Look at the word "warm" again, it has two meanings: first, as an adjective, warm; Second, as a verb, it makes people feel warm. The topic of this proposition is very wide, which can be conceived from many angles and linked with social reality from many angles. However, we should pay attention to the limitations of style. In short, it is easier to write "you" in detail, and it is better to write excellent works around people and things around us.
Example 1. You warm my sight.
I stood at the height of history and looked at the mountains and rivers in the distance. The river passes by and spreads to the east of hope. The setting sun shines on the ancient land and breeds the life of this land. It is the brilliance of great men and their lives that warm my sight.
Living in seclusion in the country, you warmed my sight with an open mind.
Witnessed the darkness of the officialdom and the ups and downs of the official sea, you broke the cocoon into a butterfly, chose to retire to Nanshan, farm and graze, and returned to Dai Yue. Pick chrysanthemums under the east fence, get drunk and climb high to write new poems. Your life is like a song. You have nowhere to stay in the officialdom, but "picking chrysanthemums under the east fence and seeing Nanshan leisurely" has helped you find the true meaning of life, perhaps destiny takes a hand. At the foot of Nanshan, your lonely figure shows us your ease, an open-mindedness of life, and it seems that you have found a butterfly dancing leisurely under the fence. When you bend down to pick chrysanthemums with a leisurely smile, you will become an eternal and open-minded chrysanthemum in my mind.
Illness is like hatred, and you have warmed my sight with persistence.
Look at a Thousand Fingers with Cold Eyes. You turned the pen into a sharp dagger, threw the gun and stabbed the enemy in the chest. You shout and chat in the endless night, comforting the brave who runs in loneliness, so that he is not afraid of his predecessors. Deep vision, penetrating thousands of years of history in China, you use the candlelight of "endless struggle" to ignite the light of hope. You will be full of human righteousness, you will look up at the sky and shout, overlooking the earth, willing to be a Confucian cow. Your determined figure shows me the hope of China.
Great love and selflessness, you warmed my sight with calmness.
You light up your life with songs, you sow the seeds of love to the world, and your dream is "everyone gives a little love to make the world a warm world". Every act of kindness you do is to help the children in the disaster area. You give every penny of yourself to the children. Until the last moment of your life, you will never forget your child's life, and you are afraid of disappointing your parents' hopes. The green side of your heart is always ready to hold up a piece of coolness for others, but you forget that you also need to put down your tired steps and try to cool down. You left the coolness to others and the heat and danger to yourself until the day you disappeared. Cong Fei, a resounding name and a selfless love, made my heart surge and tears filled my eyes.
Miao daughter, you have warmed my sight with persistence.
A barefoot doctor wandering in the mountains never had a chance to put on a white coat, but she lit up Miao township with the spirit of helping others. A bamboo building with airy walls has since become the warmest hospital in the world; A pair of thin shoulders, shouldering the health of miles and eight townships. As the only doctor in Miao township, you take life as a responsibility, and you prove the meaning of doctors by paying-saving lives. Li, you are not a migratory bird, you are the moon that illuminates the Miao people. It was your persistence that made me understand the meaning of life more.
Looking at the light ahead, my heart is infinitely warm. It is precisely because of this spirit and this openness that every inch of land they go is full of light. It is the most beautiful thing in life to ignite hope with life and let the light shine on the earth. At this moment, my eyes stopped there, and my sight was warm.
Teacher Guangming is divided into 38 points for basic level+development level 17 points =55 points.
Well-founded, the author has a clear hierarchy. She skillfully adopts the horizontal writing structure, firmly grasps four characters (Tao Yuanming, Lu Xun, Li) and four qualities (openness, perseverance, calmness and persistence), and skillfully turns reality into reality, making "you" both virtual and real. The author is widely quoted and has rich associations. A large number of factual materials are divided into four sections, which are unified under the theme of "You, warming my sight" and scattered and gathered together.
Ex. 2: You have warmed my sight.
The bonfire fills the air, who sits calmly on the tall building; Who fiddles with the Zheng leisurely; Whose song "Empty City Plan" has retired tens of thousands of heroes; Whose brilliant ideas make the enemy ashamed? An eternal famous minister who "died with all his heart"! Your life's hard work has been dedicated to Shu, and your life's loyalty has been dedicated to preparation and Zen! When I heard the long cough in front of my account and saw the white Faxi, my vision blurred and a tear welled up in my eyes.
Mountains and steep cliffs. Who climbed the high platform over the age of 60 and resolutely waved the banner of command; Who is not afraid of difficulties, set foot on the ground, and be diligent in warning the key points; No matter who becomes famous, he will never forget to devote himself to the great cause of the motherland. As a water conservancy engineer of the older generation, how many quiet nights have you spent? Dear Mr. Zhang Guangdou, when the Gezhouba Water Control Project was successfully completed, you left tears. When the Three Gorges Project was handed over to you, your eyes were moist again. It's you, your everything, that warms my sight, and also warms the sight of all China people!
