I like to overlook when I feel tired in spring, and I am delighted to find that the distant mountains seem to have restored their green memories. A few clusters of pale pink halfway up the mountain are faintly shy. If you feel happy and study, you will look up before you know it. The sky seems to be much higher, the clear prison seems to have been washed, and the clouds are lying lazily and comfortably. This is the eighteenth spring in my life. People always say that spring is beautiful, fleeting and sad. Summer is fierce and brave, and winter is calm and quiet. And autumn seems to have the same fate as spring, with the company of falling into the wild goose and being crowned with the feeling of falling into the wild goose. But isn't there a poem that says "autumn has been sad and lonely since ancient times, and I say autumn is not as good as spring"? Since the sages sent us a message full of joy, I dare to change the meaning of spring. The beauty of spring lies not only in the grass growing and the warblers flying, but also in the vitality of paper kites all over the sky; Not only is her beauty and loveliness pitiful; More importantly, her simplicity encourages people to cherish time and enjoy life. Especially for our group of older children who are about to complete their growth and move towards a broad world of science, this spring is particularly precious and unforgettable. You don't have to be swayed by everything around you. The decision is in your hands. So now I will be calm and happy in the face of the heavy learning task of senior three. That is my life, my future. It's really great to put these burdens on my shoulders and feel a little stronger and more confident. My attitude towards spring will be determined by my feelings. Treating life, the fulcrum will always be on my shoulder. In such a beautiful season, I also want to give myself a holiday to let my tired body and mind take a deep breath of thrush. Let's fly kites, but at that time, sometimes there was no strong wind and the wind direction was chaotic, and kites swayed in the sky. I began to learn from the grandfather around me, and controlled the kite by adjusting the thread in my hand, so that it could climb higher with the help of the wind. It turns out to be so simple, because I can control the kite line very tightly. There is a little boy armed to the teeth learning to ride a bike by the river. He looks unhappy and well protected, but he seems to have fallen badly, because he didn't pay attention to the rider's head when he got on the bus, and the direction was always off, so it was difficult not to fall. I walked up to him a little depressed and raised the kite string in my hand: "Brother, you should hold the faucet tightly and adjust the direction correctly, and you will soon learn." Just like my sister has a kite string in her hand, isn't the kite very obedient to her sister? "The child looked up at me, eyes flashing with joy, just like me just now. In the face of my life, some students feel powerless. After all their success, they looked back and found that they had not worked hard enough. The fulcrum of kite life is a thin thread in my hand; The fulcrum of a bicycle is the faucet you want to hold tightly. The fulcrum of life, I can't say what it will be, but I will always carry it on my shoulders, feel its weight, complete my struggle and move towards tomorrow. I am a child born in spring. I will spend the eighteenth spring of my life seriously and give her an answer sheet with a faint fragrance. I want to stand tall, stand tall. There is a poem in Sichuan that says: ("extreme") is a period of life; The fulcrum of life/forever/on our own shoulders. This is really a good poem. Comparing life to a pole is really a genius's imagination. Life, in different poems, has different metaphors, some are better than a mess, and some are better than a race. Why does the poet compare it to a pole here? It turns out that the poet emphasizes the promise of life. The fulcrum of commitment is the "shoulder" mentioned in the poem. Yes, no matter how heavy the pole of life is, we should carry it on our shoulders. Like Kafka, even if it is an iron fence; Like Lu Xun, even if it is like a secret door; Fu, how can you be afraid of falling wood? Like Jesus, even like a heavy cross. Carrying life on your shoulders is not to live quietly, nor to live for survival. Living a meaningful life and pursuing a meaningful life is the real commitment. Here, I want to say that some great men have taken on life in ways that are difficult for us to understand. Qu Yuan knew that the meaning of his life was to pursue beauty and goodness. The history of his life is the history he undertook, that is, he shouldered the burden of national rejuvenation. However, he finally chose death. There may be a lot of understanding about his death, but I can also understand that he didn't want to live like a walking corpse. In other words, once he knew that his shoulders would be useless because of the king's fatuity, then dying was a wise choice. This is not an escape from commitment, but a good reputation for fulfilling one's life and bravely taking responsibility. Indeed, if he is an unwilling aesthete, he can forget about nature and live a leisurely and lonely life among the flowers under the moon until he dies. Therefore, compared with Qu Yuan, the pastoral poet who returns to nature, although his literary achievements may be unsatisfactory, is quite light in shouldering and resisting evil with his body. Now I am a scholar. Now the pressure of the college entrance examination falls on my shoulders like heavy snow in winter. So, my shoulder seems to be the fulcrum of the score. Therefore, it seems that I have reason to turn a deaf ear to the things outside the window and concentrate on reading the exam books. So, I seem to have a reason to hang my head and stab me, only to pour the so-called secret recipe of success in the exam into my mind. However, I have to say: no, people's shoulders are not only burdened with fame and fortune for themselves, but also with five measures of rice for their families, and not only with happy flowers and blue flowers for their relatives and friends. My shoulders will face the haze on the ground and the flying snow in the sky. My shoulder, but also learn to bear and defend the truth of the world, the beauty of life, the goodness of human nature. Because, I know the sky may not fall, but it can rain acid rain; The ground may not fall, but unicorns can eat people on the ground. I won't listen to such a small saying that "the sky is falling and there is a tall man". Everyone doesn't want to get taller. Only short people can walk on the ground. Everyone did not stand up when they saw rats doing evil and wild animals hurting people. Humans will only become beasts, and homes will become pigsty. Animals have only one survival principle, and political power comes from their teeth. Men are born hard, so I speak with my shoulders: I am willing to stand tall. The fulcrum that supports the blue sky life is on our own shoulders. We should take responsibility in life and hold up a blue sky for ourselves. At the beginning, the