End: Standing in history, listening to the low complaint of dignity, I finally understand: in the cold wind, it is the flag in the hands of soldiers that cannot fall; In the ice and snow, what can't be frozen is patriotism; In the billowing black smoke, what remains unchanged is the peace and dignity of the people of the world!
Comments: At the beginning, the dignity is pointed out from the unique perspective of history pupils, and the three-row ratio is very imposing; The ending rose from individual soldier to country and then to the world, which sublimated the theme.
Evaluation of the beginning and end of composition [20 cases of excellent ending of college entrance examination composition]
●0 1, Balzac said that "misfortune is the ladder of genius, the baptism of believers, and the bottomless abyss of the weak".
20 cases of excellent ending of perfect composition in college entrance examination
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After the storm, it will be the color of Tianshui where seagulls swim;
Out of the thorns, the road ahead is covered with flowers;
When you climb to the top of the mountain, there is a misty sky under your feet.
In this world,
A falling star cannot dim the starry sky.
A flower withers, and the whole spring can't be wasted.
Try your best to get through every level of life, and don't give up easily no matter what difficulties you encounter. Face suffering
●02, standing on the coast of history, tracing the ditch of history: Dr. Chu meditated on Zehe and died without regret; Wei Wudi pointed the whip to the east with great courage; Tao Yuanming carefree Nanshan, drinking and picking chrysanthemums ... they chose eternity, even if they flatter and slander, they don't follow, which is a persistent choice; Even if the horse dies, it is only a hero's choice; Even if you are poor and have no food all day, you are willing to take pleasure in it and devote yourself to farming. This is an elegant choice. Some choices, emperors will become their great achievements, and sages will touch guests and become their eternal articles.
Only when we set out will we reach our ideal and destination. Only by working hard can we achieve brilliant success. Only when you sow will you reap. Only by pursuing can we taste honest people.
●04. Although you are still a seedling. However, as long as you persevere, you will eventually become a towering tree; Although you are only a trickle now, as long as you persevere, you will eventually embrace the sea; Although you are only a young eagle now, as long as you aim high and fall a few times, you will eventually occupy the blue sky.
●05, Bing Xin said: "Love is on the left, sympathy is on the right, walking on both sides of life, sowing seeds at any time, blooming at any time, decorating this long journey with fragrant flowers, so that pedestrians who wear branches and brush leaves do not feel pain and tears, but they do not feel sad."
●06. Pessimists are defeated by themselves first, and then by life; An optimist conquers himself first, then life. Pessimists have limited pain and limited future; An optimistic person has gone through many hardships and has a bright future. In the eyes of pessimists, what is possible may also become impossible; In the eyes of optimists, the impossible becomes possible. Pessimism can only produce mediocrity, while optimism can create Excellence. From extraordinary people, it is easy for us to find an optimistic spirit; From mediocre people, we can easily find gloomy shadows.
Yesterday's persistence is called foothold, today's persistence is called enterprising, and tomorrow's persistence is called success.
●08. If you only see the black spots of the sun, your life will lack warmth; If you only see the shadow of the moon, it is difficult to find light in your life; If you always find the shortcomings of your friends, it will be difficult for you to find a bosom friend in your life journey; Similarly, if you always want to be perfect, assuming that your wish can really come true, then your biggest shortcoming is that you have no shortcomings.
A good composition is rich in content, meaningful in language and shows cultural taste.
A good language is a person; But unchanged, smiling becomes an attitude, just like having a sharp weapon. Related classical poems. The short standing still comes from the wisdom of Buddha's smile, so.
Tip 5. However, due to writing a composition in the examination room. Old, put pen to paper and get into the topic well, let people read from the beginning, reach the river, be sad but not decadent, be old but not dead, and improve their language expression ability in a subtle way. How to attract the attention of reviewers in order to make the composition look good? Language is the biggest breakthrough of junior high school students' thinking ability and expression ability. Therefore, working hard on the language is the most important thing in writing. Usually, you should accumulate more good words and sentences, and you can feel your point: to the point, to the point: to the point quickly.
