(1) Read the following text and write as required.

In the summer afternoon, my mother took two sisters to the park to play and saw two different colors of flowers on a tree. It was really beautiful.

Sister said: "This is a beautiful peach tree, what a fiery red flower, I like its gorgeous."

"No, this is a pomegranate tree. Look at this tree root. It's obviously pomegranate. That peach branch is grafted. I like this white pomegranate flower. " Sister said.

"It's the beauty of peach blossoms here!"

"The pomegranate here is more beautiful!"

The two sisters argued.

Mother said, "Look, son, isn't the spectacle of one tree and two flowers equally wonderful?"

According to the meaning of the above materials, write an article of not less than 800 words on the topic of "equally wonderful"

(2) "If you want to walk fast, walk alone; To go far, a group of people will go. "

This is a profound sentence. What does it make you think? Please write an article of not less than 800 words in connection with your life experience and understanding.

interpret

(1) Interpretation of materials

This is a "material+title" material composition. The materials provided are only hints of writing direction (including value orientation and emotional tendency, etc. We should pay attention to the title and analyze the connotation and extension of the concept grammatically.

"Equally wonderful" is a radical phrase, and the central word is "wonderful". Connotation, as long as it is "beautiful and excellent", it is wonderful; Broadly speaking, it can be the brilliance of different people (things) or the brilliance of the same person (things) in different periods and in different aspects. It can be "nature, society, spirit, material, tradition, humanities, science and technology" and so on. "Similarity" is the same, and there is no difference, which requires that the article must have "comparative" contents, such as green hills versus green waters, spring flowers versus autumn moon, graceful and restrained versus bold, Confucianism versus Taoism, nature versus society, tradition versus science and technology, Li Bai versus Du Fu, and Van Gogh versus Qian Zhongshu.

Reference concept:

(1) each has its own wonderful features.

② Live your own personality.

(3) Different and wonderful.

4 choose the one that suits you.

⑤ Rich and colorful.

(2) Material interpretation

This is a famous epigram composition. Aroused rich thinking and many angles of thinking. "If you want to walk fast, just walk alone; To go far, a group of people will go. " The two sentences can be understood separately or as a whole; It can be parallel relationship, hypothetical relationship, conditional relationship, etc. You can even recombine the relationship of "walking alone, walking fast and walking far", as long as you can make sense and justify yourself.

Reference concept:

(1) Dare to surpass.

② Get rid of the baggage and move on easily.

3 unity is far-reaching.

(4) cooperation can win * * *

⑤ According to your own needs, choose the way and strategy that suits you (you need to walk fast alone and walk far/fast and far together).

exist problem

1, two composition questions, the former focuses on sensibility and the latter focuses on rationality, and the selection ratio is about 3:2, which shows that the composition thinking is too stable and ignores the texture training of thinking.

2. "Equally wonderful" is the composition of "material+title". Most students still follow the routine of new material composition, such as from the perspective of two sisters (learn from each other's strengths/not look at the problem one-sidedly, etc.) ), mother (to look at the problem dialectically and comprehensively/to be optimistic and open-minded, etc. ), and a tree opens two flowers (be generous and tolerant), leading to "hanging suicide"

3. Poor composition skills:

The keyword (1) is not implemented, so multipoint docking is not allowed. For example:

The romantic Li Bai is wonderful, and the realistic Du Fu is also wonderful. (equally wonderful)

(2) When the wind blows and the cold blows, Qiangke will never return. (Walking alone, walking fast, walking far)

Example 1 only uses the label of "Miao", but does not write the specific content of Li Bai and Du Fu's "Miao"; (2) Only the second half of the sentence "If you want to walk fast, you can walk alone" can correspond to the composition materials, and the first half of the sentence "Walk fast" is not involved at all, so it is difficult to link Jing Ke's case with "Walk fast".

Countermeasures: implement the specific content of keywords and reflect keywords in the composition materials when using cases.

The title of the first composition is "equally wonderful" and there are two key words: "equally wonderful" and "wonderful"; There are four key words in the second composition: "walk fast", "walk alone", "walk far" and "walk together". When writing, whether it is use cases or analysis, we should closely follow the keywords, connect them one by one, and implement the specific content of the keywords. "Similarity" is realized by giving examples at the same time, and "wonder" is embodied by specific contents, such as "whoever walks alone, where is fast" and "who walks with whom, where is far". For example:

Lin Xiangru convinced people with words, and Lian Po took Wu Liwei. A piece of moist jade gives off a soft but shining light. A strong-willed man dispelled his cold eyes without stabbing them. Their It's a Wonderful Life. Two different lights, wonderful to the extreme, become similar. ("equally wonderful")

(2) The article is flat, and the three-dimensional sense is weak.

