Comments: "Trying to overcome difficulties" is the harvest of the little author. The little author clearly described what happened in the labor class and the process of solving doubts from it, which gave us an inspiration in writing: in fact, there are many topics around us that need students to seriously discover and accumulate.
Comments: When waiting for the bus, the article exaggerated the number of people and laid the groundwork for "crowded cars". The moment the car door opens, the process of "squeezing" begins.
Following the little author's pen, we experienced a painful but interesting process of crowding cars. At the end of the article, I said, "It feels good to walk!" It is the voice of a small author and a reader.
Comments: The fierce three-person battle shows that the life of the little author's family is very full, active and enviable. It is not difficult to find that the young author's brushwork is so fresh, natural and true. The author's language, manner, movements and psychological activities respectively reflect the different personalities of three people. Of course, * * * sex is also obvious, which has become the keynote of this article-childlike interest.
Comments: The article is a good feeling of reading enough. Starting with the content of the book read, the young author arouses feelings, makes ancient and modern associations, compares descriptions, and then connects with reality, making the article complete and fully expressing his thoughts and feelings. Comments: The biggest touch of this composition is the child's true feelings! Everything is going on unintentionally and reasonably.
Just like "it takes a heart to bloom, but a willow leaves a shade unintentionally", the child bought a gift for his classmates at first, but accidentally saw a photo, so he remembered his mother's birthday. All this is so natural and unpretentious.
Judging from the use of language, it is also worthy of praise and encouragement to be able to describe a thing clearly and smoothly at the age of a child. Comments: After reading this composition with curiosity, I seem to have experienced a false alarm with the little author. Yes, we all had this experience when we were teenagers. In fact, there are no ghosts in this world, and "ghosts" are in our hearts. The success of this composition lies in that the author can rewrite his psychology and actions when he hears the "ghost" phone ringing, thus vividly depicting his extreme fear and helplessness at that time. The last sentence is both a key point and a key point.
Since ancient times, people have been praising Gong Yu's persistent spirit of moving mountains, and the completion of the wildlife park tells us that sometimes skillful work is more effective than hard work. Comments: This is an interesting and useful article.
There is no flowery rhetoric, no artificial posturing, only the change from never brushing your teeth to brushing your teeth frequently, which is just a vivid narrative close to reality and makes people feel true and credible. "Good habits benefit for life", this composition reminds me of this wise saying again.
In fact, people are born with a lot of inertia. The key is how to overcome it. what do you think? Comments: This is a very interesting fairy tale, which contains a simple but profound truth that makes people think deeply! The story itself is not complicated: two fish, accustomed to the pampered life and bored, fantasize about exchanging places with each other. As a result, it is conceivable that an irreparable tragedy has finally happened! Hey, don't you see this phenomenon in your life? ! The little author is good at using anthropomorphic techniques, grasping the characteristics of small animals, drawing and describing shapes, and making vivid psychological descriptions. Really lifelike! The thick humorous atmosphere contains thought-provoking philosophical thinking, which is commendable! The article is full of imagination and fluent language, and it is a very tasty fairy tale comment: the little author uses a lot of dialogue descriptions in the article, which fully shows the personality characteristics of the three characters. The title quotes folk nursery rhymes, which is very novel.
Comments: Give up your seat, which is a very ordinary little thing, but the little author can see the big picture from the small, which has triggered profound lessons and profound thinking, which is commendable! In the article, writing about the congestion on the bus is concise and vivid; The young man with yellow hair is vivid and concrete, and contains a kind of well-meaning irony. In particular, writing about teachers, without saying a word, only wrote about giving up your seat, smiling and staring, but it was so detailed, so complicated and so meaningful! How quiet it is! This paper attaches great importance to the relationship between primary and secondary details, highlighting the main detail of the article-the teacher's eyes, which has caused long-term regret and painful thinking of young authors! Comments: Life is the source of writing. The young author personally experienced two days of rural life and had many real feelings. This is true feelings, there is no empty slogan. Young writers use the method of restraining first and then promoting, first expressing their yearning for rural life and envy of rural children, and then using the word "but" to lead to the following, which is natural and natural. The language is simple and vivid.
