Rodin said that it is not that there is no beauty in life, but that we lack a pair of eyes to discover beauty. Isn't that what happiness is? We always complain about our lack of happiness. Happiness is actually very simple. It happens all the time around us, but we easily ignore it.

Happiness is actually very simple. When practicing the model airplane, I accidentally cut my hand with a blade. The incision was deep and there was a lot of blood. The teacher took me to Tangshan hospital by bike, signed me up in a hurry, paid the medical expenses himself, and asked the doctor about my injury with concern. At his insistence, the doctor gave me a tetanus shot. By the time dad got to the hospital, the teacher had finished everything. Before leaving, I was busy going to class without forgetting to explain it to my father carefully. Looking at the back of the teacher's departure, my eyes filled with tears of happiness.

Happiness is the teacher's meticulous care for students like his father!

Happiness is actually very simple. Whenever I go to Tomb-Sweeping Day, I always go back to my hometown with my father. I don't like Du Mu's sad atmosphere of "it rains a lot during the Qingming Festival, and pedestrians on the road want to die", but I prefer He Mu's aesthetic mood of "jasper adorning trees and hanging tapestries with thousands of strands of green silk". Blue sky and white clouds overhead, green grass under your feet. Roll a few times, kick a few balls, run a few laps-unknown wildflowers in the distance are competing for beauty, red as fire, pink as chardonnay, and white as snow-and fly their kites together in the suburbs full of spring.

Happiness is to let go of your happy mood in sunny spring!

Happiness is actually very simple. After the Wenchuan earthquake, the poem "hold your mother's hand, child" deeply touched me, and I began to understand what you are going to and how precious family ties are. I donated all my pocket money in the piggy bank to the children in the disaster area. My mother is party member. In addition to the unit donation, she also paid a special membership fee in 800 yuan. Adults and children around us have joined the fund-raiser. No matter how big the difficulty is divided by1300 million, it will become insignificant, and no matter how small the love is multiplied by1300 million, it will merge into an ocean of love.

Happiness is the national cohesion and national pride of "one side is in trouble and all sides support"!

Happiness is really simple! What is happiness? It's what you feel inside, not what others say. True happiness and sadness can only be understood by oneself. Will everyone's happiness be different? Bmw, wealth and prosperity must be happy? A thatched cottage with a bamboo fence, a small amount of tea, piccolo and flute, smiling at the person I love most, who can say that it is not happiness and happiness in life? Then I finally understood that happiness is actually a feeling. When you feel it, you have it. Cherish what you have is happiness. So, happiness is simple.

The traditional composition teaching mode of "teacher's proposition-teacher's guidance-student's composition-teacher's correction-teacher's evaluation" makes students fall into boring rules and put an invisible "condom" on their thoughts. The new curriculum standard clearly points out: "Writing is an important way of using language to express and communicate, a process of understanding the world, self-awareness and creative expression, and writing ability is a comprehensive embodiment of Chinese literacy." Therefore, in the process of composition teaching, I explored a writing mode of "imitating sentences-expanding sentences-from paragraphs to articles", which was welcomed by students, and this process was later called "triple jump" by students vividly.

Parallel structure; Composition; triple jump

First, problem generation.

Composition writing is the "hard bone" of students and also the composition teaching of teachers. On the one hand, students are not rich in life experience, have little material and are not deeply touched. When they write their compositions, they think that "a clever woman can't cook without rice." On the other hand, the textbooks are updated quickly, and there is a lack of writing guidance or writing guidance is not practical. Teachers are often at a loss in composition teaching, and often give students a composition topic at will, regardless of whether the students have anything to write. All the handed-in compositions, from punctuation to typos, from ill sentences to paragraphs, from title to structure, are corrected in batches from beginning to end, and all of them are "fully examined" like doctors treating patients. When analyzing and commenting on the composition, all the advantages are mentioned and all the disadvantages are criticized. The teacher thinks that this will enable students to inherit all the advantages, avoid all the shortcomings and eat into a big fat man in the next composition. But students feel that their compositions are bruised everywhere, and they don't know what medicine to take. This traditional composition teaching mode of "teacher's proposition-teacher's guidance-student's composition-teacher's correction-teacher's comment" makes students fall into boring rules and puts an invisible "condom" on their thoughts.

