Since ancient times, due to the wisdom and stupidity of human beings, sadness is like erupting volcanic lava, which accumulates layer by layer and freezes and cools. ...
In this world, some people are willing to bear all the troubles of the past and present. How energetic! How tragic! Maybe a little helpless. ...
The long river of history is rolling forward. It is Li Bai. "White hair and three thousands of feet, like a long beard." But he is worried about the misfortune of being demoted. He came to the shore to drown his sorrows. Is Li Yu, "ask how worried you are? It's like a river flowing eastward, but he is worried about the sorrow of his small family. In the end, the Queen of Southern Tang Dynasty can only end up with a glass of poisoned wine. Is it Li Qingzhao? " What a sad word this time! "But she is just worried about the endless thoughts!
Who is worried about the sorrow of the world? Who is worried about the disasters of ancient and modern times? They wandered, pondered and wept on this shore, and history carved their immortal names on the rocks on the shore.
Dr. San Lv stayed and thought, "It's a long way, but this is Xiu Yuan, so I will go up and down." This is a portrayal of his feelings! Go to Miluo, this is a continuation of his melancholy! I saw his sadness, his pain, and he walked away silently, but left it to future generations!
Mr. Lu Xun stayed, and he criticized with an iron pen. Because of his sadness, he chose to abandon medicine and join the literature. His shoulders have been sad since ancient times! He criticized the "man-eating" society: the appeal of "saving children" was issued by him; "Looking down on a thousand fingers and bowing down as a willing ox" was his thought for future generations. Because he is fearless, he will bear this endless worry and give the world an account!
"Someone is dead, but he is still alive", how many people's minds have traveled through time and space, stretching to this day; How many people's worries carry over from the past to the future? Yes! They are still alive, and they are still worried.
One shoulder bears all the worries of ancient and modern times, and the other shoulders bears the sorrows of the world, inheriting the enlightenment of predecessors and leaving it to future generations. Is it a responsibility or an obligation? It's responsibility!
One shoulder bears all the worries of ancient and modern times and shoulders the rise and fall of the nation. Worry and fatigue can rejuvenate the country, and leisure can die. They once left their names in the history books when the nation rose, and their names will be immortal!
It takes courage and strength to shoulder all the worries of ancient and modern times, but this is an important task that every Chinese son and daughter with boiling blood should shoulder. No one can back down, no one can back down!
Need a solid shoulder to shoulder all the troubles of ancient and modern times!
[Comments by famous teachers]
The following points are worth mentioning in the article:
First, good thinking and accurate selection of materials. The article takes "Worrying about the past and the present on one shoulder" as the topic, takes historical figures as the thinking point, and then goes step by step to find out what "Worrying about the past and the present" is and what kind of people can bear it. Following this train of thought, the author leads Qu Yuan and Lu Xun, proving that only such people can bear the worries of the past and the present, and only such people can bear the worries of the past and the present! This "worry about the past and the present" is a responsibility to the country and society. People who can shoulder this "worry about the past and the present" should have solid shoulders.
Second, the structure is rigorous. The article takes "one shoulder bears the worries of the past and the present" as the center, and lists all kinds of materials, but they are all around this center.
Third, language is rich in variety. The whole sentence is interactive, and the language potential is rich!
20 10 Hubei college entrance examination perfect score composition and comments: more fantasy.
Riverside. The twilight is boundless. "It's better to pick up a broken tile than throw away the water," the father said to his son.
Son is obedient. But only draw a short arc. "Push." "I have no strength anymore," my son said gloomily. "Dad, maybe you can help me." "Then, come with me."
To get to the river, you must go through a pine forest. Behind is a flat land, where blue flowers bloom, blue birds live, and some colorful butterflies who love flowers fly between light and darkness. This doesn't seem to suit his mood He failed in the college entrance examination, and the scenery should be sad and gloomy. It should be a dim light flashing in the Woods, like there is hope but there is no hope. What he should probably do is to walk home. It seems that he is experiencing an escape. Continue or give up? This is a problem.
He tried hard, but it was only a short arc, and even nearby, he failed to bloom beautiful waves. "I tried my best, but I still couldn't," he said. "Just like my college entrance examination." "You lack a little fantasy, just like this." Father gently threw a long line, as if it were not a broken tile, but a flying fish. "If you are like this." Father threw the broken tile into the sky with great strength, but with a dull noise, the broken tile fell into the bottom of the river. "Do it again." Father flung it into the river, which sounded even more depressing. Like last time, the broken tiles fell into the bottom of the river.