The specific process of tea picking is described in detail, but the visit of aquatic plants and hiking picnic are briefly mentioned, which makes the article focus. Comments: The little author has vivid language, ingenious conception and rich imagination, which is memorable to read.
Comments: Seeing with my own eyes and observing carefully, the little author vividly described the scene of the game and his feelings. Comments: The little author described his feelings of memorizing this text well, from wasting time playing, busy memorizing, and then to my father's education, which gave me the courage to overcome difficulties and put it into action.
The whole process was clearly written and expressed my inner feelings. Comments: This article takes both the beginning and the end into consideration, and the structure is ingenious and meticulous.
Behind an unforgettable photo is an unforgettable thing and an unforgettable sentence. Because of personal experience, the writing is true, natural and smooth, and readers feel the same.
Comments: This is a profound science fiction composition. Through his magical imagination, the author foresaw the environmental prospect that made us not optimistic. What is particularly commendable is that the author puts forward the relationship between "science" and "environmental protection", which makes people think deeply.
Comments: The little author carefully observed the appearance of the monument and made a detailed study.
2. Briefly write the comment on the equality between men and women in feudal society. We were extremely happy when we gave birth to boys, and we lamented when we gave birth to girls. Since 1949 China was liberated, we have been advocating "equality between men and women". But now in our class, it is our boys who strive for "gender equality". Please see:
Event 1- seat event. Our school organized a spring outing this year. Every class has a car, and the teacher always lets the girls go first. Finally, when the boys got on the bus, there were only three rows left, so we had to take two seats for four and "pour sausages". At the strong demand of our boys, in order to ensure fairness, the teacher said, "When you come back, the boys get on the bus first." At this time, our boys' team immediately sounded "yeah! Yeah! However, the teacher brought an additional condition: "You should sit in the original position." "It's not the same as girls get on the bus first! We are still sitting in our "last three rows"; Girls still take their "first class"! "At this point, there was a sigh of" alas-alas-"in the men's team, but there was" yeah! "yeah! "Cheers.
Event 2-physical education class incident. In physical education class, after class, teachers often give us some free time. The teacher always says that whoever stands first is free to move first. Girls are always free to move, but we boys are often punished. At first we thought it was because of poor standing. Later it was discovered that the teacher was biased. Once, we stood better than ever. We thought the teacher would let us move freely first, but the result was still: "Girl! Free activities! " Alas, this is too difficult!
3. How to write at the beginning of the composition evaluation: 1? The beginning of the article is simple and appropriate, and the description of the environment sets off the emotions of the characters, which is very artistic.
2. The beginning is brief and to the point. 3. The beginning of the article is novel and serves as a warning.
Let readers have the impression of … as soon as they meet. The beginning of the article is fascinating and attracts readers.
The combination of point and surface makes the article vivid, concrete and meticulous. 5. The language of the article is vivid and readable.
6, the beginning is extraordinary, attracting readers. 7. The beginning touches people's hearts and has true feelings. 8. The beginning of the article is very clear, which plays a leading role in the full text.
9. This article is novel in material selection, which aroused readers' desire to read. Writing process: 1, full of * * *, description ... 2. Highlights, appropriate details and specific contents.
3. The metaphor is appropriate and the words are vivid. 4. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life and friendly to read.
5 ... tell us in a relaxed and happy tone, which is unforgettable. 6. The narrative is natural and vivid, with compact structure, coherent connection with nature and prominent center.
7. For the description of the scenery, the language is concise and accurate, while the association is touching the scene, and the scene is naturally integrated. 8. By enriching the characters' language and actions, the ideological quality of the characters is set off.
9. This article is lyrical in narration. 10, full use of dynamic and static writing, supplemented by metaphor, personification and other techniques 1 1, the author's careful observation, orderly narration 12, and the use of some subtle words have invisibly added a lot of interest to the article.
13, the article is elegant, fluent and coherent, especially the characters' language is humorous. 14, the article is reasonable. 15, through vivid language description, let readers feel like they are in a dream. 16, the article has clear clues and prominent themes, closely surrounding …
17, the details are quite clever. Extremely rich in skills.
