Example 1: The result is plotted graphically. ...
Improvement: draw the results. ...
Analysis: plot itself means drawing, so graphics can be removed. If you want to use graphics, you can write: the result is represented by graphics ..., but this is obviously not as concise as drawing the result. ...
By the way, the verbs indicating the collocation of "drawing" and "survival curve" are as follows:
To generate a survival curve
Draw survival curve
To build a survival curve
Example 2: This arrangement avoids re-inhaling the previously exhausted gas. ...
Improvement: This arrangement avoids rebreathing. ...
Analysis: rebreathing means inhaling exhaled gas, so this arrangement avoids rebreathing. ...
Example 3: It completely meets the requirements.
Improvement: ... fully meets the requirements in. ...
Analysis: Demand and need have similar meanings, so need can be removed.
Example 4: Different degrees of operation, from simple drainage to complete laparotomy.
Improvement: The operation changed from simple drainage to complete laparotomy.
Analysis: "Unequal size", "Unequal size" and "From" to "are all expressions about the scope, which can be simplified as: from simple drainage to complete laparotomy.
Example 5: Our results may be better. ...
Improvement: Our results may be better. ...
Analysis: "Possibility" and "possibility" have the same meaning, so you can choose either one.
Example 6: Myoclonus and myelination can be regarded as sequelae AE.
Improvement: Myoclonus and myelination may be sequelae of AE.
Analysis: Sequela ae must be followed, so the follow-up can be removed.
Repetition 2: "Differences between China and Britain"
False: Although aspirin is effective for rheumatoid arthritis, it is not effective for ankylosing spondylitis.
Correct: Although aspirin is effective for rheumatoid arthritis, it has no therapeutic effect on ankylosing spondylitis. Or aspirin is effective for rheumatoid arthritis, but not for ankylosing spondylitis.
Analysis: "Although ...
False: In addition, some patients also received potassium supplements.
Correct: In addition, some patients received potassium supplements.
Analysis: In Chinese, we will say "In addition, some patients have taken potassium supplements", but in English, we either use "in addition" or "also".
False: Recent studies show that mast cells store and release pre-infectious diseases including IL-4 and IL-6.
Correct: Recent studies show that mast cells store and release pre-infectious diseases including IL-4 and IL-6.
Analysis: In Chinese, we often say "including, etc." , but in English, including/such as and so on. Can't appear at the same time. Because there are some contents after including/as, it means that there are other contents besides the listed contents, and so is etc. It means that some contents are omitted, so you can choose either of them.
Repetition 3: "The same word appears many times"
Case ①:2 patients were type I, 7 patients were type II, and 1 was type iii mirizzi syndrome.
In order to avoid repetition, you can only write the name of the disease at the end of the sentence. In addition, except for the patient at the beginning, the patient is omitted at the back.
Example 2: A total of 29 patients completed laparoscopic chocolate examination, all of whom had type I or type II Mirizzi syndrome. 1 case of type Ⅱ patients underwent laparoscopic cholecystectomy and common bile duct exploration. Two patients with type III or IV diseases were converted to open surgery; Type III patients underwent end-to-end bile duct anastomosis, and type IV patients underwent cholangioenterostomy.
Change the expression form according to the situation, such as type * Mirizzi syndrome, type * patients, type * patients.
Example 3: Of all patients, 26 showed complete response, 12 showed partial response, and 5 showed no response.
Except for the patient at first, the patient was omitted later, avoiding the repetitive appearance of the patient.
Example 4: ldt effectively controls hepatitis activity among outstanding women with CHB, because it rapidly reduces HBV DNA level and reduces mother-to-child transmission of HBV. Therefore, its use is beneficial to both mother and baby.
Use pronouns to refer to the previous LdT to avoid repeated expression.
Case ⑤: 10 patients found local recurrence,1/kloc-0 patients found metastasis.
This sentence pattern can only be used once and will not affect the expression of sentence meaning.