The sentence "our list is as follows" is obviously not smooth. The main problem is "we". Just delete "we" or replace "we" with a list name, for example, "All names are listed below". There is nothing wrong with the sentence "We can draw a conclusion from the above experimental results", but it is a bit colloquial. More is to write adjustment "xxxxx conclusion can be drawn from the above experimental results". In fact, the easiest way is to ask someone to help read and correct the whole paper.