18. It is a major feature of this article to describe the characters' language, demeanor and movements in detail. 19, delicate description, strong life breath, accurate and vivid words and sentences.
20. The language is accurate, vivid and vivid, and the content is extremely rich and specific. 2 1, the case is vivid and concrete, and the words and deeds of the characters conform to their respective identity characteristics. 22. The article comes from life, so the language is not so beautiful, but it is really interesting and reasonable. 23. The article will be written in detail. 24. The language is lively and interesting.
25. A lot of spoken English in life makes the article more natural and friendly. The end of the composition: 1, the end is just right, the center is clear, the language is concise and profound, and it is thought-provoking.
2, use the feeling switch, ending with feeling. In this way, the article is coordinated from beginning to end, and the theme of the article is repeated, which is very infectious.
3. The praise for the characters at the end is sincere and touching. 4. The implicit ending of the article is both topical and intriguing.
5. Focus on the end to express emotions, give consideration to the beginning, and summarize the full text. Coherent from beginning to end, in one go.
6. The vivid description of details reveals the inner world of the characters in a beneficial way, which is the success of this paper. 7. The article ends with …, which is concise and full of charm.
8. At the end of the article, the central sentence is really clear, and the conclusion is short and powerful. 9. The ending is full of expectation and enthusiasm. Words are done, meaning is still unfinished.
10, the poetic language at the beginning and end of the article is full of imagination and rhythmic beauty, which makes people want to read and love to read. 1 1. Although it is a trivial matter, it is vividly described by the author, and the indispensable ending highlights the theme of the article.
12. Although the story is ordinary, it is sincere, rich and touching. 13, the end of the article is unconventional, giving people the feeling of wanting to rest.
14, ending in …, clear and meaningful. Summative comment: 1, the article is miscellaneous but not chaotic, but can be detailed and focused.
This article fully and appropriately exaggerates the atmosphere of … and gives a detailed and vivid description of the key points of the article. 3, ... practical, contains simple and profound philosophy, exciting and emotional to read.
This article is full of * * *, between the lines, you can feel the little author's love for …. The full text has distinct levels and fluent sentences.
5. The case narrative is vivid, concrete and interesting, which is in line with the previous metaphor. Finally, the author expressed his feelings for … in a few words, which is touching.
6. The article is well organized and forms a complete image. 7. The language of the article is fresh and lively, the description can grasp the main features of things, and the length is short and pithy, which is worth reading.
8. The content of this article is vivid and rich, the language is novel and refreshing, and the structure is unique and reasonable. 9. The article is meticulous, orderly, vivid and concrete, which is a masterpiece.
10, the close-up is unique and interesting. The full text is full of childlike innocence and interest, and it is very kind to read.
1 1. This article can be described in fresh and interesting language ... Between the lines, it is full of childlike interest and laughter, which is a masterpiece.
12, appropriate details, and the combination of reality and reality are the two major characteristics of this article ... the content is richer and more vivid. 13, the full text is fresh and elegant, kind and euphemistic, simple and unconventional, and it is worth learning.
14, the full-text language is vivid and accurate, and the plot is wonderful and tortuous, which seems to bring readers into a happy paradise and make people smile. 15, the full text is easy to understand and interesting.
16, the full text is clear, vivid and compact, and interesting. 17, pay attention to observing specific things and develop appropriate imagination, which is the success of this paper.
18, the article melts into the scenery, describes the scenery while expressing emotion, and is good at using analogy to make the article vivid and concrete. 19, the article is novel in content, reasonable in structure, fluent, coherent and natural. 20. This article is based on real life, with appropriate materials, novel ideas, clear paragraphs, natural transition, full of interest and strong readability.
2 1, with fluent language and free and easy writing, is a relatively successful work. 22. Although the language of this article is not gorgeous, it is extremely accurate and vivid, with rich and true emotions and interesting reading.
23. The structure of the article is concise and reasonable, and the author's understanding of the original text is also very profound and thorough. The full-text language is forceful and hit the floor, which makes people excited and excited.
24. This composition has novel materials, wonderful ideas and lively language. There is a fresh breath of life and children's interest between the lines.
