A long time ago, in Niujiazhuang, Nanyang City, there was a clever and honest young man. His parents died long ago, and the young man lived with his brother and sister-in-law. His sister-in-law is vicious. As soon as autumn came, she forced him to herd cattle. People often saw him herding cattle, so they gave him a name, "Cowherd".
One day, a group of fairies descended to the river to take a bath. One of them is a fairy named Weaver Girl, who looks like a fairy. With the help of the old cow, the cowherd got to know the Weaver Girl. They loved each other and lived in peace, and the Weaver Girl became the wife of the Cowherd. After the marriage of Cowherd and Weaver Girl, men plowed and women weaved, and they had deep feelings. They gave birth to a boy, a girl and two children, and the family lived happily.
But the good times didn't last long, and it was soon known to the Emperor of Heaven that the heavenly queen herself came down to earth and forcibly brought the Weaver Girl back to heaven, and the loving couple separated from each other.
Do as the old cow said, put on shoes made of cowhide and take care of the children. They walked in the clouds to chase the weaver girl. Seeing that they are about to catch up, I am afraid that the Queen Mother has torn off the golden hairpin on her head, and a turbulent Tianhe appears. Cowherd and Weaver Girl were separated on both sides, and they could only cry bitterly. Their loyal love touched magpies, and thousands of magpies flew in and died.
2. Brief folk story composition 1: Meng Jiangnv
In the Qin Dynasty, there was a kind and beautiful woman named Meng Jiangnv. One day, when she was doing housework in her yard, she suddenly found a man hiding under the grape trellis, which startled her and was about to shout. I saw the man waving his hand again and again, pleading, "Don't shout, don't shout, help me!" " My name is Fan Xiliang, and I'm here to escape. "It turned out that Qin Shihuang arrested people everywhere to do coolies in order to repair the Great Wall. I don't know how many people died of starvation! Meng Jiangnv saved Fan Xiliang. When she saw that he was sensible and had fine features, she fell in love with him, and Fan Xiliang fell in love with Meng Jiangnv. They are soul mates, and with the consent of their parents, they are ready to get married.
On the wedding day, Meng's family was decorated with lanterns and decorations, beaming with joy. Seeing that it was getting dark, the people who drank the wedding banquet gradually dispersed. The bride and groom were about to enter the bridal chamber when they heard a chicken fly and a dog bark. Then a group of vicious officers and men broke in. It's hard to say that they chained Fan Xiliang and took him to work in the Great Wall. The happy event went up in smoke, and Meng Jiangnv was filled with grief and indignation, missing her husband day and night. She thought that instead of sitting at home in a hurry, I would go to the Great Wall to find him myself. Yes! Do it! Meng Jiangnu immediately packed her bags and set off.
Along the way, I don't know how much wind, frost, rain and snow I have experienced and how many steep mountains and rivers I have trekked. Meng Jiangnv never cried a bitter word or shed a tear. Finally, with tenacious perseverance and deep love for her husband, she reached the Great Wall. At this time, the Great Wall is already a long wall composed of construction sites. Meng Jiangnv looked everywhere from one construction site to another, but never saw her husband. Finally, she summoned up her courage and asked a group of migrant workers who were about to go to work: "Do you have Fan Xiliang here?" Migrant workers said: "There is such a person, a newcomer." Meng Jiangnu was very happy when she heard this. She quickly asked again, "Where is he?" The migrant workers said, "They are dead, and the bodies have been filled at the foot of the city!" " "
Suddenly hearing the bad news was like a bolt from the blue. Meng Jiangnv only felt black at the moment, a burst of sadness and burst into tears. I cried for three days and nights, and I cried so dark that even the sky was moved. It's getting dark and the wind is getting stronger and stronger. There was a loud crash, and a section of the Great Wall cried down, revealing its corpse. Meng Jiangnv's tears dripped on his bloody face. She finally met her beloved husband, but he never saw her again.
3. The abbreviation of several folktales is one of the four great folktales in China: Once upon a time, in butterfly lovers, there was a place called Zhu, who was called Miss Zhu. His daughter Zhu Yingtai is not only beautiful and generous, but also smart and studious.
