A 500-word perfect composition with comments Article 1: Family ties are original. Inadvertently, many things will go away.
When I was a child, I would blame you.
You always come and go in a hurry when you meet me. I always hear what you say the most. You have to go. See you next time. I don't care, maybe I'm young and ignorant or I'm used to it. I remember one day when I was a child, in kindergarten, a child sarcastically asked: Why does your mother never pick you up? ? After that, I will miss you. I can't help it So, when you came to see me say that sentence again, you cried and hugged you and asked why you didn't pick me up. You let go of my hand and said you were busy. Still missing. On that occasion, I cried very sadly, but my child didn't remember anything after crying.
Life is like this. Day after day, year after year.
Be reasonable, and I will blame you.
At that time, like other children, I grew up beside my mother, only to find that I was not as happy as I thought. I have known that you have gallstones since I lived with you. I never took it as anything, because I never knew how painful it was. Finally, you live in that place where disinfectants are everywhere. After the operation, you lie flat on the bed and talk to me. Tears seem to be coming down, but I try not to cry and ask you if it hurts, but you still give me a weak answer. What did you say?/Sorry? ? I said it must hurt. You've been talking about how poor my health is since I left the hospital, but it's actually worse than me. Sometimes, I will blame you and say: Take good care of yourself. If you can't even take care of yourself, how can you take care of your precious daughter? ?
Now, I will love you.
Now, I finally understand that kinship is a place of love, and it is full of love. What a poor child I would be without you. So I decided to love you as much as you love me, but I must love you. The warm sunshine crawled lazily into the window, and suddenly you were by your side, smiling as brightly as a star. It's good to have you.
Mom, actually, you know what? I've always wanted to tell you myself: it's not easy for you to ask me. But you don't ask the price. I've always wanted to thank you in person. Do you always give me strength without fear and timidity? .
Mom, in fact, I love you very much, but I never said it seriously.
Do the happiest thing for your mother and tell her when she is happy. Mom, I love you. ?
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? Reading? Affection, choose three periods to describe the picture of life with mother, from? Complain Arrive? Is that weird? Again? Love? ,? I finally understand that kinship is a place of love, and it is full of love. ? The process of emotional change is described naturally, cordially and touching.
500-word composition plus comments Part II: Being with you, I think, being with you.
I was so naive that I thought I could feel your infinite warmth when I was near you, but I was just a trivial drop of water, stained with your little light. However, when I really walked into you, I found that I was out of my depth! Your brilliant light is too dazzling, your passionate flame is too burning, and your great momentum is too grand, so I can't get close to you.
However, you attract me like a magnet, trying to escape, but irresistible. In this way, I left my hometown, which loves me and embraces me, and flew to you without hesitation. Although, there will be danger of rolling in the deep at any time, there will be fear of death at any time, and there will be disasters that will be scattered at any time; Although I miss my hometown all the time and the people I love all the time, as long as I hear your call, see your smiling face and smell your smell, I will rush to your side regardless, and I want to be with you!
My family is calling my name, and the tears of missing make the ocean wider. But I smiled and shook my head, and my body floated up; The wind stopped me from flying to you, and the strong wind made me totter, but I smiled and shook my head, still rising and rising; The cloud tells me that the future is dangerous, and being close to you will be beyond redemption. Finally, I came to your side, dizzy, and left you forever before I could say a word, look at you and smile with you. It is very painful and uncomfortable to be burned by waves of hot light. My body made of water spreads like a shadow in an instant.
Buddha said that looking back 500 times in the past life has brought me a brush in this life, and the thousand-year practice has brought me the fate of being in the same boat with you. I'm willing to pass by 10 thousand times in this life for a second with you!
However, I can't even be with you for a second. What's the point of my pursuit? My fiery heart gradually cooled down. Although my body had already been torn and turned into clouds and dust, I kept searching, repaired my broken body and healed my injured heart on the way down the sun. I began to recover my original appearance, and I found the direction to go home!
Waves burst, that's my mother's call, ah, the blue sea is in front of me, and I plunged into the arms of my family!
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In many articles that write people's notes, I can't help but marvel at such a unique masterpiece.
