I didn't criticize you, just slightly revised your original text. It's best to start with Mr./Ms. I don't quite understand the self-culture in the original text, so I may have made a mistake. You wrote a cover letter, didn't you? This is an China proverb. In English, it is usually called a cover letter. I deleted Confucius' sentence, and I don't think it makes much sense.

Enclosed letter

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am an undergraduate of East China University of Science and Technology. ..

Through long-term English study, I have a solid English foundation. I really want to be a hotel assistant. My wish has become especially Saint Rong Er, because my knowledge in the hotel industry has increased through self-study.

I am very interested in Shanghai Yuehua Hotel. This is a five-star hotel, belonging to the world traveler network. This hotel caters to the needs of foreign guests. The hotel has two world-class buildings with 150 luxury suites and rooms. It has specialized meeting rooms of various sizes and functions. With complete facilities, advanced equipment, standardized service and professional management, it is a top hotel for conference and holiday. Yuehua Hotel is definitely an ideal place for guests to stay.

Working in the hotel industry means serving people. I totally agree with the motto of your hotel "people-oriented, strict management". Through self-study, I learned that in order to create a "home away from home" environment for customers, all employees must strictly abide by the hotel policy.

I really hope Yuehua Hotel can give me a job opportunity. If I have the opportunity to work in Yuehua Hotel, I will abide by all the rules and regulations. I will certainly continue to study, do my duty and complete all the tasks assigned by my superiors. I hope to have the opportunity to contribute to the continued success of your company.

Thank you for your serious consideration of my application.

You are sincere,

King Gareth

November 2008