The article has only one level, such as "equally wonderful", which is only for interpretation. It is very thin to list a series of examples to explain what "wonderful" is.

Countermeasures: According to the four categories of argumentative writing, what is it, why, how to do it and what will happen, step by step. For example:

The topic is "equally wonderful":

"What is it?" : the lotus is graceful and pure, and the plum blossom is proud of frost and snow;

"Why": Each has its own nature.

"What to do": Stick to the true colors.

"What will happen": Realizing value

"a person walks fast, and they walk far together";

What is it? Mo Yan is willing to be lonely and concentrate on writing to win the Nobel Prize.

IBM and Microsoft joined forces to occupy the computer market.

"Why": Less interference, go into battle lightly.

Learn from each other's strengths and unite as one.

"What to do": I can stand loneliness and have a firm belief.

Unite and help each other and brainstorm

(3) Lenovo is absent and not deep enough

An important reason for the fierce collision between ideas and use cases is that they are not fully related and are not analyzed from more angles.

The first question is "equally wonderful":

Most students just make similar associations, from "green hills" to "green waters", from "spring flowers" to "autumn moon", from "bold" to "graceful". If we can use the association of opposites to write the wonderful of the opposing sides, it can better reflect our dialectical thinking ability. Great Man is wonderful, and Ordinary People has many touching moments. "Success" is enviable, but some "failures" can win applause.

The second question is "Walk alone, fast; A group of people walked away ":

(1) From the perspective of the connotation, extension, personality, cause, result, internal cause and external cause of keywords, we should be able to find unique content. For example:

"Walking alone" means being lonely, maverick, concentrating on research and finding a new way. ...

A group of people walking is to brainstorm, learn from each other's strengths, unite and help each other and help each other in the same boat.

"Fast" means fast, efficient and early. ...

"Slow" means long distance, long time, big step, long vision, long thought and deep influence. ...

(2) There are many relationships between the four keywords of this question, and if they are recombined, new ideas will emerge:

"Alone" is both "fast" and "far": Li Na entered the Grand Slam final solo, which had a far-reaching impact;

"A group of people walking" is both "far" and "fast": China scientists completed the invention of atomic bombs and hydrogen bombs in just 50 years;

The relationship between "one person" and "a group of people": a person can walk very fast without the help of others (predecessors); When walking with a group of people, you should also stick to your own opinions.

model essay

Just as wonderful.

In summer, a mother took her two sisters to the park to play. The two sisters argued over which is more beautiful, peach blossom or pomegranate flower. Mother told them, "Isn't it just as wonderful to see two flowers on a tree?"

Yes, in fact, whether it is peach blossom, pomegranate flower or two flowers in a tree, each has its own brilliance. Peach blossom has its fiery beauty, pomegranate flower also has its pure white beauty, and one tree with two flowers has its peculiar beauty.

"Peach blossoms outside the bamboo are three or two, and the spring water warms the duck prophet" is the vitality of spring; "The next day, the lotus leaves are infinitely colorful, and the lotus flowers reflect the different colors of the day" is an unrestrained summer; "Falling red is not a heartless thing, but turning into spring mud protects flowers more" is the deep affection of autumn; "Like the strong wind in spring, it blows at night and blows open the petals of ten thousand pear trees" is the whiteness of winter. Spring, summer, autumn and winter are all wonderful. Life should be the same, each has its own spring and autumn, each leading the way. Li Bai has his festival "Oh, how can I bow and scrape solemnly to a high official, and no one will suffer an honest face", so he has a wonderful "poetic fairy"; Su Shi has his optimism and open-mindedness of "looking back at the bleak place, retiring to his hometown, rain or shine", so there is Su Da, a wonderful writer; Mao Zedong has his great talent and great strategy of "criticizing Fang Qiu and pointing out the country", so he has a wonderful new China. No matter who you are, you have your own unique appearance, personality, your own direction, and everyone has their own wonderful places.

Everyone has a wonderful life, you don't have to envy others, you just need to take every step of life and create your own wonderful life. Maybe you don't have the brilliance of Li Taibai's integrity, maybe you don't have the brilliance of Su Shi's open-mindedness and optimism, and maybe you don't have the brilliance of Chairman Mao. However, if you have a heart to fight for the college entrance examination, a heart willing to be lonely and a heart determined to pursue your dreams, you can have a wonderful college entrance examination result and a wonderful future. The glory of others will always belong to others. We can't envy or do it. Besides, blindly copying wonderful behaviors that don't belong to you will only lead to stupid results, just like Dong Shi imitating Xi Shi. We don't care about other people's wonderful, because we also have our wonderful, don't envy others, don't envy others, and don't blame others.

