At the age of two, Zhang Yaqin lost his father. Several of his relatives live in different cities. In order to exercise his ability to live independently, he lived alone in several cities at a young age: he was near the college entrance examination and suddenly fell ill, and his mother advised him to give up. Zhang Yaqin didn't listen: "I just tried, even if I failed, it was also an exercise;" If you don't fight for it, you won't succeed! " As a result, he was admitted to the juvenile class of China University of Science and Technology. Then, master's degree and doctor's degree … eventually became the global vice president of Microsoft and one of the most outstanding scientists in the field of electronic engineering. Looking back on the past years, Zhang Yaqin proudly said, "In my opinion, growth is more important than success. In the process of growing up, I gained independence, persistence, strength and confidence ... Without that growing experience, there would be no me today! "

Please write an article on the topic "Growth is more important than success".

Requirements: ① Other genres are not limited except poetry. (2) No less than 600 words, no real school name. (3) The writing standard is neat.

(2007 Chinese Composition Examination in Taizhou City, Jiangsu Province)

Ideas:

Looking back on the moment of life, we have experienced many growth processes: there are pains in growth, pains in growth, joys in growth and comforts in growth. The process of growth is a process of struggle, a process of struggle, a process of reflection, and a process of gradual success. In fact, we all grow up for success.

The topic of "growth is more important than success" in the composition is more open, which is helpful for students to publicize their personality and write their true feelings and inner emotional world. Students can open their own accumulation warehouse, find typical writing materials around them and enrich their thinking space. Everyone has a growing experience in life, a feeling of success, and a real feeling when writing. This proposition is close to the colorful life development area of students, which is convenient for students to quickly stimulate the inspiration of thinking, activate their strong enthusiasm for life, write their own profound feelings, and also facilitate readers to reach a * * * knowledge and form a * * * voice.

1. The theme should be positive. To write your own or others' feelings about the growth process, you should write your own profound understanding and experience about the growth process, give readers positive enlightenment, and give people deep thinking and aftertaste in inspiration and life. Be careful not to write negative materials, so as not to have negative effects and dilute the theme.

2. The key points should be prominent and clear. Pay attention to choose your best style of writing. When writing a narrative, we should focus on why or how to write it. We can describe a touching thing, not only ourselves, but also others. We can make a general outline of the macro aspect, or we can make a detailed description. Writing prose can take "growth" as a clue to conceive an article and connect the writing materials of the whole article in series; When writing an argumentative essay, we should refine the argument around "growth is more important than success" The argument must be clear and powerful, clear-cut, fresh and typical, persuasive and can be demonstrated around the central argument.

3. Make good use of writing skills. Choose good materials, choose a style that is conducive to play, the topic should be novel, vivid and attractive, and work hard on the topic; The beginning should be novel and interesting to catch people's attention; We should use a variety of expressions to express our feelings; Rhetoric can be appropriately selected according to the needs of the article to enhance the expression effect of the article; We should pay attention to the vivid and beautiful words and sentences, and enhance the language appeal of the article; You can use more literary language to make the article interesting and enduring.

Demonstration composition

Flowers bloom and fall, I grow up.

Time flies, people's life is just an insignificant moment in the vast history, but how many flowers have passed through this fleeting moment?

After six years of hard work in primary school, I got my wish and was admitted to the ideal middle school. Flowers bloom and fall, and I am in high spirits. I came to my dream campus and I was attracted by this modern and civilized school. It is famous for its elegant environment, orderly teaching and excellent campus management. So I decided to live on campus. Because living on campus is a very desirable story for me. Because I can't hear my father's snoring and my mother's boring nagging. Everything here is so free and everything is so desirable. It's really "the sky is high for birds to fly and the sea is wide for fish to jump"! Campus has become a paradise for our life.

I was curious about the environment here at first, and I was so serious about everything. We clean the dormitory every day. The dormitory can be used as a mirror. The first days were very pleasant, because it was good to leave home. Before long, we felt tired, and the flying wings tried their best to find a place to rest. That night, we chatted in the dormitory. Some people say that school life is so hard that you are free at home; Some people say that my clothes are always dirty and I have to be on duty. It's really annoying People say my mother's cooking is delicious, and I really want to eat my mother's cooking. Say that finish, she actually began to cry. Later, the life teacher in the dormitory came. She kindly taught us and helped us solve the problem. So our homesickness gradually faded. Of course, we actually spend a lot of time getting homesick.

Later, many students decided not to live in school. They want to feel the kindness and care of their parents, and they want to go to their parents to be spoiled, but I chose to stay at school because I want to continue to exercise and accept challenges in the tempering of life. I secretly made up my mind: this difficulty is nothing, I will be strong, I will continue to strive for self-improvement, I will go on independently and persistently, and I will not shrink back because of small difficulties, because I am a strong man in life.

