Ambition should have been a good thing, but because I didn't know myself, I set my goal too high, which eventually led to the failure of the snail. Dialectical analysis is rare. If snails are like this, aren't people like this? Therefore, we must put our position in order to grasp the future. [From this to that, put forward a positive point of view: we must put ourselves in a correct position]
People who overestimate themselves will push themselves to the edge of the cliff. [Expand the first paragraph of the first sentence. I wonder if you have any impression of the Great Leap Forward at the beginning of the founding of the People's Republic of China? At that time, China people were so arrogant that they boasted that "China will surpass the Soviet Union economically in a few years." So they concentrated the people of the whole country on economic construction. As a result, they not only failed to honor their promises, but also brought a lot of trouble to the country and the people were miserable. The failure at the beginning of the founding of the People's Republic taught us a lesson. We should set practical goals according to our own situation, and don't overestimate ourselves. [Take this paragraph and control the beginning of the paragraph]
People who underestimate themselves are people who bury their talents. [Expand the second, the first central sentence of the paragraph. There are many people around us who always think that they are inherently inferior to others. Despite their efforts, they still don't, so their talents are buried by their stupid ideas. The ancients said, "I was born useful." No one is born a genius, such as Newton and Edison ... they are all the results of their own efforts. So please put those who underestimate themselves in a correct position and let their talents fly. [Take this paragraph and control the beginning of the paragraph]
The person who is in the right position is the person who leads to the hall of success. [Expand the first sentence of the third paragraph. Do you remember the man who lived in the silent world? When she was young, illness deprived her of the right to listen to the world, but she didn't give up her life because of it. She positioned herself in the palace of art. Through hard work, her program "Guanyin with a Thousand Hands" touched China and everyone in China. Everyone's ability is limited. As long as you keep your position right, everyone will be a successful person. [Take this paragraph and control the beginning of the paragraph]
6. People in the right place can find oases in the desert; Only those who put themselves in a correct position can grasp their future; People in the right position are the diggers of their own talents (changed to "can dig their own talents" and the contextual sentences should be harmonious); People who put themselves in the right position can ...
If you don't want to end up with nothing in this life, please get to know yourself again and put yourself in the right position. [Close the full text and take care of the opening]
Maybe it (snail) should choose its own way and do what it can.
There are countless crossroads in life, so we should do what we can. ..... Too high a goal is easy to make people decadent, and too low a goal will make people down and out all their lives. Life should have an appropriate goal.
(2) Someone asked, is it the right choice to do what you can? I think it's more than that. ..... don't do unjust things.
(3) Dare to take the right path. ..... Give you a way, if you dare to walk, it's the process.
【 Conclusion 】 Life is spent in choices. When faced with a choice, you can be a rational person only if you do what you can. Only by measuring right and wrong can you become a wise man; Dare to fight is brave. Snail made the wrong choice, chose the wrong goal and chose to give up. Life should take this as a mirror and choose the right path.
Please take the first step to success.
Peng, Class Two, Senior Three.
Everything in the world must take the first step before it can succeed.
Take the first step and we will see the door to success. (2) When we take the first step, we can see the way forward. (3) By taking the first step, we can gain greater confidence.
Please take the first step to success, don't be afraid of the front like a snail. The road to success ahead is beckoning to you. As long as you take a step, you can see the door to success, see the way forward and gain greater confidence.
Set goals correctly when doing things.
Xu Huiqun, Senior Three (10)
It can be seen from here that we should set our goals correctly.
(1) Setting goals correctly is the prerequisite for doing things well. (2) Setting goals correctly is the cornerstone of success. (3) Setting goals correctly can make us realize the value of life better.
【 Conclusion 】 We should proceed from reality, do what we can, set correct and suitable learning goals for ourselves, test our level in the college entrance examination and enter our ideal university.
go into action
Jing Wong, Grade Three (10)
The snail made up his mind to succeed in half, but gave up the other half of success-action.
(1) Action is the way to put ambition into practice. (2) Action is the best way to prove your ability.
(3) Action is the only way to succeed.
