Su Xichang's second essay is entitled "Leave some space", which I think is quite good. First of all, under the traction of thought,

It faces the so-called fast pace,

An efficient and morbid society,

Advocating that we are fully exploring,

Seek conquest

At the same time, leave some space for yourself and others, reflect in time, return to your heart, and re-evaluate all values. It can be said that the composition question

Objective to show that sense of responsibility and care by remin or even calling,

It has strong times and humanity.

this

It is also a trend of college entrance examination composition proposition. Secondly, propositional discourse is well-intentioned and communicative. Especially "one point",

Very colloquial,

To some extent, it can awaken the expression of senior three students who are tortured to death by exams and tired of expression.

Wish.

Under the severe background that more and more people are forced to give up private writing,

This topic points to personal experience,

Perception and harmony

Think and try to establish the value of self in writing, so that students can have something to say and say it honestly. Of course, this kind

Text pattern estimation is difficult to appear in college entrance examination composition proposition.

Because look at the essay topics of Jiangsu college entrance examination in recent years,

Every question

Those eyes are like coming from

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/kloc-What people over the age of 0/8 say is either grand and heavy, or beautiful.

It reveals indifference. I guess people who don't know their fate can't say that.

I have two feelings when I see this topic.

First of all,

It has a lot of room to write,

A lot of material space is reserved for candidates.

Between.

Second,

In the choice of style,

It is more suitable for writing miscellaneous feelings or narrative prose.

of course，

To write well,

The key is to be clear about the examination questions.

Well-meaning, clever conception, clear thinking and expressive language.

The most important thing is to examine the questions.

The core word of this topic is

"Space"

This space can be a specific place,

At a certain distance,

It can also be an abstract opportunity,

Something that allows the soul to inhabit,

Thinking,

Accommodate,

The location of the extension.

"stay"

This word implies the necessity of self-counseling in view of the crowding and chasing in reality.

"A little" is not all, it doesn't mean that.

March forward to the times,

A categorical denial of self-development,

It's a temptation,

This is also an exhortation,

Another kind of affirmation.

I think/in my opinion,

The examination questions should be divided and the ideas should be combined. On the whole, this verb-object topic has several meanings: first, it needs to stay.

Spaces, not the other way around, written as "Don't leave spaces"; Second, the focus should be on "why".

What kind of space should I leave occasionally,

Instead of staying for whom,

Who will stay,

It's not about how to stay.

(Because

"Space"

This concept needs candidates to face first. Only by solving "what" can we answer "how". Besides, "how"

The content is easy to write mediocre);

Third,

The scope of specific ideas may have a re-examination of the value of life.

Development rhythm

Adjustment, protection of personal feelings, tolerance and expectation of other people's lives, cherish and support of cultural life,

Human hair

Condemnation and appeal for sabotage during the exhibition, and so on.

Let's talk about my views on eight-sample paper.

Article 1:

This is an argumentative essay,

It can also be called miscellaneous feeling.

This composition is based on the demolition of Liang Sicheng's former residence.

main points

"Leave some space"

Then, from the aspects of urban construction and rural urbanization, we can leave one for historical sites and life memories.

Point out the meaning and value of space, combine narration with discussion, have real feelings and clear attitude, and finally tie a knot with the trend, and the ending is slightly straightforward. accomplish

The article is clear in thinking and mixed with reason. In addition, this paper takes "demolition" as the main line, with a unique perspective and concentrated brushwork, based on reality and the times.

Strong breath and profound humanistic thinking. The shortcoming is that the local language is inaccurate and the expression is not in place. Judging a kind of volume,

65

Points.

The second part: This composition shows that candidates are making a leap from model essay to prose expressing their own spirit.

The article begins with "Are you full?" I clearly expressed my attitude and advocated leaving some space for myself to rest and aftertaste.

And reflection. of course，

This introduction is not natural enough,

The truth contained in the story should be learned endlessly and not complacent.

And the author's songs

The solution is to reflect the traveling light at the right time, and the advantages are not bound. Then, the main part starts with giving yourself, life and mind.

Go ahead,

Three arguments are too empty,

The logical relationship is chaotic,

If we make an exception,

If you pay more attention to what he says,

We will find his sincere expression,

The advantages of more convincing reasoning.

Finally, these three sub-arguments are buckled again.

Have a certain

Structural consciousness. The language of the article is fluent, the classics are quoted and the metaphor is more appropriate. Can be divided into three types of volumes,

5 1

Points.

The third part: This is also an argumentative essay, which, like the second part, belongs to the syllogism type and is written neatly and clearly than the last one.

The volume is better, but the argument is obviously not as convincing as the second one.

In the logical framework, there are three arguments.

"Save some for others.

Space can be called a booster for him to forge ahead ","Leave a little space for the soul, which can be called a haven for the soul ",

"Give yourself.

Leave a little space, and he will help you reach the other side of success ",which also belongs to relationship confusion." As far as every argument is concerned, it has no meaning. "

Lack, inexplicable. At the argumentation level, the argument is divorced from the argument and is unconvincing. In particular, Tao Yuanming left space for himself.

Example,

What does this mean? Is the way to become a generation,

Or just to keep the wind from the heart,

Or will it go down there?

The other side of success? It is estimated that the argumentative essays among the authors are more poisonous,

So when writing,

Pay more attention to the style and technique of the article.

