At the end of the flower season, I hope I can always remember the good words of the sages: the ship of life cannot be separated from the ideal sail. The ideal of life is for the ideal life.
(Selected from the full text of the senior high school entrance examination in Huzhou and Jingzhou) Tips: Echo from beginning to end is one of the most practical methods in the examination room composition. Generally, the author first puts forward the center of the article at the beginning, and then emphasizes it again at the end, taking care of the beginning and making the center of the article stand out clearly. You see, in the above example, the little author used the way of echoing from beginning to end, and highlighted the theme of the article with beautiful poetic language-the happiest time in an ideal life is the flower season of dreams.
(1) has a kind of brilliance that hangs over the spiritual home of the Chinese nation; There is a flame that dances on the Olympic Mountain of the national soul; There is a kind of flame that warms the distant feelings of civilization, and that is friendliness! (End) We can't lose confidence in fighting ugliness because of repeated injuries, because we need to protect our spiritual fire-friendliness! (Selected from the full text of "The Fire of the Guardian Spirit" in Henan senior high school entrance examination) Tips: This is the beginning and end of an argumentative paper in the examination room. Compared with the above example, this example is concise and lively. The argument is put forward at the beginning, the question enters quickly, and it is repeated at the end, which echoes the beginning and strengthens the strength of the argument. .
2. The environment at the beginning of the environmental description is the "soil" of the character's life and the foundation of the character's formation and development. Su Xun once said: "The scenery that is difficult to write is in front of us, and there is infinite meaning in it." Indeed, a successful environmental description can not only render the atmosphere, but also make people feel the life breath of the whole era and environment, and feel the thoughts and emotions in the author's heart. Specifically, there are several ways to write articles in new colors.
First, a series of descriptions unfold the plot of the story.
In the article, the repeated use of scenery description can not only make the plot more real and attractive, but also unfold the plot naturally. Scenery description appeared three times in an essay entitled "Concern". The beginning is described like this:
"The drizzle is like a continuous line, and my troubles are like this continuous rain, which has no end."
The middle went on to say:
"Looking around, bamboo forests are more beautiful in the rain, and clusters of green leaves are greener and brighter after being washed by rain."
At the end, the author wrote about the scenery:
"I just stood in the rain and watched my father and daughter disappear in the fog. Suddenly there was a heat flow in my heart. " "The rain is still falling, but the rain has become my mother's hand, stroking me and running."
The same rain, but with three different emotional words, the plot is natural. The article written in this way is clear-cut and full of emotion.
Second, the scene description reveals the emotions of the characters.
Infiltrating the inner "emotion" into the external things naturally is the "emotion is contained in the inside and originated from the scenery" in writing. Only when there is emotion in the scenery and there is scenery in the scenery can the scenery and water be integrated into one. The so-called "sadness is sorrow, joy is joy" is the truth. Lu Xun's novel "Hometown" begins with a gloomy and cold winter atmosphere, and the desolate and lifeless rural scenery appropriately sets off his sad mood. Sun Li's article "Lotus Lake" begins with a poetic description of the night, only to reveal the quiet and happy mood of aquatic sister-in-law. Due to the proper use of scenery description, there are elegant tastes of "picking chrysanthemums under the east fence and seeing Nanshan leisurely", and there are also sorrows of "where the petals have shed tears and where the lonely birds sing their sorrows". A student in the story on the grass has such a description, the author does not directly write the inner yearning, but only says:
"After a rain, the grass is greener, and the green grass suddenly looks like a large piece of the eldest son, turning this piece of grass into a thick carpet. I think it's not grass that breeds, but thoughts that can't stop. "
This kind of sentence is implicit and affectionate, which is different from the general description of scenery.
Third, the comparative description sets off a profound theme.
Environmental description can also reflect the different feelings of characters in different times and situations through scenery. Du Fu's "The stinking road of Zhumen wine freezes people to death" has always been told by people, because there is a strong and sharp contrast between the two. In the article "The Trouble of Grade Three", the author and "Feng" first met on a sunny spring day, and wrote:
"For the sun, this is a particularly good spring. Soft breeze, warm sunshine, and the new green blooming on the branches all make people feel a kind of vitality. The vast field is like a light green carpet, which is endless. "
For various reasons, the author had to be different from the "maple leaf" later. At this time, the author used a landscape description. However, it is not the beauty of spring, but the depression and loneliness of autumn. Through different scenes in the Spring and Autumn Period, the article vividly describes the great changes of the characters' mood and profoundly reveals the theme of the article.