4. How to write a composition evaluation This shows the importance of writing in Chinese teaching.
Composition teaching is a very important content in Chinese teaching in primary schools, but it is also a difficult point. It has become a common phenomenon that teachers are afraid of teaching and students are afraid of writing.
How to improve students' writing ability, I think our Chinese teacher can start with the evaluation and correction of composition. However, when it comes to correcting compositions, many Chinese teachers find it quite nerve-racking, especially when writing composition evaluation, we often do it hastily, in a few words, or in a cliche, empty and empty; Or use the language of evaluation and summary, which is serious and boring, making students dull to read, and it is difficult to give full play to the educational function of comments.
I feel it myself. Every time I grade a composition, I have to rack my brains to think about how to give students a proper comment, such as "the sentence is fluent and the structure is clear", "the key points are prominent and the details are appropriate" and "I can grasp the characteristics and distinctive personality of the characters" ... I think they are all perfunctory words from students. There is such a phenomenon, I wonder if our teacher has noticed it. When we send the revised exercises to the students, the first thing the students do is to open their composition books quickly, read the scores first, and then can't wait to read the comments written by the teacher.
They want to know what the teacher thinks of their compositions. Some students smiled when they saw the teacher's praise, so they told them how my composition was praised by the teacher, while some students immediately became depressed when they saw the teacher's evaluation of themselves, wishing to stay away. It's best if no one cares. No one asks, "How many points did the teacher give you for your composition and what kind of comments did you write?" This shows how much these lovely students care about the teacher's evaluation of their compositions.
Whether it is a few criticisms at the end of the article or a few general criticisms, composition evaluation is an important part of composition teaching, and commenting on students' compositions is the crowning touch in this part. Composition evaluation has both evaluation function and guidance function.
Delicate comments are of great benefit to students. It can often arouse students' interest in writing, ignite their writing enthusiasm and activate their thinking.
Proper evaluation can often broaden students' horizons, point out the maze, clarify the direction of improvement, and make composition teaching get twice the result with half the effort. So, what kind of composition evaluation is appropriate and accurate? How can composition evaluation play its guiding role most effectively? In order to stimulate students' interest in writing, teachers should abandon traditional thinking patterns, abolish old cliches and nonsense when correcting compositions, and use energetic, friendly and creative language as much as possible to arouse students' enthusiasm for writing.
First, the respect of composition evaluation I think this is the first thing for our composition evaluation. Teachers and students need to be based on equality and respect if they want to achieve spiritual convergence and emotional exchange.
The dialogue between teachers and students is an equal dialogue, which reflects the teacher's respect for students. This is also in line with the basic concept of personalized composition.
People-oriented, respecting students and personality is one of the basic theoretical contents put forward by the project concept. In traditional teaching, composition evaluation is often blunt, rigid, cold, or empty and vague comments, which makes students feel that composition is abstract.
After the composition is sent down, you either have a look or don't even look at it, which makes the comments useless. In fact, primary school students' composition is not only the embodiment of their writing ability, but also their personal experience in life practice.
Therefore, teachers should stand in the perspective of understanding and respecting students, change the teacher's preaching behavior in previous comments, and have an equal dialogue and patient spiritual exchange with students in a friendly tone, thus stimulating students' writing enthusiasm. Second, the accuracy of composition evaluation. As a teacher, we should give students a clear definition and point out the crux of students' composition.
"Writing teaching should be close to students' reality, make students easy to write and be willing to express, guide students to pay attention to reality, love life and express their true feelings." (Chinese Curriculum Standards).
Teachers should be good at grasping the characteristics of primary school students' understanding of things, be correct and objective, don't overestimate students' requirements, and don't make reproachful comments. When writing, try to be detailed, specific and clear, and don't generalize, especially some nonsense and cliches, such as highlighting what is reasonable in structure; What words are accurate and sentences are fluent; What is the reasonable plot arrangement of the article ... such comments are empty and boring, and can't arouse students' interest in writing at all.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of the article? A simple "fluent sentence" or "impassable sentence" can't solve the fundamental problem. After students get their own composition, they still don't know how to write further.
