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20 19 the topic of the national essay volume is as follows:
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"People's livelihood is diligent, but diligence is not scarce", and labor is the source of wealth and happiness. "Sleeping at night, sweeping the court" and loving labor are the excellent traditions of the Chinese nation, which have continued to this day. But in real life, some students don't understand and don't want to work. Some said, "We are too busy studying, and labor takes up too much time!" "Some people say," With the rapid progress of science and technology, the future labor can be left to artificial intelligence! "Others said," Labor is so hard and tiring, why do you have to do it yourself? Spend some money to let others do it! "In addition, there are some phenomena around us that don't respect labor.
This has aroused people's deep thinking.
Please write a speech for the students in our school (collectively referred to as "Fuxing Middle School") according to the content of the materials, and advocate that everyone "love labor and start from me", reflect your understanding and thinking, and put forward hopes and suggestions. Requirements: self-made topics, self-selected angles, and determined ideas; Do not copy or copy; Do not disclose personal information; Not less than 800 words.
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First, the topic is analyzed sentence by sentence.
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"People's livelihood is diligent, but diligence is not scarce", and labor is the source of wealth and happiness.
The focus of this sentence is "the source of wealth". This is mainly a matter of material level. )
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"Sleeping at night, sweeping the court" and loving labor are the excellent traditions of the Chinese nation, which have continued to this day.
(Tradition is mainly spiritual. This is the most important point of all materials. Students, this is a Chinese exam. Your reviewer is a Chinese teacher, a Chinese major student and a master student. Therefore, the key point is not that labor creates material wealth, but spiritual wealth. Everyone must remember this sentence firmly.
This is the first level of matter, and it is concluded that labor can create material and spiritual values. )
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But in real life, some students don't understand and don't want to work.
(the negative point of view is coming. Pay attention to "don't understand" here. This is a summary of all negative views. What candidates have to do now is to clarify their understanding of labor. )
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Some said, "We are too busy studying, and labor takes up too much time!" "
(Negative view 1, labor and study are opposites. This view is easy to crack, because the purpose of our study is labor. )
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Some said, "Science and technology are progressing rapidly, and we can leave artificial intelligence in the future!"
(Negative point 2: Oppose science and technology with labor. This is not easy to crack, because technology can really greatly reduce the amount of labor. What shall we do? Let's go back to the first level of our topic. )
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Others said, "Labor is so hard and tiring, why do you have to do it yourself? Spend some money to let others do it! "
The idea here is to let others do it with money, which many students often can't figure out. Because we usually pay others to do things for us, for example, we can't go home for dinner or we can't catch up with cooking when we go home. When eating, you can only buy rice in the restaurant; I have to go to school and work by taxi because I am in a hurry. Because many people have done this thing, and even some people often do it, it is not easy for us to think of its irrationality. But think about it carefully, "why do you have to do it yourself when you are so hard and tired?" It turns out that the trap of this view lies in the first two sentences. The reason why you don't work is not because you are in urgent need, but just to avoid "pain" and "fatigue". Now it is clear that it is not a bad thing to spend money to let others do things, but to spend money to let others do things at will in order to avoid hard work. )
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In addition, there are some phenomena around us that don't respect labor.
(The following is another summary. The core problem of the first three viewpoints is "disrespect" for labor. Combined with the reason of "ignorance" mentioned at the beginning, we can sort out a train of thought: some people don't respect labor because they don't understand the meaning of labor. )
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This has aroused people's deep thinking.
("this" refers to the first three phenomena of disrespect and ignorance of labor. "Arousing people's deep thoughts" is the task assigned by the questioner to the candidates. This sentence reminds us that candidates should refute all or one or two of the first three negative views in the article. )
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Please write a speech for the students in our school (collectively referred to as "Fuxing Middle School") according to the content of the materials, and advocate that everyone "love labor and start from me", reflect your understanding and thinking, and put forward hopes and suggestions.
