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Let the world change for you (56 points)

Don't let the darkness that devours the world bury your ideal, because the only value of your existence is to let the world change for you. Quote a famous saying, deduct a title, and highlight it)? Steve jobs

People are born good and firmly believe in the beauty and eternity of the world. When the overwhelming undemocratic, immoral and illiberal flows like a torrent, if individuals choose to change themselves and indulge in depravity, the times will no longer have the power to rush to the ideal realm. Only by adhering to personal beliefs can we change the world. Countless energetic individuals surround another beam of light like a beam of light. Only in this way can we have a hopeful nation and a powerful country. In connection with social reality, based on the comparison between changing myself and changing the value of the world era, I have a focused perspective and a clear view.

Pick up moral deficiency

Once upon a time, you witnessed the moral decay of the world, chose to change yourself and let go of your responsibility for a better world. You have condemned the indifference of eighteen passers-by, but such condemnation lacks internal strength; You are heartbroken for everyone's selfish interests, but such heartache lacks social recognition. So, you followed the people and went to the opposite side of morality without looking back. Only by practicing the skill of dry eyes and numb heart can we get inner peace? Refute the drift of self-change and go straight to social ills?

That's ridiculous! You see countless intellectuals in the society. They stick to the spirit of independence and embrace the dream of changing the world. Bai refused to change himself and called for caring to become everyone's values through the power of the media; Unwilling to give in, LUQIU LUWEI went around day after day to guide the public to accept the truth and practice the virtue of goodness. You can't give up your passion and responsibility for love and justice because of your smallness. You should be firm and rebuild a warm moral world! (Contrast presentation, positive examples, concise language, outstanding views and strong feelings)

Shine the light of democracy

The American public on the other side of the ocean, unwilling to be ignored by the powerful, is determined to fight for changing the world and occupying Wall Street. They don't want to ignore the value of the weak in society, but dare to think, debate and act, and dare to choose goodness and stubbornness, in order to realize a more equal American dream and spread the fire that changed the world all over the world.

Even if the road to promoting national democracy is like a burning thorn, you can't ignore the call for democracy in your heart. Are you willing to live a cowardly life that can only be stable if you are attached to a political party? Are you willing to turn on the TV every day and put up with the moral lies of the anchor? Can you stand the sudden deprivation of your rights and then accept that this right is given by others? If not, then change the world, let democracy one day become your self-cultivation and make it as important as the air you breathe every minute! From the perspective of democracy and human rights, this paper discusses that "you can't change yourself or the world", which embodies the universal value of civilized society, and has appropriate language and strong appeal.

We can't let the darkness engulfing the world change the firm new look of our life, and we can't silently promise and tolerate the immorality, undemocratic and human rights of the world. Therefore, only by changing the world, standing upright, supporting the backbone of the country and being a strong man with indomitable spirit, can the world change from now on because of the existence of each individual!

I believe that the people of my motherland, all people under the same starry sky, can become strong people who change the world.

Comments: This paper is ambitious. From the perspective of civic moral behavior and social fairness and justice, it points out the absurdity of going with the flow and being numb and silent, and points out that every citizen should stick to his own beautiful thoughts, his belief in democracy and freedom, and bravely undertake the mission of "changing the world" with his meager strength. The structure of the full text is clear and distinct, with distinct levels. Language is closely related to the topic and full of strong emotions, which embodies the valuable "responsibility" spirit of young people. Individual statements are slightly extreme.

Examination analysis: examination analysis

1, this topic belongs to the composition topic that leads to the writing scope by the material. Material is a famous saying of John Lennon, a world famous rock musician. The famous saying has two meanings: the first is "If you can't change yourself, you will change the world"; The second layer is "If you can't change the world, you can change yourself". In short, one is to change the world, and the other is to change yourself. The material is concise and philosophical.

2. Think deeply, this sentence by John Lennon reveals a basic social reality-in the relationship between man and the world, there will always be a history of "conflict-harmony". This sentence embodies dialectical philosophy from the ideological source, and "changing the world and changing yourself" is in the contradictory movement of unity of opposites.

3. "Ask" candidates to write this famous saying to arouse their own thinking. They can write their own experiences related to this famous saying, and they can also show their understanding of this famous saying. Whether it is "experience" or "understanding", it must conform to the style of your choice. In writing, you can choose to write "change the world", "change yourself" or both, but no matter how you write, you must reflect the internal conflict between them. If you choose to write on one side, you should also take the other side as the background. If you completely abandon one side and write the other side in isolation, it is obviously not a digression in concept, but it is obviously not the best angle.

For example, the article "Change yourself" in the examination room has three sub-arguments, focusing on the specific methods of "change yourself". To change the mentality, ideas and methods, the focus of his writing falls on the mentality, ideas and methods, ignoring the opposite of "changing the world", and naturally it is impossible to get high marks.

4. The material is about the choice between "changing yourself" and "changing the world", which is both a restriction and a hint. If the candidates only use examples to confirm the tips and cover everything, it is impossible to get high marks without their own analysis and sentiment.

For example, candidates rigidly apply step-by-step formulas such as "what is to change themselves and the world", "why should they change themselves and the world" and "how to change themselves and the world". Although such an article will not stray from the topic, it can basically be judged that the article does not have its own thinking and feelings only by looking at the arguments.

Conceptual perspective

"The perspective of an article can distinguish the thinking and comprehensive ability of candidates." Clear angle is the premise of high score composition, and scattered angle will lead to no central argument or profound and thorough writing in the limited space of 800 words. Chen Miaoyun once said that it is better to write an 800-word composition from only one angle. If you write from two angles, it is equivalent to the examinee reducing the level of the composition to 400 words.

What elements should a good "angle" contain?

First, be realistic and targeted. "The article is timely", and any article should be based on the present and reflect the attitude of paying attention to life and reality. This topic is directly related to "democracy and freedom", "innovation and development", "social harmony" and "following the trend". The article is best based on reality, thinking about fashion and future through history and tradition.

Second, be thoughtful. Writing ability is thinking ability first, and the ideas expressed in many candidates' articles are superficial and outdated, lacking in thinking. The article is closely related to the facts and has no new ideas and ideological content. Firstly, this is related to the choice of conception angle, and secondly, students lack the basic viewpoint of understanding the world and themselves, and often act blindly with partiality.

Note: Structured language

First, multi-field+individual thinking. Candidates should choose the stylistic theme they are good at. After understanding the meaning of the question and determining the basic point of view, they should quickly search the material database for personal life experiences and various materials that can demonstrate their views, and choose touching life experiences to write narratives or relatively novel ideas and relatively fresh materials to write argumentative papers. At the same time, candidates can try different and reverse ideas to achieve a breakthrough in the theme, such as: changing themselves and changing the world, in addition to the relationship of exclusion and opposition, they can also be unified and transformed. It can be said that "changing yourself has been praised and trampled." What is your evaluation of this answer? 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