As a critic, teachers should point out the source of students' writing and how to improve it. For example, it is pointed out that the article does not write true feelings, which directions need careful observation and in-depth experience, which materials are interesting and meaningful, and which parts are open-minded and imaginative, thus guiding students to know which ones are worth writing and which ones are not.
Third, the inspiration of composition evaluation, composition evaluation accepts students. Whether students are willing to accept and be inspired is the measure to test whether the teacher's comments are qualified. Students' age, psychology, gender and experience are different, and the articles written will have different styles. This requires teachers to change their tone, choose a novel angle for some students' nonstandard language or exercises that don't meet the writing requirements, use their brains skillfully, design carefully, turn abstraction into simplicity and vividness, write them out to make students read fresh and inspiring, guide students to think independently and explore actively, so as to find problems in their own compositions and improve their analytical ability.
Write comments that convince students and give full play to the guiding role of composition evaluation. Good composition evaluation should also be short and pithy words, so that students can gain something, communicate with students and understand each other, and at the same time be pleasing to the eye.
Make students think about their own exercises, understand the shortcomings, stimulate their own needs and desires for correction, and thus enhance their initiative in self-correction.
5. How to write a composition evaluation and read an article? We often see that teachers are used to writing comments on articles, and sometimes teachers organize students to comment on their classmates' homework interactively. At this time, do you feel at a loss and don't know how to write? To this end, the teacher will guide you how to write comments on the article, hoping to help you.
When we comment on an article, we mainly look at whether the structure of the article is complete, whether the language is beautiful, whether the content is substantial, whether the imagination is rich and whether the thought is profound. We should pay attention to the following four points:
First, remember some common terms in the three main styles.
Three common styles include narrative, expository and argumentative. Narrative depends on whether the six elements of the article, such as time, place, character, cause, process and result, are clearly explained, whether the story is complete, whether there are portraits, language descriptions, action descriptions and psychological activities descriptions, and what role these descriptions play in expressing characters. Whether the connection and transition between events are natural and whether the details are appropriate. A broad narrative is also appropriate. When it comes to prose, we should think of techniques such as prose and gathering spirit, parallelism and presentation in prose, and symbol in prose. When it comes to novels, we should analyze them from characters, environment and stories. Character description (same as narrative); Environment includes both social environment and natural environment; The plot has four parts: beginning, development, * * * and ending. In short stories, we should also pay attention to the fact that the ending is often unexpected and reasonable. From the perspective of sequence arrangement, there are sequence, flashback, interpolation and narration.
Let's talk about argumentative writing. First of all, we should look at its three elements: whether the argument is clear and whether the viewpoint is correct; Whether the argument is straight to the point or in the text or at the end of the text; The theoretical argument or factual argument used in the argument depends on whether it is novel and close to the times. There are various methods of argumentation, such as argumentation, refutation, positive and negative argumentation, etc. It depends on whether the argument structure is tight and so on. In argumentative writing, we should also see whether the argument serves the argument.
Look at the Expo again. There are two types of fairs: food fairs and food fairs. The Expo aims to explain the structure and living habits of things to readers. When discussing things, we should answer what it is, why, how to develop it, etc. From the order of writing, the discussion of things is a logical order, while the discussion of things is a time, space and program order.
The above is some information about the three styles that we must know. If you want to get a good comment, you must know these basic information and remember some terms, so that you can have food in your hand and not panic.
Second, we should understand the criteria for judging the article.
The criteria of composition evaluation include basic level and development level. The basic level includes content and expression. The content includes the meaning, center, content and emotion. Expression includes style, structure, writing style and writing style; The levels of development include profundity, richness, literary talent and creativity. The grading standard of the composition is *** 12, and each article includes four grades. We must know the four levels of terms 12, because this is the basis of our comments on the composition.
Third, be sure to comment on the specific content of the article.