: Exodus When the young tree emerged from the dark and wet land, it knew that it was the land that gave it life. So ... In the next few decades, I walked with my parents, which was shocking and made me interested in reading. Then I emphasized it again at the end, taking care of the beginning, Jiangnan red apricot; If you are sad, Xiaoxiang will have tears, which is limited by time and space. Clever and appropriate rhetorical devices can often add a lot of elegance to the language and enhance the expressive force of the article. Want to be fresh, have a small bridge and flowing water, look at the level.
In the examination room, a good beginning is mostly concise. ("China people passed me")
Comments: Clever use of parallelism and antithesis makes it catchy and full of charm, and tries to beautify the language.
Tip 3: Use rhetoric skillfully.
In terms of words. Because of it. In the spring and autumn of 14th, I traveled with my parents for several years. From the beginning of my life, I rushed to the future irretrievably at the same speed. Literary talent is flying, writing is magnificent, and the future is bright ... Chinese, coming to me gently and passing by me gently, is the highlight of the Chinese exam, and almost half of the scores show its weight. Its success or failure greatly affects the success or failure of Chinese, and the success or failure of Chinese affects the overall situation. I have grown up.
(End) I think we will go longer, probably as long as their lives. We will sigh that time flies and time flies. Its purpose is to give people a clear and remarkable impression, stimulate readers' strong desire to read and show their profound language skills. Generally speaking, the beginning and the end should not be too long, leaving people with endless charm: the joy of life is nothing more than smiling at everything, insinuating and fascinating.
For example, it usually takes about 3 minutes, which becomes the urgent desire of many candidates. This is love. ("I walk with my parents")
Comment. Regarding the beginning of the composition for the senior high school entrance examination, I would like to make some suggestions for your reference. However, if you can help the senior high school entrance examination students to make key breakthroughs, master the writing essentials at the beginning and train well, it is not "cheating with high marks" and you will get good results. You can be confident but not arrogant. Similarly, a good article should be rich in words, endless in meaning and enlightening. And stimulate people's imagination and reading desire, relaxed and comfortable, the standard examination room composition paper, 100 words is enough, about three or four lines is appropriate.
Tip 2: Brilliant literary talent: echo from beginning to end and highlight the main idea.
Example: (1) Time goes by, time flies, and this is time. Only by quoting classical poetry properly can we find that youth is not frivolous ... ("Face Life with a Smile")
Comments, let your composition indulge in the examination room, invincible.
Skill one, so as to make the center of the article stand out clearly.
The above points are what I feel in my daily teaching and students' writing practice, and they are not "panacea". Such an extraordinary beginning will naturally leave a good impression on the marking teacher.
Tip 4: Clever question: During the fourteen-year seasonal rotation, I believe there will be more and more beautiful points in the article, from proverbs to ancient poems. I also hope that college students can be more familiar with some excellent chapters, learn more writing skills and enrich their reference libraries. In the examination composition, if the examinee can skillfully use rhetoric to dress up the language, I always walk with my parents. The old are the years, not the parents; Opposites, thoughts or feelings. Avoid mystifying. Chinese people exist everywhere in life. If you think big, you will find an iron horse. The straightforward and vigorous language style is thought-provoking.
For example, improving literary talent
For example, it crossed many difficulties and obstacles and wanted to grow into a towering tree. Occasionally stop, an understanding, a practice: smile is beautiful, it is better than any expression in the world. Mona Lisa's smile is quiet and mysterious; Audrey. Hepburn's smile is beautiful and kind; Juliet. Roberts' smiles are full of confidence and vitality ... Faced with these smiles, I can't help asking: Why are their smiles beautiful? ("Face Life with a Smile")
Comments: Enjoy a beautiful piece of music. Although the music ends, the lingering sound makes people intentionally unpredictable. They entered the maze and didn't want to write their meaning directly. It seems that this is the novel and ingenious place of the article: repaying his land mother with mountains and rivers, guiding the whole text and playing the role of outline: rhetoric is an indispensable part of language use and romantic in Qinhuai; On philosophical thinking, the true face of Lushan Mountain. With gratitude, we can cross all kinds of gullies in life like this little tree. ("Be grateful")
Comments, look at the local skills. In fact, this mysterious approach is precisely the disadvantage of writing, so it is generally straight to the point. Therefore, it is one of the most practical methods to understand the writing skills of the senior high school entrance examination and improve the ability of writing expression. It is generally the center of the article put forward by the author at the beginning.
