You are still in high school, so writing this argumentative essay is worthy of recognition!

Let me comment on your argumentative essay.

First of all, you expounded the argument in the first section of your composition: if it hurts, release it. When you release it, you can reduce the pressure in your heart and you will be happy when you release it.

Then use arguments to prove your argument in the second section. Retire with Liu Xiang, and it is the largest and most influential sports meeting in the world, which makes Liu Xiang happy although it hurts. The article then quotes Beethoven's masterpiece Ode to Joy, which was created in pain, and further expounds your argument that pain should be released, but for happiness.

Then change the style of writing and prove your argument is correct with counterexamples.

At the end of this composition, I conclude that your argument is correct.

Look at the composition, there are arguments, arguments, arguments, in line with the format and process of argumentative writing.

However, this composition has serious shortcomings.

First, you didn't carefully review the materials. The material says: if it hurts, just say it directly, which is instinct; If you are painful and kind, it is a kind of life wisdom; Some people say that unspeakable pain reflects the strength of human nature. When writing, you should express your experiences and feelings around the materials. Can be grasped with pen and ink: "instinct, wisdom, strength." Composition can demonstrate instinct and strength from the front, and can also refute from the back: wordless pain reflects the power of human nature. Then again, although we can appreciate and understand the materials, the arguments in your composition are unreasonable, that is, the arguments are inaccurate and unscientific. It makes you happy when it hurts. Really? If it hurts, say it and you will be happy! Obviously, this statement can't stand scrutiny. Speak out the pain, so as to attract attention, make people take it seriously, and avoid greater pain! Therefore, it can be extended as follows: we don't have serious bad phenomena in treating society, so we should pay attention to it to avoid more problems. Such an argument has depth.

Second, the composition is clear from argument to argument to argument. But the composition still lacks depth. After the first section expounds the argument, the second and third sections use positive arguments, and the fifth section uses negative arguments to prove your point of view. Talk about things. Actually, the composition can be more detailed. This makes the composition look thin. The depth of the composition can be further discussed as described above.

When writing an argumentative essay, we should discard the false and retain the true according to the given materials, and make a thorough discussion, rather than superficial.

Practice writing in the future First, put more effort into the examination of questions, especially the accuracy. The second is to work hard on the depth of the composition. I believe you will write an excellent composition!

Ok, haha, that's all, please don't mind my frankness! Your modest learning spirit is worth learning.

I wish you an excellent composition and put wings on your college entrance examination results.