But in ancient times, women couldn't go to school, so Zhu Yingtai could only lean against the window bar every day and look at the scholars coming and going in the street with books on their backs. He was envious! Can women only embroider at home? Why can't I go to school? She suddenly asked herself: Yes! Why can't I go to school? Thinking of this, Zhu Yingtai hurried back to his room and got up the courage to ask his parents, "Dad, Mom, I'm going to study in Hangzhou. I can wear men's clothes and dress up as a man. I won't let others recognize me. Just promise me! " I wish the couple didn't agree at first, but they couldn't stand the entreaties of Yingtai and had to agree.
Early the next morning, at dawn, Zhu Yingtai and the maid dressed as men, said goodbye to their parents, took up the bookcase and set off for Hangzhou happily. On the first day of school, Zhu Yingtai met a male classmate named Liang Shanbo, who was knowledgeable and had an excellent personality.
She thought: If such a good person can be together every day, he will certainly learn a lot and be very happy. Moreover, Liang Shanbo also thinks that he and she hit it off very well, and he thinks that he also hits it off at home.
As a result, they often talk about poetry and articles together, care about each other, and are hot and cold, shoulder to shoulder. Later, the two became sworn brothers, always inseparable.
Spring went to Qiu Lai, three years passed quickly, and the school year was over. It's time to pack up, say goodbye to the teacher and go home. Classmate for three years, I fell in love with my brother Liang. Although Liang Shanbo didn't know that Zhu Yingtai was a girl, he admired her very much.
They parted reluctantly and returned home, missing each other day and night. A few months later, I went to visit Zhu's family, which surprised and delighted him.
It turned out that at this time, Zhu Yingtai he met was no longer the handsome little scholar, but a beautiful young girl. At the moment of goodbye, they all understood each other's feelings, and they were already soul mates.
After that, people were invited to visit relatives and friends in Zhujiajian. But I hope Mr w doesn't respect this poor scholar. He has betrothed his daughter to a rich young master, Ma Gongzi.
Liang Shanbo was so desperate that he couldn't afford to get sick and died soon. Hearing the news of Liang Shanbo's death, Zhu Yingtai, who had been opposed to arranged marriage with her parents, suddenly became unusually calm.
She put on a red dress and got into the bride's sedan chair. The wedding team beat gongs and drums all the way, so lively! When I passed the cemetery of Liang Shanbo, suddenly sand and stones flew and the sedan chair had to stop.
I saw Zhu Yingtai coming out of the sedan chair, taking off his red clothes, putting on plain clothes, walking slowly to the grave, kneeling down and crying loudly. At the moment, it was stormy and the grave cracked with a bang. Zhu Yingtai seemed to see her gentle face again, and she jumped in with a smile. Then there was a loud noise and the grave was closed.
At this time, the wind dispersed, and after the rain dispersed, all kinds of wild flowers swayed gently in the wind, and a pair of beautiful butterflies flew out of the grave and danced freely in the sun. The second of China's four great folk stories: the white snake is clear, the flowers on the shore of the West Lake are red and green, and the people in the upper reaches of the broken bridge are like a shuttle. What a beautiful picture of spring. Suddenly, two beautiful girls climbed up from the bottom of the West Lake. What happened? How can people rise from the water? It turns out that they are two snake spirits who cultivate human beings. Even so, they are harmless to people's minds. Just because they envy the colorful life in the world, one changed its name to White Snake and the other to Xiaoqing, and came to visit the West Lake.
It happened that God suddenly lost his temper and it rained cats and dogs. Bai Niangzi and Xiaoqing were caught in the rain, and there was nowhere to hide. They're worried. Suddenly, all they felt was an umbrella overhead. When they turned around, they saw a gentle, fair and delicate young scholar holding an umbrella to shelter them from the wind and rain. Mrs. White Snake and the little scholar's eyes met, and they both blushed and appreciated each other.
Xiaoqing looked in her eyes and said, "Thank you! What is your name, please? " Xiao Xiucai said, "My name is Xu Xian and I live near this broken bridge."