The new curriculum standard clearly points out: "Writing is an important way of using language to express and communicate, a process of understanding the world, self-awareness and creative expression, and writing ability is a comprehensive embodiment of Chinese literacy." The new curriculum standard advocates "students are the masters of Chinese learning" and requires students to write my heart and my feelings by hand. It can be seen that the traditional composition teaching mode is like a stagnant pool, which can't arouse any confusion. The author believes that everything should not be rushed for success, and it is better to treat the headache and the foot pain. Only by breaking through bit by bit, solving one problem after another, and finally summing up and integrating can teachers and students understand what they should do and what they are doing, thus effectively improving students' writing ability.

Composition teaching is an infinitely rich world, with many points to watch: examination, conception, title, beginning and end ... A paper cannot cover everything. If we can really solve a problem and make this solution practical, it is very gratifying. In my long-term teaching work, I found that when students write, the language is often wonderful and the facts are vivid, but they often write wherever they want (I believe many teachers have encountered similar problems). Later, I made an in-depth study of this problem, found the crux of the problem, and found that "structural confusion" was the fatal wound of students' composition, so I decided to "prescribe the right medicine" and set about solving this problem. Generally speaking, the common structural modes of junior high school composition are total score, subtotal, parallel, progressive and comparative. I have carefully studied the above five modes and trained them in five composition classes. Finally, teachers and students have integrated the five models and achieved good results. Students have a strong interest and made great progress in composition, which basically overcame the defect of "structural confusion". Among them, the most successful teaching course is the parallel structure. So I want to talk about my own experience in the teaching process of parallel structure composition writing, and I want to discuss this issue with my colleagues, and write out some of my practices to share with my colleagues in order to improve.

The teaching goal of this kind of composition training is "imitating sentences-expanding sentences-from paragraphs to articles", which was later vividly called "triple jump" by students. The following are specific teaching steps and teacher-student interaction:

Second, the activity process

First-rate (first jump): from material to parody

Students read several materials provided by the teacher and then train according to the teacher's requirements.

Material 1: Life is like water, peace of mind is like water, integrity is as clear as water, fame and fortune is as light as water, and laughter is as tough as water.

Material 2: Life is like a mirror. If people want to constantly enrich themselves and improve themselves, they must have three mirrors-microscope, magnifying glass and plane mirror. Use a microscope to find your own shortcomings, use a magnifying glass to find the advantages of others, and use a flat mirror to reflect your current situation.

Material 3: Life is like a flower. Life should welcome everything in early spring like a spring jasmine. Life should compete in hot summer like sunflowers. In the cold winter, life should be as fragrant as wintersweet. ...

Material 4: Life is like punctuation and life is like a question mark. Seek advice with an open mind and strive for perfection; Life is like a comma, endless, endless struggle; Life is like an exclamation point, affirm yourself and motivate yourself; Life is like an ellipsis, affecting future generations, and death is sweet. ...

Material 5: Life is like chess, playing chess pays attention to diamond cut diamond, and life pays attention to competition and win-win; Playing chess is offensive and defensive, and life is advancing and retreating; If you play chess carelessly, you will lose the whole game. Opportunity knocks but once. When playing chess, sometimes you lose soldiers and sometimes you win. Sometimes the mountains are heavy and the waters are heavy, and sometimes the flowers are bright.

After reading five materials, the students are more excited and find these life metaphors very interesting. I took the opportunity to ask them: "In fact, there are many feelings about life and many metaphors of life. Please read five more materials carefully, chew them repeatedly, and carefully taste the angle from which the materials reveal the phenomena and laws of life. Choose the one you are most interested in to imitate. The specific requirements for imitation are as follows:

① Choose your own vehicle, or use the vehicle in raw materials.

Choose your own angle and reveal the truth of life.

(3) Using parallelism, you can write three or more sentences.

