace the soft sunshine. Only then did I know that so much pain and suffering, cold despair, have passed and will be complete. Seeing the sun again, the darkness before was nothing to me. Now, I am a pine tree, born in the gap of the cliff, watching the eagle soar, for the morning of heaven and earth!
Recalling those days of despair, cold and depression, I smiled silently. I've always been grateful for those days, which made me. And I never gave up, so my name is "Jinsong"!
I always remember that those who have achieved great things in ancient times are not only outstanding talents, but also have perseverance.
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This paper is novel in conception and unique in angle. With the style of "pine nuts", the author describes the process that it went through all kinds of hardships and finally became "Jinsong", with delicate brushwork and appeal. There are proper anthropomorphic techniques and detailed psychological and motor descriptions (such as "Tired, deep-rooted pain, I switch my head to it once, twice ... 100 times, 10 1 times ...", etc. These are particularly commendable), as well as the fine sketch of the living environment, full of freehand brushwork.
On the whole, the article writes "Yan Song" in beautiful language to see the world, and draws a strong and unyielding struggle history of "Songzi", which can be described as both literary and aesthetic.