("Fuxing Middle School", this hint is very clear. The last part of our article must be summed up as "the great rejuvenation of the Chinese nation". In addition, everyone should pay attention to the stylistic problems of the "speech draft". Combining last year's epistolary style with the three-choice proposition of the year before, it can be seen that the proposer has always wanted to innovate in the form of composition proposition. In fact, the format of a speech is similar to that of a letter, both of which should have a header and a fixed ending. In fact, we'd better use this special format more consciously in our usual practice. Finally, there is a hint of "love labor, start with me", which many students are puzzled. Is this the fixed title of our article, or is it just a restriction on the central idea at the end of the article? In the examination room, there are not a few students who are entangled in this problem. However, as long as we calm down and think about it, we will find that the real intention of the questioner is the latter. Because the original text is "advocating everyone", this initiative is a soft formulation and a slogan. Of course, if you are afraid of digression, then the safest way is to take "love labor, start with me" as the topic. Will this affect the candidates' composition scores? In the real marking scene, it will not be affected too much. For the same article, the fluctuation of scores due to different topics generally does not exceed 2 points. Everyone should have confidence in the judges. Even many provinces have the requirement that "titles should not be used instead of labeling the content of articles". )
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Requirements: self-made topics, self-selected angles, and determined ideas; Do not copy or copy; Do not disclose personal information; Not less than 800 words.
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Two. Comments on benchmarking articles
The following is one of the benchmark compositions of 20 19 college entrance examination issued by Guangdong Examinations Institute.
Bit by bit of labor, * * * construction prosperity.
(The topic closely follows the two key words "labor" and "revival")
□ Guangdong candidates
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Dear students:
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Hello everyone! The topic of my speech today is "Building a prosperous world with a little work".
(The above is the stylistic requirements of the Speech. )
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Labor is the principle that all mankind follows. From the primitive society that ate and drank blood like animals to today's splendid modern civilization, it is labor that pushes the wheel of history forward.
A is B, which is to define a battlefield for your argument and answer the question of what labor is.
But does it look familiar? "Labor is the source of wealth and happiness", which is the text in the title. What did the author do? He just put it another way. He concretized the "source" as a "wheel". )
Labor is also a fine tradition of the Chinese nation since ancient times.
("Love of labor is an excellent tradition of the Chinese nation, which continues to this day", almost copying the original words. )
For thousands of years, the Chinese nation has intensively cultivated, created endless miracles of ancient civilization, opened up great rivers and mountains of the motherland and created countless spiritual wealth. The tradition of "farming and reading" has lasted for thousands of years, and the ancestral motto "people's livelihood is diligent and diligent, and diligence is not lacking" lingers in my ears. Labor has become a gene in the blood of China people.
("Intensive cultivation" corresponds to wealth, and "ploughing and reading" corresponds to tradition. Clever as you can see, these two sentences are a detailed expansion of the current two sentences. )
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Save trouble and scenery, treat them differently.
Learn this sentence by heart. It is a common sentence. Its core meaning is "the wheel of history is rolling forward". )
In the 40 years of reform and opening up, countless China people's dribs and drabs have gathered into a torrent of the times, which has significantly enhanced China's national strength.
Reform and opening up is the superficial reason for the prosperity of our country, and the deeper reason is the hard work of the people of China. )
Farmers' labor has made us tighten our rice bowls. The sweat of workers is every brick of high-rise buildings, and researchers make great countries' heavy weapons frequently surprise the world!
(For example, it can be divided into three aspects: farmers, workers and researchers. )
Without labor, there would be no achievements that attract worldwide attention today.
(Look familiar? That's right. The central sentence of the second paragraph of the full text: "Labor is the norm that all mankind follows. From the primitive society that ate and drank blood like animals to the splendid modern civilization, it was labor that pushed the wheel of history forward. " Say it again.
This paragraph is a reference and development of "Fuxing Middle School" in the title. Here, what do we find the author's practice? By the way, it is to expand the central sentence in the topic and enrich the details. Some students will say, this is too easy! Of course.-it's not easy. This development should take imagination and peacetime language accumulation as a tool.
To sum up, I put forward the view at the beginning: labor creates material wealth and spiritual wealth. The representative of creating material wealth is "intensive cultivation"; The representative of creating spiritual wealth is "farming and reading". Then it points out that labor is the fundamental reason for reform, opening up and national prosperity. Taking farmers, workers and scientific researchers as examples, it supports the view that their own labor has created material wealth and spiritual wealth. To sum up is to expand the central point of the topic and enrich the details.
Ordinary students write here, probably have run out of words, and don't know what to write. What should I do? )
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On the other hand, the phenomenon of not understanding and unwilling to work is worrying.
Now that the positive expansion has reached its limit, let's start the reverse discussion. Moreover, the clever author directly grasped the key words "don't understand" and "don't want to" in the topic. And clear attitude, "worry" and negative attitude towards these phenomena. )
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Busy with study, labor takes up time?
This is the first negative argument. )
Students, human development is a process of all-round development of morality, intelligence, physique, beauty and labor, which are indispensable. Learning is important, but labor is also indispensable.