Fourthly, the description of dreams reflects the expectation of characters.
In the article, you can also use the writing method of "virtual to real", that is, setting off the real society with illusory scenery and reflecting the inner feelings or expectations of the characters. For example, in Yang Shuo's article Haicheng, he first spent a lot of pen and ink on the illusory mirage, trying to write its charm. Then write down the real sea city you saw when you were looking for it-the thriving Changshan Islands. At this time, the author lamented, "The Changshan Islands we saw are even better than a mirage." The more beautiful and magical the illusory mirage is, the more vibrant the city will be in the process of socialist construction.
Yang Wanli, a poet in the Tang Dynasty, wrote such a poem: "Spring flowers, autumn, winter, snow and ice, don't listen to Chen Yan, just listen to the sky (the meaning of nature)." Indeed, environmental description can't write scenery for the sake of scenery, let alone "the scenery is not enough". We should learn to let the scenery speak, so as to "add icing on the cake" to our articles.
3. Remember a familiar person. At first, the person I knew best was my father. Let's introduce it to you today!
Dad has a pair of thick lips and big eyes. I often wear a pair of black-rimmed glasses, which feels a bit like a cultural person.
My usual composition is not good, there are always no good words and sentences, and my expression is somewhat incomplete. When my father saw it, he said to me, "How about this? Every time you write a composition, you make a draft first, and I'll take a look and correct it for you. " I nodded in agreement with my father. Every time I finish typing, I will ask my father to help me read and correct it. Father told me why I changed it. In some places, I used words and sentences, and in some places, I used the order of expression, which taught me many new words. Tell me what to do in the future and let me answer some questions from time to time. After several weeks of practice, my composition has made some progress. Occasionally, when dad talks, I will find out where it needs to be revised. I want to thank my father for making my composition progress and getting better every time. Thank you, Dad.
This is the person I know best, my father!
4. The environment is more beautiful. Spring has come, everything has revived, and the willow has pulled out her delicate branches.
Today, it began to rain in Mao Mao, fluttering and spreading. Rows of willows on Xuanwu Lake disappeared in the boundless drizzle and gradually disappeared in the fog. I see a row of weeping willows in the distance. All the willows have just turned green, and the green shadow dances behind the willows like a layer of green gauze under the breeze. It's beautiful.
Qiu Guang is overlapping. It secretly took three roads during the Mid-Autumn Festival. There are no colorful flowers in spring, no green trees in summer and no snowflakes in winter. But fruit trees that bear fruit in autumn bring people the joy of harvest. There are fruits everywhere! Jiangnan in spring is beautiful, the wind is soft, the air is fresh and the sun is warm. Wheat seedlings in the field are like the sea, scattered villages are unsinkable boats, criss-crossing winding rivers, willow branches by the river spit out buds, and reeds are green as soon as they come out; The calm river wakes up from the simplicity of winter and is covered with the color of nature. Wan Li is clear.
Miss Chun squinted in the sun. The new green leaves and the fog and smoke in the fields are like her clothes.
With the pace of her spring, the green grass broke through the ground and stood out almost with her feet. The endless plain is flat and vast, like a huge dark green jade plate, which is breathtaking.
The endless plain stretches under the sky, without hills, as calm as the sea on a calm day. The intermittent rain, like a wisp of hazy smoke, covered the Huaihe River Plain stretching for thousands of miles.
The climate on the plateau is really unpredictable. Sometimes happy, sometimes angry; Sometimes it's windy, sometimes it's calm and motionless.
Spring on the plateau is as short as a rabbit's tail and fleeting. There is also a thin river on the grassy grassland, which is exposed in the sun and looks like a glittering silver necklace from a distance.
On the grassland after the rain, wild flowers are in full bloom, like a flower scarf that has just been soaked in water, and even dew is colorful! On the endless prairie, the breeze carries the fragrance of the soil and blows a large area of crops like ripples. Night hangs over the grassland, a full moon shines from the fish-scale cloud gap, and the grassland is filled with hazy moonlight, rising like a faint silver fog.
How the grassland looks like the sea! Only quieter than the sea; How the grassland is like a picture without a frame, so vast that you can't see the edge.
