First, revise the composition.
See if the center of the article is clear and focused; Look at the material selection of the article, whether it is centered, whether it conforms to the reality of life, and whether it is typical; Look at the structure of the article, whether the hierarchical paragraphs are clear, whether the transition is natural, and whether the beginning and the end are coordinated; Look at the statement, such as whether the narrative is clear and clear, whether the description is delicate and vivid, and whether the details are appropriate; See if the language is concise, vivid, vivid, fluent and profound.
Second, comments:
1, make full use of the combination of static and dynamic writing, supplemented by metaphors, personification and other methods, and make readers feel like they are in a dream through vivid language description. The praise of the characters at the end is sincere and touching.
2. The little author captures the unique scenery of spring and can accurately and aptly write beauty by using figurative rhetoric. At the same time, he praised the hard-working gardener, the teacher, and sublimated the theme of the article.
3. The little author's careful investigation, vivid and meticulous appearance and vivid metaphor personification make people feel immersive after reading it, and also make the author's favorite spiritual feelings more natural and fully revealed.
4, pay attention to observe specific things, and expand the appropriate imagination, this is success. The article melts into the scenery, describes the scenery while expressing emotions, and is good at using analogy to make the article vivid.
5, the article echoes from beginning to end, the sentence is concise, hit the nail on the head, and point out the theme. Through the description of the scenery of the four seasons, the article explains the beauty and intention at the beginning. It is best to pay attention to the clear level of paragraphs.