Father smiled at him: "Fantasy question." "Fantasy problem? You mean it's impossible for me to go to college? " "No, but college is not the only way." Father said, "There is a saying, with a little more fantasy, life will give parabolas of different heights. Obviously, fantasy is not only strength, but also the right direction. "
Both father and son laughed. "So you want me to quit the exam." "Yes, start a business and be a boss." "Fantasy! Is it possible? " "It depends on your own imagination. What I do now is to go home with you. The starting point and the end point, no matter where they are, should have their own fantasy direction and efforts. "
My son seems to be the boss, and he has a little more fantasy, so a beautiful arc is on the water, not a broken tile, but like a flying fish, swimming far away.
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This paper reveals the connotation of fantasy in the form of father-son dialogue, from the game of "throwing water into the water" in daily life to the topic, and then gradually goes deep into the "college entrance examination" that determines a person's fate. One is real and the other is imaginary, and the two lines go hand in hand. The language is simple and insightful, pointing out that the height of life parabola depends not only on strength, but also on the direction of fantasy. The author writes wonderful things around him, expresses his feelings, and can touch people with emotion and scenery. It is the biggest highlight of this article to reveal the main idea of the article with novels. The beginning and end of the article are also unique.
Article 1:
Charity needs to be done properly.
Bacon once said that goodness is the closest place between human nature and divinity. Then charity is naturally the most conclusive expression of human kindness. Charity is the embodiment of spirit and should not be a mere formality. Charity without care has become charity, and charity is poison.
Charity is not only to help others, but also to save people. At that time, if today's oil tycoon Rockefeller got a bowl of free food instead of labor, he would probably be on the verge of poverty like many hungry people. While doing charity, we should help the people who are helped to cheer up and summon up the courage to live. If you can't, you'd better not give it, lest the recipient fall into the sink after getting it. Charity includes more concern for human nature than just pity for the weak. Compassion is worthless, care is priceless.
Charity also needs to be implemented in a way that adapts to the psychology of the recipients. Asian sage Mencius has a saying: If you don't like it, you will have it, and beggars don't care. Chen cursor's high-profile charity is naturally daunting, because it makes people feel that they are standing at the peak of morality and giving condescending charity. Not to mention a mere formality, this move is more like using the self-esteem of the recipient to put gold on his face. Jobs, who was criticized by the media as "penniless" before his death, was found to have donated a huge sum of $2.5 billion to Stanford University after his death, and it was anonymous. I think tramps need corn and sesame cakes more than 50 cents a dollar.
In addition to injecting care into charity and implementing it in an appropriate way, charity must also be carried out in an appropriate way. Some people don't really need our kindness. It is precisely because some people don't do good deeds that a Red Cross worker is crazy to show off his wealth, and there is a tragedy of fishermen hitting snakes. Doing charity well is not to spare our kindness, but to make more efficient use of our limited charitable resources to help those who really need it.
We are all little people running around the world, and our small charity can't be as easy as the Gates to eliminate smallpox virus. We all have our own kindness, middle school students, lawyers, cleaners and bus drivers. No one's kindness is more noble. As Bruce Wayne said, "A hero can be anyone", and charity can be revealed in gestures. Helping pregnant women get on the bus, cleaning the welfare home, and even chatting with lonely old people can all be manifestations of kindness.
The ancients made man-made gods, and people approached God by kindness. A kind heart lit the torch in the hands of historical torchbearers through charitable acts, illuminating human civilization. Among them, torchbearers can be rich people who started from scratch or poor people who refuse to give alms.
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Goodness is the closest place between human nature and divinity. At the beginning of this paper, the essence of goodness is discussed from the perspective of human nature, and "charity and charity" are analyzed accurately. Although it is only a few words, it is to the point. Then, the author makes a detailed and effective discussion on the nature, implementation mode and implementation object of caring charity. His thought is mature and profound, expressing hit floor, showing a good demeanor of a middle school student who cares about social thinking and respects his inner independence.