[Conclusion] Haven't you put your ambition into practice? Are you still proving yourself on paper? Haven't you succeeded yet?
Come on, let's go!
Overestimating and underestimating
Senior three (10) class leaves
[Beginning] Because of the phenomenon of overestimation and inferiority, we should know ourselves correctly.
(1) Only when you know yourself correctly can you set your goals accurately. (2) Only by knowing yourself correctly can we work hard for the set goals. (3) Only when you know yourself correctly can you realize your dream goal.
[Conclusion] ... Know yourself correctly.
Read the following materials and write as required:
Walnut trees along the road are covered with walnuts. In order to pick walnuts, passers-by hit it with stones and sticks and broke its branches. The walnut tree could not help but sigh: "Alas, my life is really bitter!" " I use my walnuts for people to enjoy, but they give me this pain in return! "A nearby walnut tree that doesn't bear walnuts said sympathetically," It seems that you have to learn from me. If you don't bear a walnut, how can others ruin you! The walnut tree with walnuts thought for a moment and said, "but, in the end, I also have my value and glory!" When people pass by me, they often admire my skills and contributions. Once there is no result, can I still get these honors? Besides, can a walnut tree without walnuts be regarded as a walnut tree? "
Requirements: Fully understand the material, or write an argumentative essay of not less than 800 words according to its meaning. Self-defined and self-drawn topics.
Pain and happiness
Gao Ying, Class 22, Senior Three.
A walnut tree is admired for its full fruit, which is its happiness; People break its branches to get fruit, which is its pain. Give up happiness for fear of pain? No, life should be painful and happy.
Aida, the Queen of Flamengo who has been wearing braces for more than 20 years, is still dancing happily. Her happiness today comes from her persistence in the face of pain. I can imagine what would happen if she gave up her passionate art and chose a life without pain. She will fall into endless yearning for the stage and tear her heart out to give up. In that case, life will lose its meaning to her, let alone happiness. I admire her indomitable spirit and thank her at the same time. I'm glad she didn't become a walking corpse. She accepted the pain gladly. She was painful and happy.
Perhaps, you think that only people will make such a choice. However, there are also such examples in animals.
Mantis, who always looks fragile, only occasionally wastes her "sword" by bluffing. But it paid the price of death for the continuation of life. "Wedding Night" has no warmth in their world, only cold and bloody. At that time, the female mantis would eat the male mantis to reproduce. It's a little strange, isn't it? Perhaps, most people will dismiss this and attribute it to the laws of nature. But I always think they have feelings. In this case, they not only tasted the pain of death, but also encountered new life and eternal happiness. It is tragic to exchange death for a new life, but it makes people full of awe, pain and happiness.
I can't help thinking of butterflies that are equally painful and happy. The battle of breaking cocoon, the joy of become a butterfly and the sadness of become a butterfly have become the best and most vivid portrayal for us at this time.
I don't remember how I spent these days, but I think they are heavy and lengthy, which makes people breathless. We are like pupae waiting for a butterfly to struggle in the cocoon. After the butterfly is formed, it is supported by the blue sky, fragrant stamens and smooth breeze. Pain, since you don't need happiness, but how can happiness be erased? The days when we walked hand in hand, the days when tears and laughter poured down, and the days when we fought for our dreams will be engraved in our hearts. And the beautiful scenery not far ahead is enough to make us happy. We never regret it, because we go all out; We have never been lost, because there are dreams to guide us; We never give up, because of pain, we are happy.
Don't expect a perfect life, and don't fantasize about a life without pain. Isn't it happiness to bear some pain for the happiness you want? Walking on the road of life is full of hope, because of pain and happiness.
Comments: Advantages: This paper can closely follow the material itself, analyze the implication from the material, and grasp that people will inevitably face many difficulties and hardships in the process of survival, but at the same time they will also reap the happiness of life accordingly. And this kind of happiness is exactly the value of life we are pursuing. This idea is more accurate. Put forward opinions at the beginning, concise and clear, with examples and transition in writing, which can constantly echo the center and theme, and connect with real life and one's own feelings. Language is fluent and natural.