To achieve a wonderful life, we need a firm heart and indomitable action. Li Bai also said: "Since God has given talents, let them be employed!"! "Yes, it is with this belief that Li Bai grinds into a needle of" poetry ". To realize the wonderful life, you need self-confidence. Believe in your own ability, believe that you can create your own wonderful. More importantly, we must have a firm belief. How can Li Bai become a poet if he doesn't stick to his own way forward? If Li Bai does not insist on writing poems, how can he succeed?

Experience the wonderful life, let's act!

Comments: This paper focuses on "Equally Wonderful". First, it says that nature is as wonderful as spring, summer, autumn and winter, and then it talks about how to strengthen your faith and create your own wonderful, interlocking, in-depth and clear thinking. The interpretation of "wonderful" in this paper is accurate, especially the attribute of "same", which is more than comparison throughout and is well implemented. The poems quoted in this paper are just right, which shows the author's language skills, enhances the literary atmosphere and adds a lot of color to the article. It may be that there is not enough time, and the end of the article is hasty, giving people a feeling of anticlimactic. (Score: 5 1)

Example 2

Just as wonderful.

There are no identical leaves in the world, but it can have unique beauty. There are two different colors of flowers on a tree. Some people like the white and pure beauty of pomegranate flowers, while others marvel at the beauty of peach blossoms. Body and beauty are different, but beauty is the same.

The same wonderful, different light. In ancient times, there were beautiful talks, Lin Xiangru in literature and Lian Po in martial arts. One achieved the acme of literature, and the other achieved the peak of martial arts. As former officials, their lives are as brilliant and wonderful as before, but they radiate different light in different fields. Lin Xiangru convinced people with words, and Lian Po took Wu Liwei. A piece of moist jade gives off a soft but shining light. A strong-willed man dispelled his cold eyes without stabbing them. Their It's a Wonderful Life. How similar. Two different lights, wonderful to the extreme, become similar.

Because everyone brings their strengths to the extreme, because the ultimate wonderful life. From different to similar, from different dazzling to the same wonderful, it lit up the whole dynasty. Therefore, different majors and different lighting can also be wonderful.

The same wonderful, different hearts. Someone once said: I would rather cry on a BMW than laugh behind a bicycle. Aaron Kwok is famous for being the richest man, and Alim is respected for being poor and kind. Aaron Kwok's charity is famous for its Qian Qian, which has helped many poor and helpless old people. Alimu's charity is famous for its heart and has helped countless children with difficulties in going to school. Their kindness has helped many people and inspired the hearts of those who are about to fall. They are poor and rich. Life is as wonderful as charity. However, charity in Aaron Kwok is based on all the conditions of wealth and happiness. Aaron Kwok's charity is more or less utilitarian and purposeful, although his charity has benefited and helped many people. But his heart can't be as big and affectionate as alimu. But this is the same kind, and it is the same kind that attracts attention.

The same wonderful, different hearts, but all kind, still wonderful, still dazzling.

The world is full of wonderful Qian Qian, and there is a lot of harmony and joy everywhere. Maybe you are not as beautiful as others, but you can have your own Excellence. Every kind of brilliance is equally wonderful and beautiful. Maybe you don't have other people's wealth, but you can have your own kindness, the same help and the same wonderful, but you don't care how much or how heavy.

Comments: The interpretation of "wonderful" in this paper is accurate, and the application of examples is typical and appropriate. By comparing the different ways of serving the country between ancient Lian Po and Lin Xiangru, and comparing the philanthropy of modern Aaron Kwok and Alimu under different conditions, the "Tong" is put in place. However, the three-dimensional sense of the article is not strong and lacks a sense of hierarchy, especially in the last paragraph, but it is moderately expanded to make up for the shortcomings; The article's comments on Aaron Kwok are also a bit off topic. (score: 48 points)

Example 3

Life on the road

I woke up in a thatched cottage at dawn, and I was the only one. I hesitated, not knowing whether to wait here or go alone. Facing the vast Yuan Ye, I shouted: "If you want to walk fast, walk alone;" If you want to go far away, then go together. Tell me, should I go alone or together? "The wasteland was silent. Hunting wind seems to tear your soul apart.

"I don't know your mind. But I am destined to choose a person to go. " Your voice sounded, which surprised and delighted me. I trace the source of your voice and recall the misery and struggle of Sister Xianglin in your works.