The reason that the author finds here is to develop in an all-round way. )
In labor, we have exercised our will, strengthened our physique, increased our knowledge and broadened our horizons, which is also helpful to our study and enriched our after-school life. The two promote each other and improve our quality.
This is the role of labor in education. )
Give labor to artificial intelligence?
(The second negative view. )
It is true that scientific and technological progress can free our hands, but this does not mean that we can do nothing all day. Artificial intelligence also has many tasks that cannot be completed. Mental work that embodies human wisdom is still very important. The literary classics handed down from generation to generation and the refreshing Chun Xue are treasures that robots can never create.
The author also encountered difficulties in refuting the argument. It is obviously impossible to directly deny the significance of scientific and technological progress. Therefore, the author first realizes the significance of scientific and technological progress, and then discusses the limitations of scientific and technological progress. At present, science and technology can not completely replace human beings in many fields, especially in the field of artistic creation. )
If everyone doesn't work, the function of human beings will inevitably deteriorate step by step, and the future world will be unimaginable.
Based on the limitations of science and technology, this paper puts forward more extreme assumptions and infers the absurd future of human function degradation without labor. )
Hard work, paying people to do it?
(The third negative view. )
Indeed, labor is inevitable, but it is also an important means for us to develop ourselves, and the happiness when we get the fruits of labor can't be bought with money!
(At this point, the author regards self-development as the key to breaking hostile views. This is the same as the breaking point of the first negative view, both for our all-round development.
To sum up, in this part, the author refutes the three viewpoints one by one and proves the correctness of his own viewpoint from the opposite side. For the opposition between labor and study, break it with the viewpoint of all-round development; The opposition between science and technology and labor is solved by the limitations of science and technology and "advance and retreat"; From the point of view of all-round development, the opposition between labor and suffering and fatigue will still be broken.
This part can best reflect the author's skill. Through this part of refutation, the author has successfully completed the task assigned by the proposer.
To sum up, the second paragraph of the article begins to enter the text, and first answers the question of what labor is. Then give an example to explain why labor is a dual source. After that, why is there no contradiction between labor and learning, technology and enjoyment?
By the way, this part is the "why" part, which is the main part of the full text. )
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These are all ignoring the role of labor in national progress and personal development, and they are all wrong ideas that covet enjoyment and harm others and the country!
The first half of the sentence summarizes the mistakes of the above wrong views. No labor force is the progress of the country, but the second view leads to relying on science and technology and no one working. The last sentence is a summary of fear of suffering and fatigue. There is actually room for improvement here. It can be completely changed to: this is a wrong concept, which ignores the great significance of labor to personal development, national progress and human evolution. )
Here I sincerely hope that everyone can establish the idea of glorious labor.
(The previous definition of labor as a dual source answers what labor is. Then it analyzes why labor is a dual source, and also answers the wrong view that labor and learning are opposed to science and technology and hardship. Why is this? The next step is to answer the question of how to do it Now that we know what is right and what is wrong, how should we treat labor?
Remember the slogan "Love labor, start with me"? Here is an answer to why we should "love labor". )
Labor does not need to be vigorous. It is labor to clean up the environment and build a beautiful campus in daily life. Participating in social practice, visiting children in orphanages, doing some housework at home, and even picking up scraps of paper on the ground are all labor.
Clean the campus, visit children, do housework and pick up garbage. The solutions given by the author are very practical and grounded. )
Let's create an atmosphere of respecting and participating in labor!
(Shouted in response to "Start with me" in the title)
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With the development of the times and social progress, each of us needs to build a prosperous era with hard-working hands, so that Fuxing Middle School can shoulder the responsibility of rejuvenation!
(Finally, the author pointed out the hint of "Reviving Middle School" in the title, which closely followed the proposer's thinking. )
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My speech is over, thank you!
(speech routines. )
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Third, routine summary
Looking back at this article, do we find any profound skills used by the author?
Not exactly. The author's routine is particularly simple, that is, tightly buckle the logic and order of the topic and add branches and leaves.
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Looking back at the original question:
"People's livelihood is diligent, but diligence is not scarce", and labor is the source of wealth and happiness. "Sleeping at night, sweeping the court" and loving labor are the excellent traditions of the Chinese nation, which have continued to this day. But in real life, some students don't understand and don't want to work. Some said, "We are too busy studying, and labor takes up too much time!" "Some people say," With the rapid progress of science and technology, the future labor can be left to artificial intelligence! "Others said," Labor is so hard and tiring, why do you have to do it yourself? Spend some money to let others do it! "In addition, there are some phenomena around us that don't respect labor.