Smart but neglected self-participation and rational thinking. Among the four types of papers,

46

Points.

Junior high school Liang Hai composition daquan

Xiao Sheng got full marks for the senior high school entrance examination and zero for the college entrance examination.

The fourth article: This is still an argumentative article, which, like the second article, is also a constantly developing argumentative article. But after we read it,

It will feel worse and it will be difficult to label.

Therefore, the reasoning is far-fetched.

At the beginning of the article, it seems that I want to take the short life of the flame flower.

Compared with the eternal life of street lamps,

Emphasize practicality,

The importance of calmness,

But the author stubbornly believes that street lamps are reserved for himself.

A little space, and then point out the central argument:

"Leave some space for yourself, calm your mind and find your own.

Spiritual home. "It should be said that this view itself is right, but this introduction is too rude. The worst thing is to quote Ji Kang repeatedly.

And Li Bai. Obviously,

These two people were born to compose music, and everything they did was for themselves.

"Leave a little.

Space ",such an analysis lacks rationality and does not respect historical figures, which can be regarded as trampling on the spirit of composition. The last three paragraphs say

Correct, but superficial, ending the care and starting, but because the space of the street lamp is unknown,

This deviates from the theme that echoes from beginning to end.

Its invalidity can be judged as five types of volumes,

38

Points.

Article 5:

This is a story.

The author starts with the little things in life,

Reflect the understanding and tolerance between people.

Let such a big theme have a strong flavor of life. The narrative clues are clear,

The owner of the off-road vehicle stopped across the border, but mom gave up the parking place.

Cars are very convenient for people.

Touched the owners of off-road vehicles and promoted the expansion of each other's spiritual space and spiritual realm.

Contrast in the text

It's different, the details are outstanding, and the ending is a bit snake-footed. Generally speaking, the thought is profound, the structure is rigorous, and the writing mentality is calm.

Stretch. In a class of papers,

Sixty-eight

Points.

Article 6:

This is also a narrative.

This paper focuses on the scene of the whole family eating New Year's Eve.

Caring for the material and spiritual life of the elderly

The urgency of living. Call for giving the elderly their own way of life. There is a slight deviation from "leaving a little space" in conception, belonging to

To the basic point. The highlights of this article are: first, the author observes carefully, and the details of the characters are well described and vivid.

To express the inner world of the characters, we must have deep feelings, such as every recruit in the family.

"But to be crowded old.

People, in this era, seem to be like this. "This is very thought-provoking. The contrast in the text is strong and the emotion is full. The disadvantage is that

The narrative clues are not clear enough,

The combination of narrative and discussion is a bit messy.

Individual punctuation is not standardized, and the ellipsis is only in one box. can

Comment on three types of volumes,

55

Points.

Article 7:

This statement is typical,

I believe many students will adopt this writing strategy.

Write a simple story

I hope parents or teachers can give me some space. Judging from the plot, the author described that he was tired of studying during the May Day holiday.

I hope I can relax my adjustment by playing ball.

Father knows the situation,

As the method moves,

It is suggested to continue studying by changing different subjects.

Habitual adjustment,

Fortunately, my mother agreed to watch TV and was lucky to have a rest, but she only watched it for fifteen minutes.

Television is

Father, turn it off.

She is also an enlightened mother who understands children's psychology.

I also left myself ten minutes to watch TV.

The author regrets

I have been educated for more than ten years.

Call on parents to leave some space for their children.

After reading the article,

You will find

Even if you give him some space, he will use it to "play". Although it can be regarded as an adjustment after study, it is only

Limited to personal needs,

This idea is rather narrow.

The characters in the article have distinct personalities.

But the characters in the first three paragraphs seem to be

Mechanical and clumsy. Of the four types of volumes that can be judged,

46

Points.

Article 8: This is a novel. It is written that when I was in junior high school, I didn't do well in the exam, and I was sulking in the study. My mother sent me.

Milk,

Then go back to the living room to watch TV or knit a sweater.

In order to play online games,

Pretend to beg my mother to leave some space for herself.

Next, when I was in college,

Mother sent the freshly made wormwood cake to school.

I am addicted to computer games,

I kept urging her.

Let's go

Then I live apart from my parents after work.

Once you get sick,

Mom came to pick up the laundry,

Make me ginger soup,

And I responded: "It's not a serious illness, and people can't die." Now, I am the big boss, but my mother has passed away. I will be a mother.

The most expensive purpose of being buried in the suburbs,

Leave her a spacious grave.

Judging from the plot arrangement,

The first is the abnormal choice of materials.

Let any reader with a sense of justice be angry with the unfilial son in the article.

Even think of the author himself.

This is quality;

The second is the narrative way of the running account, which seems to be sloppy.

Of course, if we study it more carefully,

As can be seen from the conception of this article, the author's enthusiasm for "contrast" has reached the point of madness. On the one hand, this is the mother's good,

On the one hand, it's your own fault,

It's nothing in itself,

But what does it have to do with the topic? The author seems to understand his mother's concerns.

For interfering in our own space, but this has nothing to do with the topic we are reading.

"Leave some space"

At the end of the article, this is totally different.

Seems to affirm the infinite maternal love,

But it has little to do with the topic.

So it can be judged that this article is too far from the point.

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