Disadvantages: In the process of argumentation, it is best to change the order of the previous examples, so that plants, animals and people can go deeper and more convincingly. On the basis of two detailed examples, other brief examples should be supplemented to enrich the content of the article. Suggested score: 47 points
Walnut life
Zhang Yun, senior three 1 1 class.
A walnut tree full of walnuts, although often bullied and destroyed, enjoys the glory of being praised all its life, brings people sweet walnuts, realizes its own value, and turns bitter bile into sweet honey juice.
A walnut tree without walnuts, although never bullied and intact, has devoted its life to endless emptiness, without any contribution or favor, and lost its direction of survival in comfort.
Two trees, two lives, lives like walnuts. Some people live a quiet life, but they are as lifeless as a stagnant pool; Some people have a rough life, but they mobilize all the colors to dance.
"God will be a great responsibility to the people of Sri Lanka, so we must first suffer from their aspirations, their bones and muscles, and starve them to death ..." Life without difficulties is meaningless. King Wen was arrested and played Zhouyi, while Zhong You wrote Chunqiu. Qu Yuan's exile is a tribute to Li Sao. Zuo Qiu is blind and has "Mandarin"; The ruler of the revised version of Sun Tzu's Art of War; Before Wei moved to Shu, the world passed on to Lu Lan, and Han Fei imprisoned Qin, indicating difficulty and loneliness; "Poetry" 300, the underground sages, also angry. Which of these masterpieces was not produced after suffering? Which of these sages we admire is immortal without going through ups and downs? They groped their way forward in the darkness, but the darkness gave them the courage to break through the darkness, and their sharper eyes looked for light in the darkness. They left immortal classics, which made people think deeply and aroused the heroic feelings of countless people with lofty ideals. And their life value is condensed and sublimated in this darkness.
Gong Yu is determined to move mountains. His heart is higher than the sky and deeper than the sea. Although he failed, people will always remember him. Those who dissuade and laugh at the foolish old man cringe, only seek temporary comfort, dare not challenge and are unwilling to pay, and finally end their lives in obscurity and mediocrity, and are forgotten in the corner of history.
Life is a long river, with walnut trees full of walnuts and walnut trees without walnuts growing on both sides of the river. The trees on this river bank are flourishing and full of fruits, and the attractive fragrance floats on the river, attracting people's admiration and appreciation; On the other side of the river, the dry trunk looks pale and weak in the cold and loneliness. Even the fish in the river will turn around and leave here. Even if it is safe and comfortable, where is the spiritual comfort? Where should people who travel between the two sides of the strait stay?
Comments: Advantages: The idea of this article is accurate, the title is well drafted, the soul of the article can be seen through the title, the beginning and end are vivid, it can be handled skillfully, the presentation and summary are in a comparative structure, and the cited materials are reasonable.
Disadvantages: The article uses the contrast structure at the beginning and end of the argument, but in the specific process of argument, it only gives examples and analyzes the positive side, while the negative side is only vague and fails to fully demonstrate, which is one-sided. Quote an ancient poem, some of which are too long and should be deleted. Suggested score: 44 points
Read the following text and write as required. (60 points)
In an abandoned garden.
The beautiful swimming pool has dried up to the bottom. Beautiful flowers and trees withered. The rose is dead, and the nightingale hasn't come for a long time. Except crickets groaning in the grass, only poisonous weeds and thorny thorns are growing.
One day, suddenly several people came to the garden.
When they saw such a bleak situation in this beautiful garden, their faces showed admiration and regret, and they almost cried. One man sighed, "Are we going to make it desolate?" The others stood up resolutely and replied, "No, never! We should all try to put it in order. " So they discussed how to transform this overgrown garden.
One person said, "We should cut down weeds and thorns before planting flowers and trees."
Another person said, "Otherwise. You should bring flowers and trees first, and then cut off weeds and thorns, because-"
Another person said, "I agree with Mr. A. If weeds and thorns are not removed first, good trees and flowers will never be planted." Because-"
Others said, "Otherwise. What you said is wrong. I agree with Mr. B because-"
They gave many reasons, argued with each other and cited many examples to prove their words. From breakfast to noon, every household began to smoke, but did not stop; Even because of disagreement, they swore at each other ... and were scuffled.