A good sentence describing the environment is a good love for a white butterfly.
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Spring is very strong, but it's still windy and rainy in the north. Chill in spring: describe slight cold. ), a warm spring breeze just blew, and there was a cold rain.
I was walking on the grass when suddenly I saw a white butterfly on the fresh spring grass. Butterflies are hit by rain, and their wet wings make a slight rustling sound [rustling]: onomatopoeia, which simulates the trembling sound of wings. ) trembling, I can't open it. It's dying, dying. It is as white as a snowflake, soft and slender, lovely and moving, how pitiful!
(3) Where did it come from? Where are you flying to? I stared at it. Suddenly, like a drop of holy water dripping into my soul, my heart was illuminated by soft and strong white light.
I bent down, carefully picked up the white butterfly and put it in my palm.
5] This frozen little creature withered, and its thin feet moved and fell into my hands.
I took a breath and gave it a little warmth, and the butterfly gradually woke up. Were you scared by the violent wind and rain just now? However, it is really too slim. You see, white velvet wings are like transparent tulle, with two black whiskers stretching forward, two eyes like black paint, and several feet as thin as silk. However, this slender little creature, what does it fly out for? In this uncertain weather, it shows the extraordinary courage of the explorer.
Once it comes back to life, I feel infinite joy.
At this point, the wind has passed and the rain has passed. The bright sunshine shines on the whole universe and the world, everything is so crystal clear, the leaves turn from light green to dark green, and the grass is full of small flowers as big as small grains of rice. I put the butterfly on a young leaf full of sunshine, and then walked to the grass. But there is a cry in my soul-at first it seems very far away, very far away ... I thought it was raining again, and then I realized, deep down: why did you abandon a creature? ..... So I turned and walked back to the rickety old tree. Who knows that white butterfly is crawling slowly on the leaves! I don't bother it, just look at it quietly. The sun shines reddish and burns on the leaves, bringing fire, heat, light and life. The raindrops dried it, and the leaves were as transparent and clear as a piece of green glass.
My beautiful white butterfly! My brave white butterfly! It tried several times, finally jumped up, spread its wings around me for a long time, and then flew to Ran Ran. A clear sky, like a small snowflake, flew farther and farther and disappeared.
At this time, a spring water rippled gently in my heart. I felt sorry for the white butterfly when it was in danger, but when it really flew freely, I felt so lost and disappointed. "alas! People, people ... "I looked at it silently for a while, turned and walked to the grass.
6. Find a narrative outline that starts with an environmental description. Title: I remember a drum-beating competition of honor guards. Topic sentence: Unity is strength.
Content introduction (no need to write in the exam): By describing the process of drumming the honor guard competition, it reflects the vivid scene of students competing together, and is inspired by unity is strength. Structure: vertical text: summarize the time and result of things at the beginning.
I can talk about how things affect me. Second, the process is described in detail from front to back.
1. Let's go. Weather, geography, people and psychology.
2. Arrive. There is a scene description.
Execute. Details.
Personal. How you feel.
4. achievements. Mood.
Pointing out the meaning is the topic sentence. Third, reiterate the meaning at the end, take care of the beginning and send out feelings.
Want to know the details, the specific explanation is as follows: outline is the product of the composition conception stage. Conception is the overall design of composition, which is mainly based on abstract thinking.
There is no composition without creativity, but some ideas are not easy to see because of the short time (some ideas take years). The idea of writing symbols is an outline.
Outline is both important and necessary for a composition. However, as far as I can see, I haven't seen a relatively complete and detailed outline writing method.
The following features are for your reference and correction. First of all, we need to talk about how to treat the outline.
First of all, we should prepare a short outline for a literary composition (that is, narratives and essays based on it), but we don't have to draft it strictly according to the outline. This kind of outline is not the display of logical relationship, but the display of theme, plot, image and key points. It is a psychological chart, so it is more vague and emotional.
The correct way is to write a concise outline after conception, and then abandon the outline, play freely and draft at will. In fact, when drafting this way, there is still an outline that plays a reflective role.
When you can't finish writing, refer to the outline and continue thinking. Second, scientific compositions (including argumentative articles, explanatory articles and practical articles) should be carefully outlined.
As long as it is constantly enriched, the outline will become the first draft. The outline writing procedure is as follows: 1. Draw up a title.