During my three-year study career in junior high school, I have achieved great success with my rich growth experience. I feel happy and happy. I think growth is happier than success, because having a happy growth process is more exciting than success, and I also dream of greater success.

Comments:

By choosing the life experience of living on campus and expressing its unique feelings about life with vivid and delicate description methods, it is more important to enlighten people to pay attention to the process of growth than success. When we pay attention to the process of growth, we are not far from success.

Campus life is really hard, which will inevitably lead to memories and yearning for home, but this hard life experience is a heavy capital and precious wealth in our growth process. The article focuses on writing one's own feelings, writing one's own life experiences, narrating and describing lyricism, etc. They are skillfully combined and merged, which shows the author's skillful writing skills and fluent language skills.

Demonstration composition

Success is conceived in tears.

I don't know how many tears I have shed in these years, from excited joy to heartbreaking "tears full of skirts". Tears are not bitter, but sweet. She moistens my mind, purifies my mind and inspires my enthusiasm. In tears, I choose to be brave and strong, in tears, I grow up gradually, in tears, I move towards success.

In the sixth grade of primary school, students go all out to prepare for the review of junior high school. Everyone works hard, and many people burn the midnight oil, hoping to win the prize in the provincial mathematics competition and enter the intensive class of Wentong Middle School directly.

I am no exception. After layers of screening, I got the tickets for the preliminaries with strong strength. Faced with the hard-won opportunity, I was ecstatic, thinking that I could walk on the Avenue of Stars and win. I was immersed in the joy of victory. In the next series of intensive review training at the end of the term, I lost my way. Others listened with relish, and the teacher spoke clearly, but I didn't listen at all. I'm very proud. When I attended the training, I played a supporting role. I lowered my demands on myself and wasted my precious time. That's what I'm afraid of. Later, although I studied hard, I was getting closer and closer to the end of the semester, and my hanging heart was even more uneasy. I had to comfort myself: rather than sigh, let go!

I was depressed when I walked out of the examination room in a daze. As expected, I failed. Mother's complaint stings like a needle. My father's stern eyes seemed to penetrate my chest. My mental defense line completely collapsed and tears flooded. I really regret it. I can't waste any more time. I must work hard and strive for self-improvement. I couldn't help humming Zheng Zhihua's Sailor: "He said that the pain in the storm was nothing. Don't be afraid to dry your tears. At least we still have dreams. He said that the pain in the storm was nothing. Dry your tears, don't ask why ... "

So I study hard every day, ask the class quality for 45 minutes, and ask more teachers and classmates. My bird grew up in tears, and I know how to cherish time. I want to fight, I want to struggle, I want to make progress. ...

A miracle happened! I was admitted to the intensive class of Wentong Middle School with excellent results, and my efforts finally paid off. This success has not made me forget yesterday's pain. Tears remind me of it. It has always inspired me to move forward and become a brilliant stroke in my growth history.

Tears enrich your resume and make you stronger. Taste the tears bravely and feel them with your heart, and you will find that they are not bitter. Be kind to the tears and setbacks in the process of growing up, and you will find that this is also an unforgettable wealth and a ladder for your success.

Comments:

This is a very successful examination composition. Candidates can flexibly use all kinds of writing skills and have a strong ability to control materials:

1. The topic is novel and striking.

The topic breaks people's conventional thinking, gives people a refreshing feeling, attracts people's attention and stimulates people's interest in reading. This reminds us that when writing an article, we must plan to write a good topic, so that readers will be attracted by delicate topics at the first time, which is the so-called "half-finished article".

Second, the narrative is clear and the context is clear.

This paper describes in detail all kinds of setbacks in my "junior high school" exam. First, I wrote that I successfully passed the preliminary contest of the math contest, then I wrote about my pride and laziness after the preliminary contest, and wrote about my final defeat, which gave me a blow and alerted myself. Then I wrote my own awakening and thorough action, and finally got into my ideal junior high school. The article has clear thinking, concrete process, complete structure and seamless integration. The whole article is mainly narrative, mixed with lyrical comments, and lyrical words play a role in sublimating feelings and deepening the theme.

3. Echo from beginning to end, complete structure

There are a few strokes at the beginning of the article, which come straight to the point with lyrical words and express their true inner feelings, which is fascinating; The ending is the finishing touch, which echoes the beginning skillfully, making the article complete and integrated, revealing profound truth in the faint narrative, giving people enlightenment and thinking. The Chinese version is good at using psychological description to write true inner feelings, which can strengthen the description of the psychological track and emotional trend of "I", be true, concrete and credible, and arouse readers' strong emotions. The process of several emotional changes is very detailed, full of twists and turns. He is also particularly good at using details to outline the article in a macro way, which is very intriguing.