Thinking after reading the article?
Attachment: Original and revised draft entitled "Name and Reality" (part)?
Original manuscript:?
Of course, a person's "reality" is not necessarily cast into his name in his lifetime, but as long as he has "reality", it will be remembered and affirmed by history. This is another kind of "name"-name lasts forever. For example, Li Bai and Du Fu are both "poetic immortals" and "poetic saints" affirmed by history. Needless to say, their talents are not always smooth sailing, and even they are always stumbling. At that time, they were not recognized by people, especially bureaucrats. But after historical precipitation, it was finally affirmed by people. Although this name is not very direct, it can also show that "name" is based on "reality"?
Revised draft:?
Of course, there are also cases where a person with real talent and independent achievements may not be praised by people before his death and win the reputation he deserves. But as long as he really achieves something, he will be recognized by the people behind him and get the "name" he deserves. The painter Van Gogh's paintings and styles were abandoned by the appreciators before his death. However, with the development of the times and the progress of history, his "advanced" works were finally understood and appreciated by future generations. It can be seen that a "real" person, even if he is lonely before his death, will achieve great things behind him. ?
Think about this question:
(1) What's your opinion? What is the difference in the expression of the central argument?
Clarity: the center of this article: a person with "reality" will achieve great fame even if he is lonely before his death. ?
There is an error in the expression of the central argument of the manuscript: the "name" and "reality" in the central argument of the manuscript are too abstract and have no specific content. The revised draft specifically points out their respective connotations. ?
(2) Students think: Why did the author change the example to Van Gogh in the revised draft?
Clarity: We can see that it is reasonable to compare the names behind Li Bai and Du Fu with their experiences before their death in the manuscript, but it is not appropriate to associate "name" with "official career"; Besides, Li Bai was famous all over the world before his death, which was inconsistent with the center. So pay attention to the correctness of the argument when using it. In addition, Li Bai and Du Fu are familiar to us, while Van Gogh's case has a certain freshness and modernity, which gives people a refreshing feeling.