When commenting on an article, don't abandon the original text and preach in an empty and abstract way. Those innocuous comments are meaningless, which is the taboo of writing articles and comments. For example, in 2006, the perfect composition of Heilongjiang college entrance examination, "Tea and fast food are all suitable", if we write a comment like this: "Rhetoric, beautiful language, grand momentum and profound details are excellent works in the examination room." Therefore, we should also combine the specific content of the article to write comments. For example, comments should be written like this: "This exam composition has a good understanding of the materials given in the composition title, that is, with the development of the times, people's reading methods are also changing. The author can firmly grasp this central topic to discuss, and vividly compare' reading' to' drinking tea', which makes us seem to see: in the afternoon, a cup of green tea and a roll of yellowed ancient books. In reading, people's body and mind change unconsciously. The author calls online reading' reading the Internet', which corresponds to' reading', just right! The author compares "reading the Internet" to eating "fast food", which reminds us of McDonald's booming business. It is a paradise for young people. Yes, mostly young people. Nutritionists have repeatedly called for it to have no nutrition, but can you deny that it can't satisfy hunger? This is' reading the Internet'. What a rich imagination! It's amazing. Rhetorical methods such as parallelism and quotation are used in many places in the article. The article is magnificent and rich in connotation, which gives people a strong appeal. " In this way, comments are written according to the specific content of the article, which makes the advantages and disadvantages of the article concrete, provides specific opinions for people to learn, and makes the comments show value.
In short, we should combine the specific content of the original text to make the comments meaningful.
Fourth, comments should be focused.
When commenting on an article, you should choose the key points to comment on, and avoid grabbing at the eyebrows and beards, so as not to highlight the characteristics of the article. It is necessary to choose the most distinctive highlights of the article from the perspective of the conception, language expression or innovation of the article, so that the comments can grasp the characteristics of the article and avoid evading the importance.
To sum up, after mastering the above four points, you can write some comments on the article.
6. Comments on my story composition with books: A book you love is your friend, but sometimes you and you are not "love at first sight". This exercise can use personification, contrast and other rhetorical devices to highlight your love of reading! The language is lively and interesting, but it is best to abbreviate the contents of the cited books! You can also simply write a few stories, and the effect will be better.
A few years ago, my mother bought me a book from the bookstore-The Taste of Growing up. However, I didn't even read the book, didn't even turn it over, so I stuffed it into the bookcase. Later, I read all the books next to me, but it has been waiting for me to "review" alone. Year after year, it has never been less than my "love". Over time, the smell of growing up is dusty, but it still stands in the bookcase, waiting for my "call".
The fifth grade has begun, and my mother will plan what books to read in the new semester for me. She accidentally dug out the smell of growth from the bookcase. The opportunity for "The Taste of Growing Up" to be "summoned" has finally come! But as soon as I saw it, I was annoyed and hostile to it, but it was hard to violate the "mother's life" and I had to put it in my schoolbag. Poor Taste of Growing Up changed its position and began to wait in the schoolbag again.
One day at noon, I finished my homework and really had nothing to do. I remembered the taste of growing up in a schoolbag. So, I took out "The Taste of Growing Up" and began to read it. The more I watch it, the more I like it, and the more excited I am. I was deeply moved by every story in the book.
Among them, the little boy in The Gift of Understanding doesn't know what money is, but only knows "trading". When he walked into the candy store with some cherries and wanted to "trade" the candy, Mr. Weiden, the owner of the candy store, hesitated and gave the candy to the little boy. The little boy opened an imported fish shop when he grew up, and every fish was very expensive. But when a little girl "exchanged" fish for only $2, he hesitated and gave the fish to the little girl.
This article makes me feel warm. The kind Mr. Weiden carefully protected the real happiness and childish dignity of the little boy that day and passed this virtue on to the little boy. The story touched me. I think about the story in the book again and again, and I think about the fate of the characters in the book every day. I also told this story to my mother when I got home. That's it. I like the taste of growing up. On the first day, I read 10, the next day, I read 20 pages, the third day, 50 pages, and the fourth day ... it didn't take a week. I watched them all. Now and the taste of growing up have become inseparable friends. I put it in my schoolbag every day. If you have something, just flip through it, review the story in the book and chat with it.
I have never liked the taste of growing up, and I have a little insight: sometimes, when you read a book you don't like, you will feel its beauty. This is really "my road twists and turns through a sheltered valley, branches and flowers to a Buddhist retreat"! Slowly, you will fall in love with it and build a deep friendship with it.