(4) The number of words can be increased or decreased, and analogy and parallelism can be used. "

Students are enthusiastic and write imitations one after another ... After writing, the deskmates correct each other, and then recommend the well-written exercises to the whole class to share. At this stage (the first jump), there are many works with good literary talent:

Sun Li wrote: Life is like a flower, sometimes as miserable as tears, sometimes as gorgeous and beautiful as waves, and sometimes as passionate as sparks.

Zhang Qinli wrote: Life is like music, music is sometimes low and slow, and life is sometimes bumpy and frustrated; Music is sometimes loud and exciting, and life is sometimes successful and arrogant; Music sometimes reverberates, and life sometimes exudes fragrance. ...

Chen Shasha wrote: When we were young, we were full of passion and dreams, just like the radiance and charm at sunrise; When we were young, we were young and accomplished, just like the sun roasting the earth and nourishing everything in Japan and China; When we are old, we are carefree and enjoy the years, just like the glow in the sunset, and the residual temperature is still there.

Gu wrote: Life is like water, life should be as clear and transparent as a stream, life should be as brave as a river, and life should be as open and inclusive as sea water. ...

Ru Ping wrote: I think life should be like a geometric figure, as calm as a triangle, as upright as a square and as perfect as a circle.

Gao Xiaohong wrote: Life is like water, water has different tastes, and life also has different tastes. Sometimes life is as sweet as a drink, sometimes it is as bitter as coffee, sometimes it is as fragrant as tea, and sometimes it is as intoxicating as wine.

Zhu Jiafei wrote: Life is like water. Water has three states: solid, liquid and gas. Some people, life is like ice, stand still and stop; Some people, his life is like water, easy-going, smart and balanced; Some people, their life is like steam, full of passion and vitality.

Cheng Jiali wrote: Life is like a lamp. When the lamp goes out, life will die. Lights should be constantly refueled, and people should constantly absorb knowledge; The lamp burns itself to illuminate others, and life should be carved and dedicated to society.

Wen Li wrote: Life is like a pen, life should be as chic as a brush, life should be as vigorous and powerful as a pen, life should be as correct as a pencil, and life should be as colorful as a crayon.

Tong Haidong wrote: life is like English letters, life should be like me, the whole world is muddy and I am alone, and everyone is drunk, so keep a clear head at all times; Life should be like ah q, spring can't close the garden, and an almond goes out of the wall. We should continue to work hard, Paramore; Life should be like H, a bridge flies north and south, and the natural moat becomes a thoroughfare. We should build a bridge of communication between people, a bridge of understanding between countries and a bridge of prosperity between countries.

Wang Jianfeng wrote: Life is like water, and life should be as emotional as water. Once the sea was difficult for water, it was always amber; Life should be as full of momentum as water, flying down three thousands of feet, and it is suspected that the Milky Way will fall for nine days; Should life be as colorful as water, or should it be "rocky outcrops, stormy waves lapping on the shore, rolling up thousands of piles of snow", that is, "Lian Haiping on the riverside, the moon on the sea, the ebb and flow"

Zhang Yan wrote: Life is like tea. The happiness of life is like tea, the suffering of life is like tea, and the temperament of life is like tea.

The second stream (second jump): from parody to paragraph

After these imitations, students have enriched their knowledge, deepened their understanding and perception of life, and transformed others' thoughts into their own, broadening their spiritual horizons. The floodgate of thinking has been opened. Some students said to me, teacher, there are other metaphors of life, and other parallelism sentences can be written, so I simply let the students communicate and discuss what other angles can be written. After thinking and discussing, students found many metaphors about life, such as "Life is like a dream", "Life is like a play", "Life is like the sea", "Life is like a mountain" and "Life is like a poem". Even the topic of "life is like water" can be written from many angles. For example, some students think that emotions represented by water can be written, while others think that personality represented by water can be written.

At this time, I put forward a second request to my classmates: choose the materials that are most interesting to you given by the teacher or written by the classmates, carefully study and analyze them, think about the angle that this material or parody reveals the philosophy of life, then expand every parallelism sentence in this material or parody, then expand several parallelism sentences in the material or parody into several paragraphs, and finally write a 300-400-word miscellaneous feeling of life. Complete the jump from sentence to paragraph.