The deserted garden is still deserted.
You need to have a comprehensive understanding of the material, but you can choose a side and an angle to conceive the composition. Independently determine ideas, questions and titles; Don't deviate from the meaning of the material, don't copy it, and don't copy it.
Train of thought: the new material composition can be refined from multiple angles, which makes it easier to digress. First of all, we should grasp the key sentences, and secondly, we should "trace the cause with the result" What is the reason from "the garden is still barren"? If you look for a breakthrough, you can find the main idea of the material.
The following questions may be appropriate:
"Empty talk is not as good as action", "action is not as good as empty talk", "it is better to retreat and build a net than to fish in the pond" and so on.
The following angles can meet the meaning of the question or basically meet the meaning of the question:
Seek common ground while reserving differences, coordinate, unite and cooperate
Deviation from the meaning of the question: priority, compromise, concession, eloquence, harmony, goal, decision.
Example 1
Actions speak louder than words. Senior year Levin.
Krylov said: "Reality is this shore, ideal is the other shore, and action is a bridge on the river across the rushing river."
Facing the torrent of life, it seems that everyone will be fearless and shout out a few earth-shattering rhetoric, but few people really dare to set foot on the torrent. Just like a few people in the garden, facing the barren and depressed garden, they will talk about it in succession, and Kan Kan will talk about it. As a result, I talked about a train and achieved nothing.
The person who talks the most is not necessarily the person who does the most. No matter how loud the thunder is, if the raindrops are too small, it is just a bluff. Doing is the truest thing, and actions speak louder than words.
Less empty talk, more work, hard work and action are the embodiment of a person's quality and accomplishment. Hua said: "Old trees are easy to empty and old people are easy to untie. In a scientific way, we should empty them and untie them. I am willing to stick to it all my life. " In fact, it is not only the way of science, but also the way of being a man. Doing things in a down-to-earth manner and being cautious and serious about others reflect a person's fighting spirit and realistic attitude.
The father of hybrid rice, in the face of great reputation, still maintains a down-to-earth work style, walking among the ridges and immersed in the waves of rice. His hard working spirit is admirable. Ji, an ancient writer, devoted himself to research and personally inspected, never saying much. His rigorous style is popular all over the world and admirable.
Only by working hard and putting it into action can the ideal sail muster strength and the ship of life sail to the other side of success. No matter how well a person speaks and how touching he speaks, if he doesn't prove everything through actions and achieve his goal through hard work, he will eventually achieve nothing.
Balzac, who was determined to finish what Napoleon did not finish with his sword, continued to write, worked hard, realized his dream with his actions and harvested the fruits of success. Nicolo Paganini, an Italian violinist in prison, persisted in exercising for ten years and made a legendary life with his actions. Throughout the world, successful people are down-to-earth, work hard and achieve their glory with actions. And those empty talkers who just talk and don't do it are lost in the yellow sand of history and forgotten by people.
In today's society, we students can only achieve the fruits of success if we have pragmatic qualities and study hard. Only when our national leaders can speak and do better can they truly benefit the people and contribute to society. Only through action and hard work can our society prosper and make continuous progress.
The ancients said: "I think about it every day, so it is better to learn it in an instant." Now I say, "A whole day is better than an instant." Friends, let's act, abandon those great principles and create a better future with our actions. Because actions speak louder than words.
Comments: The opening of this article is obvious, and the concise introduction and appropriate metaphor throw out a clear and accurate point of view. Then several aspects are discussed layer by layer, which are well-founded and thorough. The language is concise, and he is good at using rhetorical devices such as metaphor, parallelism and quotation to make the article swaying and colorful. Words: 895 20+ 19+9 = 48 points.
Example 2
Say it a hundred times and never do it again.
The garden is deserted and everyone wants to trim it. But everyone held their own opinions and argued endlessly, but no one really practiced it, and finally the garden was deserted. They talked about many theories and criticized each other. These empty words are not good for the garden. Imagine if one of them had done it in his own way, the garden would be full of flowers and grass now!