White Snake and Xiaoqing also introduced themselves quickly. Since then, the three of them have met frequently, and the relationship between White Snake and Xu Xian is getting better and better. Not long after, they got married and opened a "Baohetang" pharmacy. Life is wonderful! Because "Baohetang" has cured many incurable diseases, and it doesn't charge any money to treat the poor, the business of pharmacies is getting more and more prosperous, and more and more people come to the White Snake to treat diseases. People affectionately call the White Snake.
However, the prosperity of Baohetang and the happy life of Xu Xian and Bai Niangzi annoyed a person. Who is it? That's the Fahai monk in Jinshan Temple. Because people's illness was cured by the white snake, fewer people went to Jinshan Temple to burn incense and ask for bodhisattva, and the incense was not prosperous, so Fahai monks would naturally be unhappy.
On this day, he came to Baohetang again and saw the white snake treating people. He couldn't help being jealous, and then he took a closer look. Oh! It turns out that this white lady is not a mortal, but a white snake! Although Fahai has a little magic, his mind is not normal. After seeing the identity of the white snake, he tried to break up the white snake couple and bring down Baohetang all day.
So he secretly called Xu Xian to the temple and said to him, "Your wife is a snake spirit. Please break up with her quickly, or she will eat you! " When Xu Xian heard this, he was very angry. He thought, my wife is kind-hearted and has deeper feelings for me than the sea. Even if she is a snake spirit, she can't hurt me. Besides, she is pregnant now, how can I leave her! Fahai saw that Xu Xian had not been fooled and became angry from embarrassment, so he locked Xu Xian in the temple.
In Baohetang, White Snake is anxiously waiting for Xu Xian to come back. One day, two days, or so, the white lady was in a hurry.
Finally, I found that Xu Xian was "left" by the Fahai monk in Jinshan Temple. White Snake hurried to Jinshan Temple with Xiaoqing and begged Fahai to put it back in Xu Xian. Fahai sneered when he saw the white snake: "Bold snake, I advise you to leave this world as soon as possible, otherwise don't blame me for being impolite!" Seeing that Fahai refused to let people go, the white snake had no choice but to pull it out.
4. Abbreviate the comments on the composition, prawn, and help to find a way to comment: "I love your parents!" This is the voice of the young author, who shows his parents' care and love for himself through specific descriptions.
Comments: "Trying to overcome difficulties" is the harvest of the little author. The little author clearly described what happened in the labor class and the process of solving doubts from it, which gave us an inspiration in writing: in fact, there are many topics around us that need students to seriously discover and accumulate.
Comments: When waiting for the bus, the article exaggerated the number of people and laid the groundwork for "crowded cars". The moment the car door opens, the process of "squeezing" begins.
Following the little author's pen, we experienced a painful but interesting process of crowding cars. At the end of the article, I said, "It feels good to walk!" It is the voice of a small author and a reader.
Comments: The fierce three-person battle shows that the life of the little author's family is very full, active and enviable. It is not difficult to find that the young author's brushwork is so fresh, natural and true. The three people's language, manner, movements and the author's psychological activities respectively reflect their different personalities. Of course, the commonness is also obvious, which has become the keynote of this article-childlike interest.
Comments: The article is a good feeling of reading enough. Starting with the content of the book read, the young author arouses feelings, makes ancient and modern associations, compares descriptions, and then connects with reality, making the article complete and fully expressing his thoughts and feelings. Comments: The biggest touch of this composition is the child's true feelings! Everything is going on unintentionally and reasonably.
Just like "it takes a heart to bloom, but a willow leaves a shade unintentionally", the child bought a gift for his classmates at first, but accidentally saw a photo, so he remembered his mother's birthday. All this is so natural and unpretentious.
Judging from the use of language, it is also worthy of praise and encouragement to be able to describe a thing clearly and smoothly at the age of a child. Comments: After reading this composition with curiosity, I seem to have experienced a false alarm with the little author. Yes, we all had this experience when we were teenagers. In fact, there are no ghosts in this world, and "ghosts" are in our hearts. The success of this composition lies in that the author can rewrite his psychology and actions when he hears the "ghost" phone ringing, thus vividly depicting his extreme fear and helplessness at that time. The last sentence is both a key point and a key point.