After the students finished writing, I asked them to communicate in groups and correct each other. If they are not sure, they can discuss and exchange opinions with the teacher. In this link, I give students more time, the purpose is to let them improve themselves and make progress together in mutual recognition and revision. The students basically corrected the typos, sick sentences and punctuation marks in the exercise questions, and the mixed feelings of life came out like this. In this session, each group also recommended some excellent exercises. Here, I choose one of the best exercises to share with you:

Life is like water (gu)

Water is the source of all things, water has aura and water has character. If you are careful, you will find that water also has human emotions.

Life is like water, and water represents sincerity. "The green hills are not old, and the green water keeps flowing", and the green water keeps flowing, which means that the sincerity is always there and the sincerity is eternal. "A friendship between gentlemen is as light as water", and true friendship pays attention to dullness, which makes the ends of the earth seem close at hand. Don't you smell off? Have you ever heard of Yu Boya and Zhong Ziqi? The flowing water of history has quietly gone away, but their true feelings still flow in people's hearts today. ...

Life is like water, and water represents human persistence. Yuan Zhen said, "In the past, water was scarce in the sea, and it was always amber." Jia Baoyu said, "I'll drink it with a ladle if there's 3 thousand water." Many talented people and beautiful women have made a promise of "the seas run dry and the rocks crumble". The water here, the sea here, has become a lover's heart, single-minded

Life is like water, and water can represent people's lovesickness. How many stars of yearning have the Cowherd and the Weaver Girl sown between them? "When you ask about the untimely return date, late rain will rise in the autumn pool." How many lovesickness did Li Shangyin fill the autumn pool in his chest? Water is gentle, but at this time it is like a sharp knife carved with unforgettable thoughts.

Life is like water, and water can represent people's sadness. Nine times out of ten, life is not satisfactory. Water doesn't know how to worry, people worry, and water also worries. "But since the water is still flowing, although we cut it with a sword, sadness is still flowing, although we drown it with wine", water has become a constant worry; "Ask how sad you are? Like a spring flowing eastward, the water becomes endless sorrow. ...

Some people say that human feelings are as light as water, and water becomes indifferent; Some people say that water can also overturn a boat, and water can also overturn a boat. It's really anger, sorrow, fear, love and evil desire, and there are joys and sorrows in the water!

Student comments:

Student 1: I think Gu's life perception language is wonderful and his thinking is clear.

Student 2: He adopted a parallel structure.

Student 3: Gu is knowledgeable and recites many famous poems and sentences.

Student 4: The front of the article is open and the tail is closed.

The third stream (the third jump): from paragraph to chapter

The whole class is required to further study the angle, truth and feelings of each material, choose the material they are most interested in for in-depth research and experience, choose the appropriate starting point, arrange the structure reasonably and write a composition. The specific requirements are as follows:

(1) The choice of angle, inscription and style is not limited.

② Reasoning by metaphor.

③ Use parallel structure.

(4) Not less than 800 words

⑤ You can write further on the basis of expanding your writing.

In order to let students have a clearer perceptual knowledge of the parallel structure composition, I showed them a model essay with multimedia:

Life is like water.

Yang Dawei

There are many similarities with water in ancient and modern China and abroad. As the saying goes, "Good as water, water benefits all things without dispute", which is the noblest moral character. Like water, it brings benefits to all things without asking for anything in return, which can be said to push the comparison of water to an extreme. When you think about the world and life, you will feel deeply: taking water as a mirror can reflect your life. Life is like water, natural and unrestrained.

Calm as water. Liu Yuxi, a poet in the Tang Dynasty, lamented that "hating people for a long time is not as good as water, and it is easy to make waves." Although the human heart is not as good as water, it does not mean that it is impossible. Water comes from high places, only flows to low places, and even falls into the sea. It's important to stay calm and keep a low profile. Life is like this. If something goes wrong, you should have a normal heart: those who are satisfied always have fun-there is no disappointment, let alone despair, on the issue of fame and fortune; Being a ninja is always safe-unless there is a big right and wrong, don't argue that I am higher than you, be patient, and you will be broad-minded and calm; An honest man is always there-don't do anything wrong, be an honest man, eat well and sleep well, and sometimes he may suffer some losses ahead, but he won't suffer in the end.