In fact, dealing with people is not the case. Sweet words are like sugar in your mouth. They can make you happy, but they are useless. As a dose of Chinese medicine, it is plain and simple, but it saved your life when you were in trouble. To achieve a great thing, you need to do it down-to-earth, not what I want to do tomorrow, but what you do now and do it well.
Practice is a noble quality of human beings and plays an important role in their growth.
The chairman of "Wuyeshen" enterprise, as Wuyeshen's advertising words said, "Strive for the future", starting from a small shop assistant and doing everything in a down-to-earth manner. Even if you succeed, you should do things solidly. Can do this without getting tired of fame and pretending to be an entrepreneur. Really do it, let the "Five Leaves God" enterprise continue to grow and become a big enterprise in our province. It can be seen that a person has a real "pragmatic" spirit and plays an important role in a person's growth.
Doing is the premise of success, but empty talk is the stumbling block.
Throughout postwar Japan, people on the ridges were poor. Surrounded by desolation, it has become the second largest economy in the world in just a few decades, which is caused by the fighting spirit of the Japanese. They advocate industry and go to the west to learn advanced technology bit by bit. In the end, their fighting spirit paid off, and TV sets, cars, instant noodles and other products sold well all over the world. Japan has succeeded, and they have achieved national prosperity through hard work.
Working hard is the spirit that our young friends must have for the rise of China, and empty talk is the root of our inaction.
The increasingly fierce competition in the world is, in the final analysis, the competition for talents. Talents must talk less and do more practical things. "It's better to retreat and make a net than to fish in deep water." Instead of talking about our future ideals, such as "we are the hope of the future motherland and make contributions to the motherland", it is better to do something for our goals from now on. Empty talk is just an excuse for our failure. Study hard, work hard step by step for our dreams, do more practical things for the rise of China and talk less.
Things are ever-changing, empty talk makes us lose time to do it, immerse ourselves in our own fantasy world, and eventually lead to inaction and regret. From now on, we should do what we think is good, accept the test of reality and achieve a successful life. Words: 846 19+ 19+8 = 46.
Comments: The examination questions are in place, the viewpoints are clear and correct, the argument structure is clear, the arguments are in-depth, and the arguments are rich and typical. The arrangement of the three sub-arguments is reasonable.
Example 3
Doing is better than talking.
The abandoned garden of several people; When I came to the garden, I felt very sad and saw that the very beautiful garden became very desolate. They all want to add a beautiful landscape to the garden. So they put forward different opinions, all of which were reasonable, but none of them were put into action, and the deserted garden was still deserted. Imagine if they really put their ideas into action, then this garden would have become a beautiful garden. This shows that doing things is better than talking.
Throughout the history of the world, there are many people who talk big, but they have never done anything meaningful. There are many doers, but their contribution to society is extraordinary. Even though they have made little contribution to society, they have made due contributions to society. Unlike those empty talkers, they only brag and do nothing. Therefore, we should cultivate a spirit of doing things, because it is better to do things than to talk.
Doing things requires a persistent spirit.
It is easy for people to study and work in a down-to-earth manner, but it is not easy to stick to it all their lives. Seventy-year-old Hua often said: "Old trees are easy to empty, old people are easy to loose, and the way of science is empty and loose." I am willing to stick to it all my life. " Hua Lao's persistence and fighting spirit make him a bright star in the field of mathematics in China. We can see from Hua Lao that we really need the spirit of struggle.
Hard work requires down-to-earth quality.
In the early days of the founding of the People's Republic of China, our party implemented a large-scale production policy. "Satellite" is widely used in various places, and the phenomenon of exaggeration is prevalent. It is seriously divorced from the actual situation in China, which has dealt a serious blow to China's national economy, seriously damaged the modernization of the party and the country, and made the people miserable. It was not until the Third Plenary Session of the Eleventh Central Committee of the Communist Party of China was held that the Party adopted the line of seeking truth from facts and pioneering, so that China's productive forces were developed, its comprehensive national strength was improved, and people's living standards were improved. Deng Xiaoping once said: "All our past achievements depend on seeking truth from facts;" It is necessary to seek truth from facts to modernize now. "How important it is to work hard!