The last two paragraphs of the article are particularly commendable. The author is not locked by material things, and on the basis of limited life experience, with a broader mind, expands the definition of "giver" of good deeds, and at the same time, its extended charity connotation and extension also have richer practical significance.
Indeed, on the road of doing good, everyone is a noble transmitter of kindness, wealth and kindness are not necessarily proportional, and dignity has never been ranked. Kindness lies in great love and details.
Commentator: Xu Shan, lecturer at Art College of South China Normal University.
Article 2:
Good deeds, what should I do with you?
Charity, which should be a word full of humanistic care, is a kind of righteous act that can let the doer know that he has surpassed the limited value of the individual to society, and should also be a hand warmer in the cold winter of the recipient's life. But now, the sensitivity and embarrassment it encounters are well known, just like a grateful but rejected family.
What makes charity fall into such a predicament? In my opinion, it may be the utilitarian and ostentatious heart of good-hearted people wearing charity coats, but more often, I have to realize that the sincere heart of good-hearted people is beyond doubt, and the way they do good often becomes the biggest obstacle to transmitting love. It is precisely because they are always used to expressing goodwill to the disadvantaged groups with the vision of "savior", and the self-esteem ignited by the recipients under this vision makes the goodwill behavior full of gunpowder, so the recipients refuse to sacrifice the increasingly precious dignity and equality in the disadvantaged position to meet the philanthropist's own value recognition. Just like the family that finally refused to donate in the name of charity, I believe they also need this kind of help when their lives are still unsustainable. Perhaps it was the unbearable experience of being helped in the past, or the way that the rich man gave help, which made them choose to refuse.
However, the road to charity should not be blocked by improper ways of doing good. Now that we have found the crux, why not seek the autonomy of good doctors?
True philanthropists often resolutely throw away the label of charity and do good deeds as human beings, just as john donne said, "Man is not an island, and all human misfortunes are my misfortunes." Only in this way can a kind doer truly understand the people he wants to help, and give them acceptable and meaningful help and support in the most appropriate way, so that the recipients can feel that they are supporting their progress equally, instead of accepting government porridge like refugees.
On the basis of discovering the value of coolies, Yan, the father of world civilian education, extended a helping hand to them. In the mass education movement, he should be regarded as a teacher and friend of all farmers and coolies, rather than an educational philanthropist. He once said, "If you want to be a farmer, you must be a farmer first." He didn't want to be a teacher and settle down, and he also talked about making mistakes in the national plan. It is to take root in farmers and explore the good deeds that are really useful to them-civilization and education.
As * * * identical human beings, to become a solid island, we need the power of charity to repair the fragile dam. To make charity flourish, we must take off the glasses of the savior, the glasses of the donor, take root in his world and ask, "What do you need and what can we work together to improve?" This is the true charity with lasting power, and we need to move forward together in the right way.
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This paper closely follows the material that the rich are enthusiastic about charity and donate to three companies, and leads to the topic of charity, which is discussed as the central content, which is in line with the content and significance of this composition.
After briefly pointing out the meaning of charity at the beginning, the article puts forward the embarrassing problem of charity being declined, and then analyzes that the root of this problem lies in the improper way of doing good. Then it discusses how to change the way of doing good with the equal status of people, and takes Yan's case as evidence. Finally, collect the full text and answer the questions raised by the title of the article by * * * working together to improve charity.
The article has a clear point of view. Really effective charity needs to adopt a charity method suitable for donors, build a bridge of equality and mutual trust between donors and recipients, and let goodwill go smoothly and love spread smoothly. The analysis and understanding of the current social problems of charity are deeper. Through the phenomenon, the essence can be deepened, the internal causal relationship of things can be revealed, the thinking is clearer and the discussion is more hierarchical.
Unfortunately, some of the long sentences in this paper are not fluent in language expression, and their meanings are not clear. The full text is weak in examples and not rich enough.
Commentator: Chen Yiping, Associate Professor of Art College of South China Normal University.
Article 3:
Let love flow in both directions
China has a famous saying: "A drop of water is rewarded with a spring." It can be seen that gratitude is a traditional virtue of the Chinese nation and has been passed down. There is some truth in this statement. Everyone needs help sometimes. If you accept help but take it for granted, don't appreciate it and return it with love, who will be willing to help? Therefore, for the harmonious development of society, please don't hurt people's hearts and let love flow in both directions.