Integrity is like water. Water is colorless, crystal clear, crystal clear. Be a man, do things and be an official. If you are as transparent as water, you will be aboveboard all your life. To promote righteousness, stir up turbidity and promote clarity, we must have such clarity and righteousness; Treat people, regardless of distance, equally; Interpersonal communication, no gangs, a clear water; Hear gossip, don't engage in singling out, laugh it off; As a matter of principle, don't go with the flow, be upright.

Look down on fame and fortune as light as water. Born in the world, if we can learn the clear nature of water and the character of "benefiting all things without arguing", not only will our spirit live in a high place, but life will also enter an open place. To achieve such a state, the most important thing is to get rid of the shackles of fame and fortune. It's understandable that geese leave their voices, people leave their names, and they want to leave a good reputation, but they can't enjoy it. If you are indifferent to fame and fortune and don't fight for it, life will be very smooth. It should be noted that "there is gold at home, not every day."

Laughter is as hard as water "How does the water of the Yellow River move out of the sky and into the ocean, and it will never return?" The firm thing is water; "But since the water is still flowing, although we cut it with the sword", the difficulty is the water. The road of life is like the Yellow River, full of twists and turns. "Unhappy things often happen", and people's life can't be smooth sailing. In the face of difficulties and frustrations, we need to be broad-minded and firm. Win without arrogance, lose without impatience, humble without arrogance, rich without poverty, not arrogant in prosperity, not impatient in adversity, not panic in crisis, not disappointed in adversity. If that's the case, "No matter how big the storm is, it's better to walk around" and "No matter how big the storm is, sit firmly on the fishing boat".

Life should be as quiet as water, as bright as water, as good as water and as tough as water.

After reading the model essay, students have a clearer understanding of the composition with parallel structure. After class, the students wrote many excellent exercises, such as Taking Man as a Mirror, Water Life, Flowers Bloom and Flowers Fall, Chess Man's Understanding, Life Punctuation, Life Graphics, Tea and Man, Three States of Life, Life as a Pen and Life as a Letter.

"Five Elements" Life

Life is like spring. In fact, people and plants are different, withering year after year and regenerating year after year. Life will only grow old and die day by day. The so-called flowers are similar year after year, and people are different year after year. I'm not here to bemoan life. On the contrary, because life is limited, people should live poetically on the earth, as poetically as Jin Mu's fire, water and earth. ...

Life is like gold. The gold contained in the ore needs constant tempering and processing to be golden; People, living in the ordinary, need to be constantly carved to become useful talents; Gold, solid and steady, people should be more reliable and loyal, which is the foundation of the foundation; Gold is precious and rare, especially in life. Life is priceless. Some people say that life is precious, but if you want to carve yourself into a rare talent and become a rare swift horse, you must have invincible toughness like gold.

Life is like a log. Wood, rooted, regardless of the environment, not afraid of risks, finally saw the rainbow after the storm, people, born, not afraid of adversity, laugh at the ups and downs, cut through difficulties, in order to shelter in society; There are different sizes of wood, the small one is used for wind and dust prevention, and the big one is used for carving beams and painting buildings. People are divided into small talents and big talents. Small talents are Xia Geng's autumn harvest and winter storage, while big talents are swaying and pointing out the country.

Life is like water. Water has an easy-going personality, breeds all things and integrates all things. In the alpine plain, flowers, birds, insects and fish live in harmony with water, and so does life. Lively and easy-going, with all kinds of people, in order to establish a life circle and network. Water has clear quality, and people should also have clean quality. If people's parents can make themselves as clear as water and spotless, then the country does not need to punish corruption; The level is bland. If people's hearts can be as plain as water and don't pursue money, power and fame excessively, there will be fewer corrupt officials in the world and the society will be more peaceful and harmonious.

