It is often said that a compliment can warm a winter. A teacher's comment full of affectionate encouragement and praise is a good medicine to cure students' "headache" and "upset" in writing, and it is also a sweet and far-reaching "sugar-coated tablet".
There is a child in the class who is very clever, but afraid of writing. Once, I asked to write about a classmate, and he wrote "A Funny Man" seriously. The composition begins with a question and answer, then tells a funny story, and finally reveals the mystery. It turns out that this funny person is himself.
Obviously, this does not meet the requirements of this exercise, but this composition is really good. So I wrote this comment: "1. Outstanding advantages: the article is novel and fascinating. It is suggested that after printing, the teacher help you contribute! 2. Friendly reminder: if you write yourself so well, then from another angle, with your discerning eye, you can certainly write your classmates' well, right? Don't believe me, give it a try! "
2. composition evaluation, the first volume of grade six, I think your opinion is also quite good. Let me talk about how I will write a composition evaluation:
I. Benefits
1. structure. Does it echo from beginning to end, get to the point, attract attention at the beginning, deepen the theme at the end, etc. You should use popular words to express your comments, otherwise you are afraid that students will not understand and understand;
2. Sentences, idioms, words and other content. Because we should not only praise good sentences, but also praise the use of idioms and good words;
3. Rhetoric. Including metaphor, personification, parallelism and other common expression skills of primary school students, if used, we should also praise them;
4. Punctuation. If the whole composition or most punctuation marks are used correctly, praise them;
5. Whether the central idea is clear and the content is off topic;
6. Whether the handwriting is neat. It is necessary to cultivate students' awareness of neat handwriting. If their handwriting looks neat, it should also be praised.
Second, shortcomings.
1. Accordingly, we should praise the advantages and put forward the disadvantages. Don't be afraid to criticize children. What we should cultivate most is the consciousness of knowing and correcting mistakes. Of course, praising advantages is more important. After all, to cultivate students' interest, we must not let them lose the motivation to write!
2. According to the actual situation of the composition, the disadvantages may include the opposite of the above advantages.
3. Sixth grade composition: My ideal is to correct comments. It's hard to be a teacher, especially a Chinese teacher, especially a composition review.
But the reality is that teachers work hard to correct their compositions and write comments carefully, but students may not appreciate it. Reason: composition evaluation, a teacher, lacks personality.
Therefore, it is very necessary to emphasize the writing of personalized comments. First of all, composition evaluation should inject emotion and be full of human feelings.
There is an "own person" effect in psychology, which tells us that in order to make the other person accept your opinions and comments, you must maintain a "homotopy" relationship with the other person. In other words, in the other person's view, you and he are "one of their own", so that the psychological distance between them is closer.
Educational psychology also shows that the more psychological communication between teachers and students, the higher the educational effect. But in fact, many of our Chinese teachers often pretend to be very distinguished when writing comments, preaching to students in a training tone, and their faces are disgusting.
Over time, students lost their expectations for the teacher's comments. Because the teacher's composition evaluation is emotionally divorced from the students' hearts, it can't arouse "* * *", so it can't arouse the students' writing desire from the deep heart.
To this end, the author believes that teachers must be affectionate and righteous when commenting on students' compositions. Only by touching students with their own feelings can they stimulate their desire for writing. Once, a student wrote an article entitled "Talking about the communication between boys and girls", and I gave this evaluation: Speaking of the communication between boys and girls, the teacher generation really envies you.
I think there has always been an insurmountable "38th parallel" between teachers and students of the opposite sex, which is ridiculous in retrospect. But it's very different now.
Students communicate freely, and their friendship is pure and sincere. This is an extreme emotion, cherish it! That will be a fortune in life.
Comments guide students to treat the communication between boys and girls correctly with their own feelings. Students should have their own thoughts in the face of such comments! Balzac said: "An ordinary person has feelings and is comparable to any great artist."
Similarly, a comment injects emotion, which is comparable to a formulaic phrase that has been conceptualized thousands of times. Injecting emotion into comments not only edifies students and stimulates their desire to write, but also edifies teachers themselves, and its benefits are obvious.
In this case, let's wake up those great hearts with affectionate pens! Secondly, composition evaluation should focus on encouragement and speak well. Speaking of motivation, it reminds me of a comment on an essay written by the great writer Mr. Mao Dun in primary school: "Good writing style.