(a) the title is closely related to the theme, but it serves the theme; The title can be changed, but the theme can't be changed at will. The leading proposition of examination composition should avoid the previous proposition and its fixed routine, and be based on foundation and practicality, giving candidates room to play.
The test questions will have the flavor of the times and conform to the life and ideological reality of the candidates. Such a proposition has a wide range of applications and strives to give candidates something to say.
(2) The composition of the exam is mostly propositional composition, and there are also many conditions that allow candidates to make their own propositions after providing materials. This must be carefully and slowly examined (as well as your own proposition). The ancients often used the method of grasping the topic, such as the word "ugly" in the inscription of the humble room.
The ancients divided the complete topic into body, spirit and eyes, such as "feelings of parting". As a "difference", that is, the main content, God is "Yi Yi", that is, measuring color and aiming at "emotion", that is, the core key. Another example is "Analysis of Social Classes in China", entitled "Social Classes in China" and "Analysis".
The ancient method of examining questions gives inspiration to today's exam. Today's topic review is also to review the meaning of the topic, clarify the requirements of the topic, and grasp the key points to make the composition targeted.
Examining questions is the key to the success or failure of composition. The steps are as follows: Step one, clarify the relationship between the topic, theme and content, analyze each restrictive word, and grasp the topic and key points.
The modifiers of the heading words show a limited scope. For example, the story of a hero inspired me, and the restrictive words are "one" and "hero".
The title component also limits the style, content, theme and characters of the composition. For example, knowledge is power, and writing argumentative papers is restricted.
And "one thing that should be forgotten" limits the writing of narrative. 1. Analyze the meaning of each word for the topic marked with material scope and content focus, and then comprehensively grasp the topic.
For example, "teach me something": "give it to me" means that this matter is related to yourself; "Lessons" should show the educational significance of events in the composition, which is the topic or key point, and the composition should take this as the central content and basic clue. For example, one of my good habits focuses on the word "good".
2. For topics with profound implications, we should contact reality and ourselves to see the big picture from the small. For example, the key is to associate life or society from the Window in front of you.
Another example is "climbing" and "I want to be a little bee". 3. For topics that provide clues, the scope and focus of the composition should be determined around the clues.
For example, "I am practicing a motto", and the clue is "motto", so we should associate it with it, especially with real life and ourselves. Can not leave the meaning of "motto".
Another example is "lucky money" and so on. 4. Ask yourself the topic of providing specific materials.
This is a semi-propositional composition. Need to analyze and grasp the center of gravity of materials.
Such as materials: "1On March 27th, 954, Einstein wrote back to an American self-taught intern mechanic and said," I think your view of our society is quite reasonable. ..... Your letter also made me realize that wisdom comes not from academic qualifications, but from lifelong unremitting pursuit of knowledge. "
The emphasis is on Einstein's views on wisdom, education and pursuit, not his contribution. Some materials will have more than two important meanings and should be analyzed from different angles.
For example, on the eve of the return of Hong Kong-June 1. Ke Shouliang, the "first pilot in Asia", successfully flew over Hukou Waterfall of the Yellow River in order to present a precious gift to the motherland, completing another feat of Chinese people conquering nature.
Before flying to the Yellow River, he said that he would use his successful flight to announce to the world that the people of China are not cowards. "Without a soul, life is like the waves of the sea ... if you work hard, you will win."
This is Ke Shouliang's favorite song. This material has two critics, one is Ke Shouliang's fighting spirit (not his achievement), and the other is Ke Shouliang's patriotic spirit.
Candidates wrote such topics as "Hard work leads to victory", "Hard work is the most important thing", "The spirit of hard work" and "Patriotism needs doers". The second step is to determine the theme of the composition, that is, to make a decision, that is, to write a judgment sentence.
The theme is a clear understanding of oneself, which must meet the requirements of the proposition and be correct and profound. For example, the topic is "My family" and the theme can be determined as: "My family is a kind and noble person."
7. The composition of "landscape" begins with environmental description and ends with environmental description.
Far away, the stone path is oblique, and there are people in the depths of white clouds, which is a quiet scenery; Tree-lined villages and pale blue in remote mountainous areas are a simple pastoral scenery; The desert is lonely and straight, and the long river sets the yen, which is a magnificent frontier scene ... After enjoying one natural scenery after another, my heart is budding, and my budding thoughts begin to drift away, to places that have never been before and are uninhabited. The scenery in the distance tells me that the scenery in Hanshan in the distance is beautiful, and the spring return at the foot is beautiful, but don't forget that the scenery here is the most beautiful.