This has aroused people's deep thinking.
Please write a speech for the students in our school (collectively referred to as "Fuxing Middle School") according to the content of the materials, and advocate that everyone "love labor and start from me", reflect your understanding and thinking, and put forward hopes and suggestions.
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Its logic is:
Labor is a dual source (what is it)-some people don't understand and don't want to work-which is manifested in the opposition between labor and learning, science and technology, and enjoyment-which is a disrespect for labor (why)-to "love labor and start with me"-the purpose is "revival" (how to do it)
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Looking back at the benchmark:
Bit by bit of labor, * * * construction prosperity.
□ Guangdong candidates
Dear students:
Hello everyone! The topic of my speech today is "Building a prosperous world with a little work".
Labor is a common principle of all mankind. From the primitive society that ate and drank blood like animals to today's splendid modern civilization, it is labor that drives the wheel of history forward. Labor is also a fine tradition of the Chinese nation since ancient times. For thousands of years, the Chinese nation has intensively cultivated, created endless miracles of ancient civilization, opened up great rivers and mountains of the motherland and created countless spiritual wealth. The tradition of "farming and reading" has lasted for thousands of years, and the ancestral motto "people's livelihood is diligent and diligent, and diligence is not lacking" lingers in my ears. Labor has become a gene in the blood of China people.
Save trouble and scenery, treat them differently. In the 40 years of reform and opening up, countless China people's dribs and drabs have gathered into a torrent of the times, which has significantly enhanced China's national strength. Farmers' labor has made us tighten our rice bowls. The sweat of workers is every brick of high-rise buildings, and researchers make great countries' heavy weapons frequently surprise the world! Without labor, there would be no achievements that attract worldwide attention today.
On the other hand, the phenomenon of not understanding and unwilling to work is worrying.
Busy with study, labor takes up time? Students, human development is a process of all-round development of morality, intelligence, physique, beauty and labor, which are indispensable. Learning is important, but labor is also indispensable. In labor, we have exercised our will, strengthened our physique, increased our knowledge and broadened our horizons, which is also helpful to our study and enriched our after-school life. The two promote each other and improve our quality. Give labor to artificial intelligence? It is true that scientific and technological progress can free our hands, but this does not mean that we can do nothing all day. Artificial intelligence also has many tasks that cannot be completed. Mental work that embodies human wisdom is still very important. The literary classics handed down from generation to generation and the refreshing Chun Xue are treasures that robots can never create. If everyone doesn't work, the function of human beings will inevitably deteriorate step by step, and the future world will be unimaginable. Hard work, paying people to do it? Indeed, labor is inevitable, but it is also an important means for us to develop ourselves, and the happiness when we get the fruits of labor can't be bought with money!
These are all ignoring the role of labor in national progress and personal development, and they are all wrong ideas that covet enjoyment and harm others and the country! Here I sincerely hope that everyone can establish the idea of glorious labor. Labor does not need to be vigorous. It is labor to clean up the environment and build a beautiful campus in daily life. Participating in social practice, visiting children in orphanages, doing some housework at home, and even picking up scraps of paper on the ground are all labor. Let's create an atmosphere of respecting and participating in labor!
With the development of the times and social progress, each of us needs to build a prosperous era with hard-working hands, so that Fuxing Middle School can shoulder the responsibility of rejuvenation!
My speech is over, thank you!
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Its logic is:
Labor is a dual source (what is it)-labor is "intensive cultivation" and "farming and reading"-labor is the foundation of the prosperity of the reform and opening up country and the contribution of workers and peasants research-some people don't understand and don't want to-personal development needs labor, scientific and technological limitations need labor, self-happiness needs labor-no labor harms others and harms the country (why)-we should love labor: sweep the campus. (What should I do?)
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Compare the two sides.
Labor is a dual source (what is it)-some people don't understand and don't want to work-which is manifested in the opposition between labor and learning, science and technology, and enjoyment-which is a disrespect for labor (why)-to "love labor and start with me"-the purpose is "revival" (how to do it)
Labor is a dual source (what is it)-labor is "intensive cultivation" and "farming and reading"-labor is the foundation of the prosperity of the reform and opening up country and the contribution of workers and peasants research-some people don't understand and don't want to-personal development needs labor, scientific and technological limitations need labor, self-happiness needs labor-no labor harms others and harms the country (why)-we should love labor: sweep the campus. (What should I do?)
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