I have some experience to share with you. It is best not to exceed 5 lines at the beginning of an argumentative paper, and to control it within 100 words. And clearly put forward their own arguments. Is the topic you want to talk about. It is best to contact the given material at the beginning and the end. This is a way to get high marks.

There is nothing wrong with paragraphs 8 and 9. I'm afraid you don't have many paragraphs To have a short paragraph is to summarize something a little. Or lead to the following situation. Because the marking teacher will like this kind of thing.

There should be more arguments. Your argument seems to have an example. You can take various arguments, such as quoting arguments. Because teachers will get tired of correcting the way everyone demonstrates.

If you look good, you will have an impression. If you are good-looking, I don't think 5 1 -52 is a problem. Don't underestimate 1, 2 points. The college entrance examination has drawn tens of thousands of people.