66-year-old Confucius finished his tour, and 4 1 year-old Tao Yuanming went home. In the traditional Confucian spirit, whether out of boredom or pursuing freedom, scholars yearn for an isolated pastoral life. So we often hear many people who are not old count their retirement days with relish. However, the reality of Dongli picking chrysanthemums and Nanshan has hooked your desire, rubbing hemp and chatting, raising flowers in cages, or worrying about the north and the south, until you give up nirvana, you can't get rid of the shackles of the secular. I have no intention to study whether Mr. Yi Ping's spiritual world is detached, but he sticks to the wheat field of Chinese teachers and can do his best to help those who need writing guidance in his retirement. It is really worth mentioning and praising.
The star's blog is used to speculate and quarrel, fame and fortune; Ordinary people's blogs are used for writing and entertaining themselves. Mr. Yi Ping used blogs to comment on compositions at the beginning of the rise of blogs, which is not necessarily a pioneering work. Taking blog as a communication platform, it can realize the dialogue between teachers and students about composition, thus effectively improving students' writing ability. Even if someone thought of it, no one could not only think of it, but also do it like Mr. Yi Ping and stick to it for three to five years. Until now, it seems that collection and publication are still desirable.
Comment on composition is a necessary skill for every Chinese teacher. If we only use vague language such as "well-structured and clear-cut", comments really don't need much intelligence, even brains. Therefore, when the reality of composition teaching requires comments to be targeted, effectively reminded and followed, comments need to improve their technical content.
Mr. Yi Ping said: "One of the particularities of composition in examination room is that it needs to be written according to the topic, and daily writing can be spontaneous." Although the composition in the examination room never refuses the natural expression of emotions, this expression must conform to the meaning of the question and cannot be arbitrary as usual. "This is a targeted comment. Limited to the circle of proposers, there are too many rules for writing in the examination room, such as topic selection, echo, material selection and so on. But it is precisely all kinds of rules and regulations that bring coping strategies to the composition. At best, it is called "skill". Improving grades is the biggest reality for students. No one will be angry because of their beautiful grades, right? If you want to go so much, you won't criticize Mr. Wang's rules and requirements when commenting on the composition.
Comment composition can teach general commonness, but more should be an effective reminder of individual differences, thus leading to a rule. Commenting on hydrology "this is also a kind of mourning", he said: "There are two problems to be grasped in this college entrance examination composition question. One is the trap set by the proposer, and the other is what he filled in on the horizontal line. The so-called' yes' is untenable. For example, loyalty and filial piety cannot be satisfactory. Your writing of loyalty and filial piety is also a kind of filial piety, which is in line with the meaning of the question. If so, it doesn't matter. The author of this article clearly realized this, and he did not write' mourning' in the conventional sense. But he seems to have forgotten another point, so he didn't insist on his choice of "mourning" and put pen to paper, thus "deviating from the affectation of the composition in the examination room" This is a comment on a composition, but it is also a far-sighted reminder to grasp the scale of examination. Only with this kind of careful guidance can we enter the writer's heart as clearly and vividly as possible and affect his writing level.
The way of commenting also depends on the will of the proposer, the author's reflection and even the degree of connection between the two. For example, for the composition "Pass" in the senior high school entrance examination, he commented that the success of this composition is suspected of writing a variable topic. There are two reasons: first, it is too difficult for a junior three student to quote so many poems accurately and appropriately in the limited and specific time and space of the examination room, with fluent writing and rich literary talent. Second, from the focus of the whole article, it is on "language" rather than "communication". There are six points and "biography" in the full text, three at the beginning and three at the end, which shows a high skill in point-asking. Without these pens, this article can only be written in Chinese. It can be seen that changing the topic of writing is a coup to win the examination room composition. In this book, people who look for composition comments in this way are everywhere. As long as everyone is interested in learning and improving, it is a practical and useful help for both students and Chinese teachers.
The highest level of composition evaluation is not simply composition evaluation, but the trinity of evaluation, guidance and encouragement according to the current composition, so that writers can see the direction of efforts and the possibility of realization, thus generating the impulse to continue writing. I dare not say that E Ping's composition comments have reached this level, but I dare say that Mr. Wang has been working hard in this direction, and there are many excellent works like this in the comments.
Because the behavior or words are different from most people, it is easy to get the courtesy of "madness". The Analects of Confucius said: "The mad make progress, and the stubborn do something." The "arrogance" here is bold and unconstrained without exceeding certain rules, and it is the dialectics of the golden mean. For a professional profession like composition teaching, it is a blessing to have a "fanatic" like Mr. Yi Ping, who dares to think boldly and look for laws in a broad field of vision.
This is a sequence.