Good insight. Read history with your eyes and argue with your knowledge.
Children can do it. He worked hard and made great achievements. "
In fact, the young author's writing level may not be that high, but can you doubt that such comments will have no influence on Mr. Mao Dun, who later became a literary master? According to the "Rosenthal effect", students who are concerned by teachers, especially those who are encouraged, are easy to succeed. Mr. Foss, a world-famous pianist, once played the piano badly when he was a student and once lost confidence in himself.
In a class, the pianist listened to his performance, kissed him warmly and praised him for playing really well. Fox's eyes suddenly lit up. The old musician saved Fowles from the crisis with a kiss, awakened his extraordinary self-confidence in his sleeping life with a few words of praise, and finally made Fowles become a world-class piano player with amazing perseverance and genius sensitivity.
Therefore, the teacher's comments to students must be enlightening, so that students can feel that the teacher is paying attention to their growth with appreciation through language and words. Only in this way can students' writing enthusiasm glow.
But what is the actual situation? Teachers often criticize more and praise less in their compositions. Although the student's homework is excellent for his age, our teacher still has to pick out some mistakes.
What's more, he refused to say a word of praise easily in the comments, for fear of degrading the dignity of teachers. In the eyes of ordinary people, perhaps a comment is nothing, but in a sense, a comment may also affect a person's life.
I remember when I was in the third year of high school, I wrote a composition entitled "I see all beings". The teacher's comment is: your writing is good, your writing is sharp, and it smells like Lu Xun's essays. If you work hard, you will certainly achieve something in literature. Because of such a comment, from that moment on, I had an extraordinary enthusiasm for writing; Because of such comments, when I applied for the college entrance examination, I resolutely applied for the Chinese department of the university, and it was a green light all the way.
For many years since then, my literary dream has never stopped. After teaching, I often can't help but pick up a pen and write something. It can be said that the teacher's comments have a profound and lasting impact on me.
French educator Dostoevsky said: "The art of teaching is not to impart skills, but to inspire and encourage." The writing of composition evaluation should be the same.
In short, there are many writing methods for composition evaluation, far more than the above two situations. But no matter which method you use to write comments, you must follow the principle that the composition evaluation must be able to touch the students' hearts and really say it.
Only in this way can the writing of composition review be effective.
4. Evaluation of the composition of the first unit of the sixth grade Chinese in the People's Education Edition I. Sentence: 1. The sentence is fluent, the sentence meaning is fluent, the text is beautiful, the narrative is vivid and vivid, and the language expression ability is strong.
2. The language is concise, to the point, to the point, concise and powerful, full of pen power, and a few words can convey the appearance of the characters. 3. The language is fluent, detailed and vivid; The meaning of the sentence is implicit and euphemistic, with profound implications.
After reading it, it is like a lingering fragrance after drinking. 4. The language is vivid and humorous, which makes people laugh.
5. The behavior description is accurate, and the verb series vividly highlights the psychological state of the characters and points out their personality characteristics. (1). The language is basically fluent, occasionally fluent.
(2) The language is not fluent enough, and the meaning of the sentence is vague and puzzling. (3) The statement was wordy, but it didn't convey the meaning. It's just detailed and verbose.
(4) The language is too brief, which looks like an outline narrative, but it fails to get an outline, with incomplete meaning and dull, dry and lifeless narrative. Second, the reason: 1. Repeatedly emphasize the author's point of view from different angles and aspects, with thorough reasoning and clear thinking.
2. Quoting famous sayings and classic examples is more convincing and can express the author's point of view more powerfully. 3. Strong arguments, thorough and reasonable analysis and strong philosophy.
4. Rich examples, proper selection and description are more convincing. (1). The logical reasoning ability is weak and the evidence is not conclusive enough.
(2) Failing to tell the truth, telling the truth, shaping the true personality and expressing the unique individual. Third, emotion: 1. Strong feelings, such as volcanic eruption, can deeply move readers.
2. Sincere feelings, strong feelings, like mellow wine, make people drunk if they don't drink it. 3. Emotions are true and natural, and there is no suspicion of affectation. Show your true feelings with a plain heart.
4. The mental journey is true and delicate, and the thoughts and attitudes of the characters are clear to the readers at a glance. The feelings are true and delicate, and the words are touching, which really comes from the author's heart.
6. Seek the gains and losses of life from self-reflection, reveal the true feelings in confession, and the words are powerful and shocking. (1). The language is simple, the feelings are dull, and the affection is not deep enough.