Thankfully, grateful people are the mainstream of our society. When a self-made businessman becomes rich, he will never forget the hard days of the past, which makes him want to pass on his love to those who still need it. We are all ordinary people, and I believe most people are willing to taste the joy of gratitude. When the giver sees that the person he helps knows how to repay, even if it is not for himself, but for society and others, he sees the value of what he has done, which undoubtedly gives him the motivation to continue to do good things. This is the dedication of love, the two-way flow of love, the acquisition of love and the benefit of society.
Maybe you only paid one point, but the society may benefit a lot. Remember the rainstorm in Beijing last summer? Disaster is being broadcast, and warmth is being staged. A group of people from rural Hebei helped the victims, regardless of their personal safety, and they were praised by everyone. As everyone knows, they were all rescuers of the Tangshan earthquake that year, and it was everyone's selfless dedication that gave them the materials and confidence to survive. Now, they don't forget to repay them and help another group of people get a new life. The flow of love and positive energy supports the society, stands firm and goes forward bravely. We can't forget the most beautiful rural teacher-Wu Yuxi, who suffered from gastric cancer for more than ten years and had three quarters of his stomach removed. He has never missed a class and corrected his homework for so many years. It was the concern of the community, students and parents who helped him to support the platform. This two-way flowing love is more precious and harder than gold.
Of course, there is also the phenomenon that the "regression chain" of love is missing. Look at a director in Shaanxi who helped many enterprises to raise money during his term of office, but was "abandoned" by enterprises after his term of office, and you will know how painful unrequited love is and the society will become less harmonious.
Don't let "two-way love" be lost, let love pass on.
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To write an article in the examination room, you must first have ideas. The reason why this article is excellent lies in its high intention. It believes that love is not one-way, but two-way, and it can still flow, calling for "let love flow in both directions." Giving and receiving are both manifestations of love. We should respect each other and communicate with each other, so that the world will be full of love and will continue to pass it on. From the perspective of conception, the author's conception is superior and most worthy of recognition among many candidates.
Around "let love flow in two directions", the author expresses the significance of the two-way flow of love from the perspective of the giver in the second paragraph. In the third paragraph, the author uses two examples to express the value of the flow of love from the perspective of the receiver. The fourth paragraph begins with negative examples to express the pain of unrequited love. Finally, an appeal is made: don't let the two-way love be lost, let the love pass on.
The author's thinking is clear and focused, which is an excellent composition in the examination room. The disadvantage is that the use case is slightly inappropriate, so you can choose a more suitable example. In addition, the negative example in the fourth paragraph is a bit hasty and the analysis is not thorough enough.
Commentator: Hu Jiajun, lecturer, School of Arts, South China Normal University.
Article 4:
Charity should also safeguard the dignity of others.
In the materials, the rich man intends to donate to three poor families. The family happily accepted the donation. The family accepted it hesitantly, but announced that they would pay it back. The family thanked the rich man for his kindness, but thought it was charity and refused.
I really appreciate the third company's approach, generous, neither supercilious nor supercilious, and tell the rich man that we are equal in personality when refusing. This also enlightens us: in the process of doing charity, we should safeguard the dignity of the donee.
Mencius once said: "If you eat a pot of pulp, you will live if you get it, and you will die if you get it. Call it, and the people in the street will be blessed; It was a slap in the face, and people dismissed it. "Mencius talked about the dialectical relationship between justice and benefit, but these words also show that everyone has dignity, and even beggars will not accept insulting alms. Confucius said, "A gentleman doesn't drink water from a stolen spring. "Therefore, when we are helping others, how to maintain the dignity of others is particularly important.
During World War II, King Howard of England visited the bombed slums of London. In front of a dilapidated building, he took off his hat and asked his master, "May I come in?" The humanistic care and respect embodied in the inquiry is admirable.
For another example, public schools in the United States generally suspend classes during heavy snow, but one school does not do so and still attends classes during heavy snow. When parents complained to the school, the school replied: There are many children from poor families in the school, but as soon as the school closes, they can't eat free lunch and can only go hungry. Parents also asked if only poor children could attend classes. The school explained: We don't want them to feel that they are giving alms.
Don't let the people who are helped feel that they are giving alms, which may be the highest goal of charity! Such help is like a ray of warm sunshine, which not only warms the recipients, but also does not burn their hearts; Just like a cool spring breeze, it not only soothes the recipients, but also does not dampen their mood.
