Topic of composition: Horizon
Please write an article of not less than 800 words on the topic of "Vision". (60 points) Requirements: Except poetry, the style is not limited.
Analysis of composition test questions:
Definition of the marking field of the concept of "vision";
The definition of "horizon" in Modern Chinese Dictionary is: the range you see and the breadth you know: ~ open/wide ~.
(1) The writing scope of this composition topic is relatively wide and has a sense of the times. When examining questions, we should turn them into small ones and abstract them into concrete ones.
The following situations meet the meaning of the question:
(1) Words and sentences can be used to express meaning. Such as "broaden your horizons", "open your horizons", "horizons determine the realm" and "horizons determine the world".
(2) Proceed from the original meaning of the word "vision", and carry out extended analysis and conception. "Vision" refers to the range you see, from which you can understand its extended meaning. "Vision" can be a kind of knowledge, experience and wisdom. Its borrowing meaning "the breadth of knowledge" can also be extended outward, which can refer to people's broad mind and wealth, and can also be compared to the ambition and goal of life. Therefore, from the point of view of why we should open our eyes and what is the function of opening our eyes, we can have the following ideas: "opening our eyes to create brilliance", "opening our eyes to gain life" and "opening our eyes to develop ourselves".
In the above two situations, if the examinee's "horizon" can be extended to: broad knowledge, forward-looking consciousness and comprehensive understanding. Then such a composition should be defined as suitable for the topic.
(2) The misunderstanding of "horizon" is mainly the misunderstanding of the concept of "horizon".
The following circumstances are beside the point:
(1) Understand "horizon" as a viewpoint, thought, position, etc. Such as: struggling vision, strong vision, confident vision, loving vision and so on.
(2) Confusion about the meaning of vision is a key issue. The field of vision is only wide and narrow, and there is no difference between high and low. If we can't grasp this point, it will be difficult to meet the meaning of the problem. If you don't understand the connotation of vision, just stick this concept on the example by labeling, such an article is not in line with the meaning of the question.
Analysis of composition marking;
(A) the concept of examination.
(1) This composition is not difficult from the perspective of examining the topic. 80% of the candidates can meet the meaning of the topic, correctly understand the meaning of "horizon" and position their intentions as "broadening their horizons" and "broadening their horizons". There are many high-minded compositions in the essays that meet the theme, such as "A broad vision can open people's wisdom and forge their character", "Only a broad vision can narrow the scope of their ignorance and realize their ideals", "Bounded eyes, boundless heart, broad vision and broad mind", "Those who want to achieve great things must have a broad vision" and "are not afraid of clouds"
(2) Some candidates' compositions basically meet the meaning of the question, mainly including: "I pursue a field of vision full of tempering, value and profound knowledge", "open the window of the soul", "unique vision" and "broaden my horizons".
(3) Some candidates can't grasp the meaning of "horizon". Or "vision" is understood as the boundary between eyes, vision and perspective; Or understand "vision" as a kind of viewpoint, position, thought, etc. , such as struggle vision, strong vision, self-confidence vision, etc. Or put the "vision" on the case. Wait a minute.
(4) Some candidates deviate from the meaning of the question or even have a low intention. Such as: infinite true love, experience with heart, seeing is believing, choice of mind, pursuit of life, the world in my eyes, narrow vision of life (non-dialectical), narrow vision, and so on.
(5) the exam is not serious. Many candidates don't take "vision" as the topic and start a new stove.
(2) material selection.
(1) Most candidates can choose certain materials to demonstrate their views. In the process of marking papers, some typical and novel materials were found, such as the foresight of national leaders in bidding for the Olympic Games, the courage of Bill Gates, the foresight of Bruno, the foresight of Lin Zexu, the foresight that touched the people in 2007, the foresight of Gan Luo, the brilliant foresight of Peking University students, the lunar exploration project, the launch of Chang 'e-1 and so on.
(2) The main problem of material selection is the lack of organic unity in the combination of materials and viewpoints. The material description is too long and the analysis is not in place. Some compositions only describe examples and have no opinions of their own.
Stylistic structure
Candidates have a strong sense of style and structure, and there are basically no four styles of compositions in marking. Most candidates write argumentative essays, which can be demonstrated by juxtaposition, contrast and stratification. However, many candidates' compositions are loose and tight, and they are anticlimactic (probably because of lack of time).
(4) language.
Most students' compositions can be fluent in language. But only a few students' compositions can be fluent, literary and meaningful. Language tends to be conceptualized seriously, unadorned and blunt. On the one hand, it reflects that students do not attach importance to daily composition language training, on the other hand, it also reflects that students' reading range is not wide and their vision is narrow.
Excellent composition:
field of vision
What can the human eye see? I can't say clearly. I only know that people have different horizons, and these different horizons are doomed to different destinies.