Life is like fire. Fire symbolizes hope, a single spark can start a prairie fire, and so can life. Hope is there, dream is there, and value is there. Fire symbolizes struggle. When it is put into it, life will not go out and burn, so should life. Life will not stop and struggle will not stop. Fire symbolizes dedication. It sacrifices itself without reservation, in order to illuminate and warm mankind until it burns itself to ashes, especially in life. Silkworms in spring weave until they die, and candles start to dry when they turn to ashes. Sacrifice yourself for the society like a fire, and live out the realm like a silkworm.

Life is like earth. Soil has rich connotations, such as gold, iron, copper and diamonds. All these are contained in the soil. Life should also be full of real talent and learning, both red and expert; Soil has valuable qualities, its true colors and its simplicity. Although it contains everything, it is not self-righteous. It is very important to maintain the true colors of working people in life, and it cannot be changed with the passage of time and the change of status. "Poverty cannot be moved, and wealth cannot be lewd." Be an "aborigine", a "grass root" and a "cloth".

Gold, wood, water, fire and earth contain the essence of life. If life is a flower, then the five elements are the petals of flower of life. Only when these five petals bloom beautifully in your life will flower of life be fragrant. Finally, I want to use a couplet to sum up my feelings about life-East, West, North and South, China is beautiful, and Jin Mu's water, fire and earth petals are fragrant. Horizontal batch: five elements.

Finally, teachers and students discussed and summarized the scope of application of the parallel structure model. We find that the collocated structural model is still very practical. Lyrical prose, argumentative writing, narrative writing (juxtaposition of several things), argumentative writing, explanatory writing and other styles are all acceptable. Some students even think that the juxtaposition structure can be used to write poetry, which embodies the architectural beauty of poetry. Therefore, students will benefit greatly if they can truly master and flexibly use this structural mode of writing. Personally, I think this composition training is successful and achieved the expected goal, because students often use this structural model in their later compositions after learning this model. For example, when writing Fortune, some students arranged the structure like this: some people think that money is wealth-some people think that power is wealth-some people think that a healthy body is wealth-some people think that knowledge is wealth-some people think that suffering is wealth. For another example, when writing a composition on the topics of "time", "happiness" and "friendship", many students use the parallelism structure. It is my greatest happiness that students can apply what they have learned. I think, as long as we study and explore carefully, our composition teaching will become handy, so that students can feel that composition is not a stagnant pool, but a kaleidoscope-like world.

Third, teaching reflection.

Teaching is an art as well as an art of regret. Composition teaching is an art as well as a regretful art. Composition teaching is a serious injury to Chinese teaching. The students were talking about "composition" and turned pale. When it comes to writing, they sigh and look helpless. Teachers are at a loss when it comes to composition teaching. Therefore, although composition is the most important thing in Chinese class, many Chinese teachers are unwilling to spend more time on this laborious and effective composition teaching. Through the attempt of this composition teaching activity, I have some reflections and feelings about composition teaching.

1. The requirements of the new curriculum standard for Chinese teaching are: "Modern society requires citizens to have good humanities literacy, innovative spirit, cooperative consciousness and open horizons, and to have many basic abilities including reading comprehension, expression and communication, as well as the ability to collect and process information by using modern technology. Chinese education should and can play an important role in cultivating a new generation of people needed by modern society. Facing the needs of social development, systematic reform should be carried out in the purpose and method of evaluation. " Therefore, with the rapid development of human society today, education should get rid of the "instrumental" influence as soon as possible and walk in front of social development. Education is education because education is an activity to cultivate people, and cultivating people is the essence and fundamental function of education. Education in the new era should not simply cultivate tool people to maintain an existing society, but should cultivate subject people for a society that has not yet appeared. Of course, it is understandable that education should serve the real society and emphasize a certain social function of education in a certain period, but the realization of the social function of education can only be carried out with cultivating people as the main function, otherwise, it is abnormal for education to serve the society. Now, our composition teaching shows us such a deformed situation: we spend a lot of time and energy training children to write compositions, but we make up a lot of lies, big words, empty words and cliches. If the composition is not well written, the style of writing will be ruined. Such teaching will lead people to an extremely dangerous direction.