Since ancient times, people have been praising Gong Yu's persistent spirit of moving mountains, and the completion of the wildlife park tells us that sometimes skillful work is more effective than hard work. Comments: This is an interesting and useful article.
There is no flowery rhetoric, no artificial posturing, only the change from never brushing your teeth to brushing your teeth frequently, which is just a vivid narrative close to reality and makes people feel true and credible. "Good habits benefit for life", this composition reminds me of this wise saying again.
In fact, people are born with a lot of inertia. The key is how to overcome it. what do you think? Comments: This is a very interesting fairy tale, which contains a simple but profound truth that makes people think deeply! The story itself is not complicated: two fish, accustomed to the pampered life and bored, fantasize about exchanging places with each other. As a result, it is conceivable that an irreparable tragedy has finally happened! Hey, don't you see this phenomenon in your life? ! The little author is good at using anthropomorphic techniques, grasping the characteristics of small animals, drawing and describing shapes, and making vivid psychological descriptions. Really lifelike! The thick humorous atmosphere contains thought-provoking philosophical thinking, which is commendable! The article is full of imagination and fluent language, and it is a very tasty fairy tale comment: the little author uses a lot of dialogue descriptions in the article, which fully shows the personality characteristics of the three characters. The title quotes folk nursery rhymes, which is very novel.
Comments: Give up your seat, which is a very ordinary little thing, but the little author can see the big picture from the small, which has triggered profound lessons and profound thinking, which is commendable! In the article, writing about the congestion on the bus is concise and vivid; The young man with yellow hair is vivid and concrete, and contains a kind of well-meaning irony. In particular, writing about teachers, without saying a word, only wrote about giving up your seat, smiling and staring, but it was so detailed, so complicated and so meaningful! How quiet it is! This paper attaches great importance to the relationship between primary and secondary details, highlighting the main detail of the article-the teacher's eyes, which has caused long-term regret and painful thinking of young authors! Comments: Life is the source of writing. The young author personally experienced two days of rural life and had many real feelings. This is true feelings, there is no empty slogan. Young writers use the method of restraining first and then promoting, first expressing their yearning for rural life and envy of rural children, and then using the word "but" to lead to the following, which is natural and natural. The language is simple and vivid.
The specific process of tea picking is described in detail, but the visit of aquatic plants and hiking picnic are briefly mentioned, which makes the article focus. Comments: The little author has vivid language, ingenious conception and rich imagination, which is memorable to read.
Comments: Seeing with my own eyes and observing carefully, the little author vividly described the scene of the game and his feelings. Comments: The little author described his feelings of memorizing this text well, from wasting time playing, busy memorizing, and then to my father's education, which gave me the courage to overcome difficulties and put it into action.
The whole process was clearly written and expressed my inner feelings. Comments: This article takes both the beginning and the end into consideration, and the structure is ingenious and meticulous.
Behind an unforgettable photo is an unforgettable thing and an unforgettable sentence. Because of personal experience, the writing is true, natural and smooth, and readers feel the same.
Comments: This is a meaningful science fiction composition. Through his magical imagination, the author foresaw the environmental prospect that made us not optimistic. What is particularly commendable is that the author puts forward the relationship between "science" and "environmental protection", which makes people think deeply.
Comments: The little author carefully observed the appearance of the monument and made a detailed description.
5. Abbreviate a folk story composition. I like listening to my parents tell stories since I was a child. When I grow up, my mother will buy me a story book for me to read by myself.
Recently, my mother bought me a book called Chinese and Foreign Folktales, and I fell in love with it as soon as I opened it. There are many well-known stories, such as Three Movements in Meng Mu, Meng Jiangnv Crying at the Great Wall, Mulan Joining the Army, The Old Man under the Moon, and The Heartless Stepmother ... My favorite story is Jane's Tomorrow.
