I remember that when I wrote my thesis, I was more lively in order to catch the teacher's attention. At that time, I also went to the teacher to revise it many times, and I also read other students' articles on similar topics to see what was different. Although the paper written in this way is not necessarily the best, there is no problem.

Personally, I don't think the full text of your article is profound enough. ) I feel that there are too many reasons in your article. Since ancient times, it seems that you are always doing work meetings. If you want to go deeper, you must write your own words. Read it by yourself after writing, and attract yourself first. How can you attract others if you can't even attract yourself? In a word, my opinion is that the last part is how to improve moral cultivation.