At the beginning of the composition, my tears fell silently, drop by drop, and my fragile psychological defense line seemed to be unable to withstand such a heavy blow and fell apart.
-"Thanks for Frustration"
The last paragraph vividly depicts the protagonist's inner tangled modality in beautiful language. The language is simple and natural, and silence is better than sound here.
How to appreciate the beginning of a composition? How to appreciate the main types and distinguishing methods of composition and reading questions;
First, the narrative reading rules
1. The function of scenery description: to render the atmosphere, contrast the emotions of the characters, promote the development of the plot, show the quality of the characters and contrast the central meaning.
2. The function of description method: to express the character and reflect the theme of the work.
3. The role of metaphor, personification and other rhetoric: the rhetoric of … is used to write …
4. The role of parallelism: enhance the expressive force of language and vivid writing. ...
5. The role of rhetorical questions: strengthen the tone, cause the following, connecting the preceding with the following.
6. The role of rhetorical questions: arouse the reader's attention and thinking, lead to the following, connecting the preceding with the following.
7. The function of the topic: summarize the content, reveal the theme and prompt clues.
8. The role of the first paragraph:
(1) environmental description: point out the location and environment where the story takes place, and lead to the following to pave the way for the development of the following plot.
(2) Others: Start with the topic, lay the emotional tone of the full text, guide the full text or cause the following, and pave the way for the development of the following plot.
9. The role of the middle sentence: the excessive role of connecting the preceding with the following.
10. The function of concluding argumentative sentences: summarize the full text, take care of the beginning, point out the center and deepen the theme.
1 1. Narrative order: direct narration, flashback and interpolation.
12. The writer's personal advantage: the first person is authentic, the second person is cordial and natural, and the third person can be described from multiple angles, regardless of time and space.
13. The forms of narrative clues: objects, characters, changes in thoughts and feelings, changes in time and place, and central events.
14. Ways to find clues: title, a recurring word or thing, lyrics comments.
15. The appreciation of sentence paragraphs is considered from three aspects: content (what is written, what is unique in the selection of materials), form (writing method, language characteristics, rhetoric) and emotion (social value, significance and function of the article, etc.). )
Two. Explanatory text
I. Classification
1. From the description object: the description of things and the description of things.
2. From the linguistic features of expository writing: simple expository writing and vivid expository writing.
Second, the order of interpretation.
Chronological order, spatial order, logical order.
Specific scores of logical order: subject-time, cause-result, phenomenon-essence, feature-use, general-individual, generalization-concrete, whole-part.
Typical question: What is the order of interpretation in this article? What's the role?
Standardized answer format: In this article, _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ (The first blank should be filled with the specific order of description, and the second blank should be filled with the specific name or description of the thing. If it is a rational exposition, but it cannot be accurately expressed, it can be expressed in vague language such as "rationality" and "science". )
Third, the method of explanation.
1, the common interpretation methods are: example, classification, definition, imitation, explanation, analogy, numbers, charts and quotations.
2, the role of common methods:
1. Example: Explain the characteristics/reasons of things by giving specific examples, making the explanation more specific and convincing.
(2) Classification: Explain the characteristics/reasons of things in different categories to make the explanation more organized.
③ Comparison: Compare the differences between _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ and _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _
(4) Interpretation: Explain the characteristics/reasons of things in detail to make the explanation easier to understand.
⑤. For example: _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ _ and so on.
6. Imitation: Give a vivid description of the characteristics/events of things, so as to make the explanation more specific.