First, the article is based on reasoning and enlightens life. The author chooses one of the most common natural phenomena in nature, the process of water transpiration, sublimation and cooling, and shows this process as a woman's passionate pursuit of men and the process of returning home after waking up from a dream. It is of vivid educational significance for junior middle school students who are still young to reason with stories and be ingenious.
Second, the article is full of passion and strong appeal. In this paper, a long paragraph of pen and ink is used to describe the passionate pursuit of the sun by water droplets, which conforms to the psychological characteristics of young students' pursuit of so-called love and often resonates strongly.
Third, the article thinks rationally and returns to nature. Without the last two paragraphs, such an article seems to be a declaration of love for young men and women, not a romance novel. Together with the last two paragraphs, the article has the depth and thickness of thought, which shows that the author's keen vision and old-fashioned puppy love will not have any good results, but a moth will put out the fire and bring about its own destruction. It is better to wake up as soon as possible and return to a normal life track.
Part III: It is said that walls are trapped between invisible walls. Some people choose to wait for the rabbit, others are unwilling to be lonely and break the wall, so there is his sorrow, his leisure and his free and easy.
Empress nantang
With what? By the sofa, how can others sleep soundly? There is a wall in your life. This wall is full of your loneliness and helplessness. You climb the west building alone, and the crescent moon is like a hook, which evokes the sadness in your heart; Cutting is still chaotic, and there are countless and unforgettable sorrows lingering in my heart! Let go of your hand, you will go south with Hongyan, but? It's hard to dream about Lu Yao? 、? Plum blossoms are like snow, but they are still full after being brushed. Standing on the ground and counting the fallen leaves, a wall climbs up from the bottom of my heart and surrounds your heart. This wall is the sorrow of the soul.
Tao Yuanming
? Into the dust net, thirty years? Tao Yuanming, you studied hard at a cold window and made a name for yourself. You wanted to use your talent to shine a ray of light in the dark, but you didn't get it. My heart is sleepy, and loyalty and righteousness are blocked outside the big wall. In officialdom, you are surrounded by rumors. In the end, you abandoned the high official Hou Lu and chose to grow beans in Nanshan in seclusion, work at sunrise and rest at sunset, breaking the secular wall with a hoe. So there was Mr. Wu Liu, who was lying under Wu Liu with the vitamin room and Nanshan as his companion, sucking the breath of chrysanthemums. What's your time? Traitor? In the five hundred years of Wei and Jin Dynasties, you conquered an era with a breakthrough in character, and a beam of light broke through the walls of officialdom. This wall is the darkness of officialdom.
Lipper
? Are we Artemisia people? Indeed, after ten years of fame, it is difficult to get out. You are surrounded by that high wall. Even if Gao Lishi takes off his boots and the imperial concubine grinds ink to make soup, you can't hide your inner pride and uneasy talent. There is no way to go in the future. Finally, you are angry? ampmdash？ Oh, how can I solemnly bow and scrape to high officials and break through the invisible shackles of high walls? You have added a different romantic luster to the prosperous Tang Dynasty. ? Until, holding up my cup, I asked the bright moon to bring me my shadow and let the three of us? You are drunk in Chang 'an, why are you looking around at a loss? You walk freely, and the road is like the sky. Why are you surprised at the difficulty of walking? A pot of wine drank the whole world. With wine and poetry, there will be a free life. This wall is a spiritual shackle.
What is a wall? The wall is the sorrow that trapped the Empress Dowager of Southern Tang Dynasty, the darkness that entangled Tao Yuanming's heart, and the shackles that imprisoned Li Bai's thought.
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This article is an excellent work, which stands out from tens of thousands of candidates' compositions and does have its bright spots:
1. Clever tailoring and precise conception. The author doesn't talk about walls, but goes straight to the point and defines a certain emotion of people as? Wall? Define the darkness of secular officialdom as? Wall? Define the fetters of thought as? Wall? This kind of cut-in and conception can be described as exquisite.
2. The theme is new and the accumulation is deep. It is not uncommon to enter the topic with cultural celebrities. With what? Say wall? For the title, including Li Yu, Tao Yuanming and Li Bai is indeed both intentional and innovative. Without profound cultural accumulation, it can only be self-defeating
3. The structure is clear and orderly. Candidates can always get the full text from the questions; The middle part is interpreted in three levels? Wall? The meaning of; Make a summary at the end, deduct the topic and respond to the full text.
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