There used to be so many great men, and their horizons were different, so their achievements were different. Like Marx, his vision is broad to the whole world and the whole human history. He saw the laws of society and established Marxist philosophy. Like Galileo, he looked at the whole universe and space. He saw the characteristics of interstellar operation and pushed physics to a peak. What else! Like Confucius, his eyes were wide to the people, and he saw the great harmony society. Han Xin's vision transcends street fighting and makes great achievements; Zhuge Liang's vision expanded to the world situation, and he influenced the world trend at the end of Han Dynasty. ……
People with broad vision will achieve great things, while people with narrow vision will accomplish nothing. Of course, the Yuan Shu of the Three Kingdoms is very scheming, but he only sees small profits and rashly respects himself as the emperor, which makes the heroes of the world rise up and attack him. Yuan Shu's failure is precisely because his vision is limited to the Central Plains and only stays on the surface. He doesn't look at the world, he doesn't pay attention to hidden dangers, and he will die tragically after all. Look at Napoleon again. As the commander of the French royal artillery force, he resolutely bombarded the feudal remnants after recognizing the trend of the times, thus reaching an unprecedented peak of power. Napoleon was successful, and his mastery depended on his insight into everything. It was his broad vision that made him successful.
"Jianghai does not contend with Kanjing, and Thunder does not contend with Wuque." That is to say, the size of the horizon determines the level of one's achievements. The reason why the rivers and seas are boundless and the thunder causes heavy rain is because they know what to do and have a broad vision. Without a broad vision, no matter how capable people are, they will accomplish nothing. However, if his ability is limited, even if his vision is as wide as the starry sky, he can't find the invisible brilliant road.
People can't be trapped in a corner and pay attention to a corner; You can't be conceited, you want to climb to the top by your own strength. Only by focusing on your own strength first, and then looking at the road ahead, can you walk out of the smoothest life and possibly the most brilliant life.
The result of life depends on the horizon. We should open our eyes carefully and don't underestimate ourselves. Take a step towards the best path you can see. You may be greeted by ups and downs, but you will eventually get your own glory, and you will eventually have the brilliance of the starry sky.
Comments: "Different horizons are doomed to different fates" is the center of this article. Full of thinking is the biggest highlight of this article, but also the profound place of this article. The comparison between Yuan Shu and Napoleon in the third paragraph, the images of Zhongjianghai and Kanjing, thunder and blackbird in the fourth paragraph, and the profound thinking about the horizon in the fifth and sixth paragraphs all fully reflect the speculative nature. The full text is in-depth layer by layer, and the organic combination of quotation, example and theoretical argumentation shines with rational light. The language is vivid and fluent, full of philosophy, thought-provoking and thought-provoking.
field of vision
There is a title "Autumn Water" in Zhuangzi, which tells that Hebo thinks that "the beauty in the world lies in himself", so he enjoys himself. However, after seeing the sea, I looked at it and sighed, "I know a hundred things and think I am not myself." I call it also. " After all, ridiculous and generous. The short and pithy article reveals the height of the horizon. Only when the horizon rises to the sea of clouds can we see all the mountains and rivers.
"Jianghai does not compete with Kan Jing, and Thunder does not compete with birds." The level of vision can be seen, that is, the eagle can fight the sky and the dragon can hit the water for 3 thousand.
Mao Zedong, the founder of China, was a visionary. As soon as the banner of * * * was raised, it revealed that "a single spark can start a prairie fire"; When Japan trampled on the Central Plains, "all reactionaries were paper tigers", which exposed the war. Jinggangshan is far-sighted, northern Shaanxi is ingenious, and a generation of great men was born in Sri Lanka.
Just like Chen She's "Swallows know the ambition of swans" is far and wide; Marx focused on the width of human beings and the world; Zhuge Liang's accurate judgment on the trend of one-third of the world and the depth of long-term integration. Before success, the horizon has reached its peak.
People with high vision become great, while people with short vision become small. It has become a well-known truth that "those who go against the sky prosper and those who go against the sky die". When democracy has been deeply rooted in people's hearts, Yuan Shikai went back to the ancients briefly regardless of the torrent of history, and was later patted on the shore by the waves of history. It goes without saying.
At present, Sanlu has triggered a milk powder crisis for the sake of temporary benefits; Passers-by pry open the manhole cover for themselves; People can't be trapped in a corner and be short-sighted.
Every cloud will float to spezia Bay, accompanied by the most beautiful glow on the slope of every sunset; Every vortex is willing to gather in the Miluo River and slowly disappear into the shallow water. Clouds and waters still hope for the best, not to mention human beings with long spirits of all things? It's more important to look tall.
Have a high vision and be self-aware. Lingyun's ambition is valuable, but you cannot ignore its own conditions. Don't be complacent, don't sell yourself short, set your sights on what you can achieve, and then display your talents. Success doesn't belong to you. Who else can you belong to?
Xunzi said: "Climb high, keep your arms from lengthening, and see far." Vast rivers and seas, thunderous and lofty perspective will always win a lofty life. Hebo knew it was not too late, and the frog in the well would jump out. From now on, while looking into the distance, climb the top of Lingyun, and you will see a star-studded life, and you will usher in a bright road.