point of view was clear, and many candidates were not easy to delay, so they mystified and showed off their literary talent. They are closely linked with "taking responsibility" and clearly point out that it takes sweat and hard work to prop up a blue sky for themselves. Helen suffered from illness since she was a child, but her physical disability did not knock her down, but made her live stronger. She is proficient in many languages and has become a famous thinker and educator. Her respect for life makes her shoulder the fulcrum of life, shoulder the responsibility with her shoulders that will never be crushed, and prop up her blue sky. Material 1: Helen Keller, physically disabled, determined, not afraid of physical disability, has reached a height of life that ordinary people can't reach. The selected materials meet the meaning of the question, and the cited materials are relatively simple. Candidates can pursue more depth, emotion and literary talent when explaining the meaning of the questions contained in the characters. What they need is the spirit of not giving in to life setbacks. Text: the second level, the central sentence at the beginning of the paragraph, suggests that candidates adjust the sentence to keep the language style consistent with the second paragraph; It takes hard work to hold up the blue sky, and the meaning of words is by going up one flight of stairs. On the spiritual level, the emphasis on perseverance reflects the examinee's deeper understanding of the meaning of the question. It is suggested that some transitions or preparations can be made appropriately. Otherwise, the meaning of the text is still a little jumping and not fluent enough. Li Li, a strong woman who touched you and me and the whole China. She couldn't walk since she was a child. She walked in a wheelchair. Finally, when the doctor told her that she could walk with crutches, she was so happy that she thought she could hold up a blue sky for herself, but a car accident in middle age destroyed all her hopes. Her world suddenly darkened, and the blue sky seemed to be covered by dark clouds, leaving only darkness in the world. But after all, she regained her passion for life. She lived bravely, propped up the fulcrum of life and found a blue sky in her heart again. She actively helps those who are in trouble. She overcame her once depressed self with unyielding spirit and sang a powerful song with unyielding heart. Material 2: Li Li, a strong woman who moved China, is slightly similar and monotonous in material selection, lacking vivid details to support the three-dimensional sense of the characters, and her writing is general and slightly dull. However, the words "wheelchair instead of walking" and "seeing the light of day again" can still show the candidates' language thoughts and pursuits; It is suggested that when dealing with materials, candidates must clearly explain the connection between the selected materials and the main idea of the viewpoint, or have important details, lyrical feelings or profound discussions. They all put the fulcrum of life on their shoulders and try to hold up a blue sky for themselves. In their world, all the darkness was banished. What a tough spirit! Conclusion: Collect the last article with both lyricism and argumentation, and point out that Helen and Lily are tough, simple and repetitive in language expression, lack of change and lack of affection; Candidates are advised to fully brew the materials they have mastered and turn them into their own things. Only in this way can they easily trigger the light of thought and language in the examination room. We should all treat life positively and hold up a blue sky for ourselves. Santiago once said, "People are not born to be defeated." We should not be defeated by difficulties and setbacks. We should bravely fight against them and firmly support the fulcrum of life on our shoulders. Conclusion: Follow the previous paragraph, point out the practical significance of the material, quote Santiago's words, and emphasize the center again; The disadvantage is that Santiago's quotation, the literary work Duel from this volume, is not positive enough for the marking teacher. Although appropriate, it always makes people feel that the candidates' life accumulation is not enough or their thinking is not fully mobilized. Otherwise, in desperation, I won't repeat the test questions, and the language is basically intact. It is suggested that candidates consider merging with the next paragraph here or on purpose to make the opposite discussion more calm, or consider using rhetorical questions, hypothetical sentences, conditional sentences and causal sentences to make the sentence structure of the article varied. Those who flinch when encountering difficulties and setbacks put the burden of life on their shoulders, and they finally lost the opportunity to have a beautiful blue sky. The word "put down" is apt, just a simple sentence, which seems thin. If you can write a few wonderful examples in a whole sentence, it will enhance the ideological depth and breadth of the whole article and complement the main part. It is suggested that candidates should practice more from the angle of thinking multi-angle training in the final stage, and broaden their conception and choice range from the same, similar or relative and opposite, so as to prop up a blue sky, such as an eagle soaring in the sky and facing the blue in their hearts. Hold up a blue sky, like tough grass, will not be crushed by the storm. Hold up a blue sky, carry the burden of life on your shoulders and create a better tomorrow for yourself! Conclusion: The full text ends with a parallelism sentence and begins with a quotation. As far as the content of the parallelism sentence itself is concerned, it is suspected of brilliant literary talent. The article does not show emotional momentum because of parallelism, nor does it see the sublimation and refinement of literary significance in parallelism. The use of metaphor is immature, and the language is worth tempering. It is suggested that candidates should have a "takenism" perspective on some writing methods introduced by their teachers. Only writing methods suitable for themselves and articles are valuable, and false, big, empty and meaningless literary comments should be avoided. Scoring: 47 (marking field) Author's Scoring: 47 From the full text, it is emphasized that the tenacious spirit supports one's blue sky, and the "shoulder pole" contained in "Carrying the burden of one's life" reveals the tenacious spirit hidden by candidates in the poem, especially the "our own shoulder" emphasized in the title, which is intentionally or unintentionally ignored. Of course, the indomitable spirit that candidates find from Helen and Lily can really point out the topic, but I think at least when writing the characters' tenacity and strength, they should point out that they have to shoulder the burden of their own lives, bear the teasing and suffering of fate, and bear all the hardships in difficult years. In addition, the upgrading of this paper also needs to solve two problems: material selection and language tempering.