The story goes like this. There was a teenager in America who didn't like reading, always stole things, and was finally expelled from school. His parents didn't like the son, so Joan became a tramp.
Once, he saw a sign hanging on the door of a restaurant, which read "Free dinner tomorrow". But the next day, he came to this restaurant again and didn't eat for nothing. But this restaurant is still hung with a signboard. He repeatedly read this sentence written on the signboard and suddenly realized a life truth. From then on, he studied hard and became a very good boy. This truth is: although tomorrow looks beautiful, it is all illusory, and only today is the best.
This kind of thing often happens in our life and study. For example, if I leave my homework on weekends, I always hope to write it tomorrow, and then dream of tomorrow's beauty. Finally, all the homework is piled up on Sunday night, and you will find that "tomorrow" is not as beautiful as you think. Only by cherishing today and working hard step by step can we reap a truly beautiful tomorrow. There are many other stories in this book, which are very meaningful. I know these stories come from the people, showing the pure and kind hearts of the working people and reflecting their pursuit of a better life and their thinking about life.
In a word, the book Chinese and foreign folktales has taught me a lot about life and taught me to face all kinds of difficulties in life with strength, courage and optimism. I like this book very much.
6. The folk story is called "Silkworm Goddess" for short: Once upon a time, a family kept a god horse that understood human nature. Once my father was not at home, he was sick in other places and couldn't go home. My daughter told Ma that she would marry him if Ma got her father back. As a result, Ma really carried her father back. Later, the father knew his daughter's promise to the horse, and he was afraid that others would know, so he killed the horse and skinned it. On one occasion, my daughter touched the mane on the horse skin, which was rolled to the distant heel and turned into a horsehead silkworm. Later, the emperor named her the silkworm god. Whenever she misses her hometown, she spins silk, and people call her the silkworm god girl.
Rapunzel: The main content is a complicated version: the stockade is short of water. A girl found a spring on the mountain and told the people in the stockade, but Shan Yao always threatened the long-haired girl in order to monopolize the spring. Finally, the old banyan tree became an old man and killed Shan Yao to save Rapunzel.
7. Highlights of composition evaluation Daquan is at least 0.27 yuan/day for Baidu Library members, which can be found in Library > Original Publisher: ysxz888 Highlights of composition evaluation 1. The beginning of the composition: 1. The beginning of the article is simple and appropriate, and the description of the environment sets off the emotions of the characters, which is very artistic.
2. The beginning is brief and to the point. 3. The beginning of the article is novel and serves as a warning. Let readers have the impression of … as soon as they meet.
The beginning of the article is fascinating and attracts readers. The combination of point and surface makes the article vivid, concrete and meticulous.
5. The language of the article is vivid and readable. 6, the beginning is extraordinary, attracting readers. 7. The beginning touches people's hearts and has true feelings.
8. The beginning of the article is very clear, which plays a leading role in the full text. 9. The material of this article is novel, which arouses readers' desire to continue reading. 2. Synthesis process: 1. With complete * * *, it describes ... 2. The key points are prominent, the details are appropriate, and the content is specific.
3. The metaphor is appropriate and the words are vivid. 4. The language of the article is easy to understand, close to the reality of life and friendly to read.
5 ... tell us in a relaxed and happy tone, which is unforgettable. 6. The narrative is natural and vivid, with compact structure, coherent connection with nature and prominent center.
7. For the description of the scenery, the language is concise and accurate, while the association is touching the scene, and the scene is naturally integrated. 8. By enriching the characters' language and actions, the ideological quality of the characters is set off.
9. This article is lyrical in narration. 10, full use of dynamic and static writing, supplemented by metaphor, personification and other techniques 1 1, the author's careful observation, orderly narration 12, and the use of some subtle words have invisibly added a lot of interest to the article.
13, the article is elegant, fluent and coherent, especially the characters' language is humorous. 14, the article is reasonable. 15, through vivid language description, let readers feel like they are in a dream. 16, the article has clear clues and prominent themes, closely surrounding …
17, the details are quite clever. Extremely rich in skills.
18, characters' language, demeanor, movements, etc. , have been described in detail.