The emotion is too strong, as if there is no emotion. On the contrary, they are coquettish and complacent. ⑶. Emotion lacks depth, fails to convey feelings through scenes, and fails to generate feelings from events. Although feelings are hidden in words, they fail to dig deep.
(4) Psychological depiction is not vivid and concrete enough to effectively express the characters' thoughts, attitudes and likes and dislikes. Material selection: 1. Be able to choose typical themes in life, and events are more representative.
2. The selection of materials is novel and unique, not mediocre, and it is refreshing to sweep away pedantry. 3. Although it describes ordinary things, the analysis is thorough and reasonable, and the rational excavation is deep, which highlights the essence of the event.
Although the incident is small, it reflects profound truth and has certain universality. 5. Multi-angle material selection fully reflects the personality characteristics of the characters, and the characters are full.
(1). The selection of materials is too popular and unrepresentative, and the old themes and ideas are unremarkable. ⑵. Although the events with certain narrative value in life are selected, the hidden truth of the events cannot be deeply reflected due to the incomplete analysis and excavation.
(3) The selection of materials is dull, too old, vulgar, simple and naive, and there is no new idea, so it is difficult to profoundly reflect the times and authenticity of life. (4) Failing to reflect the truth through trivial matters, and using the expression of "seeing the big from the small" is not skilled enough.
5. Lack of multi-angle description of the characters, only a narrow theme is selected, showing the one-sided personality characteristics of the characters. IV. Theme: 1. Focus, clear center, clear thinking.
2. Clear views, clear likes and dislikes, making people clear at a glance. 3. Directly highlight the theme in the content, clear and to the point, without redundancy.
4. The theme is serious, the thought is noble, and the enterprise is strong. (1). The center is not clear enough and the concept is not clear enough.
⑵. The theme is obscure, the meaning is vague, and the purpose of writing is unknown. (3) Although there is a central theme, the expression is not strong enough, but it is empty and powerless.
The theme is not serious enough, and there are still dross in thought. V. Plot: 1. The plot twists and turns, and the narrative process has a certain sense of ups and downs, which embodies the curve beauty of the plot and is fascinating.
2. The plot is strong in faltering, and there are accidents at ordinary times, which can attract readers' attention. 3. The plot changes unconventional, with occasional suspense, waves and surprises. The development process of the event embodies the author's innovative ideas.
(1). The plot develops smoothly and lacks certain ups and downs. (2) The plot changes are unremarkable and lack new ideas.
(3) The plot is straightforward and there is no suspense, just like keeping a running account. (4) The process is detailed, but the ending is short and incomplete.
The structure is unreasonable, giving people the feeling of anticlimactic. 5. The idea is unreasonable and the content is full of loopholes, which can't reflect the truth of life.
[6]. The plot is ups and downs, and the transformation is too fast and not coherent enough. 6. Rhetoric: 1 The metaphor is vivid, vivid and appropriate, and the ontology is similar to the metaphor, which greatly enhances the interest and persuasiveness of the article.
2. Appropriate use of contrast, comparison and other methods, through the disparity and differences between things, effectively prove the center of the article. 3. Taking advantage of parallelism to explain the characteristics of things in many ways not only enhances the language potential, but also leaves a very deep impression on readers.
4. Using personification skillfully, the images in the text have the characteristics of human behavior, thoughts and feelings, and reflect the spiritual course of the protagonist in the text from the side. 7. Content: 1. The content is close to modern life, novel and unique, grasping the pulse of the times and showing the flavor of the times.
2. The context is clear, the sense of hierarchy is strong, and the narrative is orderly and not chaotic. 3. Proper details, clear priorities and clear thinking.
Carefully selected, the material seems to be tailor-made for the theme. 4. The narrative is detailed and concrete, the details are vivid and vivid, the characters are vivid and prominent, and the images are full and vivid.
5. Use the environment to set off the emotions of the characters, and the scenes blend, the feelings are in the scene, and the scene is in the scene. 6. Rich imagination, strange ideas, not divorced from the truth of life, tied with the association of life, broaden the reader's thinking and make people feel lively and interesting.
7. Scenery description is vivid and lifelike, words and sentences are appropriate, scenes are born together, and scenes blend together, just like a vivid sketch painting presented to readers. 8. Imagination is wonderful. It not only comes from life, but also transcends life, broadens readers' horizons and is full of artistic charm.