Ye Gong Peng
10 June 2009 19[ composition topic]
Read the following materials and write an article of not less than 800 words as required.
Rabbit is the sprint champion of all previous small animal competitions, but he can't swim. Once, a rabbit was chased by a wolf to the river and almost caught. For the all-round development of small animals, the Animal Management Bureau sent rabbits to swimming training classes, as well as puppies, turtles and squirrels. Dogs and turtles learn to swim, and they have another skill. They are very happy: rabbits and squirrels have spent a long time not studying, and they are very upset. The wild duck, the coach of the training class, said, "I can swim on two legs, but you can't swim on four legs?" 90% success comes from sweat. Come on! Hey! "
The critic frog sighed with emotion: "rabbits run so well!" Why do you only train for weaknesses and not develop specialties? " Thinker crane said: "survival requires more than one skill!" " Rabbits can't learn to swim, but they can make holes. Squirrels can't swim, but they can climb trees. "
Ask for the right angle, clear thinking, choose your own style and draw up your own title; Don't deviate from the content and meaning of the material, don't copy it, and don't copy it.
-2009 national examination essay questions.
[Components in water]
Educational chaos theory
Ye Gong Peng
The rabbit was chased by the wolf and reached the river bank. He was in danger, so he went swimming. However, nature is good at running and refuses water. Hard as he is, he has accomplished nothing. Talking about people with animal things is shallow and deep, and there are different hot comments. Yu Manglu also knows that drunkenness is not about wine.
Educational chaos begins with "education". Shuo Wen Jie Zi said: "Teaching should be applied from the top and effective from the bottom; Education, raising children to make it good. " What are the desires of father and son, master and apprentice, and the desires of the upper class should be effective. This kind of education is still about making pottery, regardless of the thickness, quality and nature of the green body, while the happy party refuses to be round and follows the rules. The word "education" in western languages originates from Latin (educare) and is translated as "guidance". Go with the flow, lead and guide. If the internal development potential is suitable, the external application is suitable for the material. The differences between Chinese and western education are based on the following principles: introducing from inside and attracting from outside, yearning for differences.
From top to bottom, the pictogram shaped by the above likes and dislikes is called "management". Ignore emotions and give them, or pass them on by your own guesses. The art of communication is different from the art of teaching, with mutual accusations, inaccurate education and chaos. Rabbit Xi Yongyuan is chased by wolves. The river in front is swift, the teeth in the back are sharp, the liver and gallbladder are damaged, and his life is dying. He hates that his four legs can't get involved in the river and laments that his parents never leave their swimming skills. It is common sense for normal animals to learn to swim without knowing enough, although it is impossible by nature. Why not be good at it? Why should we devalue the quality?
Things are different, nature is a rope, take things as they are, foster strengths and avoid weaknesses, guide from the inside out, be passionate, develop in an all-round way, and put education first. However, the ideal is unrealistic in the end, and it can be realized once or twice, or it depends on providence, or it waits for time, but it is difficult to do it now. If the overlord bows, there will be many hills pointing at each other and unable to agree, education will be chaotic and the world will be even worse. Therefore, the rabbit's swimming experience is hard. We should pity his hardships in the journey, pity his ambition to cross the river, starve his skin, exhaust his bones and stimulate his ambition. Although he did nothing, he had no regrets.
Husband and rabbit, a candidate; Wolves are demons in the world. Standing on the angry shore of the college entrance examination, looking back at the vulgar wolf, the champion of the vertical sprint is also sighing until he kneels to the ground. Who is the weak crown of the body? Therefore, it is advised to educate idealists not to solve the ugliness of bad customs with illusory and empty beautiful pictures, and not to circle exams with quality distance. If you violate it, it is like praising heaven when you are on earth, singing peacefully when you are empty, wrapping yourself in beauty, licking your stomach, getting thinner and weaker, getting nothing, and regretting your life.
Education is chaotic, but it is not a sign of retrogression, but a sign of prosperity. Education in the world is dead, education in the world is declining, education in the world is booming, and education chaos is everywhere. Opinions vary and a hundred schools of thought contend. In the debate, heaven will become clearer and education will become better after suffering.
As the old saying goes, there are many wonders in the world, and chaos is the beginning. If properly managed, rabbits can swim and turtles can run. Let's talk about education through animal affairs. I hope that managers will follow the heaven and teach and educate people. In this way, the children are lucky and the world is lucky!
[Pingping Review]
The ancient road wishes to write ugly years 18 college entrance examination composition questions. This move may be the first time in the world, so I commented on all this. If this article is sorted by time, it is thirteen, ranking first by topic. So this word count is a small order.