You said that every time a person has a new idea and is recognized, it will push him forward; There are objections to promote their struggle. How sad it is to shout in front of strangers, who are silent and neither agree nor object. So you call it loneliness. I understand your struggle. In such a dark age, you take a pen as a halberd and go on your way alone to tear the darkness from the light. China people wake up in the light. You walk faster than anyone else in the world, and your loneliness on the road is like a beast, rubbing your soul every night. Your loneliness can only be understood by smiling people. You use pen, blood and courage to take on all the courage and lead the way for the world. A group of people behind you walk faster and faster because of this. I smiled and said to Yuan Ye, "Sir, you are a brave man."

"When people gather by the river to sing loudly about life, I will definitely return to the empty mountain." I sat on the ground and listened to Haizi's slight singing.

You said, I don't want to go ahead with others in Zaixi. I'd rather embark on the road of soul alone. No matter how fast it is or how far it is. I just want to harvest the deep road, face the sea, and spring blossoms. I understand your mentality that you can only satisfy yourself, but you can't bear to give it to you. You go your own way in the flute. Like a hedge falling chrysanthemum, a plum-wife crane. The Sanskrit sound you play by yourself is tempting to dream, and only those who cling to the path of the soul can dream. Tea, cloth and musk make you happy.

The echo in the wilderness gradually rises, from "living alone in its flow and learning from others." I have been sleeping, and I will never forget it. "It should be" the test is in the stream, and people are wide. "If you talk alone, you will never be surprised." ("Poetry? Feng Wei? Audit board means: knocking on the board for fun. Beside the mountain stream, the sages are generous. When you wake up and talk alone, you will never forget that "the power and money in the world are like fire (it should be: listening to the power of the world is like fire), and you can't burn like a cloud"; From "everyone's road should be a long journey" to "I am on the road with the world". I was freed from the noise.

On the road, there are always some individuals who are willing to accept loneliness and open their own way. They walked fast and suffered a lot, but they not only found their own sincerity, but also opened up a road for their later companions. A group of people supporting each other will inevitably go slower and further. It is such a group of people who built the pyramids of human civilization.

I picked up my backpack and decided to go alone.

Comments: This is an argumentative essay with clear context. At the beginning, I wrote my own hesitation: "I don't know whether to wait here or go alone." In the middle, I wrote the enlightenment of Lu Xun and Haizi in the second person, and at the end, I wrote "I took up my backpack and decided to go alone." The article focuses on the relationship between "walking alone" and "walking together". The article not only shows the author's extensive reading, but also has a profound understanding of Lu Xun and Haizi, and also has a unique experience of their works, such as The Book of Songs. The article also shows the author's profound language skills, such as "in such a dark age, you pick up a pen as a halberd and go on your way alone to tear the darkness from the light." "You walk faster than anyone else in the world, and your loneliness on the road is like a beast rubbing your soul every night." This kind of sentence is very vivid and infectious. (score: 58 points)

Example 4

Loneliness, from afar

Loneliness is the essence of life. Loneliness is a dark railroad track, and you never know what will be ahead, destruction or light. Someone said, "If you want to walk fast, you should walk alone." Pioneers of the times and promoters of society are all quick walkers. They are all loners.

Why? Because there are no worldly and cumbersome ties and no opportunities to fight with their peers, they go forward alone, relying only on loneliness and courage.

Van Gogh was lonely. As an artist, his loneliness is particularly obvious, and people can't understand his works. Poverty and hunger drove him crazy and carved the last stroke for himself with a scalpel. But1.700 million Sunflower proves that his level is much higher than that of the author of the same period, and he is not crazy. He is just a lonely man who walks in front of other painters.

Lonely people often can't get the understanding of the world at that time, because their way of thinking is higher than this world, and they can't get the understanding and support of fixed preconceived people. Lonely pioneers will feel an indelible haze from their hearts and can only bury themselves in lonely careers. Einstein was very withdrawn. When I was a child, I was scolded by my teacher for being unreasonable, but I put forward the big view of relativity. Sima Qian suffered great humiliation, and under the contempt of everyone, he wrote a bumpy and magnificent epic with tears; Copernicus insisted that the torch of truth would not go out and Heliocentrism was not understood by the world, so he used his life to push the truth forward.

Therefore, the madman is lonely, and the genius is also lonely.