9. The description of the event process is detailed and concrete, although there are many contents, it seems.
5. Write a 550-word composition around the central meaning in the sixth grade. Once, our family went on a trip.
As the mountain is very high, we went up by cable car. The cable car is rectangular and green.
It doesn't stop at the foot of the mountain, so it can only go up quickly, and it must be at the speed of light, otherwise it will be missed, because the platform is only five meters long. On the cable car, the cable car slowly climbed higher and higher.
As the cable car gets higher and higher, things on the ground get smaller and smaller. Looking at the things on the ground, there is a magical feeling. People have a kind of fear and sudden beauty, which is both mysterious and nervous.
The interior space of the cable car is very small, only the palm of your hand is a little bigger, and it is ventilated on all sides, so it is easy for luggage to fall down. The car has four handles and an alarm device, so you can get in touch with the ambulance personnel on the ground at any time.
Everyone is very nervous, mainly afraid of falling. Mom's hair stood on end and she was as nervous as an electric shock.
Sweating on his forehead, as if he had been caught in the rain. Her hand holds mine, and my hand hurts like it's going to be broken by her.
Dad curled up in the corner of the carriage, staring at the roof, sweating profusely, rubbing his hands back and forth, feeling very scared. The cable car rose to another height and climbed a hill. At this time, our nervousness eased down.
We looked out of the window and looked like a distance from the glass window. Things on the ground are so small that we have to use a telescope to see them clearly. The mountains in the distance are high and low, and you can vaguely see a beautiful landscape painting.
The cable car has reached the highest peak, and the white clouds are around us, like soft cotton candy; White clouds are beautiful and poured into the cable car; The white clouds are very light, and I want to ride them to higher mountains. White clouds smell good. I feel like swimming in a sea of flowers. White clouds decorate our cable car. In this short period of ten seconds, we have come to fairyland and gone through Xanadu.
The cable car has reached the top of the mountain. It' s really "not afraid of clouds to cover your eyes, just because you are at the highest level." This cable car ride is really beautiful.
6. Sixth grade composition My ideal comments on my ideal.
There are many ideals and dreams in one's life. And my ideal is a fashion designer.
Actually, I want to be a fashion designer because of a game. I was dazzled by all kinds of costumes in that competition, including street cowboys who lead the fashion, casual T-shirts with beige linen pants, and dresses with colorful patterns. I was a little touched to see these beautiful clothes. I can design my own clothes when the game is upgraded to 10. I will naturally look forward to becoming a fashion designer.
Fashion designers can make people's clothing life colorful, make an ordinary dress the focus on the runway, and let people understand the meaning of beauty. . At that time, I set this lofty ideal and have been fighting for it.
On weekends, you can surf the Internet at home and design in the "clothing workshop" in that game. For beautiful clothes, I will draw them, color them and keep them in the book. Occasionally, when I catch a cold, I pick up a sketch and then go home and revise it carefully. After dinner, I will think about new ideas, observe the current fashion trends, and then think about how to design new clothes.
I firmly believe that as long as I work hard, my ideal of fashion design will be realized.
7. Write a composition around the central idea
Scene description, so what is a scene? Scenes generally refer to scenes presented to people in group activities within a certain period of time. Just like a scene or scene we saw in a play.
What scenes have we participated in or seen in our life? Here are some examples for your reference.
The labor site. We often participate in school-run factories, farms or service labor at school. There are many people's enthusiasm and enthusiasm in labor, and there are good people and good deeds in labor. We also often visit factories, villages and shops and ask questions to see how uncles and aunts work. These are the scenes of childbirth.
Game scene. Students often play games together at home or on campus, and teachers also organize various activities during sports activities. These game scenes are often very lively and interesting, and students are familiar with them.
Entertainment circle In our colorful after-school life, entertainment is a very important content. There are many vivid scenes in literary performances, party activities, watching movies and TV plays that are worth remembering.
Ceremony site. At the beginning of each semester, we will hold the opening ceremony. Ceremonies are usually held in your city, village or town, and also when new buildings are completed. The scenes of these ceremonies are meaningful and instructive, and we should carefully observe and record this memorable moment.
Sports scenes. At the sports meeting, athletes chase after each other, struggle hard and strive to create excellent results; The audience applauded and cheered for the athletes. These exciting scenes are unforgettable.