People who write in classical Chinese are innovative. This article is like a book, advancing step by step, with sophisticated brushwork and fluent language, showing the basic skills of writing. Simulate the college entrance examination composition to follow the rules, analyze the fake materials, and echo the topic from beginning to end. I know the composition of the examination room well. However, these are all forms, and ideas are particularly important. Gudao talks a lot about the "educational chaos". He thinks that "the difference between Chinese and western education is based on" the top is the bottom, the inside is the bottom, and they yearn for differences ".He thinks that today's education" ignores the feelings of the bottom, education is inaccurate, and education is chaotic ".He thinks that" the ideal of education is unrealistic after all, or it can be implemented one or two, or by God's will, or by waiting for the opportunity, instead of encouraging it now. As for using rabbits as a metaphor for candidates, using wolves as a metaphor for bad habits is empty and incisive; Take "educational chaos" as a good omen, and pray that "education will get better after learning from a painful experience", and it will be wise to be chaotic. This kind of thinking goes beyond thinking, and the ancient road can really be said to be an educated person with a heart.
Gudao wrote The Theory of Educational Chaos in classical Chinese, and Yi Ping also commented on it in classical Chinese. How fast it is to push the boat with the current!
I started my blog on Sohu. Com June 5438+1October 19, 2006. So far, one column I insist on is "composition review". Now, I have selected them and compiled them into a book called Comment on the Blog Composition of Yi Ping, a famous teacher. I want to be a companion with Comment on the Composition of Yi Ping, a famous teacher, published online.
It is very convenient to comment on middle school students' compositions and guide their writing on blogs. It can not only integrate paper composition with network guidance, but also realize smooth two-way interaction between teachers and students, and also bring enlightenment to more netizens, which is why I really enjoy it. I have never opposed book-based composition guidance, and I always think that the correct way to improve students' writing ability is to prescribe the right medicine according to students' actual situation. Blog composition comments undoubtedly provide a broad platform for my composition guidance, and many composition cases enrich my composition guidance practice and theory.
If you want to do well, you must be careful, and the same is true of commenting on the composition on the blog. If you don't pay attention, you won't comment on the composition in time, and procrastination will become laziness, which can't reflect the timeliness of the network; If you don't pay attention, you can't comment on the composition well, and you can't reach the pertinence of the guidance. If you don't work hard, you can't build a tall building, and you will fail to lead and look forward. If you don't care, you don't know how to protect students' enthusiasm. Putting aside encouragement will ruin the gas station and will not arouse the enthusiasm of writing. You don't want to give your heart to a heartless student. Without communication, you lack understanding and can't take advantage of the interactivity of the network. I dare say that I am very careful when commenting on my composition on my blog. I always try my best to do it well. Of course, it is inevitable that things are not satisfactory, and we can only sigh, please forgive the readers.
I commented on my composition on my blog. Yi attended high school for three years. I commented on his 47 exercises, of which 65,438+02 exercises have been included in the online review of Yi Shifu's flat composition. Now 65,438+04 has been included in this book, and it is not easy for each other. Yi was admitted to Fuzhou University this summer. I hope that writing can play a further role in his future study and life. Huang Yi is now a senior three student. He is diligent in writing, and his composition has made rapid progress. This book contains 17 articles, quite a lot. I hope he will make persistent efforts and win the college entrance examination next year. Zheng He and Liao Xiubao joined hands to be admitted to Fuzhou No.1 Middle School. I hope they can keep reading and writing in high school and deliver good news three years later. There are several other students, I hope they will continue to write and make progress, and increase their interest in learning with the happiness of composition. I am waiting for their good composition on the blog!
I want to take this opportunity to thank two people. First, Mr. Ye wrote 18 college entrance examination essay for the first time in China, and I commented on it one by one; Now I have included his series of articles in this book, which is undoubtedly a bright color. Thank you very much. Secondly, Mr. Wang Zhenpeng, I invited him to write three essays on the same topic in the college entrance examination, and he readily agreed to finish them on time, which deeply moved me. Thanks also to those well-known and unknown netizens. I hope my comments on their compositions can be recognized by them. Finally, thank all the netizens who pay attention to my blog comments, thank them for their flowers and thumbs, and thank them for their pertinent comments.
Blog review composition, now published, I hope readers will like it.
Guo Tingping from Linjiangzhai
2009-9-9
(Ye is now the deputy director of the Supervision Office of Lianjiang Education Bureau in Fujian Province, the former deputy director of the Academic Affairs Office of Huangrulun Middle School in Lianjiang County, and a senior middle school teacher. Editor-in-chief of Translation and Appreciation of Classical Chinese and Chinese Reader for Senior High School, and participated in editing more than 0 volumes of books/kloc-0. )