Beating, smashing, looting and burning wantonly, who opened the building door at a critical moment and accepted 106 strange lives; Who sat by the door for two nights and put the burden of life first without hesitation; As an ordinary citizen, who has such a broad mind? Uncle Shandan in Lausanne, your righteous attitude shows me the flesh-and-blood ties of the Chinese nation and the love that permeates us! It is you who have opened the doors, accepted hundreds of lives, opened your hearts and opened the hearts of hundreds of millions of people! You, a casual action, warmed the sight of hundreds of millions of people in China.
The earth shook and it was deafening, and you were thrown out of the classroom in an instant. You could have fled the scene of the earthquake disaster. However, you resolutely returned to the classroom, trying to rescue the students trapped inside. At that moment, you were buried in the ruins. Yan Peng, you touched me with your love. Teacher Tan Qianqiu, who is in the same predicament, deserves to be an example. Originally, you could have escaped, but at that moment, you chose to stay and protect your four classmates with your arms, but you left yourself. You explained the greatness of love with your life! Your behavior makes my eyes blurred with tears!
The mountain can collapse, the ground can crack, and the people of China are more United! Bearing in mind the great trust of the party and the expectations of the people, the workers at the earthquake relief site are United as one; The generosity of the whole country is that the people of the whole country have forged their arms with blood and blurred my eyes!
Countless Chinese sons and daughters have brought us sweet smiles; A refreshing fragrance; A little surge of life. From you, I have touched a kind of power, and it is this kind of power that bears the heavy and indelible history of China!
Excellent basic achievement of teachers is 35 points+development achievement 15 points =50 points.
Well-founded, the author also adopts a horizontal structure, which is divided into five sections, from loyal Kong Ming, a water conservancy engineer who is not afraid of difficulties, a broad-minded Lausanne Shandan, to a determined Yan Peng and a great Tan Qianqiu, thinking of the love of the earthquake relief field workers and the people in the rear. These * * * show the center of "you warm my sight". The idea is novel and ingenious, caring and intimate, and has far-reaching implications.
Thinking 1: What is an argumentative essay? Argument, argument, argument
Thinking 2: How to deeply process narrative?
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My eyes, at that moment, fell on a pair of hands. ...
My mother took me to school.
I walked into the elevator with a heavy bag in my hand. But I don't think it weighs much. Maybe I'm waiting for someone to save me.
Mother locked the door in a hurry, followed the elevator and the door closed.
Mom saw the big bag in my hand and quickly took it. Maybe this is my waiting.
The elevator reached the first floor, the door opened and I went out. Behind him came the sound of the elevator door closing. I look back:
Mother leans over and her steps are a little messy. Her two hands are struggling to grasp the big bag, and the tendons in her hands are clearly visible. She seems to be angry with the heavy load and seems to be falling apart. Her hands kept changing places, as if to use the moment of communication to relieve stress. A few strands of hair slipped to her forehead, as if to cover her frowning brows soaked in sweat. ...
"Can I help you?"
"No, you go first." Can I help you? Yes, I did say that. The bag is mine, but I asked, can I help you?
We came to a road, the red light was flashing, and then we jumped on the yellow light.
Mother let go of a hand holding a handbag. She held me tightly with that hand, but I didn't hold her tightly. Obviously, I felt a deep dent in her hand. Did you leave it when you were carrying a bag? I really want to ask her if she hurts. But I know I won't tell.
On the school bus, my mother found a window seat. She pressed the bag on the seat next to me. I turned and looked out of the window.
She combed my hair with her hand. At that moment, my eyes fell on a pair of hands, dim, rough and tired. ...
Mom, when did your hands become like this?
I finally know that she tried to make me feel happy without reservation. At that moment, I understood, mom …
The school bus began to drive slowly, and your figure gradually blurred outside the window, vaguely seeing you waving to me.
My eyes once again fell on your hands, clear, I saw happiness. ...
How to write with you to warm my sight?
Thinking: you: mother extension: maternal love reflected by what my mother did for me.
Warm: How warm? Dedication, selflessness and love
My vision: from concrete vision to spiritual level.
Strengthening: Warm things: carrying heavy bags, holding hands and cutting hair.
Note: it is impossible to cover everything, so what is the point? Carrying a bag (describing the details of the mother in the front; Write your own language, psychology or actions on the opposite side) abbreviation: holding hands (even some behaviors like children can be extended here to strengthen maternal love), abbreviation: haircut.
What can play the role of "holding the moon in the clouds"? Your own details, the surrounding scenery, the weather, other people's eyes.
What can play a "finishing touch" role? Remember to ask questions everywhere, either write about warmth, immediate feelings, or the surrounding environment, and then express a little emotional strengthening center before the end.
Avoid:
1 careless examination of the questions, failure to grasp the key points and inappropriate details.
It's too popular to write your own ideas without sketching them out carefully.
Spoken language is too realistic and the stream of consciousness is too terrible.
No beautiful language runs through or all beautiful languages have no center, so you can't see what to write.
I can't get over it. Besides affection, friendship and even love, what else can move you? The monotony of life.
6 accumulated too little. Learn to extract what you can learn from the most typical narrative or argumentative essay.