Hard work requires an honest and sincere heart.
"Less empty talk and more practical work." It is the motto of Mr. Ba Jin and a true portrayal of his life. Ba Jin pursued telling the truth and doing practical things all his life, and advocated literature not for literature's sake. He advocates treating people with an honest and sincere heart, whether at work or young. Therefore, he is known as "the conscience of China in the 20th century".
Therefore, for those who talk big all day and talk big and do nothing, please do more practical things, so that life will be more meaningful. A thousand "0s" are not worth one "1", and a thousand wishes are not worth one practical action. We firmly believe that words speak louder than deeds. Words: 892 19+ 18+8 = 45.
Comments: The concise introduction at the beginning of the article naturally leads to the central argument, the argument structure is clear, the argument is typical and substantial, and the good citation makes this normative argumentative paper show the beauty of literary talent.
Example 4
Practice speaks louder than words.
Everyone in the garden is undoubtedly a superb talker, but they are also low-level practitioners. In the end, they got nothing through dialogue, and the garden remained deserted. Sadly, sadly, if one of them tries to practice, maybe the result will be very different, and maybe the garden will be colorful again next spring!
From this perspective, we should realize that practice is better than empty talk. Balzac, a writer, once said, "Eloquence is the clever means of sophists, and practice is the only way to truth." So, my friends, let's put down the shelf of theorists and talkers and stretch out our hands to practice hard on the road of life!
Practice is the premise and foundation of eloquence.
Mao Zedong, our leader, once said, "Whoever has not practiced it will have no right to speak." Indeed, Chairman Mao's words are as thought-provoking as the morning bell and the evening drum. Without practice, where can you get the theory and eloquence? All eloquence should be based on practice. When Marx created socialist theory, he discovered the disadvantages of capitalism through constant practice and investigation, and put forward Das Kapital, which shocked the world on the basis of practice. Sima Qian, the author of Historical Records, also traveled all over the country, constantly collecting historical materials and writing this unprecedented Historical Records. So practice, our eloquence should be based on practice.
Practice is the only criterion to test eloquence.
The truth of eloquence should be tested by practice. Eloquence that cannot stand the test of practice is always a false argument. As we all know, Deng Xiaoping's theory of "one country, two systems" was questioned by the people of China when it was first put forward. However, with the rapid prosperity of Hong Kong and Macao, it is finally proved that "one country, two systems" is the best way to solve the problems between the mainland and Hong Kong, Macao and Taiwan Province Province. Don't jump to conclusions when we hear others talking eloquently. It is necessary to test whether his eloquence is correct through practice.
Practice is a powerful way to achieve this goal.
Any eloquence and theory that wants to be applied to real life must be realized through practice. And talking on paper is undoubtedly an idiotic dream, and ultimately nothing. The famous French orator Rothesay is a boaster, but he never put it into practice. In the end, none of his theories can be realized. Wang Xuan, the inventor of laser phototypesetting technology for Chinese characters, finally realized the theorization of laser phototypesetting technology for Chinese characters through continuous practice and with the spirit of not being afraid of difficulties, and went to the world and went down in history. So let our theory and eloquence be realized through the world.
Practice, my friends! Don't talk on paper, you should know that practice speaks louder than words. Only by constantly practicing and never stopping can we finally succeed, and we can feel the sky blue and grass blue in life, and the clouds are light and the wind is light! Words: 89 1
Comments: The article can be drawn from the introduction, which naturally leads to the central argument. The argument structure is clear, which enriches the argument from three aspects, and the use of parallelism sentences enhances the power of the argument. However, from the perspective of "eloquence", we can only think that it is in line with the meaning of the question.
16+20+7 = 43 points
Comments: Avoid copying materials in the composition of new materials. This composition quotes concise materials, which naturally leads to arguments. The material is typical and convincing. However, the entrance to the exam is not allowed and the content is not substantial. 15+ 18+7 = 40 points.