Life scenes. There are many scenes in daily life that are also very distinctive. For example, buying goods, family reunion, traveling by car and boat, seeking medical treatment, building houses and repairing walls; , decorate the bedroom, etc. , have a strong flavor of life.
Meeting site. Class meeting, team meeting, school meeting; Meeting heroes and model figures and attending various celebrations and commemorative meetings often leave a deep impression on us.
In a word, practicing scene description can improve our observation cognitive ability and narrative description ability.
8. The original publisher of the composition wrote around the central meaning: Long Yuan Journal Network.
In ancient times, there was a scholar who never got to the point when writing articles. Once, he went to ask the teacher for advice. The teacher took him to a small forest, pointed to a spider web and said, "Please worship it as a teacher!" " "The reader looked at it for a long time and suddenly understood the mystery. Since then, his article has made rapid progress. Someone asked him why, and he said, "There is no spider web without a center in the world. Spider webs are made of a center and then a circle. The same is true of writing articles! "
So how to write around the central meaning?
Write a paragraph around the central sentence.
The composition of the middle grade requires writing one thing around the central meaning. Students in this section can usually practice with fragments-write specific sentences around the central sentence.
What is the central sentence?
The central sentence is generally the first sentence of a paragraph, which summarizes the main content of this paragraph.
Exodus: The fog this morning is really heavy and beautiful! There was a vast expanse of whiteness between heaven and earth, as if there was an incomparably wide tulle garment floating. Mountains, houses, fields and trees in the distance are shrouded in milky fog, looming and beautiful. I walked on the way to school, as if I were in a misty fairyland, which was very interesting.
The first sentence in the example is the central sentence, and the last three sentences are all around "The fog this morning is really heavy and beautiful!" This sentence is described in detail: "white, milky white" first writes the color of fog, and "incomparably wide gauze clothing" is a metaphor for writing the beauty of fog and fog. Through my feelings and conversations with characters, the fog is very thick and heavy.
9. How to write the Mid-Autumn Festival family composition in Unit 4, Volume 1, Grade 6?
Now I try to buy more things for my grandparents every time I go back to my hometown. I am well aware of their tastes and preferences. Every Mid-Autumn Festival, I miss my grandparents in my hometown very much, especially when I see the green silk and red silk in the moon cakes. I especially miss them, those who spent the Mid-Autumn Festival together, those poor, simple and warm Mid-Autumn Festival, those eternal moss and red silk. ...
In my childhood memory, the earliest impression is Zibo moon cakes, which are small and round, crisp and delicious. At that time, there were not many kinds of moon cakes, only brown sugar stuffing and white sugar stuffing, each with green and red silk in it and hidden in the middle of moon cakes.
I seldom ate moon cakes when I was a child. Half or one of them is symbolic. It was a Mid-Autumn Festival, and naturally it was indispensable. Even poor families will buy a catty and a half. If there are many people, they will share them and everyone will taste them. This is a festival. When I was a child, I lived in my grandmother's house in a mountain village for a long time, where I spent every Mid-Autumn Festival. On the Mid-Autumn Festival, no matter how many mooncakes there are, I eat them first, because I don't like the green and red silk inside. It tastes strange. After I finish the pastry layer by layer, my grandparents will eat the remaining green silk and red silk. They said they loved those silks, which were the best. And my favorite rice, dog meat, biscuits and so on. What I like must be something they don't like, so I always eat alone and feel at ease.
Later, life became better and better, and there were more and more moon cakes. My grandma and grandpa only ate the whole moon cake. Later I learned that they also like rice, dog meat and biscuits. The secret was discovered before I got married. Grandpa went to town, and my mother added a second bowl of rice to grandpa. I reminded my mother that my grandfather didn't like rice and he was too sticky. Mom smiled: silly child, that's because I can't bear to eat. I quickly asked grandpa: Do you still like those moon cakes with green and red silk? Grandpa ha ha smiled: those filar silk, sandwiched in moon cakes, are not bad, can't eat any peculiar smell. It won't be delicious if you eat it alone. I see!
Now I try to buy more things for my grandparents every time I go back to my hometown. I am well aware of their tastes and preferences. Every Mid-Autumn Festival, I miss my grandparents in my hometown very much, especially when I see the green silk and red silk in the moon cakes. I especially miss them, spending the Mid-Autumn Festival together, the poor, simple and warm Mid-Autumn Festival, and those.