A truly lonely person is loyal to his heart, able to resist temptation, indifferent to his ambition, peaceful and far away. Madame Curie regarded medals as children's toys, and Qian Zhongshu refused to be interviewed by reporters. What they need is the loneliness and silence of "sitting on a cold stool". Even though Edison, the "king of inventions", invented countless things in his life, he was impetuous and loved fame and fortune in his later years, and he was not really alone.

Lonely people should pay attention to the "assimilation" of the people while leading the technological trend and promoting social development. There is a vague sense of group in people's character, and it is natural for the minority to obey the majority. Lonely people must be able to turn a deaf ear if they can't argue with Confucian theory. Many people walk alone and become one of the sentient beings after being called a few times. Therefore, it is rare and precious for lonely people to be "cold on high places", which is envied by the world and puzzled.

If you want to walk fast, please go alone. People who achieve great things should endure the unbearable loneliness of ordinary people, work hard and not get lost in the public. Lonely people, people far away.

Comments: The article well explains "loneliness" and "distance" and their relationship. Through the incomprehensible loneliness and achievements of pioneers such as Van Gogh, Einstein, Sima Qian and Copernicus, it is concluded that "a madman is lonely and a genius is lonely". The examples of Madame Curie and Qian Zhongshu are also used to show that lonely people "can resist temptation, be indifferent to ambition and stay away quietly." Edison is used to explain what a real loner is. The full text is novel and profound, full of dialectics, rich in typical materials, persuasive and fluent in language expression. Score: (53 points)

Example 5

Departure to travel

The wind continued to rage, and pear flower falls fell to the ground. A folding fan, engraved with a few words, put on a dazzling bamboo lamp, put on a robe, and so on, on the road.

The world is chaotic, and everything is redundant. I set out alone and only walked in the shadows. I think, only if we don't persist, can we move forward as fast as the wind. I thought I was arrogant.

If you want to walk fast, walk alone.

Chen Ou said that dreams are destined to be lonely. We each have our own way, and I am the only one alone, clutching an unlit candle in my heart. My life is very clean. I get up alone in the morning breeze, step on the silence of the ground, study quietly in class, hold a turquoise plant between classes, and enjoy the warmth and biting in the sun. I struggled alone, without any worries, fell down, got up by myself, patted the dust and continued on my way. When you are alone, you can study your brain and heart calmly, learn your photosynthesis indifferently in the ups and downs of the road and sing it to yourself. The pace is fast, because there are no fetters. I just want to walk faster, faster, closer to the distance I expected, closer. So I choose to go alone.

Finally, I found it unnecessary. Lonely heart is too strong, but bitter as a long sleep, in fact, it has been against the wind. So I split the black and white world.

I am more eager to go far than to walk fast.

You need help on the way. So I'm finally willing to fight with you. I accept the brilliance you carved in my life. When I fell, you stopped for me and held out your hands just to help me; When I stand up again, you push me with your thick palm and let me move on; The candle in my heart has gone out, so you wiped away my tears and added brighter light; My loneliness, we drink and eat together; I'm beginning to feel that the warmth you bring is like putting wings on my ribs, which makes me fly higher and farther. Then, dear, you taught me to grow and love, and you traveled with me, but I saw a world I had never seen before.

You are my new candle. My road is brighter because of this.

Hand in hand, we can encourage each other to go further.

"Once upon a time, I thought I was a god. I waved my huge blade and cut off countless glories. I thought I could walk faster and faster. I think loneliness is the greatest strength to move forward. The wind continues to rage, and pear flower falls is everywhere, but it seems that neither opportunity is needed, as if it were instinct. I abandoned loneliness and continued on the road with the people I love. I saw my folding fan decorated with different colors, and my robe fluttered more elegantly. Only in this way can I go further, further and more glamorous, "I said, looking at the unkempt time in the mirror. "However, the fetters have made me go further with me now."

In other words, loneliness is innocent and exultation is innocent. The only difference is whether the end of my vision is beyond my ability. And I, at this moment, I'd rather hold your hand, before I run out of Jiang Lang's talent, before I grow old as new with you, on the road, in order to go faster and further.

Comments: This essay is a combination of lyricism and reasoning. In the style of sketches, I write my own feelings and express my inner feelings. In the first half, I walked alone, and in the second half, I wrote "hand in hand" to go further. The center of the full text is clear and focused, and the use of the first person makes the expression of feelings more vivid. The language in the article is concise and vivid, such as "You can learn your own photosynthesis calmly in the ups and downs of the road", "The candle in my heart has been extinguished, so you wiped away my tears and added brighter light" and "The warmth you brought is like putting wings on my ribs, so I can fly higher", which shows the author's profound language skills and strengthens the image of reasoning. (score: 53 points)

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