However, in life, we also see some "violent" charities. They are charities, but they donate without regard for the dignity of the recipients. For example, Chen cursor, a high-profile charity, we don't deny that he did help many people, but his way makes people think, right? There is a photo of Chen cursor and the recipients raising money. Chen cursor is full of smiles, but he can't see the smiling faces of several recipients. Did they get help? Or are they victims of "violent" charity again?
Nowadays, "micro-public welfare" and "voluntary activities" emerge one after another, which seems to be an era of charity for all. However, when we are ready to do charity, we must remind ourselves not to hurt the fragile dignity of the recipients.
We are helping others and helping ourselves. Don't flatter yourself, lower your posture, please take care of the dignity of the donee!
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This paper is an argumentative paper, which is characterized by clear views, rich arguments and strong arguments. The article draws its own view from the attitude of the third family to the donation provided by the composition problem: "If you want charity, you must safeguard the dignity of others." Around this central argument, the author lists the relevant discourses and practices in ancient and modern China and abroad, and mainly demonstrates the importance and role of safeguarding the dignity of donors with examples and positive and negative comparative arguments. In order to make readers understand the significance of respecting the dignity of the recipients, the author also uses metaphors to demonstrate that such help is like a ray of warm sunshine, which not only warms the recipients, but also does not burn their hearts. In the process of argumentation, while affirming the good side of some people at present, the author can also point out the existing problems in connection with reality. Finally, it is suggested that philanthropists put down their airs and take good care of the recipients. The full text is clear and the argument is rigorous and powerful. The structure is more rigorous.
The full text shows the author's concern for reality and deep thinking on correct charity and improving the quality of charity, which is in stark contrast to those articles that talk empty talk and cliche.
The main deficiency of the article is that individual sentences are not accurate and fluent, such as the second paragraph.
Commentator: Zhou Xiaopeng, Associate Professor, School of Arts, South China Normal University.
Article 5:
When charity meets pride
And the richest man, Bill? Gates, Buffy, the stock god, and other global rich people have launched a wealth of charitable activities with "naked donation", and the wind of charity has swept the world like countless super hurricanes. This seems to be a happy thing. The donors are happy and the winners are happy. However, not all poor people will receive free gifts with gratitude. In their minds, this may be a charity, a loss of dignity and a loss of backbone.
So, what should we do when charity also encounters "Waterloo"?
First of all, as a charitable donor, it is good to have this conscience, but we should also pay attention to the way. Chen Guangbiao, the richest man in China, has won many honors, but he has also been criticized for his high-profile charity. The reason lies in his impatience and high profile. In each of his publicity photos, the background is the poor people who have received his help. But those farmers who have solved their difficulties in life, even with a smile, can hardly hide their humbleness and cowardice. Chen cursor's lofty way of doing good has undoubtedly hurt their dignity and squeezed their backbone alive. On the contrary, the dust in Dalian is much better than Chen cursor. Dust is not a person, but an organization. Countless anonymous people donate money and send money to people in need, but they don't leave their names and ask for nothing in return. This kind of charity not only left enough dignity for the recipients, but also probably moved them to join the dust. It can be seen that the effects of different charity methods are actually very different. The poor also have dignity. When charity meets proud people, the most taboo is a pair of high-ranking mouths. The original intention of charity is to help others, not only materially but also spiritually. Therefore, only by doing charity in a gentler and more appropriate way can we help others to the maximum extent.
Secondly, as a beneficiary, we should do things according to our actual situation, and never be impulsive. In ancient times, there were arrogant people who "didn't eat their food" and eventually starved to death in the streets. No matter what the attitude of the rice delivery person is, if you fight for a moment when your life is dying, it is often not worth the candle. Admittedly, people who receive funding from others should have some backbone, but this does not mean blindly rejecting other people's kindness. Huang Zhongtian, president of National Taiwan University, went back to Yale to thank menstruation, who had helped him a lot, but menstruation seriously refused, asking him to help more people thank her. Huang Zhongtian kept it in mind and supported countless students all his life. Huang Zhongtian's practice is the "pride" that the beneficiaries should have. He didn't accept the donation in vain, but spread the goodwill he accepted around through his own hands, which can make charity go further.