Although the mountain is silent, it is not. Mountains have the majesty and charm of mountains. Shan showed the magnificence of his scenery to the world with his stalwart body. It is dwarfed to write the beautiful scenery of other mountains with the heroic spirit of Mount Tai. Use its blood.
All the beautiful scenery is in front of us, plum, orchid, bamboo and chrysanthemum. Don't forget that you are a landscape. Numerous ancient literati and poets are interpreting this truth.
In the desolate North Sea, a flock of snow-white sheep bleated behind them. A messenger waving a sheep whip built a loyal landscape painting. Ren Hu's whip was held high. He devoted his whole life to painting artists. It has become the most beautiful scenery in China for 5,000 years.
The mountains and rivers are broken and the wind is floating, and life experiences are ups and downs. The magnificence of the sea has created the beautiful scenery of "lotus leaves connecting the sky". Dante has a saying: Go your own way and let others talk! The scenery here is very unique.
The wind blows low, and the grassland of cattle and sheep is endless. But don't kill our own scenery yourself. As shabby as grassland overload. We should use our hands to build our own scenery and beautify our home.
For example, Tao Yuanming, who is not familiar with worldly customs, created "Picking Chrysanthemums under the Hedgehog" and leisurely saw the idyllic beauty of Nanshan.
For example, Wang Wei's heroic spirit painted the majestic beauty of "the desert is lonely and straight, and the long river sets the yen".
For example, Li Suli's dedication has built a sacred landscape of "serving the people".
Such as Fei's space leap, it has put a bright halo on the beautiful starry sky of the motherland and added new scenery to the land of China.
I want to raise my ideal sail, love on the left, love on the right, hold up the balance with my life and build the scenery with my hands. The scenery you cast is the most beautiful.
Wandering again and again, no longer shouting.
No more hesitation, no more hesitation.
Listen to the sound of water and feel the beautiful scenery
That mountain has a quiet majesty. During the day, tourists come in an endless stream, and messy footsteps and laughter come from time to time at the foot of the mountain. At this time, the majesty of the mountain has also become amiable and approachable. When the sunset glides over the shoulder of the mountain, people who have played for a whole day still sit together and light a warm bonfire with great interest. At this time, the songs sung by the stream were faintly audible, and I was attracted to leave.
What a beautiful scenery. I sat on a piece of bluestone polished by gentle water by the stream, letting the gentle voice of the stream moisten my heart, and the softness and delicacy echoed in my heart. The water swept the green velvety moss on grotesque rocks of different sizes.
Quietly, the moonlight melts into the stream, as if everything in the universe is listening to this wonderful sound and feeling this beautiful scenery. My thoughts drift slowly with the current. An unprecedented sadness and beauty are seeping into my breath with the traces of years. In the flashing silver waves, I suddenly forgot what kind of sound the stream made, but enjoyed a feeling of devotion. The stream flows through my heart, and I have understood it in our subtle feelings.
In such a wonderful scenery, the moon is drunk, the mountain is drunk, the water is drunk, and people are drunk. I looked at the clear water, and my heart was occupied by a mysterious emotion. I wonder if all the complexity and fatigue can go with the stream at this moment to listen to and respond to the natural sounds on the other side.
If the sea is a big occasion for Confucianism to enter the WTO in order to rule the country and level the world and pursue success, then the beauty of this stream and this mountain is the work of Taoism, "Being born but not doing things". I am not a saint, and I can't understand its profundity and mystery, but I realize that all the noise and splendor will surely end in a kind of harmony and tranquility.
A chill passed by and I put my hand in my pocket. At this point, the moon has risen into the air. I think I will definitely come here again in my hurried life journey, listen to the sound of water, feel the beautiful scenery, let myself unconsciously blend in with the harmony of nature, whisper to the waves and stand next to the sunset.
The moon is drunk, the mountain is drunk, the water is drunk, the scenery is drunk, and people are drunk. Just drunk for the beautiful scenery, people feel a lot of beautiful scenery.
Listen to the sound of water and feel the beautiful scenery.
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