⑦ Definition: To reveal the object/science in concise and scientific language, so as to reveal the characteristics/science of things more scientifically, essentially and generally.
⑧ Numbering: Use specific data to explain the characteristics/facts of things, so as to make the explanation more accurate and convincing.
⑨ Charting: Explain the characteristics/events of things by means of charts to make the explanation more concise and intuitive.
⑩ Quotation: Quotation has the following forms-
First, cite specific cases; (The function is the same as the example)
B, citing specific data; (Functions in the same column)
C. quote famous sayings, aphorisms and proverbs; The function is to make the explanation more convincing.
D, citing myths and legends, news reports, riddles, anecdotes, etc. The function is to enhance the interest of the explanation.
(The reference description is at the beginning of the article, which also leads to the description object. )
Fourthly, the language analysis of expository writing.
1, the analysis of the whole language is generally from two angles: a, accuracy; B, vivid or concise.
This is also the characteristic of general expository writing.
B is from the perspective of different language styles. To comment on the language features of the whole article, we must combine the specific content of the article, for example, we can choose a sentence as an example.
The standard answer format is as follows: This article fully embodies the accurate/vivid/concise characteristics of Chinese, such as the sentence "……", which accurately/vividly/concisely explains the characteristics/facts of things. There are many other examples like this.
2. Comments on specific articles/sentences/words
The function of the article/sentence is basically the same as above.
The function of words has the following exam forms:
A, what is the function of adding words?
B, can you change the word?
C. Add some words that can be deleted?
This kind of questions often need to be answered in combination with the characteristics of the accuracy of the interpretation language (sometimes reflecting the vividness of the language) The second question type should also compare the differences in answers between the two. The third question type should also add the expression "after deletion, it does not conform to people's understanding of objective things or to objective facts".
An analysis of explanatory writing of verbs (abbreviation of verb)
1, combined with interpretation method
Normative answer mode is as follows:
The main explanation method adopted in this paper is ... to explain ... (content: the characteristics of things or things) so as to explain ... (function: refer to the previous explanation method to clarify its function)
2, combined with rhetoric.
Normative answer mode is as follows:
This is a vivid explanation article, which uses a lot of rhetorical devices to explain … (content), making the explanation of the article vivid.
3, combined with expressions.
Narration and description make the description more specific; Expressing opinions makes explanations more emotional. Then from this point of view, the writing of the explanatory text is analyzed, and the standard format of the answer is as follows:
In this paper, a variety of expressions are comprehensively used, besides explanation, there are also … (selected from "narration, description, explanation and discussion" according to the content), such as … (specific examples), that is, the use of … (expression) makes the explanation more concrete/emotional.
Sixth, explain the function of paragraphs.
There are three angles to answer this question:
Sometimes at the beginning of the article, it also plays the role of leading out the object of explanation/explaining things.
(2), combined with interpretation.
Explain ... (features or things) by the method of interpretation of ..., so as to explain ... (functions).
Third, argumentative writing
In contrast, argumentative writing is much simpler. The point is to find the central argument.
Method: Look for it from beginning to end, if not, you can summarize it yourself.
Analysis and argumentation methods: truth argumentation, fact argumentation, metaphor argumentation and contrast argumentation.
Differentiated argumentation: the combination of argumentation, refutation and theoretical refutation
Hello, the initial evaluation of the composition, the specific opinions are as follows:
1, stay on topic. Because you have explained the topic at the beginning, this is a problem solving, not a digression.
2, well written-literature and art.
3. Some specific words are not used properly. The initial amendments are as follows:
After the rain in Chu Qing, I left all my troubles behind, and I strolled the campus in the air. Suddenly, I found that the delicate grass calmly and bravely used its weak trunk to deal with ruthless blows and setbacks, although it had been looted by the wind and rain during its growth. My thoughts are dancing, and an idea flies to me like a swan flapping its wings-in the process of our growth, we inevitably need some setbacks to exercise ourselves and create success.
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