When charity encounters "pride", the giver of charity can't walk away, and the beneficiary can't stick to his own opinion. Only when the two sides are calm, change their ways and correct their mentality can we make this charity happy, make the givers happy and make the recipients happy. Everyone understands each other, you water and I fertilize, making the tree of charity stronger.
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At the beginning of this paper, it is pointed out that charity is beneficial to the world and people's hearts. Then, with a change of pen, it is pointed out that when charity meets pride, how to face it will be difficult for both sides. From this key point, the article chooses the relationship between giving and receiving to demonstrate, which can be described as accurate. The article first wrote the way of charity, and used two examples to illustrate what is the correct way of donation. Compared with Chen cursor, the charity of the dust group is not to hurt but to safeguard the dignity of the recipients. The article then analyzes the mentality of accepting donations, and still gives two examples to discuss. The article points out that impulsive and blind rejection does not mean so-called dignity and pride. The correct way should be to repay the society with your own goodwill, just like the recipient Huang Zhongtian. The article is intended to explore the charitable nature of goodwill communication between the giver and the receiver contained in this example, which shows that the article has profound thoughts. At the end of the article, the author uses the metaphor of watering and fertilization to show the real relationship between the giver and the receiver, which further strengthens the central argument of the article. Throughout the full text, the viewpoint is dialectical, the structure is rigorous and the argumentation method is appropriate. However, there are some defects in this article, such as inaccurate expression of "squeezing out the trunk", slightly far-fetched logical connection between pride and return, and "clumsiness" in typo, which is still a good exam composition.
Commentator: Li Yongzhong, Associate Professor of Art College of South China Normal University.
Article 6:
Light thousands of lights
A rich man who is enthusiastic about charity donated money to three poor families, but he got a completely different answer.
The family refused, thinking it was charity-this was a warning.
The family hesitated and declared that they would pay it back-this is a kind of worry.
The family accepted it gladly and shed tears of gratitude-this is good.
In the face of others' goodwill and goodwill, we should respond with goodwill. In this process, love is transmitted and goodness is carried forward.
People who quit are wary and alert, which is really unacceptable. Just like when you were hungry and cold in the cold wind, suddenly someone brought a cage of hot steamed bread, but you scoffed and walked away. How chilling! Compared with charity, it should be said that it is help and mutual assistance. There is no difference between the rich and the poor. What connects each other should be the warm ties of progress and the pursuit of public happiness. If you are on guard, you will build a cold high wall, which is impenetrable and impenetrable by love.
Worrying is anxiety and anxiety, not the best policy. Worried people turn the relaxed goodwill of others into an invisible burden on their shoulders. They understand that acceptance is rewarded, but they don't fully understand the connotation of this reward. They focus on the donations they receive, wondering whether they can afford this heavy debt in the future, but they don't know that if they integrate the goodwill they accept into their lives and spread it out, they will try their best to light up the hearts of those who need light more. This is the best reward. The so-called trouble is also trouble.
Good people are influenced by external things and come from the heart. Accept goodwill and understand the goodness of others; Learn to be grateful and light up your heart. In times of crisis, grasping the helping hand extended by others at the right time is not only acceptance, but also inner magnanimity and clarity. If you refuse like a quitter, you will still struggle on the line of food and clothing in the future. More importantly, if you don't know how to accept, you won't know how to give. How much love can an occluded heart hold? If you are as worried as an alarmist, then your future life should be overwhelmed by the double pressure of spirit and material, accepting and only thinking about repayment. I don't know if it will spread to a wider scope and whether love will wither in your hands.
Only good, no tasteless precautions, don't think unnecessary ideas, know how to accept, and should be willing to share. The so-called "people are good, although the blessing has not arrived, the disaster is far away", which applies not only to the giver, but also to the receiver. Accept and be grateful, let the light pass, illuminate yourself, warm others, and light thousands of lights. (Huaguan Composition Network)
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This exam composition deserves the word "gentleness".
The content is comments on three families. If you want to comment, you have to express your position. If you want to express your position, you must give reasons. This is very hard work, which is also the reason why the thought is not profound. Should poor families accept sincere donations from the rich? The author believes that it depends on whether it is conducive to the transmission of goodness and the promotion of love. It is thoughtful to be able to tell the reason from this level.